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Ok, finished, first third of the game i just couldn't stop laughing, idk why, anyhow what are other routes? All choices I made were potion and cat and rest of the game was click clicking and reading, or I missed something?
ashjoben said: Ok, finished, first third of the game i just couldn't stop laughing, idk why, anyhow what are other routes? All choices I made were potion and cat and rest of the game was click clicking and reading, or I missed something?
ps. if kota is blondy who's matrix guy ?
lol besides potion and cat there were other options in those. try gold and sword and you shall see :p
Is this something that would be interesting for a Let's Play channel and/or something people here would be interested in watching? If it's the latter I can just upload the videos as unlisted so only people here could watch it.
I can't really answer @Lotus. I have seen VN walkthroughs on YouTube. This game is rather short so idk if it's a good idea to spoil the walkthroughs over sth so easy. On the other hand it would be nice if we had vids of them. I really don't know. I'd like to hear what other have to say
ashjoben said: Ok, finished, first third of the game i just couldn't stop laughing, idk why, anyhow what are other routes? All choices I made were potion and cat and rest of the game was click clicking and reading, or I missed something?
ps. if kota is blondy who's matrix guy ?
lol besides potion and cat there were other options in those. try gold and sword and you shall see :p
4 options not worth re-playing, but when i wrote f'cking space pirate it said "I know you wanted to write something good" or something but when i wrote lumi is LewD it said the same!!
ashjoben said: Ok, finished, first third of the game i just couldn't stop laughing, idk why, anyhow what are other routes? All choices I made were potion and cat and rest of the game was click clicking and reading, or I missed something?
ps. if kota is blondy who's matrix guy ?
lol besides potion and cat there were other options in those. try gold and sword and you shall see :p
4 options not worth re-playing, but when i wrote f'cking space pirate it said "I know you wanted to write something good" or something but when i wrote lumi is LewD it said the same!!
lol thats weird. I havent set it up saying that :S
Haha, this was fun and felt nostalgic! Kudos to who made the soundtracks, I definitely heard my Zelda tune, hehe. And of course to every other hard working contributor! Y'all so creative!
Hello there!
I have finnished the game (All routes) And here's what I have to say about it.
I'm going to put aside typos and grammar errors for now.
With that said it's a very enjoyable nice little VN.
The story was interesting and fun and I gould never guess where it was heading.
The characters were nice and it was fun to see some people I know from the Discord server.
Most of all what I noticed was the amazing art and music.
The backgrounds were amazing!
Very fitting and cool, and nice details.
The music was also very good, A few times I just let the game run in the background while I was taking a break and some of the tracks were very nice as background music, particularly the track in Turquoises shop.
I had a fun time playing this although it made me watch less Gintama.
Damn you VN, you're too much fun!
And to end this with some constructive criticism and feedback, I noticed that the game had quite a few typos and errors and I'm just trying to helpful bringing them to light in case you have time and would like to do aything about them.
WARNING!!!
Some of this might be considered spoilers so read on your own risk if you haven't finnished the game.
You probably have no reason to read on from here unless you like to read typos or are working on the game and am willing to look through this and fix some things.
1. Just a small thing but in the line from the narrator that says "The day when Bill-sama decided to abstain the throne and live his life as a free man." Was the king a prisoner or what is going on here?
2. Line spoken by Turquoise "Zodac at this hour is usually taking his daily walk at the forest" should be "in the forest"
3. Another small thing Turquoise "My cat ran away and I can't find it, could you help me?" Just think "I can't find him/her" would sound nicer.
4. Same on the next line "He's/She's" might fit better.
5. Also maybe let the character respond to that. You just leave the shop without saying a word.
6. Zodac has a big ass.
7. Zodacs line "... or there's Ascius, you have more chances of finding Ascius actually". "you have a higher chance of" or "you have a better chance of" would fit better.
