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Don’t be in a hurry and, please, surprise me.

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I will, Gru-Senpai

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Jul 12, 2015 4:18 AM

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Ok Gru-Senpai, here it this, my next attempt at making this review.
My idea was to look at old one and cut away parts i felt was not need and used spell checker to hopeful make any spelling mistakes. While you said to write a 300-400 words long review, i looked at my other reviews, most of the was well over that limit and i wanted to know why this one was so much longer. The answer was that i was comparing it to season one, so to comprise on the high word count, I took half of the character part out and put limits on each part, only 200 words max each part. The character part just went pass that limit but was under 300 words so i think thats fine. I did this to show you Gru-Senpai that i not giving up on this like i did with Chaos;head and i going to keep trying my hardest to make the best reviews i can do, and even try to push pass that to make them even better.

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Jul 13, 2015 1:49 AM

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1)Check my mistakes.
2)See if you want to rewrite something.
3)Rewrite the red part of your review.

It is advisable to read this review after seeing the first season of Seitokai no Ichizon.

Seitokai no Ichizon Lv.2 is a very enjoyable anime with a good comedy and some heart-warming moments. But let’s see if it is different from the first season.

Student Council's Discretion (Seitokai no Ichizon) has the following genres: comedy, parody, school and harem. The anime is based on the light novel by Aoi Sekina and Kira Inugami; the show was produced by AIC and it aired between October 13, 2012 and December 15, 2012. The anime has 10 episodes in total.

Story-line (7/10)

Just like in the first season of Seitokai no Ichizon, the second season doesn’t have a story-line, because all episodes aren’t connected and the events of one episode don’t add much to the next episode. But unlike the first season, most episodes of the second season have more scenes taking place outside of the student council’s room, which was made in an attempt to make the second different from the first season. The story-line continues from where the first season ended with only 6 more months until the graduation day, with Kurimu and Chizuru graduating, and Minatsu and Mafuyu moving schools, leaving Ken with the task of creating his harem much harder to accomplish. So, throughout the second season, Ken tries to make the four girls happy and to show them how much he loves them. The comedy part in the second season was somewhat weaker than in the first season; yet, the character development received much more attention than in the first season. But for some reason the interaction between the characters felt forced and unfeasible.

Art (8/10)

Seitokai no Ichizon Lv.2 uses a very similar art style to the first season, with the only noticeable change being the use of brighter colors and a smoother look to the animation, which made the show more attractive to the viewer. Another difference was that the student council room was different from what it was in the first season. In Seitokai no Ichizon Lv.2, more time was given to the scenes outside the student council’s room, which was interesting, since they showed other places including Ken’s room. This gave the viewer something new, instead of keeping them just in the student council room and in that room only, which season 1 did most of the time. This also allowed the viewer to see other parts of the characters’ lives outside the student council room. All in all, the characters still look well-designed and pleasing to look at, just like in the first season.

Sound (8/10)
Seitokai no Ichizon Lv.2 captured the same feeling with the music like the first season did. The new opening for Seitokai no Ichizon Lv.2 gave a nice feeling with its soft and cute vocals, while the ending, unlike in the first season, was sung by the female singer. The background music was well-made and each musical piece fitted the mood of what the characters were taking about. The voice actors/actresses did one hell of a job voicing their characters; they felt to be real and I did like it.

Characters (9/10)
The anime follows five members of the student council at Hekiyou Academy.

--Kurimu Sakurano, voiced by Mariko Honda (Yuuko Aioi from Nichijou and Mazinger Z from Robot Girls Z.) She is a child-like president of the student council, who acts somewhat childish and loves sweets. At the beginning of nearly every episode she writes briefings on a white board. In season 1, Ken revealed that he met Kurimu in the spring, while helping her carry boxes.

--Chizuru Akaba, voiced by Yuka Saitou (Mira from High School DxD and Ritsu Kisaragi from Kiniro no Corda: Blue♪Sky.) She is a sadistic secretary, who loves Kurimu and is always trying to cuddle and abuse her. Ken met her in the autumn, when he was suffering from a broken heart by the two girls he loved.

