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Jun 21, 2016 12:17 PM
#51
@Erazmus Your character is good Erazmus, but there is a problem with your abilitys. First, you must know that we can't hurt other people at the sheme this means you can't make anyone feel pain during scheme. If you want you can threaten someone but not hurt, and you must speficy what this inflicts when you do. Or you can use your martial arts to break things during the scheme. Of course, not hurting people. In the Mob war, you must specify exactly how much turns you want the bleeding to have effect, i think 5 turns would be enough. (it would cause a total of 10 dmg, half of a thug max HP). This way the ability wouldn't be stackable so it wouldn't be OP. Please change it, then we will reply you again. @Nice Hello Kiii! nice new username!!! (like literally) Wow your character is really good, i really liked your bio, even though it's just about one night. Well, there are some problems with your abilitys though. In your scheme ability, there is no problem about seducing someone to extracting information, but this person must have lower charisma than your character So please especify this. Also you seem to have two abilitys in just one, and that's a problem, you must chosoe between seducing or using this "not revealing information ability". So you must remove one, and when you have a new rank you can add it again if you want. Next there is your War ability, unfortunately it's way too OP, stackable abilitys tend to be OP and that's the problem of this one. I suggest that you make it like mine "Madness" ability, where you can double the damage of your next action and it's not stackable. So please change those things and we will reply you once again. Looking foward for your character :D |
fyruskingJun 21, 2016 12:25 PM
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Jun 21, 2016 1:26 PM
#52
fyrusking said: Your character is good Erazmus, but there is a problem with your abilitys. First, you must know that we can't hurt other people at the sheme this means you can't make anyone feel pain during scheme. If you want you can threaten someone but not hurt, and you must speficy what this inflicts when you do. Or you can use your martial arts to break things during the scheme. Of course, not hurting people. Fyrus, there is no physical damage done, they will not be harmed (physically at least), it is purely psychological effect, the opponent is not harmed in any way, however it will make them experience pain, naturally some characters such as masochists and trained personnel (who have trained to withstand pain) will not be effected by this very much. |
Jun 22, 2016 4:48 AM
#53
@philtecturophy @fyrusking I made the necessary adjustments. Anything else? Is there a problem with the new power still OP? |
Jun 22, 2016 4:04 PM
#54
@Erazmus I see. your war ability is fine now. But you still need to specify what good thing come out from your scheme ability. So you will psychological torture the enemy, but what will you win with this? Information? If so, please explain it, and remember the rule about only being able to do this with characters that has lower Charisma than yours @Nice Will talk about it with phil. But i'm pretty sure everything is fine now :3 |
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Jun 22, 2016 9:22 PM
#55
Name: Rentaro (Also known as Subject 0) Picture: Age: 19 Gender: Male Personality: {read bio first} Rentaro, while he appears to be kindhearted and polite, he is cunning and unethical. He does not value human life, more that he values animal life. He is not afraid of anything. Or so he thinks... Many times he finds himself crying for what happened in the past. Reminding him that awful day when he had to kill that girl. His biggest weakness is him self. While this is a rare occurrence, there are also times where he cannot control his hunger for violence and death so he goes berserk. When he is in that state he becomes more violent and ignores all pain. But he is also more vulnerable as he is not aware of his surroundings and his actions. {lil disclaimer: berserk is not an ability, it's merely a part of his personality.} Current Mobster Rank: Rank 10: Thug Current Charisma Points: 0 Abilities: Great use of handgun, Decent use of knives Description of your ability when used in the SCHEME / RP Play Story Line: Russian Roulette: Rentaro loads 1 blank bullet in his .44 Magnum, spins the cylinder, places the muzzle against another person's head, and pulls the trigger. {Cannot deal damage/kill. Opponent is Feared making him more likely to comply. This is more effective with low charisma people.} Description of your ability when used in the MOB WAR: Sharpshooter: Rentaro enters a state of harmony and focuses on his target. With extraordinary accuracy unloads 6 bullets on the target. {Deals 1 Damage per bullet.} Weapon: .44 Magnum Revolver , Silenced Beretta M9 Handgun , Butterfly Knife Mob to join: Tartarus Biography: Rentaro was born in Germany, in a wealthy and caring family. His parents were both scientist, and they owned a private institute where they researched Nanotechnology and Cyber-technology. Rentaro lived a quite and happy life as he had many friends from all around the neighborhood and he also had everything he wanted. But the worst was yet to come, as at the age of 7, Rentaro was hit by a car while playing with his friends in the road. He was immediately moved to the hospital, but after 24 intensive hours of surgeries, he was finally pronounced dead. His parents could not accept his death so they decided to use a procedure they had been experimenting on for quite a while, to try and bring him back to life. Like a miracle out of a fairy tale, the procedure worked and they boy, was once again alive. Rentaro's parents were sure that their hardships were over and they would be able to return to their normal lives once again. Unfortunately for them though the military was interested in their newly successful procedure to bring back the dead, as something like that would be the exact thing military would need for covert ops. Kids that have died, and were believed to be buried, would be trained to become merciless assassins and work for the higher-ups. But that was not all. The military also too Rentaro from his parents, as it would be too much of a risk to let him leave. The boy along with 100 other, recently dead children, were moved to a secret underground facility and were trained under hard conditions. This program became known as the Blue Rose Program. After 7 years of extreme training only 10 of the kids had survived, including Rentaro. They were all sent out on different missions. Their first mission, their first kill. Only Rentaro and