There's absolutely nothing at all wrong with this story. In fact, it's reasonably well paced, and the emotions of the characters are conveyed well too. The only thing is that there's nothing that distinguishes it from at least 40 other stories. It's not the author's fault. I'm sure that the magazine editors still want these repetitious stories for new readers who haven't read all the nearly identical ones that came before.
The best part of the story is how the main characters continue to act like idiots and keep hurting each other's feelings by not talking to each other. Yep, just like in real life! Insecurity is a pain!
So.... I'm giving it a 6 instead of a 5 because of how the author handled that part.
If you've not become jaded from reading a bunch of similar stories, give this one a try. You'll probably enjoy it.
