| Hey man, Zetrin told me to pick up a spot here. |
HieiTrafalgarLaw said: This is what every first comment should be like.Anime is the reason why I live. |
| I don't know any of you, and I'm not big on vanity, but Red told me to join this. Do your best to make my portrayal one utterly unflattering. |
| This was the only mal story that I was not caught up on. I am really enjoying it. It was nice to have the two groups come together. I wonder if it is wise to stay together though, a big group attracts attention. |
 Where there is no imagination there is no horror. || Arthur Conan Doyle || Happy Halloween! |
| How many times do I need to see Lupadims junk ;__; I hope I have some Tsundere moments and give him a good uppercut sometime. Lupadims just like saying something pervy and I go: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=aCoYeb4v3Vg |
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| I find it odd that his fic is lacking some yaoi rape |
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UnoPuntoCinco said: I find it odd that his fic is lacking some yaoi rape I regret writing that chapter now. >.< It sounded so much different in my head. |
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God-of-Harem said: UnoPuntoCinco said: I find it odd that his fic is lacking some yaoi rape I regret writing that chapter now. >.< It sounded so much different in my head. All lines of thought lead back to Yaoi rape scenes. |
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Kibura_Iburasa said: Rape in yaoi always leads to love-God-of-Harem said: UnoPuntoCinco said: I find it odd that his fic is lacking some yaoi rape I regret writing that chapter now. >.< It sounded so much different in my head. All lines of thought lead back to Yaoi rape scenes. |
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UnoPuntoCinco said: Rape in yaoi always leads to love- Its just aggressive passion, like Korrvo and Jack in the other fiction. |
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Kibura_Iburasa said: That fic is da shit, update plzUnoPuntoCinco said: Rape in yaoi always leads to love- Its just aggressive passion, like Korrvo and Jack in the other fiction. |
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| Chapter 13: Who are you? “Thanks Yoro! Lupa said happily, buttoning up his new jacket and jeans. “Don’t thank me. I only did it so we didn’t have to see you naked anymore.” Yoro said with a sigh. “Where’s everyone else Goh?” Yoro said now talking to Goh. “Kousoku and his group went to buy medical supplies and new weapons.” Goh said browsing through a rack of hats. “Korvvo said he had something to do. He looked suspicious so I asked Lime to keep an eye on him.” Goh said picking up a hat and trying it on. “Asa’s still in bed. I told him to stay there and I’ll buy him some medicine. And Kibura is ri-…” Goh looked around, she was nowhere to be seen. “Hmm. She was just here a second ago, Goh said leaving the shop to find her. Kibura was walking through the crowds, something was wrong, she could feel it. She stopped out the front of an old abandoned house. The alleyway beside it caught her attention. Something was drawing her in. Kibura walked into the alley there were shadows all around her. “Are you lost, pretty girl?” A croaky voice said from the shadows. “Who’s there?” Kibura sharply responded, sensing danger. “Who? Me? Oh, I’m nobody. No, no, nobody at all.” He let out a cackle and danced into the shadow opposite him. “What do you want!?” Kibura said unslinging her bow and turning to face the voice. “What… Do I want? Oh, you ask such interesting questions.” He said with a clap of his hands. “Now, let’s see… what do I want…? This is such a difficult question…” He mumbled sounding troubled. “No! Ask an easier question! That one was too hard!” He yelled angrily. He swivelled into another shadow once again. “Listen… I don’t want any trouble.” Kibura said with a shaky voice, arming her bow. Her hand was shaking so much that she dropped the arrow on the ground. “Trouble? Am I really that troublesome?” The voice came from a shadow behind Kibura now, she turned frantically to face it. She took a step back. She could now see the back of the figure of what seemed to be teenage male, except there was a key in his back, like a wind up doll. “Perhaps… Perhaps I do know what I want…” He said to himself. I-is that s-so?” Kibura said taking a step back. She couldn’t shake this dangerous feeling. This person was emitting an enormous amount of pressure. She fell onto her backside as the mysterious boy’s head turned without his body, like the head the head of a doll. “I just want to know who I am.” He said with a sob. His eyes were blood-shot, and his face was without a nose. Kibura let out a shriek and all of a sudden the figure disappeared entirely. “I have a feeling we’ll meet again” his voiced seemed to say in her mind. “Kibura? There you are!” Goh said entering the alley. “Huh? What’s wrong? You look like you just saw a ghost.” End of Chapter |