another girl made it back. All others were either killed on the mission or captured and tortured, never to be seen again. Rentero thought it was finally over, but little did he know as the Chief of the program ordered a fight to the death, between the two survivors. Rentaro came out victorious, but victory came at a price. From this point on, Rentaro was exactly what they wanted him to become... A emotionless killing machine! In the 2 years that followed, Rentaro had infiltrated many countries, resulting in a kill count of over 2000 people! He was no more a human. In his eyes the world was already dead, he was just doing his victims a favor. He was already 16 years old, but most of those years were of pain and suffering. As time went by he continued to work for the German government, and conflict brought him in the heart of Russia. His mission? "Make it public". Those were to only words he could hear, as he laid in that old apartment waiting for the presidential car to show up. But when it did, he remembered his parents...! It was a long time since he last thought of them... He hesitated for a bit, but then pulled the trigger, hitting the Russian president in the chest, delivering a fatal blow. After a big chase though he was captured and exiled in Siberia. The next 3 years, he spent trying to find his way back in Europe. Rentaro, now 19 years old, finally reached civilization again! He was in Poland! There he heard rumors about DeLiberty City, and the only thing he though was "This is were I belong. This is the only place a monster like me should be!"... |
ApsMadManJun 25, 2016 12:47 PM
Jun 23, 2016 9:02 AM
#56
@fyrusking On second thought I'll go with smashing stuff, although... Precision martial arts doesn't really relate to smashing stuff, but meh, whatever. Maybe I uh, smash stuff skillfully I guess? |
Jun 23, 2016 2:56 PM
#57
@Erazmus It's all right now! You are ready to go eraz! @Nice Heya Nice! Huum your new ability still takes too much damage, specially to the Thug Rank. So it would be better if you would only be able to bound your enemy into not attacking and giving just a little damage, like 2HP Please, use this suggestion or Think of something not so strong ok? Your scheme ability is fine :D @ApsMadMan Will give you a reply soon :D |
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Jun 23, 2016 7:46 PM
#58
Name: Hadeku "Chatta" Shizuka (Real name not confirmed) Picture: Age: 25 Gender: Male Personality: Cruel, Enjoys torture and the smell of blood. There is no such thing as 2nd chances for him, and he only has 2 expressions, the face of insanity and his normal face. His heartbeat is regularly at a constant pace Current mobster rank: 10, Thug Current Charisma Points: 0 Abilities: Knife play, Auto Shots, Snap, and Screech (the last 3 are not learned) Description of your ability when used in the SCHEME: Knife play: He will get close to the victim and put the Karambit's curved side to the neck, threatening him for cash, belongings and etc. (Can only be used on lower charisma victims) Description of your ability when used in the MOB WAR: Knife play: Does 3x extra damage and the victim has his damage halved for 1 post Weapons: Karambit and a Ruger SR22 Auto pistol Mob to join: The Muse (aka High Society) (my character just doesnt fit in with luminaire) Bio: Since he was a child, He was deaf. His mom and dad were Yakuzas and taught him how to shoot and kill when he was little. One day, they moved to DeLiberty City for a stock exchange with the muse. At school, he accidentally told a friend his parents had some business with Muse. When his parents found out, they were furious. They sewed his mouth shut and left him in a small room. His lust for blood sparked in that room and he killed his parents at feeding time. (he can only pour liquids in between the stitches to eat) (Age 19) Years after the "Sewed mouth" Case, he had his mouth covered by a mouth mask and rarely went outside. One day, he got a text from an old friend saying he could make him hear and speak again. He met up with him and ge gave him the supplies. It was a gas mask and some head phones. He put them on and tried to speak, and it worked. His friend said "Can you hear me?" His mind was fucked and he was astounded. He could now eat by putting a canister with some vapor in it and to breath it in. Now 25 and he is ready to join a Mob. Why he cant take out the stitches: Blood loss and the 97% chance he would die in the operation. |
NekyneJul 17, 2016 7:19 AM
Jun 24, 2016 3:06 AM
#59
Name: Kireina (綺麗な) (In short called Kiri) Picture: Age: 17 Gender: Female Personality: Calm and cute, but when made angry can turn the world to ashes. Current Mobster Rank:Rank 10: Thug -_- Current Charisma Points: 0 Abilities: Aurora Pulse Description of your ability when used in the SCHEME / RP Play Story Line: It is a light related ability. It can blind a person for a certain amount of time. Description of your ability when used in the MOB WAR: Aurora Pulse: Blinds a person making them unable to attack for 2 turns (but they can still cure). Weapon: Aurora Spear (Light Spear) Mob to join: Luminaire Character biography: Kiri was born in a small town. Everyone in that town had the fire power except her. She was bullied when she was young since she was different and had a light ability. All of them were assassins who were always paid to kill. She did not like it. At the age of 13, she ran away from her town in search of a place where she belongs. She finally found place in this mob. |
Sh_eenJun 24, 2016 5:00 AM
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Jun 24, 2016 11:43 PM
#60
@philtecturophy @fyrusking Redesigned the MOB WAR power. Should be acceptable now. |
Jun 25, 2016 6:21 AM
#62
@philtecturophy @fyrusking Just say if the power is good to go or not, but don't approve it yet. I'm planning an overhaul right now. |
Jun 25, 2016 10:22 AM
#63
