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Apr 22, 2009 12:50 PM
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Sygnus said: FRIENDS, ROMANS, COUNTRYMEN! LEND ME YOUR EARS! Please read everyone's posts CAREFULLY before you comment, refute, etc! I'm really seeing a lot of posts in which people completely miss the point of the previous post SO PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE read everyone's ideas CAREFULLY!!!!! Discuss plot ideas HERE!!!!! What we need is...
We voted that our manga will be a Mecha, Comedy, Horror, Romance, and the supernatural. We'll some how compile it all i guesss... CHAPTER ONE Directors
Storyboard doodz
Artists
CHAPTER TWO Directors
Storyboard doodz
CHAPTER THREE Directors
Storyboard doodz
ALL STAFFING FOR THE FIRST CHAPTER IS FINAL. No drop outs or you'll be fired forever -_-. We're starting on the second chapter soon, so if anyone wants to be a scriptwriter or editor for the second chapter, then speak up :] Calendar for CHAPTER ONE This will take effect on May 6th 2009. Since there's so little time left in the year, this schedule will be used for next year as well. BRACE YOURSELVES. THIS IS GANNA TAKE A SHIT LOAD OF DEDICATION and bare with the colors... it's like 4 in the fucking morning give me a break WEEK 1 May 6 Wednesday [Club meetings] Share ideas of what should be put in the chapter. The scriptwriters and editors will be hand picked by Jon The artist will have a sign up sheet for jobs such as panel art, concept art, outlining, and backgrond/tones. [but for the first chapter, lisa already hand picked a few people <3] May 7 - May 10 Thursday - Sunday [Scriptwriter's own time] Scriptwriter takes all of the ideas complied during the club meeting and types up a script. The script will STRICTLY be due on SUNDAYS. WEEK 2 May 11 - May 12 Monday - Tuesday [Editors Only Lunch Meeting] Jon will select editors to sit with him during lunch and run through the script. Based on the input of the editors, it could give them a shot at writing the next chapter uh...over teh summer o.o; The only other people, besides editors, that are allowed to attend will be the script writer and the art director. Other than that, this is STRICTLY for the chosen editors. Finalization of script must be made by the end of Tuesday. Decisions can be made outside of school if necessary. May 13 Wednesday [Club Meetings] Artists will receive a copy of the finalized script and this day will be made for further discussions concerning the art. There will be a separate art schedule, but everything is expected to be done within 1-2 weeks if coordinated correctly. We can go briefly over the next chapter, but srsly, this Wednesday will be a chill day. We got karaoke and Anime Expo planned out. Panel artists can also take this time to start. There will be 2 panel artists doing 20 pages each. May 14 - May 17 Thursday-Sunday [Panel Artists own time] Panel artists need to start making panels lol. Panels need to be done STRICTLY by the end of Sunday so it gets to the concept artists BY MONDAY. If panels aren't done by Monday, you'll prolly be permanently fired until we can trust you again :P Concept artists will just have to draw without panels. There will be 4 concept artists doing 10 pages each. WEEK 3 May 18 Monday [Artists only, Lunch meet] Panel artists will show concept artists what they have done. Concept artists will take what is done home to begin on the...uh... concept art XD We will discuss the process of accessing the photobucket account and uploading what you have done. May 20 Wednesday [Club meeting] Ideas for chapter 2 will be discussed. Scriptwriter for chapter 2 will be chosen. This scriptwriter has until Sunday to finish script, it should only be 20 pages. May 18 - May 22 Monday-Friday [Concept artists own time] Concept artists are STRICTLY responsible for getting the first 5 pages done by the end of Friday. All concept artists need to get their first 5 pages scanned by themselves and uploaded to our photobucket account so that the outliers have access to the images online and can get started. More details will be listed under "concept artists" If first 5 pages aren't done by the end of Friday, you'll prolly be permanently fired until we can trust you again :P Someone else will have to pick up on the pages that were dropped. May 22 - May 24 Friday - Sunday [concept artists and outline artists] Outliners will outline what has been uploaded to photobucket. All outlines must be done digitally. Post what you have done onto the photobucket account page - by - page so that the background/toner can begin right away. Concept artists are responsible for getting their assigned last 5 pages uploaded to photo bucket Outliners are responsible for outlining the first 5 pages of what they are assigned done by the end of Sunday. There will be 2 outline artists doing 20 pages each. WEEK 4 May 25 - May 29 Monday - Friday [Outliners and Background/Toners] Outliners will finish whatever pages they have left STRICTLY by the end of Wednesday. Remember to immediately upload whatever pages you have done on photobucket so that the background/toners can start right away. There will be 2 background/toners doing 20 pages each. May 29 - May 31 Friday-Sunday [background/toners and type setters] Background/toners will finish up whatever they need to get done STRICTLY by the end of Saturday. Needs to be uploaded to photobucket. Typesetters can start as with whatever the background/toners uploaded to photobucket. WEEK 5 May 31 - June 2 Sunday - Tuesday [typesetters] Typesetters will finish the job :] There will be 1 type setter to do all 40 pages, maybe 2 if necessary. Typing in text takes a fuck load more time then it appears -_-;;; June 3 Wednesday [club meeting] WE'RE DONE! LAST MEETING OF TEH YEAR!! PAR-TAY!! Please string your name at the end of your post so I know who's who >_<. melancholy said: Oh... by the way. We're not rejecting the ideas because we want to stay true to the original plot. Most of the ideas are being rejected because they're too cliche and have been seen too many times. We're trying to avoid being just another Gundam Mecha anime, and try to add some uniqueness to the manga. If you're going to reject someone's idea, please give a good reason. Try to stay up to par with my long response, cuz the more detail, the more we can understand each other [i hope]. Also, don't take any of the comments personally. PLEASE act professional or else we're gonna get nowhere. Don't think that I hate you or anything, because I really really truly don't. For me to hate someone because of discussion over manga? Oh please. It's WAY too immature and ignorant to hate someone because they were sharing their ideas, and I hope you guys don't hate on each other JUST for sharing ideas and being honest. And don't feel shot down because we rejected your ideas! Feel free to argue back and defend your idea, but let's not respond with something immature, rude, or ignorant. That kind of behavior won't be tolerated. -Lisa Sou |
melancholyJun 1, 2009 6:53 PM
Apr 22, 2009 6:13 PM
#2
Lawl... here i go with my long ass rants about manga lolol...feel free to disagree with anything i am about to say. See, I don't exactly have a good idea for a plot yet, but I certainly know ways of how to make a manga... not crappy. I'll throw out base ideas to see where everyone will take my suggestions. By the way, I watch too much anime, and these are the exact thoughts that I think when criticizing anime... First off, I just wanna say that if we're going to combine mecha, horror, comedy, romance, and super natural, it's gonna be CHEESY if we take ONE wrong slip. I'm freakin serious. I cannot stress how many anime I've seen that have tried to attempt this... where 99.9% of the jokes aren't funny, the romance was WAY too cheesy, the horror completely was out of nowhere, and the mecha fights were a little too... cheesy. [COUGH COUGH dragonaut... COUGH COUGH dearS...soul link...etc...] The way to completely avoid that is to somehow combine all of these genres in a very very VERY subtle way. This means NO forced jokes, NO forced romance, NO forced horror...you get the point. Now wait a sec, how the heck are we supposed to subtly do it without any of it being forced? We need to set up a plot that can easily let us hit all of these genres without making it look like we're trying to hard. Something REALLY flexiable. The plot should be very straight forward that doesn't take us about 5 episodes to figure out what the plot is about. The more complicated it gets, the more cheesy cuz then it'll seem like we're just trying too hard. The simpler, the better. If you can explain the main idea of a manga in a sentence, then it's perfect. And if we can take a simple concept and explode it into something amazing, then god knows how beautiful the manga will come out. Anime like Aria, GTO, Nodame Cantabile, and Kino's Journey have very very simple plots but the authors REALLY know how to do a lot with the simple plots. Even Death Note has a very simple concept that is exploded into something amazing. The BEST way to do this relies HEAVILY on the characters and their personalities. I CANNOT emphasize that enough. The characters need to be built up with a perfect personality so that they can blend in these genres easily. The less characters the better. When we have less characters, their personalities can be fleshed out so fucking much and the relationships can be built up beautifully if we can do it right. We can't have like like... 150 characters where about 140 of them are insignificant to the plot but apparently have a whole episode devoted to themselves. Now, I've devoted the next few sections on suggestions on how I believe everything should blend in. This just helps me organize my thoughts :P
LAWL that's cheesy, but again, it's a start. I think it's better for me to illustrate this idea rather than to type it up cuz I feel like I can't convey the situation that I am envisioning XDDD Anyways, shoot away with your ideas plz :P -Lisa Sou |
melancholyApr 23, 2009 7:26 AM
Apr 22, 2009 7:20 PM
#3
damn it lisa u absent minded asian u for got to put me under artist do u even know me and jimmy are the fathers of anime club we ran it some number of years ago and all we did was watch anime no computers so there wherent any fakers |
Apr 22, 2009 7:32 PM
#4
lycantat said: damn it lisa u absent minded asian u for got to put me under artist do u even know me and jimmy are the fathers of anime club we ran it some number of years ago and all we did was watch anime no computers so there wherent any fakers Chill, bum. Did you not see the 10 page essay she just wrote? And you've got the cojones to say that. I bet your incarnation of the club couldn't raise 800 dollars. So sit down, shut up, and address your grievances properly, you cocky, headstrong, unfeeling ingrate. Also, you might want to fix your grammar, buddy. |