--Minatsu Shiina, voiced by Misuzu Togashi (Origami Tobiichi from Date a Live and Yukiteru Amano from Mirai Nikki.) She is a tomboyish vice-president, who loves shounen to a point that most of her suggestions are based upon them. Ken met Minatsu in the summer.

--Mafuyu Shiina, voiced by Yuki Horinaka. She is Minatsu’s little sister and the club’s treasurer. She is addicted to video games and loves BL novels. Ken met Mafuyu in the winter in an online chat room.

--Ken Sugisaki, voiced by Takashi Kondou (Hibiki Laytis from Fairy Tail and Takumi Kaizu from _Summer.) She is the valedictorian, or “blue chip” seat of the student council, because of being the highest scoring student. He loves to play eroge and bishoujo games. He dreams and plans to make the rest of the student council members his harem.

Enjoyment (8/10)

Seitokai no Ichizon Lv.2, did feel to me weaker than the first season, it was still enjoyable to me. [color=red]The story was still attractive and it had some very funny moments, but in comparison with the first season, it had a more serious feel to it, where it was way more focus on the comedy.[/color] The art was pleasing and the sound delivered the same feeling, apart from the two things: Firstly, most of the ending songs didn’t give me the same feelings like the ones in the first season and secondly, Chizuru’s new voice actress couldn’t give me the same feeling that the old one did, especially in the sadistic scenes. But aside from that, it was a very good watch.

Overall (8/10)
Seitokai no Ichizon Lv.2 suffers from what happens, in most cases, in some sequels: the prequel overshadows the sequel. While it was still enjoyable, it just failed to match with the first season, because of the comedy being weaker, to make a room for the character development that feels forced. The art has been improved and gives viewers new and interesting things to see. The sound as both improved and not, while the opening song and the new voice for Mafuyu are welcome improvements, most of the ending songs and Chizuru’s new voice just doesn’t deliver the same affect and feels like a step backwards. But even with these facts, if you enjoyed Seitokai no Ichizon, then Seitokai no Ichizon Lv.2 gives you a lovely and nice ending to the story but the journey doesn’t feel as filling as Seitokai no Ichizon was.

Jul 13, 2015 1:54 AM

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Ok, i work on it in a bit, i am wondering what you mean Check my Mistakes? You mean mine or did you put some in to see if i notice them?

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Jul 13, 2015 2:11 AM

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>Ok, i work on it in a bit, i am wondering what you mean Check my Mistakes? You mean mine or did you put some in to see if i notice them?

In my first language, which is Ukrainian, check my mistakes means check my mistakes.

Jul 13, 2015 4:25 AM

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Well here is the changes Gru-Senpai

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Jul 13, 2015 6:16 AM

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Read it one more time, see if there is anything you can do and only after that you can publish it.
[spoiler]
It is advisable to read this review after seeing the first season of Seitokai no Ichizon.

Seitokai no Ichizon Lv.2 is a very enjoyable anime with a good comedy and some heart-warming moments. But let’s see if it is different from the first season.

Student Council's Discretion, Seitokai no Ichizon, has the following genres: comedy, parody, school and harem. The anime is based on the light novel by Aoi Sekina and Kira Inugami; the show was produced by AIC and it aired between October 13, 2012 and December 15, 2012. The anime has 10 episodes in total.

Story-line (7/10)

Just like in the first season of Seitokai no Ichizon, the second season doesn’t have the story-line, because all episodes aren’t connected and the events of one episode don’t add much to the next episode. But unlike the first season, most episodes of the second season have more scenes taking place outside of the student council’s room, which was made in an attempt to make the second different from the first. The story-line continues from where the first season ended with only 6 more months until the graduation day, with Kurimu and Chizuru graduating, and Minatsu and Mafuyu moving schools, leaving Ken with the task of creating his harem much harder to accomplish. So, throughout the second season, Ken tries to make the four girls happy and to show them how much he loves them. The comedy part in the second season was somewhat weaker than in the first season; yet, the character development received much more attention than in the first season. But for some reason the interaction between the characters felt forced and unfeasible.