@Nice Hello Nice! Your new ability is still too much powerfull, we think that it would be better if your forgot about this ability involving damaging the opponent by his own actions points. I know your character approval has been delayed a lot, so try to just make a simple ability for now, like the others, that simply do damage or make something no one has made untill now, like a healing ability. ok? I noticed a big mistake in your scheme ability, you need to change it for your own good, this ability will be useless in the scheme, because there is a restriction on psychological effects that, people can only threaten characters with lower charisma than then, thus your character ability will be useless since no one with lower charisma will be able to threaten you already. A solution for this, would be: a character with the same rank CAN'T threaten her. What do you think? good huh? here is an example: Natasha has 120 charisma points and is in rank 5. Yakihiro has 130 charisma points and is in rank 5 Even though yakihiro has higher charisma than Natasha, he can't threaten her because they are the same rank. Note: We will only approve a scheme ability that threatens if he has the the restriction: can only threaten a character with lower charisma. (so don't worry) So for you to not have a useless scheme ability please change to this. So in order to your character to be approved change these, and make another war ability. If you still got any doubts or problems PM me ok? @ApsMadMan Heya Aps! Your character effects are really good! But in your scheme ability, there is a problem. Like, how does this roullete works? we can't really say that you will be able to survive the roullete everytime... like it's a bit unreal xD So please change it into something more real ok? like threatens with the gun or something like this ^^ But the effect is good. just say that it can only affect people with lower charisma ok? Also there is no dodge system, so your war ability will give 6 damage, can you just put this info? so people don't think they will be able to dodge. Please change it then we will approve the character dude :D @nekyne Your character is really good! ^^ Everything is alright, just one thing... You can only be able to threaten someone with lower charisma than your character Can you please put that restriction in your scheme ability? when you do, we will approve it! :D @SeraTsubaki Your character is really good! It's approved! you are ready to go! |
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Jun 25, 2016 10:35 AM
#64
@fyrusking I put that restriction ^^; ill wait to be approved |
Jun 25, 2016 12:36 PM
#65
@fyrusking Thanks >< |
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Jun 25, 2016 12:50 PM
#66
@fyrusking about my sceme ability i think i fixed it, tell me if there is a problem with that i'll change it to something else ;) (blank bullet=fake, only makes sound) also i think that all ppl are afraid of death even with high charisma but yeah i put that low charisma restriction. Also thought there was a dodge system ;p anyway fixed that too ;) |
Jun 25, 2016 12:53 PM
#67
This will be interesting to try and RP with him lol here he is Picture: Name: Reji lector Age: 19 Gender: M Personality: optimistic Very smart Takes care of the people he like and or loves Has trust issues Very picky when it comes to food Likes to read books Focused and steady person Current Mobster Rank: Rank 10: Thug Current Charisma Points: Charisma Points=0 Abilities: enhancement injections Description of your ability when used in the SCHEME / RP Play Story Line: enhancement injections: enhancement injections which give him a masive boot to his skills for his strength and agility. he can now lift very heavy objects or used his strength to scare / threaten people, can be used to dig some information from person having lower charisma than him. Description of your ability when used in the MOB WAR: enhancement injections: he is able to damage 4 HP with his strength and his dodge's half incoming attacks Weapon:kitchen equipment and strength XP Mob to join: Luminaire (every mob need a Cheff) Character biography (You have to elaborate your character's life in minimum of 100 words) He was brought up differently than normal, yes he lived in a normal house and yes he looked like he was a normal average person but really, he would dewl himself in books, studies and his favourite thing was food. As he grew so did his skills, he would use them in restruants and would be working in many famous places by the age of 14, yet he got bored and started to make food which was unexplainable to others, at this point he would have started to explore what he could do. He never liked anyone as he could never get along with people, he wouldn’t even get along with his family other than twin sister, although she was hardly ever be home and would come back unexpected she would be the only one who would understand him.... so much that they would be closer than what people would consider a safe family relationship and their parents wouldn’t know what was going on. (if you want i can expand his bio?) (if anyone would like to be his sister and create the character then do let me know im not planning on creating her as well it wouldn’t work if you read his bio lol but yeah lol) |
Unthinkable92Jul 2, 2016 5:06 AM
Jun 25, 2016 1:53 PM
#68
@fyrusking Your new ability is still too much powerfull, we think that it would be better if your forgot about this ability involving damaging the opponent by his own actions points. You just say that I should throw it away and pick an entirely new concept? Bloody hell. Excellent work being admins. You guys deserve a gold medal for that alone. The more admin-like approach is to give suggestions for nerfs without breaking the concept of the power, yes? But, of course, since the admins say so... Oh well. Back to the drawing board. I know your character approval has been delayed a lot, so try to just make a simple ability for now, like the others, that simply do damage or make something no one has made untill now, like a healing ability. ok? You do know that the delay in approval is caused by slow service, right? Healing? Thanks, but no thanks. The last role I want to see Natasha in is a healer ordered around by a Rank 5 to keep her teammates alive. I'm also not that hyped or excited to start roleplaying here. I'd like to take my time to plan out a power that I would actually like. :) |
Nice--Jun 26, 2016 3:09 AM
Jun 25, 2016 6:09 PM
#69
@philtecturophy @fyrusking Question: During the 2 turns period, if enemy moves, he will be damaged by [3 times Setsu's current maximum action] I must either be missing something very big here, or there is a major flaw in the approval system. How is this not overpowered, but mine is? Is it due to the scaling that is based on the character's own action points? At Rank 10, that's basically choosing between 15 damage or a 2-turn stun. I don't see why mine was not allowed. |
Nice--Jun 26, 2016 3:11 AM
Jun 26, 2016 9:04 PM
#70
@Nice: Ahh sorry i corrected the mistake there. I wrote that ability for Setsu and instead of saying attack , I said move. It has been corrected. Enemy basically cannot attack for 2 turns, but they can still cure, so its not completely stunt in those 2 turns. |
Jun 26, 2016 9:11 PM
#71
@Nice @ApsMadMan @nekyne @Unthinkable92 We will discuss and approve characters more today. Sorry for the delay. Quick note for @Unthinkable92: Hey friend, your char looks very cool XD But you did not write your mob war ability yet. Also your abilities should only be the name of your ability, not a description. Use other approved character as reference for the format, example: SeraTsubaki's character :) |
