| I spend 6 months made an Independent Animation,named「Lost Time」. Can I introduce my animation to you guys? :) I made english subtitles, So you can easy to understand this story. Maybe you need to click the button named “subtitles/closed captions” in youtube window to open the english subtitles. Thanks GaryMuffuginOak san help me to fix my english subtitles!!! https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=RKflS0vU9WY You guys can reply or tell me what you thought about my animation with english,I can read english. :) |
Mitsuha-ShigureAug 27, 2016 11:25 AM
Waffly said: Man, this was deep. Loved it! Great animation! Thank you!! I'm very happy you like my animation! : ) |
| This is very good, thank you for sharing and the best in the fields of animation to you Mitsuhasan! |
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| I haven't finished it yet but I'm going to call it... weird? Good work on the animation, it's pretty :3 English could be brushed up a little but overall it's good. Thanks for sharing, you spent quite a bit of time on it. |
  WORK IN PROGRESS ~The frog leapt forth to my lilypad memory.~ I was indoctrinated by an inamorata rabbit, Adenomata affronted. It was the verecund, dismissed creatures That I jubilated in most. This rabbit I would nurture, At the aiguille of esse, The anneal of noblesse. ❤️ Birdie ❤️ |
| Your characters are more interesting than most in anime and you only needed 11 minutes. It`s pretty good for your first work. |
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Necronomicon said: This is very good, thank you for sharing and the best in the fields of animation to you Mitsuhasan! Thank you Necronomicon san.It was my pleasure you like it！ |
YaoiMaster said: I haven't finished it yet but I'm going to call it... weird? Good work on the animation, it's pretty :3 English could be brushed up a little but overall it's good. Thanks for sharing, you spent quite a bit of time on it. Thank you，my english is not so good，but I will learn more about english. : ) |
Mitsuha-Shigure said: YaoiMaster said: I haven't finished it yet but I'm going to call it... weird? Good work on the animation, it's pretty :3 English could be brushed up a little but overall it's good. Thanks for sharing, you spent quite a bit of time on it. Thank you，my english is not so good，but I will learn more about english. : ) Where there's a will, there's a way. You're trying hard :P. |
WORK IN PROGRESS ~The frog leapt forth to my lilypad memory.~ I was indoctrinated by an inamorata rabbit, Adenomata affronted. It was the verecund, dismissed creatures That I jubilated in most. This rabbit I would nurture, At the aiguille of esse, The anneal of noblesse. ❤️ Birdie ❤️ |
Idiots_on_MAL said: Your characters are more interesting than most in anime and you only needed 11 minutes. It`s pretty good for your first work. Thank you!I have do many effort to finish my animation in 11 minutes.It's not easy ,but really fun! |
| Haven't finished it yet but the character designs are good and so is the voice acting :) I can see you put a lot of effort in! |
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| Such beautiful animation!You can see how much effort and hard work was put into it!There is room for improvement on some parts,there were some transitions for the hair and when she put her hands on the skirt that looked a bit weird but it's still great job done. And the story hit home for me .The speech Hime(?) gave could be a much needed encouragement to the viewers.I would love to see more! |
| Wasn't expecting much but i was surprised, was pretty decent in the end. The voice acting and the music were very good |
vikki7783 said: Haven't finished it yet but the character designs are good and so is the voice acting :) I can see you put a lot of effort in! Thank you. me and my friends spend many time to do our best to finish our work. : ) |
| Not a big fan of MMD's/Vocaloid-ish..ooopps, I meant to say 3D graphics...but it was great in it's own way |
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| That was a pretty cool short story, keep up the good work! But next time try to get better subtitles, I'm a translator, so I hate reading bad subtitles. But apart from that, the characters looked pretty and the voices fitted very nicely, and I like the message of this animation. Congratulations for this great project and I look forward for more |
Futari wa Milky Holmes was a mistake Yoshii did nothing wrong |
| Nice music choice, great story, and well-written dialogue. I'm not that big a fan of 3D things and that sort of character design in general, but I can really feel the effort and love you and your friend put into it. It's great for a debut piece, keep up the good work!  The setting and character outfit were very Aria-like (: |
Mikatina said: Such beautiful animation!You can see how much effort and hard work was put into it!There is room for improvement on some parts,there were some transitions for the hair and when she put her hands on the skirt that looked a bit weird but it's still great job done. And the story hit home for me .The speech Hime(?) gave could be a much needed encouragement to the viewers.I would love to see more! Thank you.Yeah, I have many times to modify the script and Storyboard。Yes,I will do more better next time. Haha, you are right, skirt is a week point in my animation.it's very hard to Adjustment the skirt in correct position.Thanks for your opition. : ) |
--RazoR-- said: I liked it. Voice acting was great, and you managed to told a good story only in 11 minutes. I look forward to see your future animations ^^ Thank you. I will do more effort next time. ^^ |
| I'm sorry but I didn't find it interesting enough. There are things with the animation that maybe could be fixed but I don't have much knowledge in that field so I won't talk about what I don't know. As for the voice acting it was good. Thanks for the subs but as someone said it needs polishing (but thanks lots for them). Oh and good choice of the music, it was fitting. Even so good work. Keep it up and bring us better works in the future~ |
