Jan 22, 2024
The story really didn't know what it wanted to be. On one hand, there's a drama and slice of life thing involving dance lessons, and on the other, there's lots of ecchi fanservice, with nipples in plain view. The story went well out of its way to separate the two from each other, despite their proximity. FMC is aroused by watching a second girl dancing. Instead of using that to have FMC get grabby during the private dance lessons, we get her having irrelevant fantasies at home. The story even lampshades this later on when a third girl assumes "private dance lessons" is code for
...
something.
If the story wanted to be a horny, fanservice title, the dance lessons should have been an opportunity for the stated into-girls FMC to get handsy with the other one(s). If it wanted a more serious slice of life dance thing, it shouldn't stop the story every couple of pages to flash us, to have us watch them masturbate, lick each other, or sniff each others' panties.
Neither of the two stories is bad, per se, but then on top of that you can really sense the author throwing in everything and the kitchen sink, with plot threat after plot thread that quickly goes nowhere, as if all the author had in mind is there would be dancing, and then naked kids doing naked stuff, and then realized there were 15 more pages to fill.
Reviewer’s Rating: 6
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