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Did you enjoy it? Was it too short for your taste? What did you think of the characters or story line? Hope that it becomes more than a one-shot? Anything like this happen to you? Etc. Have fun with it :)

It was very cute! ^^ Thanks for the links.

Finally I got a comment, come on people, it's easy and enjoyable to talk about such a cute series like this. I thought for sure this was going to turn into a sex scene in the stream haha.Im glad it didn't though, it would have ruined the sweet atmosphere. Of course, we don't know what happened after words. I do hope for another chapter just to see how their relationship goes, it's very sweet. Almost bitter sweet due to the length. I was really worried at first because she said she wanted to wash away the filth. I hate when people referring to lesbianism as filth. Makes me sad :(

This mangaka is pretty famous for having not-quite sex scenes in his work. I liked it, since there was a tinge of sexuality in the air. I mean, sweet romance aside, it's nice to see a manga explore the sexual nature of a girl's relationship with another one.



Perhaps a potential happy ending? :P It seems that at least they managed to be open with one another.



It's nice that they dealt with the issue though. But I think it extends further than that. Other than lesbianism, I think the "filth" she wanted to wash away was the guilt.

Other than that, I totally dug the atmosphere and the use the setting for the one shot. I mean, take the stream itself. It's rarely you ever see the setting contribute thematically to a one-shot. The stream served as various things:

1. A cleanser. As they said, they needed to "wash away the filth".

2. A metaphor for their feelings. Water usually signifies not only tranquillity but it could also mean turmoil or unsettledness. What I liked about what it did in this instance was that it juxtaposed the notion of a quiet, private interaction between two friends and the emotions stirring uncomfortably between them both as well.

3. A way to literally and figuratively cool off for the girls (what with their heated passion scenario taking place). As a prop in the scene, it managed be fully utilised.

I also like that there was the whole misunderstanding from the both of them. Each of them thought they had sullied the other person, and it turned out that they both liked/loved one another.

Lastly, I dunno about anyone else, but I thought it was pretty sexy as well, so...

Sexy, of course! Haha it was extremely sexy xD but that is true the filth being more than just lesbianism. Which as you said and the way you put it, made this so much more deeper than I even thought. It was really sweet that they were confused and yet still had the same feelings, and I could actually see something like this happening so very easy, another plus.

I thought it was a very sweet story. I felt it was a realistic and thoughtful portrayal. While I did score it very high and like it quite a bit. It seems I have seen this story way to many times in One Shots. Someday I would like to read something that does not revolve around the characters just realizing or discovering their love or their sexuality but more of an actual relationship.

Skadi, this is what all yuri fans wish for. Unfortunately, it rarely works out that way. What I could direct you to are the Nana and Hitomi one shots. Those actually go somewhere with the relationships portrayed.

I also felt a little pang in my heart when she said she wanted to wash away the filth. It had many interpretations, none of which were good. Homosexuality is the obvious "filth" we think of, but tehnominator also pointed out guilt, which I also saw and felt sad. No one should feel guilty about expressing their love, although we don't usually go around kissing people while they're sleeping ^_^

But it really was a cute one-shot and I'm hope that there will be more to come. Even though that type of story line is very common, and it was so short, I still felt a chemistry between the characters, they worked well together. I also liked to slight "role-reversal" meaning, the girl with the shorter hair was the shy one and the girl with the longer hair was more forward.

That was a very sweet story. Thank you for sharing. I agree with a lot of you that the filthy comment made me shudder, but I also felt it was guilt and not about lesbianism. Then again I've had moments where I felt dirty for having sexual thoughts, even if it is just a kiss, so I know how they felt.

Still I loved how it turned out in the ending. I'm happy to have found this at the start of my day. It is great to have something like this on my mind before going to work on my own art.

Well jaa ne

Kat

I think the whole "filth" thing made everyone grit their teeth, But I can see it as the signs of guilt and regret. I liked the twist though, where it was the kiss that made one of them realize that they liked the other, where the other one thought that had ended their friendship. It was literally one of the girls' dream come true ^^.
I really liked how they incorporated the stream into the plot and I agree with tehnominator:



Overall it was a nice and sweet confession one-shot. I've read a lot of this mangka's work and I've liked all of the one-shots that I've read by him.