Apr 22, 2009 7:36 PM
#5
Sygnus said: lycantat said: damn it lisa u absent minded asian u for got to put me under artist do u even know me and jimmy are the fathers of anime club we ran it some number of years ago and all we did was watch anime no computers so there wherent any fakers Chill, bum. Did you not see the 10 page essay she just wrote? And you've got the cojones to say that. I bet your incarnation of the club couldn't raise 800 dollars. So sit down, shut up, and address your grievances properly, you cocky, headstrong, unfeeling ingrate. Also, you might want to fix your grammar, buddy. wait... there was an anime club a few years ago? never heard about it. well i guess if we had to go out and make a new anime club, then the old one must have blown some balls. |
Apr 22, 2009 8:10 PM
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lawl, i posted my idea for the plot in my long ass post but it's kinda buried so i'll post it again Vincent Clyde ould be a secret prodigy elite mecha pilot who attends high school regularly as a student. He has a best friend, Sherri. These two have a strong chemistry of love between each other... Throughout her life, Sherri has been haunted haunted by killing machines [o_o?] because she has significant powers [but nothing too magical or fantasy. Something simple, like time traveling, or the ability to corrupt minds]. She knows she's being haunted and will eventually be killed, but doesn't want to tell anyone about it. Ironically, the Vincent is the one who is building these killing machines that is haunting Sherri because he wants to possess the powers she has, but he doesn't know that it's the girl he loves that he is haunting... and she doesn't have the slightest clue that he's a mecha pilot... or something like that. Sounds cheesy and complex if you read it again, but it's a start :P Lawl, the way I explained this plot sounds a bit cheesy. I'll try to break it down a bit. I'm hoping the manga doesn't focus too much on the mecha because i don't want this to become just another mecha anime, but there is clearly mecha right from the begining of the anime. It's not just randomly thrown in like in Gankutsuou... anyways, the male protagonist and the female protagonist don't have so much a romantic relationship, but a really funny and comedic relationship that eventually turns into love. Presto, you've got romantic comedy. I decided to have the girl haunted by something that the guy created because then he is directly tied into the horror, and presto, mecha has been combined with horror. And if she's being haunted because of an ability to corrupt minds, presto whamo, you've got super natrual. Nothing that's really forced, amirite? I'm not saying we're totally going with this idea but this I'm hoping it's something that'll at least trigger ideas. |
melancholyApr 23, 2009 7:26 AM
Apr 22, 2009 9:05 PM
#7
Oh boy a mecha manga? I mean, not to brag or anything, but I've seen quite a few mecha, good and bad, in my day... SO THIS IS THE PERFECT STOMPING GROUNDS FOR MY IDEAS Let's start with our big, metal, buddy, our main mecha! -BASIC MECHA DESIGN- High school, probably modern to near future. The mecha will need to have very modern weaponry, but nothing too futuristic. NONE OF THE FOLLOWING: World-ending laser Black hole cannon Gravity based weaponry Spiral Energy, G-Stones, GN Drives, Getter Rays, or anything that has an infinite amount of power. So we're really talking Real Robots as opposed to Super Robots. As in any mecha, there should be: The Hero's Mecha, with higher specs than the... Mass produced Mecha, which will be the cannon fodder. The big-bad mecha, can be mass produced or like the hero's for a single character. This gives the hero a rival, although IMHO there shouldn't be a one on one rivalry. But we'll go into that at the plot discussion point of this post. So in my head... I imagine the mecha to be something like this... Description: There'll be several variations, which will be explained later, but, at the bare minimum these things will be like walking, all terrain tanks. They will have legs, however, these legs wl be supplemented with treads or wheels to aid in movement through streets or long flat areas. They will all have arms, although some will have rudimentary arms, while others may have very defined arms, fingers and all. Height: 5-6 meters Power source: Very large battery unit (I like the sound of Freya Driver...) Weapons: Something along the lines of large-scaled small arms... mecha sized rifles, pistols, and for close quarters, knives. Specialized mecha wil obviously have different types of weapons for their specializations. The cockpit will resemble a basic mecha cockpit, with control boards on either side of the pilot, 2 foot pedals, and 3 monitors for viewing. Advanced models may include a 360 or extended screen. For example, this could be on of the defining features of the hero's mecha, aiding his already fantastic piloting ability. As for their overarching name... ARMS Which stands for Assault and Reconnaissance Mechanized Suits Cooler names for specific suits come later. I bet you're glad I'm done writing about the mecha, but there's still my plot ideas! So hang onto your most recent meal and HERE WE GO! ~And so the plot thickens~ Through the use of mechanoid weapons known as ARMS, military interventions have brought peace to most of the world. However, these interventions were not brought along by the "righteous" powers in the globe. No, this peace was brought about by the very company that produced ARMS, the paramilitary organization, AstrumOrdo. Starting in 2039, AO implemented their newly developed ARMS to stamp out terrorism, despotism, and many other global issues. Due to their actions, people's trust in their own governments began to wane, thus allowing the rise of powerful corporations, who in a sense became their own governing bodies. Fast forward to the year 2057 Former countries have been divided amongst the richest orgnizations in the world- governments no longer by the people, for the people, but rather, by the business, for the business. At the AstrumOrdo run Liberal Arts Secondary School (PLEASE CHANGE THIS NAME FOR ME), -heroine's name here- struggles to keep up with the rigid and rigorous curriculum. Being in her second year, you'd think she'd be used to it by now, but sadly, that is not the case. In fact, the very nature of the school gives her chills. Though she cannot remember anything from before er 5th birthday, she has a fragmented bit of memory, that she cannot place- Crumpled over her are people dressed in lab coats- they lay dead on her as if to protect her. Out of the small gap between the bodies, she sees a red light- the eye of an ARMS. A loud noise- A crash- And then the momery comes to an abrupt halt. She's been seeing this in her dreams more often recently... And for as long as she can remember, she's had terrible, inexplicable headaches whenever she was angry at someone. However, she passes that fragment of memory off as insignificant. Her father, despite her irrational dear of them, is an ARMS pilot, and she has no mother. Her grades in school, despite her struggling, aren't half bad. She isn't popular, but she isn't the class ridicule target. She has friends, and she has enemies. This is her truth, her reality, and she sticks to it. Across the classroom sits a seemingly average teenage boy. Average grades, lower than average motivation. He's a funny kid, to a point that the professors tend to grow weary of his hijinks. However, if you observe him closely enough, you will notice a solemn, dedicated look on his face. [hero's name], Test Pilot for AO-Experimental Development Section. His less than average day job disjoints him from the average high school setting anywhere outside the school, disallowing him to spend much free time with his small circle of friends. Claiming a variety of excuses ranging from illness to solitary study session, he spends much of his free time with the AO DevEx staff, testing whatever new equipment they may have developed. Despite his exterior, he really does feel some loneliness- after, he is just human. ------------------------ ...I had a scene in mind, I'll post it in an upcoming addition. |
Apr 23, 2009 3:40 AM
#8
Running off of Sygnus after her scene a declaration of war takes place between to competing groups, Now instead of lulz memory loss I was thinking a more Romeo & Juliet type thing with the girl he loves a mecha pilot on the opposite side, the comedy comes in thier battles with each other often ending in ties for some reason or another. I also wanted the declaration of war to be Pearl Harbor style so this is what I came up with: Two kids on a beach(one of which is the main character) , its like 11 at night, they look to the sky and see the stars, and it looks as though one of them exploded, then another and another, a bright flash and you see the contrails of something in the atmosphere, falling, burning on re-entery its falling towards the kids on the beach. A massive splash, it crashed into the water and there is steam everywhere. The steam clears and the kids rush into the water and on one of the shoulders they see the scorched but still legible badge " 1001st Solborne" Sol means Sun BTW, so like the battles take place from mostly 38,000 feet and above but their are lower altitude battles when there isn't a warning of the attack so to continue: They see more streaks in the sky, seeing ARMS decending from the skies. To their left they hear a whirring noise and where a rock used to be there is now a SAM site and another to their right. WOOOSH!!! A missle is away tracking after a ARM. The ARM fires a bust of rounds towards the missle, BOOOM!! The ARM then shoots at the beach, destroying the SAM but also hitting our main character's best friend. That's when they leave, his friend bleeding out in passenger seat of the car, as they race though traffic to get to the ARMS Testing Facilty, known as Area 515 you see more ARMS dueling in the sky above as it pans out to show the battered city... Let me know what you think!! Got to catch the bus see you all later! P.S. It's Jordan P. here. |
Apr 23, 2009 2:59 PM
#9