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| Well...that was scary. For a moment there I thought I was gonna get raped D: Just gonna get stalked by some freaky ass puppet-thing guy..... ;____; |
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Kibura_Iburasa said: Disappointed?For a moment there I thought I was gonna get raped D: |
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emeraldrosary said: Korrvo is putting a plan together to win over Emerald, obviously.Great chapter as always Goh. I have a bad vibe about Korrvo. I wonder what he's up to. |
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YorozuyaGinSan said: Kibura_Iburasa said: Disappointed?For a moment there I thought I was gonna get raped D: Attempted, might have added a bit of grit to the scene don't you think? some clothes ripping at least. Then someone could have saved me dramatically by crushing their head with a large rock....ok maybe not...man do I have a problem with light hearted plots lol I like the puppet man plot idea a lot more though. ;__; I think, not sure about been stalked in the night by him though. |
SpooksMay 11, 2014 3:23 PM
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| I thought we were gettin sum raep :C |
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NarTaco said: UnoPuntoCinco said: I thought we were gettin sum raep :C I'm sure we all assumed that. Damn it guys. What is wrong with you? Suprised that nobody picked up on who creepy doll guy is. I decided to introduce him early, for plot development. |
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God-of-Harem said: Is it RedArmy?NarTaco said: UnoPuntoCinco said: I thought we were gettin sum raep :C I'm sure we all assumed that. Damn it guys. What is wrong with you? Suprised that nobody picked up on who creepy doll guy is. I decided to introduce him early, for plot development. |
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YorozuyaGinSan said: God-of-Harem said: Is it RedArmy?NarTaco said: UnoPuntoCinco said: I thought we were gettin sum raep :C I'm sure we all assumed that. Damn it guys. What is wrong with you? Suprised that nobody picked up on who creepy doll guy is. I decided to introduce him early, for plot development. No spoilers ;) |
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| God damnit I'm not the Doll Version of Jackie Chan. https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=CGH_1A-3bDg |
emeraldrosary said: RedArmyShogun said: As soon as I read that the doll/boy was cackling I immediately thought of you. Maybe it's because your avatar seems like a cackler lolGod damnit I'm not the Doll Version of Jackie Chan. https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=CGH_1A-3bDg Saddly so did I -__- |
| Chapter 14: To Astonguard. The party had suited up and had set on the road once again, this time, with the party of five. They had been climbing up a steep hill for what seemed like hours, “I guess we’re the party of eight now huh? Well, ten…” Asa thought aloud as Lupa carried him on his shoulders. Goh had decided earlier that Asa shouldn’t put pressure on his leg, it had been a week since the battle with the bandits, but Goh wanted to be sure, in case of battle, he wanted Asa to be in his best condition possible. There was a big sigh of relief from the back of the party as a big yawn was let out Zetrin was walking 10 meters behind everyone with Kibura. Kibura was quieter than ever. “Man, I wish I could just lay down and go to sleep in this sun.” Zetrin said all of a sudden. “You were asleep, just like 20 minutes ago.” Kibura said. “Besides you can sleep while walking. You would not have bothered to speak unless you had something on your mind.” Zetrin looked at Kibura through one eye, as the other eye was closed. “I guess you’re not as stupid as you let on.” Kibura wasn’t sure if she should take that as a compliment or not. “So? What is it?” She asked. There was a silence. “You.” He said. “You saw something, didn’t you? You’ve not spoken a word in ages.” Kibura wasn’t sure what to say. “All I can say, is we’re going into a big battle. And soon.” She said. Zetrin closed his other eye and yawned. “Thought as much.” spoken his last words before he instantly fell asleep. Goh and Kousoku we’re at the front of the