Forum Settings
Forums

MAL-Fiction: MAL Saga Online: (Current Chapter: Twenty-two)

New
Pages (7) « First ... « 2 3 [4] 5 6 » ... Last »
May 10, 2014 12:45 PM

Offline
Sep 2011
11111
God-of-Harem said:

On another note, it makes me happy that so many people are reading this. I've never worked so hard on something in many years. :)


Just as it makes me happy to read it, keep it up!!! Fight-o!

kibura said:
something about me being always younger didn't feel like opening up tabs to find the quote :P


yeah I suppose x.x;; so if there was ever a MAL meetup would I have to cosplay as how I'm written in all these fanfics? I feel people would be dissapointed with how tall I am and how I'm not actually a loli lol



Lorem ipsum dolor sit amet
May 10, 2014 2:28 PM

Offline
Nov 2013
7378
Chapter 9: Battle!

The thumping of heavy footsteps and the clinking and clanking of armour and weapons resonated as Goh's party made their way through the thick forest, after leaving Restonhawk. "So this states capital is our destination, huh? What was it called again?" Asa called out over the noise. "Astonguard, or something rather." Yoro called back while looking at a map. "We can learn about Hell's Gates there according to the elder." he finished his sentence as Goh cut through a vine revealing a large clearing in the forest. "I just want to get to the next town's Inn first." yawned Asa. "I haven't had a wink of sleep since we woke up here." A frozen breeze blew through as they middled the clearing. Lupa shivered. "I'm cold guys..." Asa looked at him and laughed. "You like naked things so much, I don't see you problem." Lupa gave him a dirty look. "That's maids there's a difference." The frozen breeze seemed to never end. "Quiet!" Kibura said sharply "... Something's not right." One of the Ranger's attributes is the ability to detect danger. Kibura realised this. "Ready yourselves!" she called out. After a moment of hesitation, the party moved into a cautious offensive stance.

"Well, well, what have we here? A merry band of travellers?" three men all Swordsmen, walked out of the thicket on the other side of the clearing, the one in the middle was obviously the leader, he spoke in an english-like accent. "There's a slight problem, you see? This forest is our territory, if you want to come through, you need to pay the toll!" The leader smiled a crocodile-like smile. "Highwaymen." Korrvo scowled. "How much?" Korrvo asked the leader. "Thirty gold!" he replied, still smiling. "That's all the gold we have!" Asa said in despair." Yoro sighed. "I suppose we should pay it." he said. "Like hell! There's no way I'm going to give in to some deadbeats!" Lupa said angrily "Besides we need that money for the inn in the next town. I say we kick these guy's asses and make sure they never steal from anyone again!" Goh brought his sword down next to his shield. "I'm with Lupa on this." he said firmly. Lime nodded his head once in agreement. "Oh me oh my. And I thought we could avoid conflict." the bandit leader said angrily. He gave a sharp whistle and 5 other bandits, two Archers, two Swordsmen and one Cannoneer, entered the clearing. Goh and his party were outnumbered.

"Attack!" The leader commanded. Kibura unslung her bow and quickly armed an arrow in one swift movement. 'FLIP' the sound of the arrow leaving the bow followed by a yelp. One of the bandit archers now had an arrow in his windpipe. He fell flat on his face. "Holy shit!" the bandit next to him screamed. Kibura brought up her bow again but there were already two bandit's on her. One of the bandits brought up his sword above Kibura's head. Kibura tucked her head in and braced. 'THUMP' Kibura looked up and there was a kunai in the bandits face. The bandit collapsed. "You gotta watch out" Asa called out, drawing his short sword to face a bandit swordsman. Kibura dexterously retreated from the other swordsman. "Guess there's no helping it." Yoro sighed. He pressed the button on his belt and the suit covered his body. He used his thrusters to charge at a Swordsmen before planting a solid metal fist in his face. The Swordsman tumbled over twice after his consciousness was knocked clean out of him. Although his armour was heavy Yoro's armour was impervious to things like arrows and blades. "Watch out!" Korrvo yelled to Yoro. The bandit Cannoneer had position himself to fire at Yoro. Yoro had no time to escape. "I'll fight fire with fire!" Korrvo yelled as he fired his cannon. The cannonball crushed into the Bandit Cannoneer's skull, decapitating his head.