I like Sygnus' idea for the mecha but we should still ask what kind of weapon it will use. Laser, large rifle, or railgun? A weapon is an important part of the mecha's "feel" so to speak. Also clothes. Ever heard the saying "The clothes make the Man."? It's true, what the characters wear is very important. We need a good high school outfit, if we decide to do uniforms for the high school or we need to give them casual outfits. Then for Vincent we need to give him a pilot suit for the mecha (form fitting would probably be best), and a dress uniform for formal events, like meeting with superiors or such. Finally are we gonna show any focus to OTHER soldiers during combat. If so we need to design a generic uniform and weaponry design for them. There's more too but I'll stop here for now. David B. |
The esteemed General Cow |
Apr 23, 2009 4:25 PM
#10
ok i totally no wat the girl's power should be! the power she has it vair vair dangerous... when ever shes angry she gets into dis rage where her eyes go totally black (or white... or sumthing cooler) and she starts killing everyone around her. (adds to the horror and supernatural). but after her rages she totally fogets everything tht happen during her rage (or not idk). so im guessing the gov. is trying to get her cuz shes a danger to humanity and wants to 'heal' her, but actually just want to use her as a weapon n try to create more like her except making them easier to control. for her charater i want her 2 b the loner type quite and stuff while the the guy is the outgoing one with a bunch of friends. her classmates r scared of her bcuz shes sumwat scary looking (i want her 2 have white hair tht turns black when shes in her rage). even thou shes kinda scary looking she personality is actually really sweet, the only reason y others cant c tht is becuz shes shy. i want her personality to b kind of like nagisa's (just the personalilty nothing else). she doesnt have a lot of confidence and she's a bit conservative. also her boobs r not huge! they r a C cup at most!!! nothinbg larger than tht!!!!! n... ... wow im still going on... ummm i'll continue dis is if u guys like the idea.. haha im just babbeling... if u like the idea i'll continue... if not i'll just shutup |
Apr 23, 2009 5:36 PM
#11
Hey guys, I talked to Ms. Shapiro about putting our manga on the Jagwire Ahaha... there's gonna need to be a change in plans. Ok, first off, I gotta give a reality check to everyone. The Jagwire is releasing the week of May 11th. And they have to get to the printer by the end of next week. Ms. Shaprio told me she needs something by Wednesday or Thursday NEXT WEEK. Time is not my concern because I'm sure we can draw something really quick with no problem since we have quite a small spot. My ONLY concern is the content. We could go with something dramatic and put a sample of what we've come up with so far, OR we could come up with something completely different and make it a comedy but JUST for the jagwire. I hope I'm making sense... We have 2 options for the position of the comic. Here are the two options that Ms. Shaprio gave me The area in red is where our comic will be positioned Option #1 Option #2 So yeahhhh.... with such little space, I feel like we're going to have to resort to a comedy 4-koma. By 4-koma, I mean something 4 panels, like THIS. These are really quick to make, but really hard to come up with. I'm gonna read a few 4 komas to get a good idea of how to make some jokes. There's no way we can pull off something dramatic in such little space :/ even if it's a sample... but we can try. By the way, I'm up for option #1 because it gives us space to do 2 vertical strips, instead of 1 horizontal strip. Like so... with more panels... we could either go with a comedy or a dramatic scene. I REALLY need some input by monday on what to put in the jag wire :/ Oh by the way, we'll leave a link to our website so that people can read it online, which means I STILL want the first chapter to be done since we're advertising it on the Jagwire. So let me run down the dates...
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melancholyApr 23, 2009 5:55 PM
Apr 23, 2009 5:43 PM
#12
IMHO: Option one, just a 4koma... Something basic, lighthearted, and funny... however, introducing our manga as a whole. Something that would bait in potential readers... Not totally my forte, however, the obvious is: -The strip needs to STAND OUT -It need to LOOK GOOD -compared to its surroundings- -It needs to be FUNNY It does not necessarily have to be amazingly drawn, but it most definitely should not be fleabag. Otherwise, Option 1, 4-5 boxes, maybe the last one for straight information and a bit of illustration. |
Apr 23, 2009 5:52 PM
#13
Mrs. Shaprio said that we gotta commit to making the comics for every jagwire issue because people are gonna be looking for our comic and if it's not there it's kinda disappointing. Unless it sucks... Do you still think we should make a big web comic project of what we're coming up with so far or should we wait off til next year? This is because we're doing such a short comic on the Jagwire and committing time to make such a big comic. It'd be wise to do it next year, but then again, I'm really excited to start this like right away. We can take our time to do the first chapter and theres no rush to get the first chapter online because we probably won't even advertise it heavily until next year when we have a LOT on the website. |
Apr 23, 2009 5:55 PM
#14
I has idea Since the next issue is essentially the last (or almost last issue), we can announce our upcoming 4koma series and tell readers to look forward to it next year. In addition, we can also plug the serious business manga as well, putting the link in an everything. Something like that |
Apr 23, 2009 5:58 PM
#15
Sygnus said: I has idea Since the next issue is essentially the last (or almost last issue), we can announce our upcoming 4koma series and tell readers to look forward to it next year. In addition, we can also plug the serious business manga as well, putting the link in an everything. Something like that lawl XD so now we're making a 4koma series? lolol sounds like fun. we can do that on the side IMO. yeeaah... we can say that we're making an upcomming series, we don't need it to be released right away. This relives pressure of time and gives us more space to come up with something good XDDD And we can even work on the serious manga over the summer. If it's on a website, then we can advertise the website to anyone and anywhere. Trust me, when it comes to advertising, it's my total forte 8D I also wanna get other people's opinions on what to make the 4koma about... but not too many people are posting on here yet... |
Apr 23, 2009 6:02 PM
#16
melancholy said: lawl XD so now we're making a 4koma series? lolol sounds like fun. we can do that on the side IMO. yeeaah... we can say that we're making an upcomming series, we don't need it to be released right away. This relives pressure of time and gives us more space to come up with something good XDDD And we can even work on the serious manga over the summer. If it's on a website, then we can advertise the website to anyone and anywhere. Trust me, when it comes to advertising, it's my total forte 8D I also wanna get other people's opinions on what to make the 4koma about... but not too many people are posting on here yet... Yeah, I know, I can still hear the crickets chirping and the pin drop from across the room. However, to be honest, when this plan was in utero, I was thinking solely 4koma. BUTTT we now have this tandem project, which IMHO, is much better than my original idea. Since it's a 4koma, it'll be easier to write, draw, and implement, so I think it's for the best. |
Apr 23, 2009 6:17 PM
#17
if no one is putting input, then we're gonna have to make the decisions ourselves. These kind of decisions need to be done OUTSIDE of the club meets, because the club meets should be focused on creating, not debating. here are examples of 4komas so people who are actually reading this thread can get a good idea Example 1 Example 2 (classic favorite) Example 3 Example 4 Example 5 Example 6 Example 7 keep in mind that the art style doesn't need to be solely anime. They can be like the funny stick figure comics [but then we'll be like...copying off that guy XD] likeeee Example 1 Example 2 ...but we gotta keep it appropriate of course xD |
Apr 23, 2009 6:32 PM
#18
melancholy said: if no one is putting input, then we're gonna have to make the decisions ourselves. These kind of decisions need to be done OUTSIDE of the club meets, because the club meets should be focused on creating, not debating. here are examples of 4komas so people who are actually reading this thread can get a good idea Example 1 Example 2 (classic favorite) Example 3 Example 4 Example 5 Example 6 Example 7 keep in mind that the art style doesn't need to be solely anime. They can be like the funny stick figure comics [but then we'll be like...copying off that guy XD] likeeee Example 1 Example 2 ...but we gotta keep it appropriate of course xD Many lolz were had. Yes, those are perfect 4Koma examples |
Apr 23, 2009 6:59 PM
#19
lol. these new ideas are really good. So are we starting the real manga next year and just doing a 4koma now? or are we gonna keep doing the 4koma next year. Theres too many terms, stuff, and writing. >.> frankly half of those examples i dont think they were appropriate but were pretty funny lol :P anyway i think we should do like one of those Fail blog things :D to keep it funny and simple. like the ones Jean showed earlier today :P and we shouldn't do like anime 4komas like code geass or kemeko cus people wouldnt REALLY understand what's going on just my thought :P found this thought it was funny.. if you play sc :P http://yoyo.its.monash.edu.au/%7Eayanami/Sakura.Romesh.Blog/Images/fathers%20day.jpg -- James P. |
Tempest-93Apr 23, 2009 7:08 PM
Apr 23, 2009 7:50 PM
#20