party arguing over who should be leading. “Geez. They won’t listen to me, no matter what I say.” Emerald said pouting. Little did she know a malicious plot concerning her, was being made just five meters behind her. “It’s perfect! There’s no way this can fail!” Korrvo was flicking through a notepad dotting down notes here and there. “She’s gonna fall head over heels for me, Lime-me-boy!” Korrvo sung giving lime a nudge. “I see.” Lime said quietly. All though Goh had told Lime to keep an eye on him there was nothing he could do to stop his plan now. Capri was giggling as Yoro was giving her a piggyback. It looked almost like they were father and daughter. They were nearing the top of the hill “I’M HUNGRY!” Uno complained. “If we don’t get there soon, I’m gonna have to eat fresh meat!” Uno gave Lupa an evil look. Lupa looked terrified as he sped up to a jog to get away from Uno. Lupa stopped at the top of the hill. Lupa stood there looking amazed. “What are you looking at Lupa?” Goh said as he reached the top of the hill. There, on the horizon, a huge city spanned for what seemed like hundreds of kilometres. “Astonguard!” He exclaimed with a huge smile on his face. “It’s huge.” Kousoku said in amazement. “Come on guys. Let’s pick up the pace. It’ll be dark soon.” Goh said as they continued their walking pace. What awaited the party at Astonguard? What new faces will they meet? Only time would tell. But little did they know, they would not reach the city unscathed. End of Chapter |
BaileyyMay 11, 2014 8:39 PM
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| +1 to Zetrin 1v1 me Kibura Yoro building a relationship with Capri, that's smart of Yoro. A big battle is coming, I wonder what the enemy will be like. |
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Kibura_Iburasa said: Asa is still somewhat a burden, he's still injured. Something may happen to him, or someone protecting himI feel incoming drama and combat, possibly someone gonna get injured? NarTaco said: Red is OP if he can take on the group alone lolZetrin said: A big battle is coming, I wonder what the enemy will be like. Red. Unless he has his own entourage, it'd be interesting to see him take them on all alone. |
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Zetrin said: Kibura_Iburasa said: Asa is still somewhat a burden, he's still injured. Something may happen to him, or someone protecting himI feel incoming drama and combat, possibly someone gonna get injured? ...Maybe someones gonna get even more injured because of it, perhaps really bad. That would be interesting. As for who is coming its obviously RED |
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Kibura_Iburasa said: Zetrin said: Kibura_Iburasa said: Asa is still somewhat a burden, he's still injured. Something may happen to him, or someone protecting himI feel incoming drama and combat, possibly someone gonna get injured? ...Maybe someones gonna get even more injured because of it, perhaps really bad. That would be interesting. As for who is coming its obviously RED BLOOD FOR THE BLOOD GOD! SKULLS FOR THE SKULL THRONE! |
RedArmyShogun said: BLOOD FOR THE BLOOD GOD! SKULLS FOR THE SKULL THRONE! For the imperium! http://i43.photobucket.com/albums/e369/dinodudemax/moraleposter.jpg |
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Kibura_Iburasa said: RedArmyShogun said: BLOOD FOR THE BLOOD GOD! SKULLS FOR THE SKULL THRONE! For the imperium! http://i43.photobucket.com/albums/e369/dinodudemax/moraleposter.jpg MILK FOR THE KHORNE FLAKES! http://fc06.deviantart.net/fs71/f/2013/009/6/0/milk_for_the_khorne_flakes_by_j_raveneye-d5qyexo.jpg |
GOH said: “If we don’t get there soon, I’m gonna have to eat fresh meat!” Uno gave Lupa an evil look. Dem innuendo |
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| Chapter Fifteen: A legendary beast "It should be just a few more kilometers" Goh called out to the rest of the party. The mood surrounding the ten players had grown at the thought of comfortable beds and a warm meal. Zetrin looked as though he was still asleep, though he was focusing on Uno through the slits of his eyes. Uno had strayed away from the party and looked as though he was fiddling with something. "Man we were lucky that we didn't encounter a battle!" Asa said sounding relieved. "We can't relax yet." Goh said, reminding Asa of the mistake he made in the last battle. "Wait! Something is nearby" Kibura called out, as if on que. The ground about twenty meters in front of the party began to turn over and a hand penetrated the ground. The hand was rotten, the party could smell the decaying flesh from their position as a huge beast pulled