Asa was still clashing swords with the swordsman, having the smaller blade he was having a tough time. The Bandit Swordsman's blade swung at Asa from the left and Asa swiftly stepped to the right and drove his shortsword through the Bandit Swordsman's chest and he collapsed on Asa's sword. Asa pulled the sword out of his chest. "Whew... That was close" he took a deep breath. But Asa relaxed too soon. 'FWIP' a sharp pain pieced Asa's leg. "ARRGHHHH!" Asa screamed and he dropped onto the ground.

The remaining Archer had cornered Lime in a thicket. "Awww he's just a kid. I kinda feel sorry for ending his life." the Bandit Archer said. "NOT! HAHA!" The archer armed an arrow as Lime raised his hand. 'CLICK' Lime clicked his fingers and at the same time the Bandit Archer combusted into flames and turned to ashes. "Serves you right." Lime said quietly.

Lupa was face-to-face with the remaining Bandit Swordsman. "Why are you naked?" he quipped. "SHUT UP!" Lupa yelled landing a hard punch in his gut. The Bandit Swordsman doubled over as the spikes pierced his gut and blood spilt everywhere. Lupa's Fedora started glowing and Lupa's muscles doubled in size. He placed another punch into the Bandits face, caving in his skull and decapitating his head. "A magical Fedora? Now I've seen everything." Lupa said to himself.

Goh was in battle with the Leader. They clashed swords and jumped back. It was a swaying of offense and defense for both of them, they clashed swords for the final time and both dashed back. They both caught their breath and charged. The next strike would end the battle.
end of Chapter

Wow that chapter took forever. I'm not good at writing action, but I hope I did okay...
BaileyyMay 10, 2014 2:36 PM
[center][size=85][b]MAL Interviews[/size] | [/size][size=85][b]MAL's Chatting Corner | [size=85][color=darkviolet]If you wear Caesar's clothes, you have to behave like Caesar.[/color][/size][/b]
May 10, 2014 2:54 PM

Offline
Dec 2013
18121
Goh's party is badass, with the exception of Asa.

Lupa is elegant as can be
ShannaroMay 10, 2014 2:58 PM
May 10, 2014 2:56 PM
Offline
Mar 2013
16285
There were a few awkward word choices here and there like "frozen breeze". I think you meant a cold breeze. And I found it a bit funny how the bandit leader said "Oh me oh my". Doesn't sound like something a bandit leader would say.

Other than that it was a great chapter. I'd say the action scene was pretty detailed, good job! You're evil for leaving it on a cliff-hanger though >:(
May 10, 2014 3:06 PM

Offline
Jun 2012
12277
Zetrin said:
Goh's party is badass, with the exception of Asa.
Asa had the most interesting fight exposition this chapter though, the rest were just like "I'll kick your ass", proceeding to kick someone's ass.
God-of-Harem said:
The bandit Cannoneer had position himself to fire at Yoro. Yoro had no time to escape.
The mecha suit is actually pretty weak considering a henchman's cannon is strong enough to destroy it.
And how Yoro didn't know the henchmen was there aiming at him is beyond me.
OchimushaMay 10, 2014 3:10 PM
May 10, 2014 3:09 PM

Offline
Dec 2013
18121
YorozuyaGinSan said:
Zetrin said:
Goh's party is badass, with the exception of Asa.
Asa had the most interesting fight exposition this chapter though, the rest were just like "I'll kick your ass", proceeding to kick someone's ass.
He was doing great up until the point of his rookie mistake. Now he's probably just a burden to the group in this fight
May 10, 2014 3:10 PM
Offline
Dec 2013
3536
God-of-Harem said:
The archer armed an arrow as Lime raised his hand. 'CLICK' Lime clicked his fingers and at the same time the Bandit Archer combusted into flames and turned to ashes. "Serves you right." Lime said quietly.

Lime=Mini Roy Mustang
May 10, 2014 3:10 PM

Offline
Sep 2011
11111
So lime's pretty much Roy Mustang then? Confirmed for OP

Lupa's Fedora started glowing and Lupa's muscles doubled in size

ahahahahahaha, don't know why I found that so funny



Lorem ipsum dolor sit amet
May 10, 2014 3:13 PM

Offline
Nov 2013
7378
I don't even know who Roy Mustang is lol.
[center][size=85][b]MAL Interviews[/size] | [/size][size=85][b]MAL's Chatting Corner | [size=85][color=darkviolet]If you wear Caesar's clothes, you have to behave like Caesar.[/color][/size][/b]
May 10, 2014 3:14 PM

Offline
Jun 2012
12277
God-of-Harem said:
I don't even know who Roy Mustang is lol.
Character from Fullmetal Alchemist.