Jun 26, 2016 9:12 PM
#72
@philtecturophy mine basically just needs to be approved since fyrusking said i needed to add one thing and i did |
Jun 26, 2016 9:15 PM
#73
@nekyne: ahh okay i see you have modified. Perfect!! So its approved and your good to go :) |
Jun 27, 2016 5:31 AM
#75
@philtecturophy sorry man don't understand what your asking me to change |
Jun 27, 2016 5:45 AM
#76
@Unthinkable92 Hey friend, take a look at this as initial modification. See the RED colored text. [b]Picture: Name: Reji lector Age: 19 Gender: M Personality: optimistic Very smart Takes care of the people he like and or loves Has trust issues Very picky when it comes to food Likes to read books Focused and steady person Current Mobster Rank: Rank 10: Thug Current Charisma Points: Charisma Points=0 Abilities: Give a "single name" for this as your ability used in mob war and scheme Description of your ability when used in the SCHEME / RP Play Story Line:he can use food to change a person from its smell, taste and looks, each do a different type of thing. When smelling the food (which food can travel a fair distance) its can either put someone to sleep for a certain amount of time [help with how many turns please not sure myself is 4 fine?] This can only be done if he is creating the food so it would be done as an inside man. If he got you to eat the food then it can really go and do a variety of things to you, it can go from making you very ill, kill you or even have you become manipulated. His food abilities can never stop when it comes to eating them. A specialty of his would be his food mines, as a small defence measure he is able to make food turn in to explosives like mines, with a radius of it exploding its a good way of him defending himself to an extent as it can take walls down. Only he can handle the created food for he does not know how to let others handle them. Will review this with fyrus, but this seems to be too long. Can you shorten this a bit perhaps? And what psychological damage it may cause? Note that SCHEME ability cannot cause physical damage. Description of your ability when used in the MOB WAR: What's your ability's effect in mob war. Mob war ability can cause physical damage, its like an RPG system when battle. Its a taking turn system. Take a look at this thread to see the gameplay during Mob War: http://myanimelist.net/forum/?topicid=1521402 Weapon:kitchen equipment XP Mob to join: Luminaire (every mob need a Cheff) Character biography (You have to elaborate your character's life in minimum of 100 words) He was brought up differently than normal, yes he lived in a normal house and yes he looked like he was a normal average person but really, he would dewl himself in books, studies and his favourite thing was food. As he grew so did his skills, he would use them in restruants and would be working in many famous places by the age of 14, yet he got bored and started to make food which was unexplainable to others, at this point he would have started to explore what he could do. He never liked anyone as he could never get along with people, he wouldn’t even get along with his family other than twin sister, although she was hardly ever be home and would come back unexpected she would be the only one who would understand him.... so much that they would be closer than what people would consider a safe family relationship and their parents wouldn’t know what was going on. (if you want i can expand his bio?) (if anyone would like to be his sister and create the character then do let me know im not planning on creating her as well it wouldn’t work if you read his bio lol but yeah lol) |
Jun 28, 2016 5:23 AM
#77
@philtecturophy okay iv changed him |
Jun 29, 2016 10:46 AM
#78
@ApsMadMan Approved! My friend :D |
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Jun 29, 2016 11:38 AM
#79
@kamina-uchiha Approved, you can join the rp now :) |
Jul 1, 2016 4:38 PM
#80
@philtecturophy edited my character |
Jul 1, 2016 10:40 PM
#81
Name:Shino Luciel Picture: Age: 28 Gender: Male Personality: Shino is a very clever and intelligent person. He is very nice to anyone he meets, even if they are his enemies. Though he doesn't have a good sense of direction, despite being really intelligent. He is extremely lazy though and tries to make the best of excuses to get away from work. Occasionally, he would do work as he is told to. He also calls being lazy conserving energy to make it sound better. Though during certain situations that has anything to do with violence, he becomes violent and insane himself. He won't show mercy to anyone he fights unless it is just a sparring match. He is still intelligent and clever even if he is insane. Current Mobster Rank: Rank 10 - Thug Current Charisma Points: 0 Abilities: Greater Inspection Description of your ability when used in the SCHEME / RP Play Story Line: Greater Inspection: Shino is a great detective due to his cleverness and intelligence. Using it, he can make anyone who has lower charisma tell Shino the information he wants through threats or manipulation. Description of your ability when used in the MOB WAR: Greater Inspection: Dodge half of the incoming attack and damage them 4 HP (the enemy's HP is deducted by 4 when its Shino's next turn) Weapon: A tanto blade and a flintlock pistol Mob to join: Luminaire Character biography: *Camera turns on and starts recording* So, you decided to listen my life now? Well, here we go boy... or girl. Gender equality for the win! So here we go, we will just skip my birth since it might be boring. *looks back at his publisher* Wait what do you mean killing my parents isn't boring? No screw you, starting from birth is incredibly boring! I can bust your career so don't talk back to me! Yeah that's right, listen to the one who tied you up! Sorry, I'll be nicer next time, for now stay cozy on that seat will you? I'll give you a blanket if you ask for it okay. *Looks back at the camera* I'm so sorry, my friend was very rude so let's go into my life story. Now I'm skipping my childhood so why not go to adulthood shall we? We start off with me just a normal person, just walking the street and I am just a normal person might I add. *Looks back at his friend* Okay, that was quite rude sir calling me a psychopath. You know what, I'm not giving you a blanket anymore. *Looks back at the camera* So anyways, I was walking the street when in the alleyway, I saw a girl getting mugged. I saved her of course, because I am just a great person might I add. She looked like a shining star in which I grew feelings for her at first sight. Of course I didn't ask