Art (8/10)

Seitokai no Ichizon Lv.2 uses a very similar art style to the first season, with the only noticeable change being the use of brighter colors and a smoother look to the animation, which made the show more attractive to the viewer. Another difference was that the student council’s room was different from what it was in the first season. In Seitokai no Ichizon Lv.2, more time was given to the scenes outside the student council’s room, which was interesting, since they showed other places, including Ken’s room. This gave the viewer something new, instead of keeping them just in the student council room and in that room only, which the first season did most of the time. This also allowed the viewer to see other parts of the characters’ lives outside the student council room. All in all, the characters still look well-designed and pleasing to look at, just like in the first season.

Sound (8/10)

Seitokai no Ichizon Lv.2 captured the same feeling with the music like the first season did. The new opening for Seitokai no Ichizon Lv.2 gave a nice feeling, with its soft and cute vocals, while the ending, unlike in the first season, was sung by the female singer. The background music was well-made and each musical piece fitted the mood of what the characters were taking about. The voice actors/actresses did one hell of a job voicing their characters; their characters felt to be real and I did like it.

Characters (9/10)

The anime follows five members of the student council at Hekiyou Academy.

--Kurimu Sakurano, voiced by Mariko Honda (Yuuko Aioi from Nichijou and Mazinger Z from Robot Girls Z.) She is a child-like president of the student council, who acts somewhat childish and loves sweets. At the beginning of nearly every episode she writes briefings on a white board. In season 1, Ken revealed that he met Kurimu in the spring, while helping her carry boxes.

--Chizuru Akaba, voiced by Yuka Saitou (Mira from High School DxD and Ritsu Kisaragi from Kiniro no Corda: Blue♪Sky.) She is a sadistic secretary, who loves Kurimu and is always trying to cuddle and abuse her. Ken met her in the autumn, when he was suffering from a broken heart by the two girls he loved.

--Minatsu Shiina, voiced by Misuzu Togashi (Origami Tobiichi from Date a Live and Yukiteru Amano from Mirai Nikki.) She is a tomboyish vice-president, who loves shounen to a point that most of her suggestions are based upon them. Ken met Minatsu in the summer.

--Mafuyu Shiina, voiced by Yuki Horinaka. She is Minatsu’s little sister and the club’s treasurer. She is addicted to video games and loves BL novels. Ken met Mafuyu in the winter in an online chat room.

--Ken Sugisaki, voiced by Takashi Kondou (Hibiki Laytis from Fairy Tail and Takumi Kaizu from _Summer.) She is the valedictorian, or “blue chip” seat of the student council, because of being the highest scoring student in his group. He loves to play eroge and bishoujo games. He dreams and plans to make the rest of the student council members his harem.

Enjoyment (8/10)

Seitokai no Ichizon Lv.2, did feel to me weaker than the first season, but it is still enjoyable to me. The story was interesting and it had some funny moments, but in comparison with the first season, it had a more serious feel to it, whereas the first season was more focused on the comedy. The art was pleasing and the sound delivered the same feeling, apart from the two things: firstly, most of the ending songs didn’t give me the same feelings like the ones in the first season and secondly, Chizuru’s new voice actress couldn’t give me the same feeling that the old one did, especially in the sadistic scenes. But aside from that, it was a very good watch.

Overall (8/10)

Seitokai no Ichizon Lv.2 suffers from what sometimes happens in some sequels: the prequel overshadows the sequel. While Seitokai no Ichizon Lv.2 was still enjoyable to watch, it just wasn’t able to match with the first season. This desire to spend enough time on the characters’ development only ruined the second season. Did they want to make a good comedy, or perhaps did they want to make something more than a romantic comedy? That is the question I can’t answer.

All in all, if you didn’t like the first season, there is no reason for you to watch the second. It is not an eye-candy, it is a show, which will help you to chuckle and just to kill your free time. Give it a try!