They're referring to the fact he can use fire magic.

The personality is nothing alike.
Zetrin said:
YorozuyaGinSan said:
Zetrin said:
Goh's party is badass, with the exception of Asa.
Asa had the most interesting fight exposition this chapter though, the rest were just like "I'll kick your ass", proceeding to kick someone's ass.
He was doing great up until the point of his rookie mistake. Now he's probably just a burden to the group in this fight
I guess, but Yoro made a rookie mistake aswell, charging at his enemy without covering his own back, he'd be in the same position had Korrvo not been there.

I still like Asa way more than say, Lime.
May 10, 2014 3:15 PM

Offline
Sep 2011
11111
God-of-Harem said:
I don't even know who Roy Mustang is lol.


Fullmetal Alchemist - he's the fire dude that wrecks peoples shit

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=tJ28CRhAObw

The above is a spoiler if you havn't seen the show btw - guess not really a big one . . .

edit: made no claim of personality . . .



Lorem ipsum dolor sit amet
May 10, 2014 3:16 PM

Offline
Jun 2012
12277
Lime_ said:
edit: made no claim of personality . . .
Who said you did?
May 10, 2014 3:17 PM
Offline
Dec 2013
3536
YorozuyaGinSan said:
God-of-Harem said:
I don't even know who Roy Mustang is lol.
Character from Fullmetal Alchemist.

They're referring to the fact he can use fire magic.

The personality is nothing alike.

True, but Roy appeared in my mind as soon as I read that line.
May 10, 2014 3:18 PM

Offline
Sep 2011
11111
YorozuyaGinSan said:
Lime_ said:
edit: made no claim of personality . . .
Who said you did?


Who said I didn't?
NarTaco said:
YorozuyaGinSan said:
God-of-Harem said:
I don't even know who Roy Mustang is lol.
Character from Fullmetal Alchemist.

They're referring to the fact he can use fire magic.

The personality is nothing alike.

True, but Roy appeared in my mind as soon as I read that line.

Lol me too =p like how yours/mine post about it was like 4 seconds apart



Lorem ipsum dolor sit amet
May 10, 2014 3:20 PM

Offline
Jun 2012
12277
Lime_ said:
YorozuyaGinSan said:
Lime_ said:
edit: made no claim of personality . . .
Who said you did?


Who said I didn't?
I implied it, nobody outright said it.

Actually, you did.
May 10, 2014 3:22 PM
Offline
Dec 2013
3536
Lime_ said:
NarTaco said:
YorozuyaGinSan said:
God-of-Harem said:
I don't even know who Roy Mustang is lol.
Character from Fullmetal Alchemist.

They're referring to the fact he can use fire magic.

The personality is nothing alike.

True, but Roy appeared in my mind as soon as I read that line.


Lol me too =p like how yours/mine post about it was like 4 seconds apart

Ikr

Though I'm glad I posted faster, unlike previously with RedArmyShogun. I beat you ^^
May 10, 2014 3:22 PM

Offline
Aug 2013
15696
May 10, 2014 3:23 PM

Offline
Sep 2011
11111
I'm going to imply ur ass
NarTaco said:
Though I'm glad I was faster. Unlike previously with RedArmyShogun.

>.>



Lorem ipsum dolor sit amet
May 10, 2014 4:46 PM

Offline
Dec 2013
18121
YorozuyaGinSan said:
I guess, but Yoro made a rookie mistake aswell, charging at his enemy without covering his own back.
Maybe, couldn't the cannoneer still fire at Yoro if he didn't charge in? Either way, I'll cover up my oversight by saying Yoro being a mech suit pilot automatically makes him 'badass'.
May 10, 2014 4:50 PM

Offline
Jun 2012
12277
Zetrin said:
YorozuyaGinSan said:
I guess, but Yoro made a rookie mistake aswell, charging at his enemy without covering his own back.
Maybe, couldn't the cannoneer still fire at Yoro if he didn't charge in? Either way, I'll cover up my oversight by saying Yoro being a mech suit pilot automatically makes him 'badass'.
True, especially with the belt, that's just too badass.