itself out from the ground. It took a humanoid form, but it was the size of at least ten men. The party retched at the smell. "Zombie?" Kousoku managed to ask through coughing. Zetrin ran to the front of the party and summoned a huge book into his hands out of thin air. It's pages flipped on it's own until it stopped at a page. "Draugr" Zetrin called out. "One of the 55 Legendary Beasts in Crave Saga Online. It's one of the weaker of the Legendary Beasts. It's undead type, so usually Healing magic would be greatly effective, however, it has the ability to block magic, so Lime and Emerald will be useless. Furthermore, Capri needs to stay back. The blood of a undead creature is like poison to a Vampire." Zetrin surveyed the party carefully. His eyes stopped on Uno. He looked calm. Zetrin knew he was up to something. "Here it comes!" Kibura called out as the Draugr started to walk towards the party. Kibura armed an arrow and released it. 'FWIP' the arrow was going straight for the Draugr's head. The Draugr caught the arrow's shaft and snapped it in half. "Split up!" Goh called out to the party. "Try to surround it. Lupa, stay back with Asa, Capri, Emerald and Lime and protect them." The party ran into their positions. Korrvo positioned himself behind the Draugr. "Eat this!" he yelled aiming his cannon at the Draugr. The Draugr side stepped as soon as soon as the cannon had fired. Yoro had already jumped into the air with his thrusters to attack the Draugr from the front. The cannon ball smashed into Yoro's gut. He hit the ground with a 'CLANG'. "SHIT! YORO!" Korrvo called out. Yoro released his helmet from a kneeling position and blood splattered onto the ground from a cough. The Draugr brought his leg back and kicked Yoro into a tree 25 meters away, next to where Lupa and the others were. "YORO!" Capri yelled in despair. "EMERALD, HEAL YORO!" Kousoku called out. Capri's eyes turned red and she removed her scarf. "NO, Capri!" Lupa said grabbing Capri's small frame and restraining her. Zetrin looked over to Uno, who was still fiddling around with something. "You better hurry up with whatever you're doing, bozo. We're not gonna last much longer." He whispered to himself. "You bastard!" Goh yelled charging at the Draugr from the front. The Draugr swung his right fist at Goh as he approached. Goh raised his shield at the last moment. It was enough to absorb the damage, but the sheer fotce sent Goh tumbling multiple meters. Kousoku jumped using the Dragon Warrior's High Jump ability and attempted to drive his lance into the Draugr's exposed back. The Draugr spun its entire body and caught the lance, and threw the lance and Kousoku into the air. Kousoku landed with a thud, but his strong legs absorbed the damage. "We just can't touch this guy!" Kousoku said angrily. "Oi, zombie guy!" The Draugr spun to face the voice. "DON'T GET IN THE WAY OF MY WARM MEAL!" Uno yelled pitching a glass bottle at the Draugr. It was the fastest throw Goh had ever seen. Anyone had ever seen. So fast the Draugr had no time to react. It smashed on the Draugr's body. The Draugr stopped in its tracks, paralyzed. "Attack now! You haven't got much time!" Kibura responded instantly, arming her bow and releasing an arrow into it's eye. The Draugr howled in pain. "I can't miss from here!" Korrvo shouted shooting a cannonball into the Draugr's back from merely meters away. The cannonball pierced through the Draugr's entire body, bringing it to it's hands and knees. Goh brought his sword through the Draugr's neck decapitating it's head, at the same time, Kousoku drove his lance through it's heart through it's back. The Draugr collapsed onto the ground and it's head rolled away from it's body. The battle was over. "Just what the hell was that Uno...?" Goh asked in amazement. End of Chapter |
BaileyyMay 12, 2014 2:32 PM
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Man we were lucky that we didn't encounter a battle!" Asa said DUMB You never jinx yourself like that!!! -- nice fight scene, hope Yoro is alright! |
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| Korrvo did that intentionally, I'd bet. These guys really need to start observing their surroundings, this was a problem for Yoro in the last fight aswell. |
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| I was listening to this when reading, it made it more epic. Uno said: Hell yeahDON'T GET IN THE WAY OF MY WARM MEAL! |