LAWL it's about time i respond to what everyone else said James - Yeah i know that we can't do inside jokes like code geass or kemeko, i was just using those examples so people know what a 4koma is XDDD ummm are far as ideas for the 4komas go, it's hard to do something funny and keep it appropriate.. especially for high schoolers. maybe we can go for something like a political joke [?], or making of a celebrity? or making a small silly joke about school. how about something like... Little Kid: Hey Obama? Do you have change for a 5? Obama: No. But I have change for the nation. or something like that XD Sidrah: I like your idea for the main girl having a mad rage. [btw, we temporarily named her Sherri]. I'm just gonna add on to your idea. I was thinking she goes into a state where her eyes change colors, and when that happens, she has the ability to corrupt minds upon eye contact. When people look into her eyes, knowledge of the world is forced into their brains to the point where it becomes extremely hard to handle and their brains literally explode. [But don't get me wrong... Just cuz the brain explodes doesn't mean the head explodes...because I dun wanna see no rolling heads on the ground. too cliche :/] The AstrumOrdo [or the AO, read Jon's post] is going after Sherri powers so that they can take the mind corruption ability to their advantage. What I was thinking was that tiny microchips dig into Sherri's head and crawl into brain at night when she's asleep. these microchips gather data about Sherri's mind corruption powers, and the AO studies this daily. Because of this, when Sherri wakes up, she always has headaches. Eventually, when the AO figures out how to fully use Sherri's power, they're going to kill her because 1) as the original subject, she could prove to be a threat since she has had the powers since birth and has mastered it since then and 2) so other companies don't get a hold of her powers. And ironically, the person who is programing these micro chips is Sherri's best friend and lover, Vincent Clyde. Of course, the audience doesn't figure out that Vicent programed the micro chips because it's important to develop the relationship between Sherri and Vincent first so that when the audience ACTUALLY figures out, it'll be extremely dramatic if it's pulled off correctly. Through Vincent's eyes, the micro chips are created to revolutionize the world in a positive way, because Vincent is so naive and is a really cheerful guy. He's programing them, but not deploying them, and that's why he doesn't know that the microchips are being used on Sherri. He doesn't know about Sherri's powers. She also doesn't know about the microchips, although she's seen them once or twice before going to sleep but brushes it off as nothing. As far as Sherri's personality goes, I have to disagree with her being a shy and secluded character because it's just been used WAY too many times. See, Sherri always wakes up with terrible headaches because of the micro chips, but despite all that, she still has a happy and normal outlook. That kind of what I'm going after. People wouldn't suspect that she has something life threatening going on in her life, and neither does she know her self. She needs to look as normal and happy as possible so it's not obvious that she's being haunted by something. [but not over the top happy.] And for a cheerful person to be hiding their real, dark feelings is more interesting than the loner who obviously has something wrong going on in their life written all over their face. Also, I can't count how many times I've seen a situation where the loner girl falls in love with the outgoing guy. It's been uesd too many times, and we'll seem really cliche. I hope you can understand >___<!!! But I am totally going for your first idea! David: Amen to that :P Jordan: Me and Jon both agreed that the idea was too mecha heavy. We're trying to avoid war so that we don't end up like just another Gundam anime. This is more of a conflict between corporations, rather than getting nations involved. War also gives the anime too much of a historical outlook, which isn't as appealing against a futuristic outlook [cuz in the future, we'd be less prone to war]. The Romeo and Julliet idea is there, but not the way that you're potraying it. Jon said the second paragraph sounds too much like Gundam Wing. The entire scene with the ARMs flying in the sky because ARMs can't fly, they are walking tanks. Let's try to avoid space so that because it's just too overdone [hence, macross, outlaw star, ALL the gundam anime, and basically... just any mecha. too over done, we're keeping it in the city]. Also take into consideration that stuff like mecha's flying and war is just waaay too hard to draw. Let's keep this a war between cooperation. |
Apr 23, 2009 8:02 PM
#21
Oh... by the way. We're not rejecting the ideas because we want to stay true to the original plot. Most of the ideas are being rejected because they're too cliche and have been seen too many times. We're trying to avoid being just another Gundam Mecha anime, and try to add some uniqueness to the manga. If you're going to reject someone's idea, please give a good reason. Try to stay up to par with my long response, cuz the more detail, the more we can understand and take each other seriously [i hope]. Also, don't take any of the comments personally. PLEASE act professional or else we're gonna get nowhere. Don't think that we hate you or anything, because we really really truly don't. For us to hate someone because of discussion over manga? Oh please. It's WAY too immature and ignorant to hate someone because they were sharing their ideas, and I hope you guys don't hate on each other JUST for sharing ideas and being honest. And don't feel shot down because we rejected your ideas! Feel free to argue back and defend your idea, but let's not respond with something immature, rude, or ignorant. That kind of behavior won't be tolerated. |
melancholyApr 23, 2009 8:05 PM
Apr 23, 2009 9:37 PM
#22
*clap clap* I'll leave some criticism once I've read it. For now, anime and sleep. |
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Apr 24, 2009 2:56 AM
#23
Well when I thought mecha I thought ACTION ACTION ACTION EXPLOSION ACTION....but hey what ever. Though I must say my mind is a LOTTTTTTT better at making action scenes, so let me know where you can use me. |
Apr 24, 2009 8:44 AM
#24
Portal8229 said: Well when I thought mecha I thought ACTION ACTION ACTION EXPLOSION ACTION....but hey what ever. Though I must say my mind is a LOTTTTTTT better at making action scenes, so let me know where you can use me. Keep in mind that we're not doing something pure mecha. There were other genres that people wanted to do, the mecha genre didn't receive the highest vote out of them all. I'm kind of against doing a mecha anime, but I'm still up for it. that's why we should keep it mecha lite to be fair. so lets get a good blend of all the genres that were voted on. Again... if you want to defend your statement, feel free to. Don't keep all your discussions and thoughts to yourself. We all want to be honest with each other. |
Apr 24, 2009 1:53 PM
#25
Ehhhh well like yeah ummm sooooooo..... *Portal has disconnected from the server.* |
Apr 24, 2009 2:18 PM
#26
Jordan: Me and Jon both agreed that the idea was too mecha heavy. We're trying to avoid war so that we don't end up like just another Gundam anime. This is more of a conflict between corporations, rather than getting nations involved. War also gives the anime too much of a historical outlook, which isn't as appealing against a futuristic outlook [cuz in the future, we'd be less prone to war]. The Romeo and Julliet idea is there, but not the way that you're potraying it. Jon said the second paragraph sounds too much like Gundam Wing. The entire scene with the ARMs flying in the sky because ARMs can't fly, they are walking tanks. Let's try to avoid space so that because it's just too overdone [hence, macross, outlaw star, ALL the gundam anime, and basically... just any mecha. too over done, we're keeping it in the city]. Also take into consideration that stuff like mecha's flying and war is just waaay too hard to draw. Let's keep this a war between cooperation. 1.A conflict between corporations...Marduk Institute & Seele v. NERV?? 2."Cuz' in the futuree we'd be less prone to war." Really? I mean seriously?!?! Ummm we are talking about the human race right? Ok then unless a nuclear war took place Fallout 3 style, then I doubt heavily that we'd stop fighting each other, I mean why is the main character testing bloody WEAPONS!!? if there is no more war. Further more, corporations in the past have gone at each others throats for technology, so whoooooo is to say that some CEO wouldn't lose it and ransack some new tech by pretending to be terrorist or something? 3. ARMS can't fly.......ok the space part maybe but what type of mecha are we talking about that don't have jump jets at least? Can you talk about the obstacles something that big would need to overcome? Plus I was thinking only like Armored Core type mechas, I think our artists can handle that. The stuff you are describing reminds me of Chromehounds:http://3.bp.blogspot.com/_CjUcAcTCcO0/SBXBVgZRs0I/AAAAAAAAAPw/k-racTT3e7E/s320/chromehounds.JPG AC:http://4.bp.blogspot.com/_fDs53lhqf44/STxptxmid0I/AAAAAAAACnw/tQdZntHuTng/s400/armored-core-crest_330_396.jpg 3.Were keeping it in the city? Why? I'm not pushing for WWIII in mecha form but can we be realistic in terms of what the people want, they say if you "jump too high you get smacked down" well let us conform if ever slightly in terms of the mecha, there is still space for Horror and SN and Romance, and besides the horror of war is appalling, the fear of never seeing your loved ones again, the feeling of invincibility, the connection you make with the fallen when you are about to join them, I mean come on, if you need an example think of Asuka fighting off the prototype EVAS in NGE, that's a great scene detailing most of which I just said. So in conclusion just defending my idea like you said, and preparing for your counter of course. |
Apr 24, 2009 2:20 PM
#27
ok for sherri i think that she shouldnt always be perky too. cuz thts also been used way to many times. to figure out her personality look at the real world. wen perople are hurting or under stress (especially girls) they get really moody. i think that sherri should be really nice and perky (or something) but like in the morning shes always really tired and moody (generally bad mods) but gets better after a point in her day like after coffee or food or going outside. (idk. 0but yeah and also i think that sometimes durring random times in the day she sould get really bad migrains tht are so bad she falls or staggers or passes out. but the audience doesnt have to kno why. her getting headaches could add drama and possibly romance or a funny situation. like wat she wakes up too. :) wow i wrote alot.. ok well just an idea. :) - candice collins. :3 |
Apr 24, 2009 2:41 PM
#28
IM SO EXCITED TO START DRAWING!!! ... if theyer any solid ideas tht everyoneagrees on id LOVE to start sketching them or atempting them. :) I WANA DRAW!! xD |
Apr 24, 2009 2:47 PM
#29
See if you can draw this: http://4.bp.blogspot.com/_qGtGl4NFC8s/Rdmxpkh-q5I/AAAAAAAADIY/iYQm4Chea9M/s1600/armoredcoreor8.jpg |
Apr 24, 2009 2:54 PM
#30