I could see Yoro being the tank esq character that draws all of the enemies attacks while the heavy hitters like Lupadim, Korrvo, Lime, and the rest of the team can pound away at them.
May 10, 2014 5:09 PM

Offline
Dec 2013
18121
YorozuyaGinSan said:
Zetrin said:
Maybe, couldn't the cannoneer still fire at Yoro if he didn't charge in? Either way, I'll cover up my oversight by saying Yoro being a mech suit pilot automatically makes him 'badass'.
True, especially with the belt, that's just too badass.
I could see Yoro being the tank esq character that draws all of the enemies attacks while the heavy hitters like Lupadim, Korrvo, Lime, and the rest of the team can pound away at them.
Yoro has a somewhat overpowered tank(?) class since regular attacks don't seem to affect him, but I guess that makes up for the group not having a healer, or any support class. Everyone in the group are all damage classes excluding Asa, because he can be defined as stealth even though he seems like a pretty great damage role.
ShannaroMay 10, 2014 5:39 PM
May 10, 2014 5:48 PM

Offline
Nov 2013
7378
I don't think I conveyed Lupadim's Fedora's ability well enough in that last chapter since I was running short on time, so I'll say it here.

Basically, every time Lupa lands a punch his muscles double in size, until he lands the killing blow, then he returns to normal size.

Also I'm back on my laptop now so I fixed up all the spelling, grammar and punctuation mistakes in the OP.

I'm starting Chapter 10 now.
[center][size=85][b]MAL Interviews[/size] | [/size][size=85][b]MAL's Chatting Corner | [size=85][color=darkviolet]If you wear Caesar's clothes, you have to behave like Caesar.[/color][/size][/b]
May 10, 2014 5:53 PM
Offline
Dec 2013
3536
God-of-Harem said:
I'm starting Chapter 10 now.

Take your time. ^^
May 10, 2014 6:09 PM

Offline
Nov 2013
7378
NarTaco said:
God-of-Harem said:
I'm starting Chapter 10 now.

Take your time. ^^


It's fine, I enjoy doing this :)
[center][size=85][b]MAL Interviews[/size] | [/size][size=85][b]MAL's Chatting Corner | [size=85][color=darkviolet]If you wear Caesar's clothes, you have to behave like Caesar.[/color][/size][/b]
May 10, 2014 6:49 PM

Offline
Nov 2013
7378
Chapter 10: To Victor Go the Spoils
There was a thud as the Leader fell onto his backside and Goh put his sword up to his neck. The Leader’s sword was now sticking out of the ground ten meters away. “Please spare me!” He cried holding his hands up above his head in surrender. “I’ll do anything, so just don’t kill me!” There was intense fear in his voice. “I say we cut his head off.” Said Lupa re-joining Goh. “NO! NO! Anything but that!” The leader whelped. “Hand over everything you’ve stolen, then run away and never return.” The Leader shuffled off his backside and forked over 60 gold pieces from a pouch tied to his waist. “Here! God bless you sir, God bless your soul” he bowed then ran back through the woods he entered from.

“Argh, you let him go, ya softie.” Korrvo said re-joining the group with Kibura, Lime and Yoro. An interface appeared in front of Goh announcing the results of the battle.
‘YOU WON!
Enemy team: 6 Killed, 1 Wounded and Unconscious, 1 retreated
Ally Team: 0 Killed, 1 Wounded and Unconscious, 0 retreated.
Loot: 5 gold pieces’

“Shit! Asa!” Goh shouted running over to Asa's unconscious body. "Quick get the bandages Kibura!" Another one of the Ranger's attributes was First-Aid. "He's passed out from loss of blood." said Kibura as she removed the arrow and bandaged his leg. "If he loses much more, he will lose his first life, and wake up at Restonhawk again." she continued. "We're going to have to carry him to the next town. Yoro gently picked him up, and put him on his shoulders. "Let's get going then." he said.

*Meanwhile somewhere else in the wild."

Kousoku, Emerald, Zetrin and Uno stared at the interface for what seemed to be like hours.

'YOU WON!

Enemy Team: 39 Killed, 0 Wounded and Unconscious, 0 Retreated.
Ally Team: 0 Killed, 0 Wounded and Unconscious, 0 Retreated.
Loot: 175 gold.'

