 Do you guys see any problem in this drawing of mine? I need help from others to see any anatomical problems I didn't notice. |
SchwarzitgiestAug 19, 2014 12:38 AM
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| Please change the topic name into something else. The most people gonna ignore this because of the name. I need help with this? what is "this": picture, art, app, profile, css, accounts, photoshop, anime creating, music or website help. |
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| No real glaring issues, but the more I look at it, the more unnatural I think the neck would look without the hair. The neck should be portioned a bit thicker, and maybe a little lower. And this is just me nitpicking, but the shoulder shouldn't be as rounded as the way you drew them. |
| The neck is slightly too long. Add more definition to the shoulders. The collarbones should extend into round points on the shoulders instead of just hanging out in the upper middle of the chest. I like the way you did the hair. It looks like it could use a little more value, but I think that's mostly just because of the photo lighting. |
 I need criticism once more. |
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| This isn't referenced, is it? Because if it's reffed, anyone critiquing the anatomy or whatever isn't critiquing your knowledge of anatomy/forms/style etc; they're critiquing the original artist's. Otherwise, I dunno it looks a little flat so you could try making it look a little better by paying closer attention to the forms. |
| Well it was partially referenced. Only the face though which I think is fine. The body is where I need help with. So I need some critique with that. |
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| Nice boobs, 10/10 |
Kyouraku-san said: Should they be bigger I wonder?Nice boobs, 10/10 |
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Schwarzitgiest said: Kyouraku-san said: Should they be bigger I wonder?Nice boobs, 10/10 No, they are perfect right now imo. |
| Clean up the line work and smooth out the values. The hair could also use some more contrast. |
 Anything else people before I move on to my next work? |
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| Too chicken scratchy, have more confident in your lines. Also, excuse my lack of knowledge in boob physics but is that suppose to be a nipple?  |
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cubepusher said: Do you know how to fix the boob problem then?Boobs look kinda weird, like they're in motion. The elbow on the arm is way too far down for the position, remember that in order to have that pose the arm coming across the body won't be to the side it will be slightly forward from the shoulder which would move the elbow higher. Also her left shoulder (on the right of the page) looks very large for her build. Some hint of definition of the form of the shoulder would actually go a long way here, remember it's a joint with bundles of connective tissue it's not continuous with the arm itself. Also @FriedIceCream that was mistake I forgot to erase. |
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| proportions are slightly off and the pencil strokes aren't in harmony. needs more improvement in putting shadows. you need to make it more lively through adding lighter (you can use eraser on this part) and even darker tones. avoid using double strokes on those lines when sketching since it looks messy. also try to smudge since you are sketching. |
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| after everything that's been said (and fixed) i think it looks great, and I'm not much of an expert but i think the arms are too thick, and the top of the boobs (connecting point i guess) start a bit too high --especially the audience left side |
Mashiro-Yuki said: Couple of hours or so.I think it looks pretty good, except for maybe the lines are kinda sketchy? Obviously this is a pencil drawing, so that's not super weird, but you might think about inking it next, and making it look cleaner. Unless that's just your style. Personally, I think it's kinda cool when things still look sketchy. It gives it a bit of personality when it's done on purpose. Clean art looks good, but sometimes when it's messier it helps to convey a more grunge-like feel. When I write stories that take place in darker settings, I tend to avoid cleaning up my artwork. Everyone made some good points here, but most of those things are easy to overlook by anyone who isn't an artist. May I ask how long this took? (If it hasn't already been asked. I didn't see anyone ask it.) |
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| For an anime/manga style girl, her torso: head ration is off. I think her torso is too big, the cleavage and angle/shape of the right breast is off, and maybe that piece of hair on the far left could be a bit thinner. |
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Mashiro-Yuki said: I would if I knew how to ink effectively.Schwarzitgiest said: Couple of hours or so. Not bad at all. Any plans of inking? |
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| Do you know how then? Or at least any guide on how? |
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| Hmmm I wonder how much a G-Pen costs... |
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| The neck is the only thing that bothers me, and the bra shape. It's pretty nice. |
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| If you want something easier, you could just use a micron. Of course it's more for linework, and you will always get the best results with something like a G-pen, but for ease and a beginner, it works well enough. |
Thank you all but I think it's time I tried something new but I'll take your ideas to heart. Maybe I'll draw something like this. |
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| Hmmmmmm......I can't really think of casual poses. Maybe drinking coffee or taking a walk will suffice. |
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Mashiro-Yuki said: Can ya think of any casual poses though? I really can't think of anything right now.I like floating poses. They're fun to draw with long-haired girls, because you don't have to worry about gravity, and you can let everything float. It's really graceful and cute. |
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| the neck is to long..or the face is to small(but the face is really well drawn) or maybe it just the body who is big compared to the face |
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