All right, all right, all right, in the famous words of a great man... LETS DOOOOO THIS!!!!!!!! Anyway, to be completely and brutally honest, for coming up with ideas, not only am I more prone to creating graphic novels(comics... >...>) yet, the problem with this genre is EVERYTHING HAS BEEN DONE. EVERYTHING. (simpsons...) Well, I kinda liked sidrahs idea yet, I cant imagine writing something Ive heard and read ALOT. The main reason I'm here is to totally drop some bombs and enforce Jordan's idea. I acutally thought this is possible to do. Oh and I'm sorry im not trying to start the flame war, yet to be sincerely honest, chances are were not gonna make money with this, and 2. Because we most likely wont, lets have fun with this. Lets pull a Sam Raimi(awesomeness) and just go all out enthusiam and have fun, eh? To poke at another comment thats been bothering me, is I dont think (NO OFFENSE) Jon and Lisa should be the Monarchs here on the decision to cut ideas or not. If thats the case, (again realism) were gonna have to comprimise for an idea not everyone likes, and will end up being poorly written or drawen due to the displeasure of losing a cool idea. Considering we have mutiple writers and artists, they should decide wether they want to spend their free time with it. Not to say that none of us will put any of our free time and patience into this( we kinda already have..) and I do respect everyones sincere efforts at this project. sigh.... anyway to Jordan's idea it is a bit cliched,yet as I stated early what isnt? Its just been a bit less cliched than other ideas. This is just my opinon dont be all grrrrr, all right? Peace. Evan D. |
Apr 24, 2009 4:58 PM
#31
Candice: That's actually a pretty good point... Sherri should be a pretty perky and happy person, but she also needs to be realistic. So yeah, being moody sometimes would be good, since it would also lend to some romantic and comedic situations. Jordan: 1. Conflict between corporations: Yes, most definitely. Drawing this out to a nation scale is just too cumbersome. 2. The type of combat we'd be prone to i the future would not be the troop rushes of old, but small, decisive skirmishes. Also, think of the situation like the city states of Renaissance Italy. A lot of the conflicts involved money, and was between maybe one our two city states. Nothing massive, but very decisive. 3. We're keeping it in a city for the same reason we're keeping the conflict to a small scale. The story would just become too cumbersome. Ever watch Legend of the Galactic Heroes? TOO MANY PLACES. Even Code Geass's story became cumbersome. There would be simply too much to cover, too much to consider. As for the feelings you're describing, they will be evident. You got a pilot, Vincent, and his love interest, who is very central in the story, Sherri. 1 + 1 = 2, if you catch my drift. 4: We're trying to make the mecha not so big... and not so prominent. The mecha are really just an addition, sorta like a toner. But the designs of the AC's are good, so if it could be, say, miniaturized, literally and figuratively, then full speed ahead! Evan: Ah no, we're not trying to lord over this entire thing. We're just giving our own ideas, and we're allowing you all to defend yours as well, and attack others, as long as you can make your arguments logical and intelligent. We're really working towards compromise and absorption of other ideas, because honestly, we can't do this ourselves. As for Jordan's idea, I really did put some consideration into, but looking at it, it's less of a plot and more of a scene. IMHO, the mecha shouldn't fly, and let's try to avoid space if possible. We're just rookies at this, and we should try to make something that isn't too complicated and technical. To hit a broad target audience, we need a story that isn't too bogged down, is somewhat fast paced, keeps the reader engaged, but does not go too over the top. Battles are nice, yes, and I promise you, they will be evident, but an all out war is just not easily palatable by the general audience. |
Apr 24, 2009 5:08 PM
#32
Evan: We're not trying to be a monarch, and I really hope you guys are not thinking of us as monarchs. I made really long posts about encouraging people to post and defend their ideas for the sake of me and jon not having too much power. Just because I'm telling people that I'm against their idea doesn't mean I'm trying to control the manga or hurt anyone's feelings. But see, if i'm against someone's idea, then of course i'm gonna speak up because i don't want put so much work on a manga that I don't really like. And I hope they do the same if they're really like their idea. But as I said, if you wanna defend your idea then defend it and we'll come to a compromise. And I'm gonna defend my ideas as well :P Oh and just cuz I'm flooding the boards doesn't mean I have any more power than you guys :P I just have the tendency to write a lots cuz I has a lots of opinions. yay for grammarz And I don't think any of us were planing on doing this for the sake of money but just for fun. When a lot of people are taking it seriously, it's a lot more fun :P I agree with a lot of what you're saying because a lot of things are cliche and have already been done so we're prone to doing something cliche as well. Jordan: Actually, to be honest, I was talking on the phone with Jon and just typed up what he told me. I think, in my position, it's hard to criticize your idea because I feel like you gave more of a scenario rather than a plot. Why are the ARMS suddenly attacking on the beach? Why is there a war? Also, is it just a matter of luck that the two kids just happened to be involved with this entire mess? If so, can you explain what's going to happen to these kids? Will they be involved in the war and out of luck miraculously stop it? This is just so I can understand what you're going after cuz I'm willing to listen, and as you can see, I might just be interpreting what you originally posted the wrong way :/ so if you can explain with more detail it'd help us out a lot Candice: Agreeing with your idea about Sherri, and I'm starting to lean on not making her a perky character cuz I dun want her to look stuck up XD. But other than that, it's pretty much the same thing I had in mind for the character. |
melancholyApr 24, 2009 5:14 PM
Apr 24, 2009 5:56 PM
#33
We can make some of the political and military aspect of the colony or what ever we end up putting this story in, minor or bring it in later so we know the people first. We at least need to show the reader that it is in the future and it has something like a government and a military that has the ability to create giant robots, even if it is not man operated. We can try to start a section off in a training with the ARMS but having the main male character starting off as a pilot already is a bit over used....but I did like the Idea of his childhood being ruined by them. Can we try to make him hate the creators of the ARMS? Even if we don't the ARMS should not be used as much as the pure Mecha....unfortunately... the real James P. |
Apr 24, 2009 6:01 PM
#34
peace love and manga guys . peace love and manga. :) |
Apr 24, 2009 6:05 PM
#35
Portal8229 said: See if you can draw this: http://4.bp.blogspot.com/_qGtGl4NFC8s/Rdmxpkh-q5I/AAAAAAAADIY/iYQm4Chea9M/s1600/armoredcoreor8.jpg hey portal8229 the site you put up i couldnt get. could u repost it plz. |
Apr 24, 2009 6:07 PM
#36
oh my flippan ...pancakes. (wierd replacement i kno) i got the picture and uhh THATS FREKING HARD LOOKING!!! but i think i could sketch it well. the biggest prob for me would be shadowing and places where theres a glare. like the places where the lights hit it and make tht spot white. i can try tho... eventually. :) cool looking tho. |
Apr 24, 2009 7:17 PM
#37
Jordan: Actually, to be honest, I was talking on the phone with Jon and just typed up what he told me. I think, in my position, it's hard to criticize your idea because I feel like you gave more of a scenario rather than a plot. Why are the ARMS suddenly attacking on the beach? Why is there a war? Also, is it just a matter of luck that the two kids just happened to be involved with this entire mess? If so, can you explain what's going to happen to these kids? Will they be involved in the war and out of luck miraculously stop it? This is just so I can understand what you're going after cuz I'm willing to listen, and as you can see, I might just be interpreting what you originally posted the wrong way :/ so if you can explain with more detail it'd help us out a lot. I was running with Sygnus's ideas of plot, and trying to lay out our first "issue" or set of panels. BTW I'm not angry with you or something just trying to raise up my idea. Also I like the plot so far with Vincent, not so certain with Sherri but SN is not my specialty sooo yeah. Also I can handle small battles I just didn't know thats what we were going for, and I mentioned a few times that I COMPLETELY UNDERSTAND NOW NOOOOO SPACE!!!! When I said it looked as though the stars were exploding I was exaggerating my point, of there is a battle in the sky going on. Also if the story isn't about the mechs, 1. Won't people be like ummm where is the MECHA?!!?! Like if we are going to have a serious plot involving the girl Sherri and some mental issues then we should just drop the mech idea entirelly and move on to the Romance and SN, or else the Mecha will just be an unecessarily sore thumb on our project. So if we are going to have small battles and the mechs are on the back burner then we should just toss them out. Lastly: The kids on the beach were Vincent and his best friend, his friend Shen got injured so Vincent was taking him to the testing facility for mecha and weapons because it is basically a base and they would be able to help. That would have also led into the next scene of Vincent worried about his friends thoughout the city and getting ready to go off and fight the attacking nation (now corporation). P.S. "Oh my flippan.....pancakes" LOL Hilarity!! |
Portal8229Apr 24, 2009 7:22 PM
Apr 24, 2009 8:27 PM
#38
Um... Jordan? Sometimes I feel like you misinterpret what I'm saying :/ I still want the mecha, but I want it to be mecha LITE. As in... no chapters with 50 pages of mecha fights and more focus on high school life to keep the mecha very low key. i'm typing up an idea that me and jon discussed for like 3-4 hours. I'm not done typing it yet, but maybe it'll give some clarification to the idea i'm trying to get across |
Apr 24, 2009 8:33 PM
#39
I got what you are saying, do it lite I was saying why bother just pull it out and focus on the main story. It seemed like that "LITE" would be a waste of resources but if you can pull it off than all power to you. Edit- Going to bed will check this in morning. |
Portal8229Apr 24, 2009 8:37 PM
Apr 25, 2009 7:46 AM
#40