Y-your're insane..." Kousoku said to Capri who was standing in front of a mess of Bandit guts and decapitated limbs and torsos. Her eyes were dark red with blood dripping of her fangs. Her eyes turned white again and she tied the scarf around her mouth again. "Onii-chan... Are you angry?" she asked sadly. "N-no, it's fine, I'm just surprised." Kousoku said reassuring her. "Stop calling my brother 'Onii-chan' would you! And Kousoku are you really fine with this? It's a monster!" Emerald ranted. "She was only trying to help Emerald." Kousoku said. "Man, how boring..." Zetrin yawned. "I didn't even get to do anything. Let's get moving yeah? I want to get to the next town so I can go to sleep." He finished stretching his arms above his head. "NOT FAIR! ONLY CAPRI GOT TO EAT!" Uno yelled. "Yeah, yeah, we'll eat at the Inn bozo." Kousoku said jokingly, “After we rest up there, we go to Astonguard.”
End of Chapter
[center][size=85][b]MAL Interviews[/size] | [/size][size=85][b]MAL's Chatting Corner | [size=85][color=darkviolet]If you wear Caesar's clothes, you have to behave like Caesar.[/color][/size][/b]
May 10, 2014 7:02 PM
Offline
Mar 2013
16285
Uno might be a cannibal, Capri is OP, and Asa might have the first death in the game. Great chapter. Can't wait until everyone gets into a town. I'd love to read about how the characters will interact with the NPCs, and how the gold will be spent.

Oh and I hope that run away bandit doesn't stir up trouble later on in the fanfic. It would suck to regret letting him live.
May 10, 2014 7:10 PM

Offline
Dec 2013
18121
Group 1
God-of-Harem said:
Enemy team: 6 Killed, 1 Wounded and Unconscious, 1 retreated
Ally Team: 0 Killed, 1 Wounded and Unconscious, 0 retreated.
Loot: 5 gold pieces’

Group 2
God-of-Harem said:
Enemy Team: 39 Killed, 0 Wounded and Unconscious, 0 Retreated.
Ally Team: 0 Killed, 0 Wounded and Unconscious, 0 Retreated.
Loot: 175 gold.'
lol what?! I'm loving group two. The difference in scores were outstanding and hilarious.
Capri is scary and Zetrin is a lazy bum.
May 10, 2014 7:18 PM
Offline
Dec 2013
3536
Hopefully me and RedArmyShogun will appear soon to kill somebody. Or we kill eachother.
May 10, 2014 7:19 PM

Offline
Jan 2013
11951
NarTaco said:
Hopefully me and RedArmyShogun will appear soon to kill somebody. Or we kill eachother.


BLOOD FOR THE BLOOD GOD! SKULLS FOR THE SKILL THRONE!
May 10, 2014 7:20 PM
Offline
Dec 2013
3536
RedArmyShogun said:
NarTaco said:
Hopefully me and RedArmyShogun will appear soon to kill somebody. Or we kill eachother.


BLOOD FOR THE BLOOD GOD! SKULLS FOR THE SKILL THRONE!

That's the spirit.
May 10, 2014 7:21 PM

Offline
Nov 2013
7378
NarTaco said:
Hopefully me and RedArmyShogun will appear soon to kill somebody. Or we kill eachother.


NarTaco will be somewhere in the next three chapters.

I have big big plans for RedArmy, so he will have to wait

I also need more User's? Anyone else wanna be in this?
[center][size=85][b]MAL Interviews[/size] | [/size][size=85][b]MAL's Chatting Corner | [size=85][color=darkviolet]If you wear Caesar's clothes, you have to behave like Caesar.[/color][/size][/b]
May 10, 2014 7:23 PM

Offline
Jan 2013
11951
God-of-Harem said:
NarTaco said:
Hopefully me and RedArmyShogun will appear soon to kill somebody. Or we kill eachother.


NarTaco will be somewhere in the next three chapters.

I have big big plans for RedArmy, so he will have to wait

I also need more User's? Anyone else wanna be in this?


Start Conscripting.
May 10, 2014 7:30 PM

Offline
Nov 2013
7378
"Uncle Harem wants YOU!"
[center][size=85][b]MAL Interviews[/size] | [/size][size=85][b]MAL's Chatting Corner | [size=85][color=darkviolet]If you wear Caesar's clothes, you have to behave like Caesar.[/color][/size][/b]
May 10, 2014 7:33 PM
Offline
Dec 2013
3536
God-of-Harem said:
"Uncle Harem wants YOU!"