Jul 13, 2015 7:04 AM

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Ok Gru-Senpai, will give it a very good look over it tomorrow and thanks for helping, and rewriting the overall part (It was very hard of me to put into words what i wanted to say)

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Jul 14, 2015 11:17 PM

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What kind of a review thread is this? Just curious since I thought it would be a thread where people would leave their reviews about a particular show and then the others will comment their opinion on it.
But from these last few posts, it seems like it's a thread where your MAL reviews are reviewed.

Jul 15, 2015 12:15 AM

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Inferno792 said:
What kind of a review thread is this? Just curious since I thought it would be a thread where people would leave their reviews about a particular show and then the others will comment their opinion on it.
But from these last few posts, it seems like it's a thread where your MAL reviews are reviewed.

You are free to JUST post a link to your review(s). We aren’t masochists to “review” your reviews if you don’t really need that.

Jul 15, 2015 12:53 AM

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Grusomhed said:

Inferno792 said:
What kind of a review thread is this? Just curious since I thought it would be a thread where people would leave their reviews about a particular show and then the others will comment their opinion on it.
But from these last few posts, it seems like it's a thread where your MAL reviews are reviewed.

You are free to JUST post a link to your review(s). We aren’t masochists to “review” your reviews if you don’t really need that.

You seem to have misunderstood me. According to what I read in the last few posts(I jumped straight to the last page), it seemed to me as if this was a thread to correct a user's review before he/she posts them on the site. But, after checking out the first page, I see that it's a little different than that.

Alright, here are all the reviews I have submitted on the site.

Kuroko no Basket Season 2

Shokugeki no Soma

Psycho Pass

Phantom : Requiem for the Phantom

Freezing

Jul 15, 2015 1:31 AM

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Inferno792 said:

You seem to have misunderstood me. According to what I read in the last few posts(I jumped straight to the last page), it seemed to me as if this was a thread to correct a user's review before he/she posts them on the site. But, after checking out the first page, I see that it's a little different than that.

Okay, I will paraphrase it. You are free to JUST post a link to your review(s). BUT! If you need our help, we will “review” your reviews.

Jul 15, 2015 1:36 AM

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Hi Inferno, i use this tread to have Gru-Senpai, Speakss-San or anyone really to proofread and to help improve my reviews as i not super good at typing. While i don't put names of users that help make the reviews in the review itself, i do put their names everywhere i post a link to the review and in the blog posts i make when a review goes up. So see this tread as a place to get help to improve your reviews and to post links to your reviews. When i got time later i give your reviews a read and leave my opinion about them here. Anyway it is nice to meet you.

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Jul 15, 2015 1:43 AM

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Seto_Masamune said:
Hi Inferno, i use this tread to have Gru-Senpai, Speakss-San or anyone really to proofread and to help improve my reviews as i not super good at typing. While i don't put names of users that help make the reviews in the review itself, i do put their names everywhere i post a link to the review and in the blog posts i make when a review goes up. So see this tread as a place to get help to improve your reviews and to post links to your reviews. When i got time later i give your reviews a read and leave my opinion about them here. Anyway it is nice to meet you.

Sure and it's nice to meet you as well!

Jul 15, 2015 1:45 AM

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Well there isn't really any "correct" way to write a review, the only thing you can really help people with is stuff like grammar/spelling/structure etc

Jul 15, 2015 1:49 AM

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HaXXspetten said:
Well there isn't really any "correct" way to write a review, the only thing you can really help people with is stuff like grammar/spelling/structure etc

Of course, there isn't. As long as the message is conveyed thoroughly and without any doubts, it doesn't really matter how you write it.

Jul 15, 2015 1:51 AM

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I really like your review on Shokugeki no Souma
Just my only big disagreement from your Cons is that I believe that the long explanations actually give the show a more appreciation to the art of cooking beyond just being a great comedy show. So in that way I find it more a positive.

Jul 15, 2015 1:52 AM

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Just a quick check Gru-Senpai.
"The new opening for Seitokai no Ichizon Lv.2 gave a nice feeling, with its soft and cute vocals, while the ending, unlike in the first season, was sung by the female singer."
I think it should be :
"The new opening for Seitokai no Ichizon Lv.2 gave a nice feeling, with its soft and cute vocals, while the ending, unlike in the first season, was sung by the female voice actress(es)."