her out straight away and we were only talking. Well anyways, she invited me to dinner for helping her out and of course I accepted since it was free food. I mean, who doesn't want free food? So we start talking and we got each others name and after that, we hit it off. We started talking more and more and sooner or later, I started visiting her everyday. That was when I proposed to date her. I saw that she was unsure at first, but she did follow her heart and say yes to my offer. That was one of the happiest times of my life. We went out together everywhere and I loved every second of it. It was a dream come true! *Looks back at his friend* I am not psychopathic! Just something happened to me that came to this event we have right now. Oh so you want to hear it? Sure why not! I'll drag you over next to me. *Dragging noises* Alright all set! Oh don't mind the rope and duct tape around his mouth, he just likes it that way. So, just as he suggested, I should talk about what had happened to me that led to me meeting this guy right here. *Guy in the camera stops smiling* It was just another day with my girlfriend. I was going to get some groceries that my girlfriend had asked me to get. She was going to stay to do the household chores like laundry, washing the dishes and other things. I was sure she was going to be safe since no one would ever try to rob us. We weren't that rich at all and we lived in a pretty cheap apartment so I was certain she was safe. But that wasn't the case at all. I got the groceries I was told to get and I ran into a couple of trouble before I made it back. It was nighttime and I had finally reached my apartment. I opened the door and the first thing I saw was my girlfriend who was bleeding out on the floor. Next to her must've been a robber who tried to rob us. He was stuck to a wall with a knife in his head. I ran to my girlfriend as I tried to stop the bleeding. She then touched my face with her blood stained hands as she said her last words to me. "Honey, I won't make it. I've already lost enough blood and even if you try to get me medical assistance, it won't be enough time for them to get me. So please remember me til the end. I don't care if you end up with another girl, but remember this Shino. I will always love you." Soon after she said than she gave me a kiss that took her last breath. I couldn't bear it, she was my only peace. The police came to investigate the scene. They didn't find me suspicious since I looked like I wasn't the culprit as I curled himself up in a ball crying. The police asked what had happened here and all I said was that a murder happened and I was there to witness my girlfriend die. I had them arrange a funeral, and they did as I told them. I didn't have much friends, nor did my girlfriend. I had no family either so the only people who attended this funeral were my girlfriend's family, friends and co-workers. I stayed at the grave that my girlfriend the longest as I tell myself why I didn't come any sooner. If only I did, she could've been saved. Though it turns out, the assassin was after my head and he wanted to kill me. He had an employer and now I wanted to find him, that's how I ended up here and this guy right here is the employer. *Shino grabs the employer* So, what do you have to say you fucking murderer?! Oh nothing huh? Oh well I'll just make your death as painful as possible. *Shino drags the employer to an open window. He stands the employer on the window as the leans the chair down.* Please tell my girlfriend that I have avenged her. Oh wait never mind, you'll be sitting in hell rather than in heaven. Don't worry you're only getting what you deserve you demonic imp. *Shino lets go of the chair. Seconds later, you hear the impact of the fall. Shino closes the window and walks over to the camera* So, you like my life story? I bet you did, but now my story will continue with a mob. Though, I won't be making anymore. This is Shino Luciel, signing out from this ugly ass apartment building. *camera shuts off* (Sorry for the long bio. I tried to be creative as possible) |
Avnore_AlterJul 2, 2016 11:52 PM
Jul 2, 2016 12:42 AM
#82
@Unthinkable92: Hey m8 it looks good now XD 1. You need a name for your ability m8 XD 2. Scheme ability: your Scheme ability must be emphasized to not hurt people physically since scheme ability only able to damage a person mentally. 3. Mob WAR ability: as I mentioned in PM, that strength and speed/dodging ability when combined need a bit balance. So now if in your condition, seems a bit OP. So t make it similar to nekyne's ability, you need to modify the damage to 3 HP and still can avoid half damage in next turn. So my suggestion, and you can just copy paste the BBCODE to your details. : Abilities: enhancement injections Description of your ability when used in the SCHEME / RP Play Story Line: enhancement injections: enhancement injections which give him a masive boot to his skills for his strength and agility. he can now lift very heavy objects or used his strength to scare / threaten people, can be used to dig some information from person having lower charisma than him. Description of your ability when used in the MOB WAR: enhancement injections: he is able to damage 3 HP with his strength and his dodge's half incoming attacks Abilities: enhancement injections [b]Description of your ability when used in the SCHEME / RP Play Story Line:[/b] [b]enhancement injections: [/b]enhancement injections which give him a masive boot to his skills for his strength and agility. he can now lift very heavy objects or used his strength to scare / threaten people, can be used to dig some information from person having lower charisma than him. [b]Description of your ability when used in the MOB WAR:[/b] [b]enhancement injections: [/b]he is able to damage 3 HP with his strength and his dodge's half incoming attacks @EarnestMovie: Ahh, joining the Luminaire, cool XD Also Hey, that's a really cool and long bio you have, perfect :) Hmm, for initial observation, here: Abilities: Greater Inspection - Shino's cleverness and intelligence is used here. He has better perception, reaction time and sense of suspicion. You do not need to explain the ability here. The detail is explained in Scheme ability that affect person mentally etc as long as its not physically damage a person, so I cross the part that needs to be deleted Description of your ability when used in the SCHEME / RP Play Story Line: Greater Inspection: Shino is a great detective due to his cleverness and intelligence. He can see the real culprit more suspicious than others, even with only a little bit of evidence shown. He can also see who is innocent based on their words and actions. If he has found a culprit, he