How about you directly ask users if they want to join. You won't take no for an answer
deactivated30325May 10, 2014 7:36 PM
May 10, 2014 9:01 PM

Offline
Nov 2013
7378
Chapter 11: Rest up.
“Checkmate.” Said Yoro moving his piece across the board. “W-wait!” Lupa surveyed the board desperately, attempting to find a mistake or slip-up in Yoro’s pieces. “Impossible!” He yelled when he realised there was no way out. “I’ll have that bath towel now.” Yoro said with a smirk. “W-wait, then I’ll be naked!” Lupa said attempting to persuade him. “You should have thought about that before you challenged me for my Mech Belt.” Yoro said puffing his chest out. “Once more!” Lupa clung desperately. “All or nothing, for my Fedora!” He pleaded. “It’s useless Lupa.” Goh said walking down the stairs into the room where Lupa and Yoro were playing. “Yoro was the national champion at Chess back home.” Lupa looked like a kicked dog. “YOU, TRICKED ME! YOU SAID YOU’D NEVER PLAYED BEFORE!” Yoro was laughing. “It’s called a bluff, now hand it over.” Lupa looked sad as he removed the bath towel. Yoro took the bath towel from Lupa and threw it in the fire beside the table. “YOU BASTARD!” Lupa yelled. “Calm down fool. I’ll buy you more clothes in the town today." Lupa’s eyes lit up “Thanks Yoro!” he gave Yoro a huge hug. “It’s touching me Lupa.” Yoro said looking disgusted. Lupa skipped upstairs, totally oblivious to the fact he was now completely naked.

“How’s Asa?” Yoro asked now talking to Goh. “Yeah, he woke up. I told him to go back to sleep. Looks like he’s going to be fine.” Goh replied. “Well, at least we made it to the next town.” Yoro said. “And we were able to rent out two rooms and the basement thanks to the gold from the bandit party we defeated.” Goh added.

“OH MY GOD MY EYES!” Kibura came running down the stairs rubbing her eyes and retching. “I feel like I just looked into the eyes of a Basilisk.” Kibura moaned. “First monster we encountered on this adventure.” Yoro chuckled. “Level 100 Snake Beast.” Goh added. The three of them started laughing. Korrvo came down stairs with Lime in tail. “What’s with naked Lupa?” He asked. “He lost a bet.” Yoro said proudly. “Big.” Lime said quietly.

About a minute later, the Bartender who runs the Inn came down. “There’s been a change of plans, ‘venturers. Another band of trav’lers have come ‘ere with enuff gold to rent out the entire Inn. We simply can’t turn down the offer. I hope ya don’t mind sharing.” He said, then left the basement. “Sorry for intruding. Looks like we’ll be in your care.” Said Kousoku entering the basement.
End of Chapter.
[center][size=85][b]MAL Interviews[/size] | [/size][size=85][b]MAL's Chatting Corner | [size=85][color=darkviolet]If you wear Caesar's clothes, you have to behave like Caesar.[/color][/size][/b]
May 10, 2014 9:16 PM

Offline
Jan 2013
11951
lol wtf
May 10, 2014 9:21 PM
Offline
Mar 2013
16285
So the two groups finally meet. Next chapter will be brilliant.

P.S. Lupa and Yoro. So is this bromance or is their going to be some actual Yaoi here lol?
May 10, 2014 9:23 PM

Offline
Nov 2013
7378
emeraldrosary said:

P.S. Lupa and Yoro. So is this bromance or is their going to be some actual Yaoi here lol?


Yoro was just teasing Lupa lol. I didn't know it come across like that :I
[center][size=85][b]MAL Interviews[/size] | [/size][size=85][b]MAL's Chatting Corner | [size=85][color=darkviolet]If you wear Caesar's clothes, you have to behave like Caesar.[/color][/size][/b]
May 10, 2014 9:26 PM
Offline
Mar 2013
16285
God-of-Harem said:
“Calm down fool. I’ll buy you more clothes in the town today." Lupa’s eyes lit up “Thanks Yoro!” he gave Yoro a huge hug. “It’s touching me Lupa.” Yoro said looking disgusted. Lupa skipped upstairs, totally oblivious to the fact he was now completely naked.
I don't know, they just seemed overly friendly to me. Yoro going out of his way to help Lupa, and then the naked hug lol
May 10, 2014 9:28 PM

Offline
Nov 2013
7378
emeraldrosary said:
God-of-Harem said:
“Calm down fool. I’ll buy you more clothes in the town today." Lupa’s eyes lit up “Thanks Yoro!” he gave Yoro a huge hug. “It’s touching me Lupa.” Yoro said looking disgusted. Lupa skipped upstairs, totally oblivious to the fact he was now completely naked.
I don't know, they just seemed overly friendly to me. Yoro going out of his way to help Lupa, and then the naked hug lol


I tried to make it sound as though Yoro was exploiting Lupa's lack of intelligence.