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Jul 15, 2015 2:04 AM

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Seto_Masamune said:
Just a quick check Gru-Senpai.
"The new opening for Seitokai no Ichizon Lv.2 gave a nice feeling, with its soft and cute vocals, while the ending, unlike in the first season, was sung by the female singer."
I think it should be :
"The new opening for Seitokai no Ichizon Lv.2 gave a nice feeling, with its soft and cute vocals, while the ending, unlike in the first season, was sung by the female voice actress(es)."

1)voice actor(Noun)
An actor who provides voices for animations, commercials and dubbed films etc.

2) Definition of SINGER
: one that sings.

(c) Yahoo

Jul 15, 2015 2:07 AM

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Ok so is it fine, because i was reading it as there only one singer, there isn't as some of the endings are sung by different people.

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Jul 15, 2015 2:13 AM

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Well I'm not going to bother linking all of mine at least, got way too many for that x.x

Jul 15, 2015 2:15 AM

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HaXXspetten said:
Well I'm not going to bother linking all of mine at least, got way too many for that x.x

You must review a lot. I mostly review for anime that really enrage me or I think they are underrated.

Well, you can link some of your recent ones.

Jul 15, 2015 2:17 AM

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Thats fine HaXXspetten, why not just put to the newest one and then just every time you post a new one leave a link here, i always looking for more anime to watch and review.

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Jul 15, 2015 2:31 AM

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Inferno792 said:

HaXXspetten said:
Well I'm not going to bother linking all of mine at least, got way too many for that x.x

You must review a lot. I mostly review for anime that really enrage me or I think they are underrated.

Well, you can link some of your recent ones.

Well I'm currently #26 here so yeah I guess

Err well I guess I could share a couple of the ones I liked myself at least

Outbreak Company
Nagi no Asukara
Ore, Twintails ni Narimasu
Grisaia no Kajitsu
White Album 2
Ginga Eiyuu Densetsu

If you want want anything else just go here I guess for the latest ones. I mostly do seasonal stuffs these days

Jul 15, 2015 4:20 AM

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Well here is the final version of latest review with help from Grusomhed
http://myanimelist.net/reviews.php?id=193452

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Jul 16, 2015 1:16 PM

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Seto_Masamune said:
Well here is the final version of latest review with help from Grusomhed
http://myanimelist.net/reviews.php?id=193452

thought it was pretty dang good. You've grown as a reviewer quite well. I'm curious to know why some of those votes are downvotes.. Maybe just people downvote trolling or something

Jul 16, 2015 4:29 PM

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Speakss said:

Seto_Masamune said:
Well here is the final version of latest review with help from Grusomhed
http://myanimelist.net/reviews.php?id=193452

thought it was pretty dang good. You've grown as a reviewer quite well. I'm curious to know why some of those votes are downvotes.. Maybe just people downvote trolling or something

I think you dont understand how MAL review system works.
The major reasons for downvotes could be:
1. The user voting doesnt agree with the overall score.
2. The review was bad. This includes all types of thimgs such as grammatical mistakes and such.
3. There were too many points in the review the user voting doesnt agree with.
4. Over praising/criticizing somethimg which wasnt too good/bad.
5. The user just feels like downvoting for fun.

In those, I think Seto's review probably falls in either the first or third category.

Jul 16, 2015 4:30 PM

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But I think 7/12 is a pretty good review ratio on Mal.

Jul 17, 2015 1:11 AM

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You should be happy with anything getting above 50% upvotes in my experience

Jul 17, 2015 9:48 PM

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Hey. This isn't a proper objective one, just a mini review I made when a friend asked why I liked Plastic Memories so much. I have never reviewed anything fully, only a few parting impression sentences in my anime list when I finish a show.

Hopefully someone will read and give the show a shot, I don't know. Here:

Plastic Memories is beautiful. Besides the emotions it tries to bring out of you it will make you think "Am I using my time like I should be?"