8. After Zodac says "No one knows where is cave is." the main character responds with "..." and then "Well, I guess I'll start asking around.". I just think that "I'll start asking around" doesn't make sense since "No one knows where his cave is" so "I'll start looking around" would make more sense.
9. Narrator line "*You find a bag of gold lying on the ground and a cat stuck on a tree.*" "stuck in a tree" would fit better.
10. on the thought line "*With a smile across your face you go through the forest deciding to go to visit the neighbor.*" First of all neighbor is spelled neighbour. nad second "you go through the forest deciding to go to visit the neighbor." would look better like this (I'll jsut write the whole line here) "*With a smile across your face, you go through the forest deciding to go visit the neighbour.*"
11. Line from main character "It's getting dark. I wonder how many hours have I been walking" Would look better as "I wonder how many hours I have been walking"
12. on the thought line "*You see the trees again and the rock you left earlier by them.*" I'm not an expert but it just seems to be slightly wrong and it werids me out. I think "You see the trees again and the rock you left by them earlier.*" might be a better looking solution. but don't take my word for it, as I'm not entirely sure I'm correct.
13. Narrator line "You don't know how this forest is actually called, right?" should be "You don't know what this forest is actually called, right?"
14. the main characters line "I... I've done nothing of like that!" was surely meant to be "I... I've done nothing of the like!" or something simmilar, so it was probably jsut overlooked but jsut looks weird as it is right now.
15. On the thought line "*You hear a wolf's howl*" Might be wrong but I'n not a grammar expert "wolf's" with the ' usually means "wolf is" and it might be supposed to be "Wolves howl" But I'm a little fuzzy on this one and not to sure. It could also be "wolfs howl" but as I said I'm not to sure about this one so I'm leaving it here just in case, you can do something about it if it's needed but I'm not 100% sure so I'll leave it at that.
16. missed a letter on the line "*You feel a cold sweat on your body as the shadow comes closer and loser*" a C is missing from the second "closer"
17. After game over by getting killed by the wolf the text says "Don't be greedy next time, ne?" Not sure if it was supposed to be like a cute japanese "ne?" or if it is a misstake so I'm just leaving that here.
18. Lunas line "You really are such a kind hearted person to so willingly trying to help us." adding a "be" in there might make it look a bit nicer. like "You really are such a kind hearted person to so willingly be trying to help us." not sure about that though, it still sounds a bit weird to me.
19. Just a small idea. In the shop where you have the choise to get either a sword or a potion, th characters in the background are still there. Not saying they can't be, but I think it's common in VNs that characters move away during choices. Then it kind of feel like you're standing there by yourself thinking "omg what should I do! What will I pick! OMG!" Entirely up to you thoug, not forcing you to do anything or saying that it HAVE to be fixed.
20. Zodacs line is missing a word "Will you give this letter to the girl who hangs out by library? Her name is Kawaii. I'll be grateful if you do." should be "the girl who hangs out by the library" "the" was missing.
21. Line from ZTHero "Looks like it too late for you pal, come with me." Minor flaw "it" should've been "it's"
22. Uuh line "YES, BUT HE DOES! I CAN SEE THAT YOU HAVE A MOUTH, WHY AREN'T ANSWERING?" Missed "you" at "WHY AREN'T ANSWERING?"
23. the main character line "Now can you please tell me where am I?" might just look better like "can you please tell me where I am?". Only a small thing, I don't know if it was intended or if it was a misstake.
24. Ascius line "Can't a guy get some peace and quite in his own cave?" the word "quite" should be "quiet"
25. Ascius line "It's a big city. A lot come here just to become ghosts, some survive for a while before turning into one and only select few manage to become citizens."
"A lot come here jsut to become ghosts" might look better as "A lot of people come here just to become ghosts" and "only select few manage to become citizens" should be "only a select few manage to become citizens.
Also the first line I'm not sure how it's intended to be interpreted but it sounds like people come there becasue they want to become ghosts. If that isn't the case then "A lot of people come here just to end up as ghosts," might be a better alternative.