Portal8229 said: I got what you are saying, do it lite I was saying why bother just pull it out and focus on the main story. It seemed like that "LITE" would be a waste of resources but if you can pull it off than all power to you. Edit- Going to bed will check this in morning. No, what I've come up with can bring mecha in but the main focus isn't really the mecha Take Code Geass for example. The first season is relatively mecha-lite because they mostly focus on the powers of the Geass and how lelouch mind fucks everyone, rather than all the fights. There aren't mecha fights in every episode of code geass, vs gundam 00 where there's at least ONE mecha fight every episode and the whole focus is the mecha. I just want a manga where the main focus ISN'T mecha... but there is definitely mecha in it. |
Apr 25, 2009 8:29 AM
#41
well i guess she can be sumwat perky but... i mean... well... lets c when sherri was a baby since she had tht power, babies can get frustrated quite easily, think the amount of ppl she killed as a child, which is y i think her dad should b one of those uhhh... watvr u call them ( APEC pilots?) to kill his daughter. she probably kill her mom along with any other relatives. i cant imagine a person who had such a violent pass to b perky n happy..... but then again i guess tht could work. ... i was thinking tht theyre should b more than just 1 person with like powers like tht... maybe like later in the story theyre should b another person like tht with powers... but she (or he) is all moody cuz she never had anyone 2 make her happy b4. (or sumthing like tht... n thts a bit cliche) ... anyway after sherri starts killing ppl as a child her dad wants to kill her off... but her mom saves her so she can run away, but sherri gets angry cuz she thinks her mom is abanding her when actually shes saving her, so she ends up killing her mom as she escapes sumhow. then she ends up in an orphanage n gets adopted to a happy family, met vincent at the orphanage as welll (n yea tht part is really cliche) .. but yea her being perkyish is ok with me! ... ooo-ooo n i want her 2 have 5 toes!!!! (u no how in the future humans will only have 4 toes on each foot cuz the little toe is useless?) n as a child they chopped off her little toes! |
Apr 25, 2009 8:32 AM
#42
i like the way jordan wants to start the story with the idea of helping a friend to a corpetation base cuz he was hurt somehow. and then vincent leaving to go battle. also lisa if we start it that way thn it would be really easy to incorperate the scene you and iwere talking about in theater. u kno the one with sherri going after him andd he leaves. yeah if we decide to use tht scene for the maga instead of the preview/ teaser/ newspaper strip. we definantly need to get an outline going tho and start making final rough draft choices tho. so we have something to present ot everyone else who isnt keeping with the thread. (just wat i think.) |
Apr 25, 2009 8:35 AM
#43
o n for the 4 koma i was gonna use dis for me n amoerry's short manga if we made tht book magazine thing (genshinanigans) its called thin slices of pie its basicailly a slice of life manga n i would just base it off funny stories tht happen to us in realy life. cuz u no i have a bunch of those. n we were gonna just do 4 koma 4 it anyway. |
queenwafflegirlApr 25, 2009 9:35 AM
Apr 25, 2009 8:35 AM
#44
and upon just reading queenwaffelgirl's entry, i think its an ok idea its a good foundation but we could tweak it a lil to make the really cliche parts more original. idk how yet . comment again wen i have an idea. (talking a bout the group manga not 4 koma) |
Apr 25, 2009 8:41 AM
#45
oh and lisa i kno that the idea we talked about in theater isnt finalized or anything but if u want i can start trying to sketch it for you. it would just be an outline. but its w/e. ur choice. :) |
Apr 25, 2009 9:09 AM
#46
Ok, I know you two are both girls and that may have some influence but please try your best to use actual words instead of, "tht" "u" "ur" "dis" "n" "cuz" "no" (instead of know). I'm sorry to be the grammar nazi here but it hurts my brain to have to re-read the stuff you guys are writing. |
Apr 25, 2009 9:15 AM
#47
melancholy said: Portal8229 said: I got what you are saying, do it lite I was saying why bother just pull it out and focus on the main story. It seemed like that "LITE" would be a waste of resources but if you can pull it off than all power to you. Edit- Going to bed will check this in morning. No, what I've come up with can bring mecha in but the main focus isn't really the mecha Take Code Geass for example. The first season is relatively mecha-lite because they mostly focus on the powers of the Geass and how lelouch mind fucks everyone, rather than all the fights. There aren't mecha fights in every episode of code geass, vs gundam 00 where there's at least ONE mecha fight every episode and the whole focus is the mecha. I just want a manga where the main focus ISN'T mecha... but there is definitely mecha in it. Portal8229 starts watching Gundam 00 |
Apr 25, 2009 9:33 AM
#48
alrite the reason y the mecha is lite is becuz didnt we vote rite in the begining tht we would want a shojo instead of shoujen? n the only reason y i dont really like shoujen is tht 2 me fight after fight is boring to me, n in half the mangas tht i read tht have fighting i have no idea wats going on (especially if its by clamp) tht only ppl tht do like the fighting r the ppl who picked shoujen n more ppl picked shojo than shoujen, which is y they r keeping the mecha lite. n plus there r a lot of good animes with a little mecha like code geass or full metal panic....actual i believe tht FMP is a mixture of comedy, mecha, romance, n SN.... n sum semi scary stuff (part where tht chick tht looks like saya from blood+ is gonna assassinate kaname). actually now i wanna rewatch FMP... damn i should finish spiral first.... o n srry thts just the way i type,n i cant change tht. |
Apr 25, 2009 10:18 AM
#49
Sidrah: LAWL i kinda had the same idea for Sherri, but in a different direction. And yeah, the reason that it's mecha lite is cuz majority of us are girls and we kinda wanted a shojo to begin with but I'm cool with adding mecha.And I like totally blank out when big machines are fighting each other cuz i dun really know whats going on @___@ It's cool if there's mecha, but keep it lite likeee Code Geass and FMP just like you said <333. Candice: I think we're gonna have to end up doing a comedy in the Jagwire cuz we have such little space *tears q___q* BUT if people are still up for that idea, what we can do is draw it and print it out, then give it to people for free as a little sample and to advertise our manga~ and you can sketch out what you had in mind cuz i wanna see it :D i'm planning to do a rough sketch to show everyone what i had in mind as well cuz sometimes writing it out in text doesn't seem to cut it XD Brandon: Lawl, agreed ANYWAYS! One night, Jon and Lisa stayed up on the phone until 2 am spending 3-4 hours of just tossing ideas back and forth. Before we knew it, we pretty much had a whole storyline down @___@!!! And we didn't exactly intend to create a storyline XD it sort of just...happened... Of course, this isn't finalized yet XDDD Feel free to add on, or disagree with stuff In order to really understand the depth of the plot, we decided to give an insight of one the character we had in mind. Oh and keep in mind this is just an IDEA. It’s not set stone, we may or may not go with this, and we’re willing to take criticism. Brace yourselves... this was after 3 or 4 hours of coming up with stuff... this ended up being 8 pages on word document :/ Jon and I had 2 protagonists in mind: Sergeant Vincent Clyde and Sherri Eve. Vincent is obviously the male protagonist. He is a secret mecha pilot who attends high school as a regular cheerful 17 year. Sherri Eve is Vincent’s best friend at school. Relationship wise, Vincent and Sherri start off as a comedy duo where their friendship is blantly seen through the jokes they toss at each other. The comedic duo soon develop into something romantic. This whole entire post is about Sherri, and we haven’t come up with much for Vincent yet. Appearance and personality-wise for Vincent, I’m thinking a cross between Morita Shinobu from Honey & Clover and Takizawa Akira from Eden of the East (Best anime of the season, BTW). Wait a sec… the both look exactly the same o_O; And they both act pretty similar, cept Shinobu is more crazy than Akira. But then again, Akira is crazy in his on ways… -CHARACTER: SHERRI EVE- Appearance & Name: We put a lot of thought behind both Sherri’s name and her appearance. We tried to choose a name that wouldn’t make us look like American manga amateurs [names such as Rachel, Sara, Nicole, and Jessica are used SO MUCH in American manga.] We also tried not to use any Japanese names so that we don’t look like wanna-be Japanese [using names like Sakura, Miyuki, Kasumi, and Akira makes us look like we’re trying to be Japanese…]. The name ‘Sherri’ is a good cross between American and Japanese, and it’s not a very common name. It also suits her appearance and personality because it’s a cute name and very pretty when you think about it. Her last name ‘Eve’ was chosen since she's the first human female with her super natural ability [lawl… we’ll get to that], just like Eve was the first female human. No one needs to look that deep though, it's just interesting. Sherri has long, flowy orange hair with a butterfly pin. She’s taller than the average girl, although her face looks pretty young. In my head she’s a cross between Yukino from Kare Kano (the girl with red hair), Saki from Eden of the East, and Risa Koizumi from Lovely Complex [just appearance wise]. Sherri is very ditzy, but knows when to be mature. Jon and I centered a good chunk of the drama around Sherri. Most of the super natural and horror is centered around Sherri, and all of the mecha is centered around Vincent. Oh…PLEASE don’t think the story is all about Sherri after you read all of this. We hav yet to explain Vincent’s story XD; Throughout the story, this will be explained in bits and pieces so please bare with us. It may be long, but IMO it’s relatively easy to follow. I just have the tendency to add lots of detail 8D;; Again, all this background information is going to be explained in the middle of the story in bits and pieces. This is NOT the beginning of the manga, but I’m putting this first for you guys, just for the sake of understanding the story. Here we go… -Background of Sherri – For several decades, an institute called the Military Neurological Development Institute (MiND Institute) invested into the research of implanting knowledge into human brains and making people more intelligent by creating pills, shots, surgery, and the such. This was to be used for y’know…advancement of technology, evolution of humans, having smarter doodz, ya ya… but see, when they attempted this, EVERY person they experimented on died. Lol wut. So wait a minute…why? The researchers