Now that I look back, it does kinda seem homosexual >.<
[center][size=85][b]MAL Interviews[/size] | [/size][size=85][b]MAL's Chatting Corner | [size=85][color=darkviolet]If you wear Caesar's clothes, you have to behave like Caesar.[/color][/size][/b]
May 10, 2014 9:31 PM
Offline
Mar 2013
16285
Oh yes that reminds me, I demand to see a mask salesman in this fanfic somewhere! Preferably when everyone goes shopping for weapons/upgrades ^^
May 10, 2014 9:50 PM

Offline
Dec 2013
18121
Their comments on naked Lupa were funny. Imagine Yoro was lying about buying Lupa clothes, and I wouldn't mind seeing Zetrin have an intellectual battle with Lupa.
Group two is blowing their money already, huh
ShannaroMay 10, 2014 9:54 PM
May 10, 2014 11:51 PM

Offline
Nov 2013
7378
Chapter 12: Union and Reunion.

“Kousoku?” Goh said suddenly standing out of his chair. “Goh…? Wait! Don’t tell me… You’re the other group?” Kousoku looked confused. “Looks like it.” Goh said. “Can’t say I’m happy that it’s you though.” Goh said playing mock disappointment. “What was that you bastard!?” Kousoku said walking down the stairs angrily. “You wanna throw down!?” Goh said grabbing Kousoku’s shirt. “I’ll throw down anytime!” Kousoku replied grabbing Goh’s shirt back. Goh tackled Kousoku onto the staircase and they tumbled around the basement floor throwing insults. “You blonde haired geek!” Goh burned. “Shut it you delinquent loner!” Kousoku quipped back. Nobody could make out the rest as it was just a jumble of insults and angry comments.

Asa walked down the stairs on crutches. “At it again, are they? Still. Surprised to see that Kousoku is in the other group.” Asa said as he reached the bottom of the staircase. “They know each other?” Kibura asked with a curious look on her face. “Childhood friends.” Asa said simply. “We used to hang out together all the time when we were young. They’ve had a long rivalry.” Asa said sitting down on a stool with Kibura’s help. “What were the chances we’d meet up here?” Asa said shaking his head in disbelief. “No. I’d say it was planned by Kineta.” Zetrin said chiming into the conversation. “You are?” Yoro asked. “Just Zetrin. I do stuff and say things. End of introduction.” Zetrin yawned and sat down “Too tired to introduce myself further.” He looked like he immediately fell asleep.

“Man they sure go at it.” Korrvo said taking a sip from a cup observing the rivals roll around. “You’re telling me. I had to break them up so many times when we were children” Said Emerald sitting down next to Korrvo. Korrvo looked to his side. His face turned red. ‘SHE’S TOTALLY MY TYPE!’ he screamed in his head. ‘Her blonde hair and sophisticated aura is just too good!’ “Your nose is bleeding.” Emerald said wiping Korrvo’s face with a napkin. Korrvo swore he could feel steam coming out of his ears. “Hey! Whats wrong!?” Emerald asked as Korrvo fell over backwards.

“Hey guys!” Lupa came running down the stairs, still naked “This guy says he’s one of the MAL workers!” Uno walked down the stairs beside him with a pile of fruit in his arms. “Oh. Looks like we’re already acquainted.” Lupa said. “Nice meat you got there…” Uno said as he walked past Lupa. Lime took an apple out of Uno’s pile of fruit and bit down into it. He looked completely unfazed by what was going on.

“Alright cut it out you two.” Emerald said pulling them apart. “Emerald!” Goh’s eyes lit up. “Your brother was being mean to me.” He said with a fake sob. “Don’t give me that shit!” Kousoku yelled. “THAT’S ENOUGH!” Emerald yelled at both of them. They immediately stoped. “Sorry…” they said in unison. “Onii-chan…” A small hand was tugging on Goh’s sleeve. “Capri! You traitor!” Kousoku cried out in despair. “You son of a-“ Kousoku tackled Goh, and they were tumbling on the ground once more.

“Well… Things sure got lively quickly.” Yoro said to himself.
End of Chapter.

This chapter was really difficult because I had trouble thinking about how the characters would interact. It probably seems poorly written, but it was my honest best.
[center][size=85][b]MAL Interviews[/size] | [/size][size=85][b]MAL's Chatting Corner | [size=85][color=darkviolet]If you wear Caesar's clothes, you have to behave like Caesar.[/color][/size][/b]
May 11, 2014 12:34 AM

Offline
Jun 2012
12277
Damn whippersnappers and their circlejerking.