can make them admit it by breaking down the scenario with only a few pieces of evidence. Sounds good,, but well later on you might want ability that do some kind of affecting people mentally too, like threatening to ask for info to people lower charisma than you etc. Just like other people also have those kind of abilities. But its up to you. For now this looks good, You just need to follow this format of mentioning the name of the ability followed by the detail like so :) Description of your ability when used in the MOB WAR: Greater Inspection: Shino has great perception and reaction time. He can aim his flintlock and tanto more accurately to its target. His reaction time can also help him react to what his opponent does. This would help him dodge or counterattack much easier than others. Hmm, you need to describe something more numerically in Mob War ability since it used use in war or physically damage the opponent, are give some kind of status effect and so on. You can take a look at how people make their mob war ability as reference EarnestMovie :) For example in your case, you might want to consider this perhaps: Greater Inspection: Dodge half of the incoming attack and damage them 4 HP (you can deduct that enemy's HP by 4 when its your next turn) |
Jul 2, 2016 4:14 AM
#83
Okay phil changed it ^-^ |
Jul 2, 2016 4:35 AM
#84
@Unthinkable92: Lol, that looks great ^^ The only thing you miss is to copy paste this to the Abilities. So delete "abilities" and its description and change into: [b]Abilities:[/b] enhancement injections |
Jul 2, 2016 4:40 AM
#85
philtecturophy said: @Unthinkable92: Lol, that looks great ^^ The only thing you miss is to copy paste this to the Abilities. So delete "abilities" and its description and change into: [b]Abilities:[/b] enhancement injections Oh right yeah not a problem done that.Ioltho u could have done that for me but thanks for saying lol |
Jul 2, 2016 4:47 AM
#86
@Unthinkable92: Yeah actually I could, but was not sure if players would prefer that way, but hey, you are approved m8!!! XD and join the current Luminaire scheme asap to get points okayyy~~ Just come from the front door of Luminaire and start from there. |
Jul 2, 2016 10:26 AM
#87
Ghost Name:Ghost (real name unknown) Picture: Age:Unknown (19-20 judging from appearance) Gender:Male Personality:Foul-mouthed and a smartass.Sarcastic and cynical.A genius and a complete psycho.These are a few of the traits that would normally be associated with his personality.Ghost is a very unstable and unpredictable person.He shows symptoms of PTSD .Although unstable he is able to get a hold of the situation quickly and is very witty.His outbursts however make him very volatile,he's hard to approach and doesn't follow any patterns.He's a walking mess.He has violent tendencies and a very crooked sense of justice.His outbursts usually result in one or more people getting injured or killed.He's insane, and is very very very apathetic.The only thing that makes him feel pleasure is slicing someone's throat with his katana or popping a bullet in their brain. He's a hardcore sadomasochist.He enjoys pain and seeing others suffer gets him erect in an instant... Current Mobster Rank: 10 Current Charisma Points: 0 Ability:Insanity Ability Scheme description:Ghost is very unstable/batshit insane.He uses his insanity to his advantage however by straight up scaring the shit out of the people who oppose him.He can intimidate people with lower charisma points than him to give him info. Ability MOB WAR Description:He is crazy.His insanity makes him able to ignore his pain and just kill things. This ability damages an enemy for 8 HP, but also damages himself by 3 HP in that same turn. Weapon:Springfield Armory XDs 4.0.His main pistol.He calls it "Harold". Appearance: IMI Desert Eagle.Basically a shotgun parading as a semi-automatic pistol.He uses it as his sidearm if things get really bad.He calls it "Maggie". Appearance: Katana.His melee weapon.It consists of a physical hilt with a subtractable blade. Appearance: Mob to join:Tartarus. Biography: Highway to HELL Who am I?The first words that came to mind were "killer" "deceiver" "traitor" "psycho". "Hahaha...." Before I even knew it I started laughing frantically. "AHAHAHAHAHAHHH...AHAHAHHAHAAHHAH..IT FEELS...SO GOOD" I laughed as I stood in the middle of the kitchen bathing in the blood of my parents.. "YOU GOT WHAT YOU DESERVED YOU SONS OF BITCHES.I'M FINALLY FUCKING FREE." I yelled that at the top of my lungs as I stood there watching my parents' lifeless corpses.My late mother was still breathing. "STOP RESISTING YOU WHORE"I yelled as I stabbed her multiple times with my knife. It was so easy...and it felt so..exhilarating... The got what they deserved the fuckers.I'm disgusted they were once my parents.I don't remember how old I am.I forgot those trivial things long ago.My name,my age,those things don't matter.I forgot about them sometime when I was locked in the basement to live with rats,or when I was forced to drink piss and eat spoiled food. "An Unwanted Child".That's what I was to these monsters."You ruined our lives"they said.I couldn't understand that.I didn't understand why they didn't love me.They sure loved each other and that FUCKING BABY they had together 2-3 years after my birth.THAT LITTLE FUCKER.THEY SURE LOVED HIM,SO WHY DON'T THEY LOVE ME.WHY DID THEY TREAT ME WORSE THAN A FUCKING PIG!?! I was so engulfed with rage I stabbed my parent's bodies a few more times.They died silently.I killed the BITCH fist and that FAGGOT came after. I came up behind the slut and shoved a knife right up her back.I held her so she didn't make any noises falling.The faggot was cooking popcorn so he didn't notice the sound of his wife choking on her own blood.I came from behind him...held his head with my left hand AND SLIT HIS FUCKING ROTTEN THROAT..... I think I ejaculated a little when I did it... Oh,that reminds me,I haven't killed the little shit yet... I was about to go upstairs to kill her too...but there was no need...she was standing at the doorway...looking terrified..THAT EXPRESSION GOT ME SO FUCKING HARD(turned on)!!!! "Tell me,"I said with a calm voice,"How old are you? She didn't respond. "TELL ME YOU CUNT!!!!" "Th..th..thir...thirteen"she stuttered as she stated her age. "Aah,I guess I must be about 16 now shouldn't I.It doesn't matter anyway.I feel kinda sorry for having to kill you.You haven't even lived a life yet.No,you know what,I'm not gonna kill you.It would be much more fun seeing you suffer,since I've destroyed your life and all that.But before I do that...LET ME HAVE SOME FUN" I unzip my pants... After I was finished raping the whore I knocked her out and took her outside.I wore gloves so that there were no fingerprints on the knife...but that wouldn't matter now...They could very well take samples of my sperm...I admit I went a little overboard. I left a message for the little bitch.I wrote it on her naked body with blood. 