One Fated Midnight

Jan 4, 2015 8:32 AM

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Hello everyone. Although I am not a famous writer but I aspire to be. I have started writing a book and I would appreciate it if you would give it a try, after all reading it is free. Please check it out and do comment on how you feel. :)

http://www.wattpad.com/story/29227734-one-fated-midnight

glazehoney12Jan 4, 2015 8:44 AM

Jan 4, 2015 8:55 AM

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I read a few pages but it wasn't really my thing, too much dialogue too little plot or character development, just seems like it was written by a fan of 50 shades of grey or something.

I've been here way too long...

Jan 4, 2015 1:18 PM

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I'm sorry to hear you did not like it. However I can tell you I have not read 50 shades of grey and it does not follow it's story. However thanks for checking it out.

Jan 4, 2015 1:49 PM

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glazehoney12 said:
I'm sorry to hear you did not like it. However I can tell you I have not read 50 shades of grey and it does not follow it's story. However thanks for checking it out.

Np, and I can tell by your reply you're a fan of the book.

I've been here way too long...

Jan 4, 2015 2:01 PM

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I guess I can come off as a dick but I'm actually going to be one here. This story reads like a 14 year olds attempt at writing the next 50 Shades of Gray. I don't expect quality writing from this type of novel but this was pretty bad. She's thinking about killing herself and jumping off a bridge and when she turns to see who is yelling at her all she can think about is how hawt this guy is. Yup she was like totally thinking about killing herself.This dialogue and thought process is ludicrous. Although if this is some kind of heart warming tale of a mentally challenged woman finding love with a rich playboy entremanure who made a fortune investing in planking I suppose I can get behind that.

If you're going to actually take writing seriously think about taking some classes and finding out what makes real literature good. Think about real dialogue and how people actually talk. Even if you're only looking to write smut it still requires basic writing skills.

Jan 4, 2015 2:29 PM

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I'm... not feeling it. Just not feeling it. I'm sorry.

http://myanimelist.net/forum/?topicid=1349768

Jan 4, 2015 3:19 PM

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CloudyOut said:
I guess I can come off as a dick but I'm actually going to be one here. This story reads like a 14 year olds attempt at writing the next 50 Shades of Gray. I don't expect quality writing from this type of novel but this was pretty bad. She's thinking about killing herself and jumping off a bridge and when she turns to see who is yelling at her all she can think about is how hawt this guy is. Yup she was like totally thinking about killing herself.This dialogue and thought process is ludicrous. Although if this is some kind of heart warming tale of a mentally challenged woman finding love with a rich playboy entremanure who made a fortune investing in planking I suppose I can get behind that.

If you're going to actually take writing seriously think about taking some classes and finding out what makes real literature good. Think about real dialogue and how people actually talk. Even if you're only looking to write smut it still requires basic writing skills.

Point is. She was not there to die. You did not read it.

Jan 4, 2015 3:22 PM

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TheConquerer said:

glazehoney12 said:
I'm sorry to hear you did not like it. However I can tell you I have not read 50 shades of grey and it does not follow it's story. However thanks for checking it out.

Np, and I can tell by your reply you're a fan of the book.

I actually do not care if you think I am a fan of it. But just to correct you. I was a fan of the crossfire series. I never even read 50 shades.

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