This anime is not perfect but from the first episode you can see that it was made to tug your feels. Some people cried, I did, some people didn't and that's okay. In between those moments of sadness there are some lighthearted moments. Some people think that the comedy got in the way of the sadness but I thought it was used effectively. With the job that the characters have, they have to try and be a little funny or they would easily all be a group of clinically depressed people.

What surprised me the most and is the best part of the anime is the romance. I saw probably more great romance in 5 episodes than I have in full 24-episode pure romance anime. It was very well done. I didn't feel like it was rushed at all.

Don't expect Plastic Memories to be unpredictable. In fact, give it a couple of episodes and you will probably see how it's going to end. But this anime isn't really about the ending, it's more about the journey. And when you hit the end, even though you saw it coming and you've been prepared, you might find yourself still shedding a little tear.

It's worth watching but that's just me. My advice is to stick with it. Tell me what you think sometime.

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HaXXspetten said:
You should be happy with anything getting above 50% upvotes in my experience

Especially when you have those people that don't even read your reviews but if it a low rating on a popular show you'll get a lot of not helpfuls and if you give something a 10 out of 10 most likely you'll get a lot of not helpfuls

Jul 18, 2015 5:07 AM

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@RedTie47

Are you going to only share it with your friend? If so, it is pretty good.

Jul 26, 2015 3:47 AM

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Inferno792 said:
But I think 7/12 is a pretty good review ratio on Mal.

I normally get few down votes every review i do, so i used to it by now. Also Sorry for not being on here lately, real life has been busy and i needed a lot of rest of late, but Next sunday is the start of the summer project so a be alot more active on here. Something also was nice to tell here about that project is the youtuber who cover song gave me the idea has express an interest in seeing the reviews.

Speakss said:

Seto_Masamune said:
Well here is the final version of latest review with help from Grusomhed
http://myanimelist.net/reviews.php?id=193452

thought it was pretty dang good. You've grown as a reviewer quite well. I'm curious to know why some of those votes are downvotes.. Maybe just people downvote trolling or something

Thank you Speakss-San, it means a lot to me for you to say that.

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Jul 27, 2015 11:42 AM

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Well I guess I can share this:
http://myanimelist.net/reviews.php?id=194468

Mostly just because maybe/hopefully it will inspire someone who hasn't read it to try it out. Now that it's fully translated at long last there's no excuse not to anymore. You don't know what you're missing :>

Jul 27, 2015 2:58 PM

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Picked up, mostly do it it finally being finally fully translated. Thanks for the review though. Upvoted you

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Just update, tomorrow i starting the summer project and the first draft will be posted on monday

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Aug 2, 2015 8:48 PM

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Speakss said:
Picked up, mostly do it it finally being finally fully translated. Thanks for the review though. Upvoted you

+1

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So here we are, the start of the project, yesterday i watch Nekomonogatari: Kuro and wrote the draft today. So here how this project is going to work incase someone doesn't know. Once i posted a draft, the next free day i have, i will watch the next one. This will continue until i watch and wrote all the drafts. Then i will spend time on days i writing the drafts to make any changes to the ones already posted here. While i not putting the any up until the first week of September, They will only be going up one a week and on weeks i haven't got the time to watch anime that week.
So here is Nekomonogatari: Kuro review and next up will be Bakemonogatari draft on Thursday.

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Aug 3, 2015 9:09 AM

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It's 'storyline' btw, not 'story-line'

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There are still some mistakes, but they are not that necessary. Anyways, you are free to do the necessary changes.

[SIZE=170]MISTAKES[/SIZE]
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1)Nekomonogatari: Kuro
Disclaimer
This is part of the Monogatari series summer project. (So what? I don’t want to waste my time on it)

2) Nekomonogatari: Kuro is a romance, comedy, supernatural anime based of the novel; Monogatari Series: First Season created by Isin Nisio and Vofan. (Based of is a mistake)

Remember!
This anime was based on a true story.
This anime was based upon a true story.
This anime was based off of a true story.