understood that the human brain disposes of useless information to make room for more information, yes? But when TOO MUCH information is forced into the brain and won’t be let out, the human brain can’t handle it…then the brain starts to bleed and the person dies. Ew. So as soon as the person takes the pill, or the shot the person IMMEDIATELY dies. Wait a sec…People can die from too much information being forced into their brains? And they die IMMEDIATELY??? This sounds like a good…WEAPON. With that, the MiND institute decided to take all their research and make it a military weapon that could kill people by forcing too much knowledge into the brain, AKA, brain corruption. Wow, how original. So basically, they created more and more shots and pills that would kill people instantly though brain corruption. But wait a sec… you can’t just carry around a brain corruption shot …or a gun or whatever… cuz then people will easily figure out what the weapon is and try to steal it. So what to do, what to do? AHA! In order to easily hide the weapon, they decided to implant the weapon inside a HUMAN. Someone who had the ability to corrupt minds! Cuz you know, humans would be easy to hide within a society and no one would really suspect them as a weapon. This research was top TOP secret. So basically… the MiND wanted create a human weapon that has the ability to corrupt people’s minds upon eye contact. When the enemy makes eye contact with this human weapon, information, knowledge, and complete history, about the world would be crammed into their brain. The enemy begins to scream because it gets to the point where a normal human brain cannot handle the capacity of the overwhelming information. You gotta understand… the ENTIRE history, ALL the philosophies, ALL the events of the WORLD is being crammed into someone’s brain in like…5 seconds. There’s no way a human brain could handle all of that, especially when it’s being forced in. The human brain can only handle so much. Remember, the reason why people can add information into their heads is cuz they dispose of old information to make room for new ones. But that’s not the case. The information is going into the person’s brain SO fast that they don’t even have time to dispose of the information, so everything is just CRAMMED IN. Basically, a mind fuck. The enemy grasps on to their heads for dear life, their eyes are about to fall out, they’re screaming in pain, and BAM, their brains internally bleed… blood comes out from the ears, nose, and maybe the eyes…then person dies. This happens INSTANTLY. This was called Project 24229 See, this kind of transition represents how even the smartest people in the world people can take the advantage of having TOO MUCH KNOWLEDGE …. how they go from wanting to create something good … and how it turns out evil in the end for the sake of power. Of course… MiND needed a human to experiment on and put implants into so they can possess this power. Osmand Eve is one of the scientists who works for the MiND Institute and is the assistant director of Project 24229. He predicted that if a human had the ability to corrupt people’s mind and kill someone instantly though eye contact, that person would be THE most powerful person. Osmand is a VERY power hungry guy, and he wanted to volunteer himself as the experiment thinking he’d be the most powerful man in the world. But see… his status as a scientist was way too high that the risk couldn’t be taken. So instead, he decided to volunteer his newborn daughter as the experiment cuz y’know… giving birth to the most powerful human in the world doesn’t sound so bad. His newborn daughter’s name is no other than Sherri Eve. We thought it’d be interesting Sherri’s mom died a bit after giving birth, so Osmond wants to create the ultimate child as sort of…a “gift” to his dead wife. But this won’t be focused on too much cuz then it’d be cheesy. So for the first 3 years of Sherri’s life, she was stuck in the MiND Institute where she had several surgeries and implants done to her head. She was never addressed with her real name; She was always called ‘Project 24229’. This was to keep her name and identification safe in case anyone tried to steal this information. So the implant is a success, here’s a run down of how Sherri’s mind corruption abilities work…
The Micoma software was developed 15 years before Sherri’s birth. It only took 3 years to implant the Micoma software into Sherri. It took an additional 2 years to test and perfect the system. By the time she was 5 years old, Sherri was let out of the MiND institute with her memory completely erased. This way, Sherri would live and act a normal life and no one would be suspicious that she’s actually a military weapon. And the MiND institute could control Sherri whenever they needed to, and Sherri wouldn’t suspect a thing… she’d just get sick every now and then but she never made a big deal about it. (MiND didn’t use her very often when she was young since she could only go into Micoma Mode for such a short period of time) Ok. So that about covers it … LAWL WTF. EVERYTHING I PUT ABOVE IS JUST A PREREQUISITE TO THE ACTUAL STORY WTF WTF. SO DAMN LONG. And this is only about Sherri lol. Keep in mind that the whole manga isn’t about Sherri. Vincent has a big role too… something that I have yet to explain @_@;; Anyways… -HERE’S WHERE THE REEEAL STORY BEGINS- …dun worry, it’s not as complex as the prerequisite. But of course… you’re ganna have to read everything that was put above to get everything that I’m about to explain lol. At this point, we’re focusing more on high school life rather than all that SciFi junk. Cuz the Scifi stuff will be explained in bits and pieces so we don’t seem like a SciFi mecha manga. That’s actaully the last thing I want…anyways… So Sherri is a 16 year old in high school now. She’s lived a relatively cheerful, happy, and fun life. She’s a very cheerful, ditzy ,and cute person. She acts NOTHING like she has a weapon inside of her and neither does her father. In fact, if there’s one person in the whole world that Sherri loves it’s her father because he cares so much about her (only because soon enough she’ll become the most powerful person in the world…but he tries to cover that up when around Sherri). Sherri has a best friend who she’s known since freshman year. His name is Vincent Clyde. Their relationship doesn’t come off as romantic at first, but very very comedic. They throw jokes at each other, have funny arguments, and just act like best friends. I REALLY want the chemistry between Vincent and Sherri to be strong and apparent fro the VERY first panel of them talking to each other. All they need to do is look at each other, and Vincent looks at Sherri with such subtle passion in his eyes and and and you can TELL that they love each other. THAT’S the kind of relationship I want to see …and of course, obviously these two fall in love But we’ll get to that later. So let’s talk about Vincent for a bit. Me and Jon didn’t go deep on Vincent yet cuz all of last night we just talked about Sherri xDDD OKAAAY~! So Vincent is a prodigy mecha pilot for an organization called the AstrumOrdo (AO). It’s like a big Mecha cooperation. He is the best, the whoop dawg for the AO especially considering the fact that he’s only 17. But wait! Not only is he a mecha pilot, but he has also studied programing and is lieeeek… a genius. Since the beginning of the manga, he as been developing a form of spying micro chips for the AO [no name for the micro chips yet]. These micro chips crawls up the enimey while they are a sleep… then it drills a hole into the brain and steals information DIRECTLY from the brain. Of course, these holes are the size of a bug bite so it’s not like the person wakes up with a giant hole in their head. So this is very useful, eh? This was programed by Vincent all by himself, and he talks about how ambitious he is developing the micro chips. He thinks of it as his best creation ever, and it’ll lauch his status in the AO… cuz he eventually wants to be the Commander of AO, the big ass boss. So he’s creating these micro chips to spy on the AO’s biggest enemy… the MiND Institute. UH OH!!! Ever since these corporations were created, they’ve been sole enemies. Both are military organizations, but the AO focuses more on mecha while the MiND Institute studies on the more on medical stuff. After years of spying, the AO figures out that the MiND Institute was creating SOMETHING that involved implanting knowledge, but they didn’t clearly figure out until like… a few years after Sherri was released from the institute. But even then, they didn’t know it was a human project cuz they Sherri was always addressed as “Project 24229”. It took an additional 3-4 years to figure out it was a mind corruption project and they were experimenting on a human. See, it takes like years to dig up this info cuz the MiND security is like beast… but the AO has some real spying geniuses like Vincent. So after years of researching, the AO FINALLY pin points Sherri’s location. YAY! I mean…wait! NOOO!!! Well.. the AO takes action very slowly. See, at this point, Sherri is 15 years old. They’ve been searching for her a few years before she was even born, so it took a HELL of a long time. So the AO decides to act upon this slowly. So they start by sending off micro chips every day to dig into Sherri’s brain and steal information on how the whole “mind corruption” thing works. And keep in mind, the brain is so fucking complex that they had to dig into her head once a week for a whole year until they finally got a good grasp of how MiCoMa worked. The microchips that are digging into Sherri’s brain … are the ones that Vincent programed. DRAMA!!! Remember... Sherri and Vincent are like srsly in love with each other. But see… Vincent doesn’t have the SLIGHTEST clue that his microchips are being against Sherri. In fact, he never knows what his microchips are being used for. He just makes ‘em and gives it to the AO, then they do whatever the hell they want with it. Of course, the AO tells him bits and pieces and that his micro chips are being used to research on “Project 24229”. Vincent doesn’t really know what that is, but he doesn’t really care. Isn’t it interesting how Vincent was so ambitious and so motivated to make these microchips in such a positive view, but it ends up being such an evil device? AGAIN!!! A project that starts out good but ends up evil!! HAHAHA!!! Anyways, since microchips are being drilled into Sherri’s brain EVERY WEEK, it’s bound to tamper with her brain since it’s artificial and bound to be very fragile. So as she turns 16, she starts to hallucinate and her vision becomes like static on a computer [cuz her eyes