The filth thing was a little: o.o but other than that it was cute, sweet and short ^^
And the art was decent.

i think that manga is ok,it ending is ok too...i look forward to watch manga like this again...

I think as well, it was all their insecurities that needed to be washed away. I believe there was mention of this in the narration. But it's nice to see their uneasiness going away.



I always like it when something like a one-shot manages to have a twist in the end. I mean, they have very little pages to work with and yet they still manage to make you do a double-take. It takes a lot of skill to do something like that, and I think one-shot mangaka aren't given as much praise as the multi-chapter ones.

I just also noticed something minor. Even the title of the manga contributed. The idea of secrets and keeping things from one another and society. Yes, it was a secret stream (himitsu in the Japanese title), but notice how it just wasn't titled something like, "The Stream" or anything like that. It gave you a history between the two characters with just the title alone.

For it to have been a secret place for both girls personalised the setting. It means that it was essentially their place, somewhere that they know, that is secluded, and they have made a refuge. And in this setting, we learn about secrets they've both been keeping from one another and a secret they'll eventually might have to keep from the wider world, depending on how you'd like to interpret an ending for this non-ending type one-shot. Anyway, it was just a thing I noticed. Some people don't care about how the title of a piece contributes to it, but it's really great when it actually does.

The fifth thing kinda bothered me as well, maybe it was more of a translation thing? Like I said before I am a little tired of these plots. It seems like almost all of them are about whether or not the other person is going to accept me because I'm gay or there is something wrong with me because Im gay. Though I think society has moved positively towards being more open and respectful to gay and lesbian relationships I still think there is a long way to go. I suppose some of these stories could have a powerful effect on some people but I dont necessarily relate to them since I am not a lesbian. Though I can certainly relate on an emotional level with angst over love and relationships, I cant with some of their specific feelings. I just want to read good love stories.

That's like the basis of most yuri manga. The tradition started in the very, very melodramatic Shiroi Heya no Futari. Basically every yuri convention for manga came out of that manga.

And it looked to me like they were country girls, if you ask me, so I guess it seemed like they live in a village society and as far as I know, folks from the country aren't as open-minded as yet as the people in the city where you get a wider variety of people in the mix so acceptance wouldn't be too hard there since you're seeing diversity on a regular basis.



That is true, but there are still places where they think homosexuality is like a fever or something :\ You just need the right "medicine" to make it go away.



Hopefully I'll find some happy one-shots for us to discuss in the club! :D

Short, sweet and cute! I loved the twist in the end and the way it was played out. I give it 8/10 a very good one-shot.

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I do love how it had the twist and confusion between one girl thinking it was he fault she ended their friendship and the other girl thinking she was inlove and couldnt bare to be around her. I know its really unlikely that anyone would actually kiss them in their sleep, expecially when they are sick (like wtf O____o;;) but its a sweet story, I wouldnt mind getting kissed in my sleep, given, it's someone I like as well, or could see myself liking. On a side note I also noticed the title was referring to a place only those two knew which brought another connection to them, and you could push to think it referrs to all the secrets they had as well but that could have just been a coincidence. Either way its sweet :D

Im erady for another great one-shot haha.

You'd be surprised at how much this trope is used in most media. I think it goes with this:

1. Vulnerable and open when you're bed-ridden.

2. You need someone to take care of you. Cue whoever is in love with you to show up and do that.

3. Delirious because of illness. It's like being drunk. You can blame it all on the fever.

Kissing in sleep? It's some sort of fantasy, I guess. But sick-kissing is just unhealthy :P

Lol I suppose getting sick after kissing someone who is a sleep and sick is just your punishment for being opportunistic.

.....But yet I think most of us would do it anyway.

well i read all 17 pages (including intro and editors waned page) what can i say ... to start it was a cute story it felt like it was going somewhere and than ..it ends so im a bit disapointed ..yes yes im aware it's a one shot and one shots are short... but still the author had a good beging to a story that could have been fleshed out to a volume or two or even just a few more chapters or atleast pages XD

its a nice story, i dont get the 18+ rateing thu ..thats kinda laughable ive seen smuttyer things on the family channel XD
anyway id give this manga a 6 out of 10 PS. luving the link from club to manga XD