Yoro x Lupa and Goh x Kousoku too stronk.
May 11, 2014 12:43 AM

Offline
Nov 2013
7378
YorozuyaGinSan said:
Damn whippersnappers and their circlejerking.

Yoro x Lupa and Goh x Kousoku too stronk.


There will be no Yaoi in this fiction! Goddamit people.
[center][size=85][b]MAL Interviews[/size] | [/size][size=85][b]MAL's Chatting Corner | [size=85][color=darkviolet]If you wear Caesar's clothes, you have to behave like Caesar.[/color][/size][/b]
May 11, 2014 1:17 AM

Offline
Dec 2013
18121
God-of-Harem said:

“Hey guys!” Lupa came running down the stairs, still naked “This guy says he’s one of the MAL workers!” Uno walked down the stairs beside him with a pile of fruit in his arms. “Oh. Looks like we’re already acquainted.” Lupa said. “Nice meat you got there…” Uno said as he walked past Lupa.
Woah.

I don't think Goh wants to throw down with Kousoku's group lol. Even if it is a "harmless" rivalry.

Korrvo is in love at first sight

Zetrin is fun as ever to be around.
May 11, 2014 3:14 AM

Offline
Nov 2011
688
Zetrin said:
I don't think Goh wants to throw down with Kousoku's group lol. Even if it is a "harmless" rivalry.
But I think that the opposite applies. Not only is Goh trying to steal our beloved yangire superweapon, they're also trying to systematically hog all of the chicks.

For the sake of gender balance in groups, Goh should at least be decent enough to trade one of theirs to the other group.
May 11, 2014 3:23 AM

Offline
Nov 2013
7378
Kousoku11 said:
Zetrin said:
I don't think Goh wants to throw down with Kousoku's group lol. Even if it is a "harmless" rivalry.
But I think that the opposite applies. Not only is Goh trying to steal our beloved yangire superweapon, they're also trying to systematically hog all of the chicks.

For the sake of gender balance in groups, Goh should at least be decent enough to trade one of theirs to the other group.


Doesn't matter really, since they're all one big group now.
[center][size=85][b]MAL Interviews[/size] | [/size][size=85][b]MAL's Chatting Corner | [size=85][color=darkviolet]If you wear Caesar's clothes, you have to behave like Caesar.[/color][/size][/b]
May 11, 2014 3:33 AM

Offline
Dec 2013
18121
Kousoku11 said:
Zetrin said:
I don't think Goh wants to throw down with Kousoku's group lol. Even if it is a "harmless" rivalry.
But I think that the opposite applies. Not only is Goh trying to steal our beloved yangire superweapon, they're also trying to systematically hog all of the chicks.

For the sake of gender balance in groups, Goh should at least be decent enough to trade one of theirs to the other group.
I should have clarified my post. I meant "Goh shouldn't" because group 2 has Capri, and Capri is deadly. Also, group 2 is quirky enough as it is because they have the pleasure of having Zetrin in there, the cannibal(?) Uno, and the sadist Capri. Kousoku and Emerald haven't really stood out though. I guess you can say they're the "normal" ones.

Both groups are staying together? This will be an interesting raid party.
ShannaroMay 11, 2014 3:37 AM
May 11, 2014 5:41 AM

Offline
Jan 2013
11951
God-of-Harem said:
YorozuyaGinSan said:
Damn whippersnappers and their circlejerking.

Yoro x Lupa and Goh x Kousoku too stronk.


There will be no Yaoi in this fiction! Goddamit people.


It is time for the Fedora man to get clothes then >>
Pages (7) « First ... « 2 3 [4] 5 6 » ... Last »

More topics from this board

» ♥Kukuri♥ ("Magical Circle Guru-Guru" 2017) Custom NENDOROID Doll

MasterTasuke - 4 hours ago

1 by Retro8bit »»
2 hours ago

» Choose your favorite character!

SushiRoe - 3 hours ago

3 by Retro8bit »»
2 hours ago

» sharing my sketch :D

SomeoneFromWITA - Dec 1

6 by capricuernos »»
3 hours ago

» Have you ever used ballpoint pens for drawing?

DesuMaiden - Dec 11

3 by Zarutaku »»
5 hours ago

» Share your profiles ( 1 2 3 )

aniikola - Apr 26, 2019

115 by Zarutaku »»
5 hours ago
It’s time to ditch the text file.
Keep track of your anime easily by creating your own list.
Sign Up Login