Anyone Interested In Becoming My Editor

Mitenmujin said:
I am currently writing somewhat of an OEL Light Novel, which has basically been in development for two (maybe even three) years, but I'm thankfully getting more and more on track and am satisfied in where the project is going right now. The job description is simple just try to catch any grammar errors myself or my spellcheck missed (heck I'm using a small sample for a project and my English teacher pointed out how "Prologue" was misspelled and it didn't even so much as underline it.) and provide constructive feedback. So what's the story?

We essentially start out with a (painfully) average Harem plot. Takuhiko Koizumi is a teenage otaku obsessed with all things Moe, but is forced to rethink his life upon his high school debut when his mother (who is a mangaka so you know his life is depressing) tells him to be more social. With the Harem escalating when he meets a girl at a train station named Sachiko Kashima that seems emotionless and creepy, but she actually starts becoming a large focus in Takuhikos' life...maybe even too much. There's also

* America Freeman: A Weeaboo obsessed with all things "kawaii"
* Ikue Takamori: A super shy glasses girl that seems to be good at every school subject
* Tsubaki Tsukino: A recently "graduated" idol that turns out to be extremely bitter despite her cutesy persona
* Satoru Kashima: Sachiko's brother who may or may not be suffering from Chunibyou
* Shizuka Nagisa: A cosplayer so cute she can't possibly be an actual girl
* Miyuki Santa: Their homeroom teacher that sweats she sees Takuhiko as the little brother she never had!

Seems cliched, right? IWell the thing is, it's not necessarily played straight, it's kind of a deconstruction. Not School Days dark (if it's even the intention) , but it basically takes common Harem and Moe archetypes and shows the dark side of it.

Its kind of like WataMote meets The World God Only Knows meets BoJack Horseman (surprisingly not Evangelion, but again it's not THAT dark).

However, I still worry that there's still some problems like with the grammar and the fear that I'm making too many references and lampshadings. Just wanted to hear some thoughts or if anyone was interested in my idea.