(Side note: Based on is more frequent)

3) Shaft produced the anime the anime aired on 31th of December 2012 as four episodes. (No)

Shaft produced the four episodes long anime, which was aired on December 31th, 2012 (“Long” is not really necessary)

Side note: If you are not sure, you can always do it like that:

Shaft produced the anime. The anime has xxx episodes and aired on xxx.

4) It’s the second chronological in the Monogatari series but was release after Bakemonogatari and Nisemonogatari. (Please translate it to me. Just omit it.)

5) A phenomenon that can be a non-living thing, or a paranormal entity(full stop) Gods and monsters are classed as an oddity

6) Koyomi finds out about an Oddity (A phenomenon that can be a non-living thing, or a paranormal entity. Gods and monsters are classed as an oddity,) called the Curse Cat and learns that Tsubasa is in danger, so he has to find a way to get rid of the Curse Cat and save his friend. (W-w-w-w-a-t?)

Koyomi finds out about the Oddity phenomenon, which unities all creatures such as: gods, ghosts, myths, and spirits. The cursed cat, leaving inside of Tsubasa’s body, becomes a real problem to her carrier, therefore Araragi decides to save his precious friend. (Sounds better, huh?)

7) Its blend of comedy, romance and supernatural is the well-balance, as it doesn’t give the viewer too little, or too much of any them. (It isounds somewhat obvious, but whatever)

8)Nekomonogatari: Kuro use a mix of types of art styles from quick sketch to beautiful drawn artwork to create a very creative animation. (…)

Nekomonogatari: Kuro USES a mix of different art styles, from a quick sketch to a beautifully drawn artwork, which helped to create a very creative animation.

9) To help to create this, its uses a very colorful blend of colors to bring it to life for the viewer. (Infinitive, infinitive and again infinitive) Hint: to help= in an attempt to do smth

10) Each location and character has been made with care and are wonderful to look at. Each location is easy to recognisable and each character has a unique look to them, making it easy for the viewer to tell which character they are.

10.1 Location? Landscape, background, scenery???

10.2 Each location and character has been made with care and are wonderful to look at. (Has and then are, why?)

10.3 All locations are easy to recognize and all character have a unique look to them, making it easy for the viewer to recognize the anime’s characters.

11) The voices of each character sounds great and able bring each of them to life to the viewer.

(Voices sounds…)

12) In Nekomonogatari: Kuro he is struggling to understand if he loves Tsubasa after she help him out over the spring break. (Logic? Perhaps it should be: After the help of Tsubasa during … he tries to do …)

In Nekomonogatari: Kuro he struggles to understand if he loves Tsubasa after she helpS him out over the spring break.

EDIT: Forgot about that one

13) The characters themselves are very interesting, as they drawn the viewer in, making the viewer want to know more about them.

to attract smb’s attention

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1)Seto, you should read one news article a day. You should read and understand every punctuation mark and every world. By doing it every day your English will surely become better.

2) I gave you almost all hints, do the changes and show me the final variant.

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Aug 3, 2015 9:51 AM

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Will do, work on it on Thursday
Also on a side note, the last few days i has been stressfull and i haven't been sleeping much. So sorry for making mistakes. But thats why i don't mind asking for help so Thanks Gru-Senpai for your help

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Aug 7, 2015 5:43 AM

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Well here' the edit of Nekomonogatari: Kuro thanks to Gru-Senpai, i was busy yesterday its why it was delayed. Anyway Bakemonogatari will be up in a few hours

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Aug 7, 2015 8:10 AM

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And here the next review draft

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My notes = red
quick corrections = bold

Seto_Masamune said:
And here the next review draft

Aug 11, 2015 7:01 AM

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Just a quick update, hopeful i got time to day to make the next draft, i will do editing on friday.

Edit: Something came up so i won't be able to write it today now, so i going to do it on friday now with the editing.

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Sorry for the long wait had a lot to do but i hope today i can post all the drafts from my project as i have watched all 6 now. Anyway here is the edit of Bakemonogatari.

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Aug 17, 2015 5:49 AM

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Well here Nisemonogatari, i just taking about a hour break then i starting to write Monogartai Second Season next.

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Aug 17, 2015 8:04 AM

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