are connected to a computer]. And geez…if little microchips crawl around your brain every week, she’s bound to get headaches all the time. She doesn’t make a big deal out of it, but she does begin to question her life a little bit. She starts having thoughts that maybe her life is a TV show being watched by everyone because of all the static that she hears and sees… lawl XDDD she thinks that her life is some kind of horror movie and she’s being haunted by aliens at night… then she beings to think she’s a robot….and she does this in a silly way like like… Sherri: *GASP* Vinny!!! Vincent: …um…yes? Sherri: A thought just occurred me!!!! Vincent: …um… sure? Sherri: Well, you see, I’ve been seeing and hearing all this static… like how you see static sometimes when watching TV right? and I was thinkin maybe… MAYBE…. I’M A ROBOT!!!! >8D Vincent: … *knocks Sherri’s head* … sounds like a robot’s head to me. [ I wanna see Sherri question her life in the COMPLETELY opposite way of what it actually is…just to be realistic and for some comic relief XD]. So she kind of ignores all the static, the hallucinations, and the headaches going on …. until it gets REALLY bad. The MiND institution gets suspicious of Sherri’s behavior and start researching into it. So after researching… -CLIMAX~! I think…- … MiND figures out that the AO figured out about the Mind Corruption junk and now it’s time to take action. MiND decided to start up the Brain Corruption software on Sherri…and their first target is the commanders of AO. Basically, if anyone knew about Sherri’s powers, they had to be killed immediately. So the techies of MiND get on the central computer that controls Sherri when she’s in Micoma mode. LAWL I bet most of you forgot what Micoma mode is. Bah… to review, it’s a temporary state where Sherri’s eyes turn red and she’s being controlled by a computer where she has the ability to mind fuck people. And that’s exactly what she does. Micoma state lasts for 30 minutes so who ever is controlling her on the computer needs to be quick. But really.. she just walks right into the AO loaction place… and then… holy fuck. she kills off a shit load of the security guards in like 2 seconds just by looking them in the eyes. ALL SHE HAS TO DO IS LOOK AT THEM AND THEN ALL THIS BLOOD COMES SQUIRMMING OUT OF THEIR EARS AND EYES!!!!! .…then she waltz right in and kills all the commanders of AO in like 2 seconds. Everyone at the AO is like HOLY SHIT WTF IS UP WIT DIS GURL SHE LIKE JUST KILLED THE COMMANDER!! …cuz most of the people working at AO have no clue about Sherri and her powers… besides the commanders who just got killed.…so everyone is in shock that someone with these kind of powers even exist. They knew about Project 24229 but didn’t think it as a little girl. So with no commander, the only option was to get the fuck in them big ass mecha suits just FUCKIN GET HER. But.. UH OH. one of the pilots in the mechas is… VINCENT!!! He fights from a distance, so he doesn’t really see clearly see her cuz Sherri has different eyes and hair color. Sherri can only stay in her crazy massacre mode for 30 minutes. So 2 minutes before time is up, Sherri’s dad DASHES down in some kind of air craft thing and flies away with Sherri… I dunno, I’ll come up with something better later. But yeah, Sherri and her dad fly away ~~~~ [and ARMS can’t fly, so they’re kind of pissed]. Oh yeah… Sherri’s dad was watching over her from a distance… Ok…so the doodz working at MiND saw the WHOLE THING cuz a computer is attatched the the retna of her eyes… so they can all see everything that Sherri sees. So get this straight…this would be the FIRST time in like 10 years that MiND uses the Micoma Brain corruption… so they never really saw her use it in REAL combat. Sherri wasn’t physically ready for it before, and it took awhile for the software to settle into her brain. So the whole time, everyone working at MiND is like… HO-LEEE – SHIT. WHAT THE FUCK WE CREATED THAT THING!?!?! Sherri’s power hungry father, Osmond, has a copy of everything that was recorded through Sherri’s eyes. He’s sitting in a dark room with no light but the computer, is replaying everyting that was recorded. Hehas the most ridiulously huge, evil grin on his face… his eyes opened wide as if he was about to cry with tears of joy, enjoying all the killing that his daughter just did. His dream just came true: His daughter is clearly the most powerful person of earth, and he feels he has fufilled the wish of his dead wife. Osmond goes up to the head of the MiND institute and says “I NEED TO SEE IT AGAIN. MY DAUGHTER. KILLING!! I NEED TO SEE IT!!!” and then the head is all like “but dood, she can only be in the Micoma state once a month or else you’ll corrupt the software, chillax.” Then the fater’s all like “BAWWW I DUN CARE I NEED TO SEE IT”. So at some point, he just pushes everyone to the side and enters the code to activate the Micoma mode… during this time, Sherri’s at the mall… and she starts killing everyone that she’s commanded to kill q___q;;; all the innocent people dieddd… So let’s get back on Sherri and what she’s going through...not only are the mind chips crawling around her brain and giving her all these headaches, but now MiND wants to fuck around with her brain corruption abilities. So she’s getting pulled on many strings here…. But still manages to pull a smile on her face when she’s at school. Vincent is talking to Sherri at school, but Sherri seems to be out of it even though she’s smiling. She’s one of those girls who doesn’t want people to worry about that, but then Vincent grabs her shoulders and whimpers/yells “Sherri… PLEASE tell me what’s wrong. I don’t want to seem like someone you need to hide from.” In class, Vincent sits a few seats behind Sherri and notices that she’s physically tired. All of a sudden, she falls of her chair and Vincent goes rushing to her. She fainted. He takes her to the nurses office to rest and stays there the whole time. By the time school ends, Sherri finally wakes up but can’t move her body. Sherri’s dad is out of contact, so Vincent carries Sherri home cuz it’s not that far away. Once Sherri is in bed, the two of them chat for a while and Vincent decides to stay for the night since her father is still at work, and he lives by himself. Their conversation is pretty romantic, this whole scene brings the two of them closer together. When Sherri finally falls asleep, Vincent is holding her hand and is smiling at her sleeping face. He decides to go to sleep as well. But his sleep is interrupted when he feels something crawling above his arm. He wakes up and wonders what it was, then he sees something glowing red across Sherri’s bed. He grabs it… and GASP. It’s one of the nano chips he made! Then he’s like… “…wtf is this doing here… WAIT A SEC.” He digs though Sherri’s hair cuz he knows that nano chips dig through the hair, not through the forehead, otherwise it’s too obvious… He finds a LOT of “bug bites” from the nano chips. This is when he realizes that Sherri is Project 24229 and I’ll explain how he knows later cuz it’s long ~__~;; Then Vincent hears a door opening… and it’s Sherri’s dad… holding a gun. Sherri’s dad knows that Vincent works for the AO and so he thought Vincent was there to steal Sherri. Vincent doesn’t know that Sherri’s dad works for MiND, so he’s like rly confused. And he’s about to be shot with by the gun. Then from here… I haven’t really come up with anything. And my hands hurt from typing q___q;; But basically after this, Sherri figures out that her dearest father is actually using her to kill off people, and the person that she loves is working against her the whole entire time. She feels like she can’t trust anybody because the 2 closest people in her life have been against her. After this, our ideas are kinda mushy and haven't been strung together yet... but hey we came up with a lot as it is. LAWL. thanks to people who took the time to read this xDDD [/spoile |
melancholyApr 25, 2009 11:07 AM
Apr 25, 2009 11:28 AM
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I HAZ IDEA!!!! For the flashbacks we could do history references, so like in her dreams we see random ass historical events happening, like ummm 9/11 or WWII stuff like that. Also about the mind rape, ummmm recorded human history is roughly 5,000 years,(http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Ancient_history) and that can fit into the human mind believe it or not, "The human brain contains about 50 billion to 200 billion neurons (nobody knows how many for sure), each of which interfaces with 1,000 to 100,000 other neurons through 100 trillion (10 14) to 10 quadrillion (10 16) synaptic junctions. Each synapse possesses a variable firing threshold which is reduced as the neuron is repeatedly activated. If we assume that the firing threshold at each synapse can assume 256 distinguishable levels, and if we suppose that there are 20,000 shared synapses per neuron (10,000 per neuron), then the total information storage capacity of the synapses in the cortex would be of the order of 500 to 1,000 terabytes. (Of course, if the brain's storage of information takes place at a molecular level, then I would be afraid to hazard a guess regarding how many bytes can be stored in the brain.) Over the course of a species-averaged 30-year lifespan, with 15 waking hours per day, this rounds to about 150MB of memory per lifetime. That means that a 30-year old human would be able to make approximately 1,200,000,000 binary distinctions based on memories until their ability to make distinctions based on memory reaches breaking point. Consider that a typical courtroom hearing probably extracts no more than a few thousand bits (perhaps a KB at most) from witnesses based on testimony. Using that as a reference, this number seems reasonable, if not a bit high. The estimate also assumes that people are exposed to novel information content every second of their waking lives. Of course, some prodigies, such as Daniel Tammet, probably are capable of retaining significantly more information than 2 bits per second, but this is a unusual case. Given that approximately 107 billion people have ever lived on this planet (”people” meaning members of the species Homo sapiens since 50,000 BC), we can derive a rough estimate of the total information content of our species’ entire memory, present and past: 1.07 x 10 x 1.5 x 10 bytes = 1.6 x 10 bytes. This works out to approximately 10 terabytes, around 20 times the information generated by the entire Internet in 2002. All of which can fit on the human brain, so technically speaking you could in theory know absolutely everything in human history. |
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