Ase to Sekken
Sweat and Soap

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This is meant to be a gentle, heartwarming romance between a shy girl with excessive perspiration and a brilliant coworker with a smelling fetish.
They meet, get involved with each other and gradually their relationship deepens. So, where's the problem?
Well, maybe it's a good read for girls, I wouldn't know, but from a guys point of view there are several issues.
Their relationship is too perfect. Come on, it's an eternal honeymoon, not even one tiny slice of selfishness anywhere!
He is really too kind and sweet and caring; every single waking moment he is only thinking of her, how to make her happy, how to surprise her. ... I can understand people might dream of a robot lover who is absolutely selfless, but this is really ridiculous.
The MC is the worst element in the story: she is this bland girl who simply can't grow up. She catches a very desirable bachelor, but her insecurity gets in the way all the time. It may be cute at the beginning, but after several months she still blushes for EVERYTHING, is incapable of expressing her feelings and behaves like a 13yo for what concerns physical love. She is lucky enough to have a sexy partner that desires her and only her, but her only concern is to avoid essentially anything but the blandest contact, to the point of being afraid of taking a bath together, let alone DOING something in the tub instead of the bed. Seriously, at one point she even blushes and frowns, as if he's a pervert just because he wants to see her in a swimsuit she has bought for a trip! Seriously??? Moreover, considering she is well aware of his scent fetish, does she learn to use it to seduce and tease him, for mutual satisfaction? Of course not: she just keeps requesting him to suppress or limit it, because it's so embarrassing - and of course, he obliges.
I don't think there's a man anywhere that would put up with such an insecure prude, except maybe some mama's boy who's just fine with holding hands. While some insecurity may be ok in a shy girl, even she should learn to move on her own two feet, eventually. Facing an eternal child will inevitably kill love in the end, so the impossible attraction this nice young man feels for this boring and childish woman is well beyond any suspension of disbelief I can muster.