GenericAnimeName said: Wasn't expecting much but i was surprised, was pretty decent in the end. The voice acting and the music were very good Thank you. I spend many time to invite best CV to my animation. It's glad to hear you like my animation. ^^ |
Konte said: Not a big fan of MMD's/Vocaloid-ish..ooopps, I meant to say 3D graphics...but it was great in it's own way Yes,you are right.talk about mmd, many people think about dance or Vocaloid. But still some people try to use it to do more thing.like to make a short story or a animation. |
KazamiSan said: That was really amazing, I really like the characters. And remember, there is always room for improvement, always, and that's why I'll be looking forward to your future animations to see how better they're gonna get. Thank you very much.Yes,I will do more better in the future! |
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| If you drew the artwork for it, like the avatar your using for YT or the bit in the pv, you should have gone for a doujin or something instead, despite only seeing a couple shots of the art, it was more appealing than 3D. Though I will say it was nice to see MMD not being used for 'adult' stuff for once as that's all it seems to be used for these days. |
| Nicely done. Two Problems: -I don't really like the 3D animation, the character movement was very stiff and would be much nicer hand drawn. It would take longer, but next time it would be worth it. -The subtitles. Sometimes the translation wasn't very good and I didn't understand things. Even though I don't speak Japanese I understand most the anime and can help you with a proper English translation that is correct and sounds natural. Good: -Music was fitting -Emotional at times! I still really wish I could be a child again though... For an anime made and written by 1 person, well done! I look forward to your next animations. 8/10 |
| “Humankind cannot gain anything without first giving something in return. To obtain, something of equal value must be lost. That is alchemy's first law of Equivalent Exchange. In those days, we really believed that to be the world's one, and only, truth. But the world isn't perfect, and the law is incomplete..." -Alphonse Elric "Then and now, what I protect has never changed!" -Sakata Gintoki I'll take anything like The Pet Girl of Sakurasou. Anything as good as that. |
| The story is heartwarming. Good writing for an 11-minute animation. There's flaws here and there in the 3D animation, but I can't comment much as I don't know one bit about making animations. I know it takes hard work and a lot of time to do those animations. Good job at doing that. The voice acting is nice, the music blends well with the scenes. What I don't get is the point of the introduction in the beginning. Who is that guy and what's his significant to the story. And the scene at the very beginning where he pointed a gun to her. Is he her brother? |
| When people asked 'why are you so quiet?', just answer 'why are you not?' |
INU4SH4 said: That was a pretty cool short story, keep up the good work! But next time try to get better subtitles, I'm a translator, so I hate reading bad subtitles. But apart from that, the characters looked pretty and the voices fitted very nicely, and I like the message of this animation. Congratulations for this great project and I look forward for more Thank you very much!And sorry for the subtitles, ok, next time I will find someone live in Anglosphere to do the translation。 |
promiser said: The story is heartwarming. Good writing for an 11-minute animation. There's flaws here and there in the 3D animation, but I can't comment much as I don't know one bit about making animations. I know it takes hard work and a lot of time to do those animations. Good job at doing that. The voice acting is nice, the music blends well with the scenes. What I don't get is the point of the introduction in the beginning. Who is that guy and what's his significant to the story. And the scene at the very beginning where he pointed a gun to her. Is he her brother? Oh,yes,this cool guy is her brother. hime and her brother brush teeth and eat the breakfast together everyday.she had an very unhappy childhood,but now is living with her brother very happy everyday. Her brother and her friends help hime to go out from Despair.Why he pointed a gun to her,because it's for funny want to make hime happy,and hime ignore him.Oh,thank you for your reply. I'm very glad you love my animation.^^ |
Mitsuha-Shigure said: Konte said: Not a big fan of MMD's/Vocaloid-ish..ooopps, I meant to say 3D graphics...but it was great in it's own way Yes,you are right.talk about mmd, many people think about dance or Vocaloid. But still some people try to use it to do more thing.like to make a short story or a animation. Bruh, ig you're gonna make antother anomation...I'll support you in any way I can...just simply use flash/bagers animation...it would look way cooler and it would have more emotional impact on the viewer....(just look on youtube flash anime parody animators...(yeah, it would take more than 6 months of your life, but it would make more than 1+ mil views on youtube ) |
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| Thanks GaryMuffuginOak san help me to fix my subtitles. It's 3:00 clock in japan now,I have to sleep,I will reply everyone when I get up. : ) |
| Your character looks really cute. I don't personally like the 3DCGI style, but it's actually not as bad as some of the anime MAL has listed. |
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| Well i'm impressed.Nicely done,especially OST was spot on. |
| @Mitsuha-Shigure i think you should share it on r/anime if you know anything about reddit.It can get you lot of views,just replace the word animation with anime while sharing on r/anime. |