'Come find me...I dare you to try and kill me...!' After I did that I surrounded the house with gasoline and dropped the match. Ghost standing amidst the flames.. END OF ARC 1 The beat goes on Oh my god!I was inspecting the girl that showed up out of nowhere.She was completely naked when I found her.She looked to be at least 13-14 years old.She was suffering from dehydration.I got her something to drink immediately and wrapped her with a piece of clothing. She woke up 3 days later.I noticed something very weird about her eyes.They were blood red.Red eyes are most commonly attributed to a leakage of blood into the iris or large amounts of the red areas of the eyes being present.This was nothing to worry about but it was super rare and kind of creepy. "Who are you?"the girl asked with a weak voice. "I'm Mathas,who are you?" "I'm..."She abruptly stopped. "Why am I here???What do you want to do to me?Please don't!!!!" She suddenly started crying.I'm pretty sure it's PTSD. "I'm not gonna do anything to you.Calm down.I found you lying on my porch so I took you inside." "Your....porch???" "Yes,my porch.Don't worry,I'm no threat...Now,I'm gonna need to run some tests on you ok?Don't worry I'm a doctor.I just want to check some minor things...Do you give me permission to do that?" The girl nodded faintly. First off I checked for concussion. "I'm gonna shine this light in you eye now,so please try and keep you eyes open..." "Ok" I shone the light in her eye.No pupil reaction.Shit!She had lost consciousness,so I hope it's not accompanied with amnesia... "Do you remember where you hit your head?"I ask. She suddenly stops breathing and stands still. "UWWAAAAAAAAAAAAA" She screamed at the top of her lungs. What the hell? I muted her by covering her mouth with my hand.. "If you don't want to talk about it,please don't." She tried to get up. "Why did you help me?"she asks looking genuinely confused. "I couldn't leave you out there to die now could I ?" "So you did it because of your ethics,morals,why?" "Does a person really need a reason to do something good?I can think of some reasons but they just seem half-baked.A person does good things because they can." "Hahaahhaha"she started laughing. "So do bad people do bad things just because they can?" I thought for a while. "I don't know." She got up completely.I noticed something I must have missed when I found her. "What the hell?"I said while glaring at her stomach region. "What?" she says as she looks down. Written on her stomach,with what looked like dried blood, was the message "Come find me...I dare you to try and kill me" I accidentally said that out loud.She looked confused but then she understood what was going on.Rage contorted her facial features. "I'LL KILL HIM!" "What happened?Who are you gonna kill?" She didn't respond.She just stood there.For hours. END OF ARC 2 Hit the road Jack I burned it to the GROUND.The house was degraded to ash scattering in the wind. I searched the house thoroughly before burning it.I took all the money I could find,clothes and their phones. And so,with my past stabbed and burned to death I set out to create a new life. End of arc 3 1 year later And I ran,I ran so far away Mathas continued to take care of me.He became like a second dad to me.He was a good person,a retired doctor who used to live with his wife.When I asked him what happened to her he didn't respond.I assumed she died. The event continued to haunt me.I would never forgive him,that nameless monster.And very night I thought of ways to kill him.I would find him,and I would avenge my parents.I guess I'm bad too.I understand that wanting to kill him makes me evil...but it's justified!!The fucker took my life away... |
CalmCallAug 2, 2016 10:42 AM
I don't even know what to write in here. |
Jul 2, 2016 5:42 PM
#88
@philtecturophy Alright, fixed. |
Jul 2, 2016 10:54 PM
#89
@EarnestMovie: Hey Earnest, please copy paste the BBCODE below to become the text below for Abilities, Scheme Abilities, Mob War Abilities: Abilities: Greater Inspection Description of your ability when used in the SCHEME / RP Play Story Line: Greater Inspection: Shino is a great detective due to his cleverness and intelligence. Using it, he can make anyone who has lower charisma tell Shino the information he wants through threats or manipulation. Description of your ability when used in the MOB WAR: Greater Inspection: Dodge half of the incoming attack and damage them 4 HP (the enemy's HP is deducted by 4 when its Shino's next turn) [b]Description of your ability when used in the SCHEME / RP Play Story Line: [/b] [b]Greater Inspection: [/b]Shino is a great detective due to his cleverness and intelligence. Using it, he can make anyone who has lower charisma tell Shino the information he wants through threats or manipulation. [b]Description of your ability when used in the MOB WAR:[/b] [b]Greater Inspection: [/b] Dodge half of the incoming attack and damage them 4 HP (the enemy's HP is deducted by 4 when its Shino's next turn) NOTE: Both the scheme and mob war ability use the same. The long description is more in the scheme ability, the mob war ability only brief description of the physical damage/effect dealt. Thank you :) |
Jul 2, 2016 11:53 PM
#90
@philtecturophy Done and done. I hope to have an enjoyable RP time with you. And so does Shino here who for some reason is holding up a bundle of rope in his hand... I might need some help... |
Jul 3, 2016 12:07 AM
#91
@EarnestMovie: Looks great, and approved !! :D We will surely have lots of fun Earnest ^^ You can join the current ongoing scheme now. Perhaps come from the front door of the Luminaire house :) |
Jul 4, 2016 9:45 PM
#92