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| Chapter 16: One down, two to go. “As expected of MAL HQ’s top scientist.” Zetrin said. “That hasn’t been confirmed. After all, you never showed up to the tests.” Uno replied back. The party looked surprised at the fact that Uno and Zetrin knew each other in the real world, but more at the fact that Uno was actually a genius scientist. “Still, that was some throw!” Goh exclaimed with a huge grin on his face, giving Uno a slap on the back. “Well, I did play a bit of baseball back home, heheh.” Uno was blushing as he rubbed the back of his head. He wasn’t used to being praised, but he thought he could get used to it. “Aren’t you guys forgetting something?” Kousoku added running over to where the injured Yoro was. The battle interface appeared. ‘YOU WON! Enemy Team: 1 Killed. Ally Team: 0 Killed, 1 wounded and unconscious, 5 retreated. Loot: 300 Gold Pieces, Draugr Heart (Ingredient)’ “What’s his condition?” Goh asked fearing the worst. Yoro’s suit was back in his belt. “It’s no good. I managed to heal the bruises and the damage on the outside of his body, but his internal organs have been severely damaged. There’s nothing my magic can do to fix that.” Emerald looked up and spoke the words that everyone was fearing. “He’s going to die.” The words hit like a truck. “The best we can do is get to an Inn as soon as possible, so he doesn’t wake up the last town.” Goh said grimly. The party’s mood had took a turn for the worst. Lupa put Asa down and picked up Yoro. “There’s a village a few hundred meters from here.” Lupa said. “We need to hurry.” The party sat around the bed. Capri kneeled next to the bed crying. Emerald held her hands above Yoro’s chest monitoring his condition. “Any second now.” She said. Yoro’s breathing sped up and he let out a sharp wheeze. He struggled for air as blood dropped from his eyes. He grabbed the sheets so tight he broke his fingers, his eyes looked like they were going to fall out they were so wide. In a final attempt for air, he coughed a bucket-full of blood onto the sheets. He slowly closed his eyes. It was the most horrific scene the party had ever seen. “It’s over.’ Emerald said softly. There were tears in her eyes and she could taste vomit in her throat. The rest of the party were no better. A flash appeared and the dead Yoro was replaced in the bed with a live one. Yoro sat up and it didn’t take much to realise the atmosphere in the room. “…I died… huh…” He said grimly. Yoro was now one step closer to death. End of Chapter |
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| The 3 lives per person rule sorta nullifies the sense of danger in this series, wouldn't mind if Yoro died here really, he'd just come back with two lives left. Said that right as a new chapter was posted. Well, the groups first experience with death, huh. Hopefully this serves as a wakeup call for their lack of perception in fighting. |
OchimushaMay 12, 2014 5:11 PM
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| Am I the only one that laughs at the hospital bit enjoying the suffering? I mean...uh..what? Get well soon...uhh be-best wishes...ah..hah..ahh.. emeraldrosary said: This group needs a tactician/strategist to assess everyone's strength and tell them what to do. It's better than everyone just jumping into battle. It's a waste of group efficiency. I WILL DO IT! But you must tell me who I am!? |
emeraldrosary said: Zetrin has potential for the job. He just needs to fix his personality. lol.This group needs a tactician/strategist to assess everyone's strength and tell them what to do. It's better than everyone just jumping into battle. It's a waste of group efficiency. |
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RedArmyShogun said: I think you're supposed to be an antagonist though.I WILL DO IT! Zetrin's character sounds the most suitable for the job. |
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emeraldrosary said: Aww, I didn't expect Yoro to die so soon. Urgh, I'm actually irritated with my fanfic counter-part. So Emerald can only heal flesh wounds and bruises? That's not exactly very useful to be honest. I hate to say this but she is probably the most useless character out of the group :/ Sucks that Yoro got the first death. He was probably one of strongest fighters on the team. Well, hopefully his death will teach the others to fight more carefully. This group needs a tactician/strategist to assess everyone's strength and tell them what to do. It's better than everyone just jumping into battle. It's a waste of group efficiency. I think I'm going to make Emerald get more abilities, but giving her the power to save dying people kinda defeats the purpose of having lives. As for the tactician, it might be difficult to write, but I'll attempt to make Zetrin fit that role. |
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