| Yeah post like "Me and my friends made an anime short" on r/anime and it could get a good amount of attention. |
 Anime is good, fucking deal with it. |
| I like the voice acting! Great job! ^ ^ |
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| good job on making an animation. i'm a bit of a 3d artist and animator myself and know how long it takes to even do 11 minutes. Here are my critiques, i hope they prove helpful in your next endeavor. i thought the voice acting and all the audio stuff was good. Im more of a visual guy so i cant say much there other than it all fit well. i like the camera work for the most part. There was only one scene transition that threw me. It was when Hime goes back in time for the second time. But as far as the narrative goes, that felt a little random so that might have been the problem. I'd say you could cut out a few bits like when the girl was talking to some kid across the table (who even was that?) and maybe a bit else to better set up hime and young hime's time together. Maybe give the guy a little more time. You shouldnt treat 3D characters like 2D ones. For instance, 3D characters pretty much always need to be moving. You got to use techniques like "moving holds" in order for you characters no to feel lifeless. Look up moving holds to get a good idea. The style of hime, the guy and the world they were in didnt fit incredibly well together. Hime was super anime, the guy was like a video game character and the world was realistic. Well, the world wasn't always out of place. In the city, a lot of the ground texture and benches and things like that are what didnt fit. The girl's home felt alright. I'd say you can bring something like a blur tool to some of those textures and it'd feel better. |
| https://combosmooth.itch.io/ - I make free-to-play browser games for PC and I sell pixel art animation here |
| Not going to lie, I thought I was going to watch 20 seconds and move onto the next thread. Ended up sitting down for this one. Good job, don't even think about giving up on this. Really lol'd at 4:19, the character designs kind of remind me of Gochuumon wa Usagi Desu ga but that might just be the setting too. |
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| This animation is done really well Everything I say is my personal opinion Personally, I loved the voice acting and the music, they complimented each other well. Now for the story, There were some parts in it that were "iffy" such as the Older sister rescuing the younger sister and the whole "lifting skirt scene", but everything else was done well and surprisingly "deep" I don't know anything about 3d animation or CGI but I can tell this took sometime, good job. Also the character are very cute <3 Great job and hope to see more in the future, Good luck |
| This was really good. Thank you for sharing. :) |
| Really good job, Mate. It's really good for your first Animation. :) |
Konte said: Mitsuha-Shigure said: Yes,you are right.talk about mmd, many people think about dance or Vocaloid. But still some people try to use it to do more thing.like to make a short story or a animation. Bruh, ig you're gonna make antother anomation...I'll support you in any way I can...just simply use flash/bagers animation...it would look way cooler and it would have more emotional impact on the viewer....(just look on youtube flash anime parody animators...(yeah, it would take more than 6 months of your life, but it would make more than 1+ mil views on youtube ) Thank you, You are very helpful. I will think about that. It's dosen't matter for me to use more time to finish a animation.Because I love animation. : ) |
omfgplzstop said: I'm not really a fan of MMD animations but I still enjoyed this and I did like both Himes' designs. Good luck in the future. I'd never wish to go back to the past lol. Thank you.I'm like hime too. ^^ Yeah,just like the story,past is not so beautiful. past should be save in our memory. |
Lemon said: Nice music choice, great story, and well-written dialogue. I'm not that big a fan of 3D things and that sort of character design in general, but I can really feel the effort and love you and your friend put into it. It's great for a debut piece, keep up the good work! The setting and character outfit were very Aria-like (: Thank you. Yeah,my friends are very good, we have done everything we can,to finish our animation.It's a little tired,but it's worth it. : ) |
SheyCroix said: I'm sorry but I didn't find it interesting enough. There are things with the animation that maybe could be fixed but I don't have much knowledge in that field so I won't talk about what I don't know. As for the voice acting it was good. Thanks for the subs but as someone said it needs polishing (but thanks lots for them). Oh and good choice of the music, it was fitting. Even so good work. Keep it up and bring us better works in the future~ GaryMuffuginOak san help me to fixed the subtitles, maybe it will be easy to watch now. Oh,don't carry about that. It's not easy let a animation to fit everybody,but I will do more better in the future. |
Paul said: If you drew the artwork for it, like the avatar your using for YT or the bit in the pv, you should have gone for a doujin or something instead, despite only seeing a couple shots of the art, it was more appealing than 3D. Though I will say it was nice to see MMD not being used for 'adult' stuff for once as that's all it seems to be used for these days. Yeah, Talk about MMD, we will think about 'adult' stuff or dance.It's really embarrass some time, You know, I can't give the adult stuff in my animation for those people. But the show must go on. Yeah, next time I will try to use more 2D picture in my work. |
| I really liked it, it was better than many anime i have seen :p You forgot to put subtitles for the last seconds ( dont know if you thank someone or it's part of the story. Overall: i'll send a friend request to see more of your work xD |
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