26. Right after in Ascius line "Now you join the group, chat a little then forget how to chat and then just hunt this cave, keeping real humans away so I can have a little peace here... untill I find a way to kick you all out." the word "hunt" was probably intended to be "haunt"
27. Right after that when you die in the cave the word "GAMEOVER" might be written together I'm not sure if there's supposed to be a space like "GAME OVER" but I think there should be.
28. When you are fired from the cannon after the route where you pick up the potion it says "You are fired from cannon" might want to add "the cannon" there.
29. That whole conversation with Astros about that thing in the library was a bit weird but it might have been intentional I have no idea. I just found it weird...
30. ODJs line "Let's just go in and get done with this" might be better as "Let's just go in and get this done with"
31. Kurichons line "Could you just get over with it already?" might be better as "Could you just get this over with already?"
32. ODJs line "I'll go play to my keytar I guess..." should be "I'll go play with my keytar I guess..." or maybe just "I'll go play my keytar I guess..."
33. Main characters line in the Hentain Cafe "I want to go to Tsiox." might fit better as "I'm looking for somone called Tsiox." or something like that.
34. Tsioxs line "And you think I can let you do that?" might fit better as "And you think I would let you do that?"
35. on the thought line "*On the way to Uuh CAstle*" you might want to add an S after "Uuh" so it's "Uuhs castle"
36. Missing letter A on Ardanaz line "More Toonnie-sam, MORE!"
37. Main characters line "Uuh disappeared. Her servant, ZTHero is his name again?" it just sounds a bit weird to read "ZTHero is his name again?" maybe putting it another way would look better, like "Her servant, what was his name again? ZTHero?"
38. Zodacs line "Iwonder what uuh's mind thinking" seems kinda weird not sure exactly how it should be put so I'm just leaving that here.
39. The main characters line "Is it me or it got quite cold here...?" just looks very wrong. Might look better as "Is it just me or did it get quite cold here...?"
40. the line "After treading through a long corridor with emergency lights guiding the protagonist he reaches cave control center" might want to add "the" before "cave control center"
41. Just think this seems a bit weird "*You go back to the palace*" it seems that it's always refered to as the castle except for this line right here but I could just be forgetful and completely wrong here.
And that's all I could find!
I'm by no means an english spelling or grammar expert and I hope I don't come across as an asshole, I'm just trying to be helpful!
I might be wrong in some places or missed some things and I'm not forcing you to fix anything.
I'm just trying to be helpful and offer my feedback and thoughts.
I have finnished all the routes and it was very fun!
Thanks for making this game for all of us!
Oops I completed this last night and all 4 routes but forgot to post here x_x
Just want to say well done and congratz to everyone involved I had a lot of fun playing this, I haven't played a VN before so I didn't really know what to expect but I enjoyed all of it quite a bit.
Oh and whoever wrote the script you had me laughing a lot, obv I didn't understand all of the references as I haven't been here that long but it was still funny! xD
i just played through all the versions of it. that was really fun lolol
i had no idea what a visual novel was at first but now i know. seemed really complicated the first time i looked at the thread but after playing it i realised its a lot less technical than i though :P
i really loved a lot of this game. if you havent played through all 4 routes no clicky
first off, hitler cat lmfao
lumis coffee with viagra and razorblades at the hentai cafe
uuhs tyranny
ardy ><
gwen and rin
geezuz this story was freaking hilarious, much props to all of you
if you guys ever do this again i may be interested in lending a hand with it ^^ in return all i ask is i get to be the town drunk
btw i played in this exact order
Routes: 4
Bad Ending
Bad Ending
Not the Best Ending
Good Ending
Finally had time to finish it and omg you guys are great!
I really had fun. Lumi and Uuh char are so cool!
Gwenny doll cuteee! :3
Love my char, thankies for that route <3
Congratz guys for your hard work! ٩(^‿^)۶