name: katagi picture: Gender: male Personality: usually calm but gets angry really fast, stubborn, cares for his friends, friendly. Current Mobster Rank: rank:10 thug Current Charisma Points: 0 Abilities: spirit consolidate Description of your ability when used in the SCHEME / RP Play Story Line: spirit concolidate: with this ability he could use his soul to make his mind stronger, people can only threat Katagi when they have 5 charisma points higher than him Description of your ability when used in the MOB WAR: spirit concolidate: he uses his soul to inhance his sword making it lighter and stronger. For the next 3 turns, Any physical damage inflicted to Katagi is reduced by 2 damage, and the damage he causes to others increases by 2 damage. Weapon: Angau Glas (Grey Death) Character biography born and raised in a clan full of fearsome swordsman he was trained to held a sword from age 5 but thanks to his craziness he was bullied alot and didnt have friends and was mocked for his skinny body which made him find himself oftin alone so he decided to train..... alot so much that because even his family didnt care for him so most of the day he would be in the woods next with his training set and just training even though when the other kids would be eating or playing and resting he would be training the only time he would go back home is when eating time came or sleeping time came which made him have more hate towards his clan when really all he ever wanted was to have friends so when he became 24 he was on of the 10 most skilled swordsman in his clan this is when he decided to go and let all the hate control him against his family and the people that bullied him so he went to his house packed every thing he had and left it outside the village and went back and killed them and then went outside the village and took his stuff and decided to become a mobster |
IITheG4merIIJul 19, 2016 6:51 PM
Jul 4, 2016 10:46 PM
#93
@IITheG4merII: Hey friend, you character looks awesome and cool :) However there are some mistakes on them: 1. Every new person receives rank Thug, and Thug can only have 1 ability in both SCHEME and MOB WAR 2. SCHEME ability can only counter or inflict mental or psychological damage, not physical damage. The SCHEME is where the member RP-ing. 3. Seems your MOB WAR ability a bit OP. You can refer to other approved player as reference of the range of damage to make your character not OP. As I see your abilities, I realized that you are trying to make this character both averagely good at both defensive and offensive. Here are my suggestion of corrections: Abilities: spirit consolidate Description of your ability when used in the SCHEME / RP Play Story Line: spirit concolidate: with this ability he could use his soul to make his mind stronger, people can only threat Katagi when they have 5 charisma points higher than him Description of your ability when used in the MOB WAR: spirit concolidate: he uses his soul to inhance his sword making it lighter and stronger. For the next 3 turns, Any physical damage inflicted to Katagi is reduced by 3 damage, and the damage he causes to others increases by 3 damage. [b]Abilities:[/b] spirit consolidate [b]Description of your ability when used in the SCHEME / RP Play Story Line:[/b] [b]spirit concolidate:[/b] with this ability he could use his soul to make his mind stronger, people can only threat Katagi when they have 5 charisma points higher than him [b]Description of your ability when used in the MOB WAR:[/b] [b]spirit concolidate:[/b] he uses his soul to inhance his sword making it lighter and stronger. For the next 3 turns, Any physical damage inflicted to Katagi is reduced by 3 damage, and the damage he causes to others increases by 3 damage. |
Jul 5, 2016 9:35 AM
#94
@CalmCall Hey friend, you character looks cool and psycho, I like him :) A bit modification though for the abilities: The mob war ability has something involving probability, which is rather hard to be implemented in the forum RP system battle game. Also the format try to use below. If you approve the ability just copy paste the BBCODE. I also include my suggestion on the Mob War ability based on your idea: Ability:Insanity Ability Scheme description: Insanity: : Ghost is very unstable/batshit insane.He uses his insanity to his advantage however by straight up scaring the shit out of the people who oppose him. This threaten the person who has lower charisma points than him to give him the information he desire. Ability MOB WAR Description: Insanity: : He is crazy.His insanity makes him able to ignore his pain and just kill things. This ability damage an enemy 10 HP, but also damage himself by 2 HP in that same turn. [b]Ability[/b]:Insanity [b]Ability Scheme description:[/b] [b]Insanity: [/b]: Ghost is very unstable/batshit insane.He uses his insanity to his advantage however by straight up scaring the shit out of the people who oppose him. This threaten the person who has lower charisma points than him to give him the information he desire. [b]Ability MOB WAR Description:[/b] [b]Insanity: [/b]: He is crazy.His insanity makes him able to ignore his pain and just kill things. This ability damage an enemy 10 HP, but also damage himself by 2 HP in that same turn. |
Jul 5, 2016 11:15 AM
#95
@philtecturophy Thanks for the tips.Changes made. |
I don't even know what to write in here. |
Jul 5, 2016 7:49 PM
#96
@philtecturophy sounds cool and done just a question can he still use his sword without the ability, and if saw can the damage caused be him normally attacking be 5,10 or 15? |
Jul 6, 2016 9:23 PM
#97
@IITheG4merII: Hey friend, sorry for the delay in response :) Yeah you can do normal attack at normal turns, the attack points are taken from your action points. Every multiple of 5 turn-th of your character, you can use that ability (Spirit Consilidate). The MOB WAR gameplay example rule: http://myanimelist.net/forum/?topicid=1521402 Anyhow, you character is approved, so you can join the current ongoing SCHEME in Luminaire that's about to end :) @CalmCall Hey friend, a bit modification. Can you change the value 10 damage hit to 7 or 8 damage. Since 10 damage turns out a bit too high, I was not concentrating while making that. You can put the damage to yourself by 2 HP or 3 HP respectively :) After you do that, your character will be apporved :) |
Jul 6, 2016 10:46 PM
#98
working Name: Jimmy R. Rokun Picture: Age: 25 Gender: male Personality: he is always collected and calm. Current Mobster Rank: 10: Thug Current Charisma Points: 0 Abilities: Disguise maser. Description of your ability when used in the SCHEME / RP Play Story Line: He can infiltrate other gangs and get info. Description of your ability when used in the MOB WAR: Can sneak into other gangs to kill a vip.). He can fool some for 2+Charisma Points in post Mob to join:looking Character biography Jimmy family were all actors. At a young age he was train to act and become other people. He was very good at this and his mother and father believe he would go far. That was till they company they were in went under and they were let go. He chose to use his skills to trick people and earn money for his family. Over time he grew to like lying and tricking others and even got hired to do it a few times. He wonders how far he can go so he looks for some mob boss to see if they could use him. After all, it would be fun. |
frogotenJul 7, 2016 10:52 AM
..... :'( |
Jul 7, 2016 1:45 AM
#99
@philtecturophy Done... |
I don't even know what to write in here. |
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