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| You know, I can't imagine those zombies even being able to slow down that particular piece of ass. On the other hand, I'd like to see her have them all souped-up with futa upgrades for the punishment Tony so richly deserves. Who knew you hooked up with a bandit princess? =) beast_regards said: I was about to make witty comment about content of this story, but I won't and ... you killed Tabitha, you bastard! So then where is the body? =P |
| No spoilers in regards to either comment :P As for the bandit princess comment: Chapter 10: Following your own path ....Nadia on the other hand, was more forthcoming. She is the daughter of the chief of her village, to which Scarlett started teasingly calling her princess whenever possible... Nadia was forthcoming, just not completely honest :P |
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| Oho, great ending to this chapter! Turns out Nadia's family is rather important. greatgreenman said: Nadia was forthcoming Nono, with Scarlet Nadia came first. };) |
| "When you have bought your own load of hooey, you know exactly what it is worth." -- Bruce Sterling |
| *face palm* lol |
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| what? |
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| I've posted the character charts on the first page :) Thank you Chime for the awesome job ^^ |
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| Chapter 34: Pockets full of sand WIP |
New_User_12345Dec 10, 2016 11:27 AM
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| Most popular decoration is Charrise :-) Forgotten One should be remembered! |
| Signature removed. It was too good for this cruel world. |
| Bandits... I wonder how many refugees suffer and thirst for want of some quality time with a gentleman. |
| Dal Shafar :3 |
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| I am not satisfied, I demand the next chapter now. Reason? Because I'm a spoiled little brat who always gets what he wants. |
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| What was unsatisfying? That she's still not received the shaft lol? |
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| No.... well yes, but that's beside the point. I'm just a selfish, greedy, bastard who wants more stuff I like. So gimme the stuff I like dammit!! >XO |
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| hmm okay I'll start writing... TOMORROW @W@ MWUAHAHAHAHA |
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| >.< fine *goes to finish kami's story* |
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| I'll be posting again soon...though that won't do you much good as it's a direct sequel *evil laughs* But yeah...GG, you need to step it up on production at least half a notch. You don't want people forgetting that this is good stuff and all =) |
| don't worry your next, though i think ima finish my Gray Garden's arc first |
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| Yeah I know.. Though I've started writing other things so i don't get bored of writing, it actually helps me keep up the enthusiasm for writing this story. I have the ending all set up, and most of the details leading up to it, its just a matter of filling it all in lol |
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| Wow. This is a really good chapter. Not just because of the reference to my story (which I of course enjoyed), but for how the war was worked in so smoothly. And I am loving the idea of the Dal Shafar. |
| "When you have bought your own load of hooey, you know exactly what it is worth." -- Bruce Sterling |
| I couldn't think of any other ancient scene worth seeing :P, I just wish I could have done it more justice, my ability to describe visually stunning events is still lacking. |
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| Chapter 35: A maiden’s woes WIP |
New_User_12345Dec 10, 2016 11:27 AM
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| 6 months?! I might already be on to the last part of my trilogy by then =P My hatred of that bastard has reached the point of full saturation, by the way. There is literally nothing he could do to make me hate him more. Even the most depraved NTR orgy with your friends and family wouldn't do it. Now, though, death seems way too gentle. At least there's someone out there now that wants him to pay almost as much =) |
| You do a good job at portraying personality green. Usually I'm ok with the death penalty for fictional characters. Realistically I disagree with it, I believe the most heinous of criminals should be kept alive allowed to wilt away in an soft, white, fully lit, isolated room with no more outside interaction than the bare absolute needed to keep them alive. Don't end the suffering through death, force them to live out their lives in endless boredom. Put Tony in a straight jacket and throw him in the room. |
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| Oh if only you knew the fate in store! Only Kami knows the truth! and I've sealed him away in a concrete box!! Mwuahahaha! |
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greatgreenman said: Oh if only you knew the fate in store! Only Kami knows the truth! and I've sealed him away in a concrete box!! Mwuahahaha! WHY?! make him write a 2nd story XT |
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| Find the key alice |
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| Chapter 36: A mother's interest WIP |
New_User_12345Dec 10, 2016 11:26 AM
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| Well I hoped to post more before I left but I ran out of time, see you guys in three months. Thanks for all the feedback up until now, I'm going to miss you all. I'll be back before you know it :P |
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| It's upsetting that this won't be updated for another 3 months. Good luck out there Greeny. |
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greatgreenman said: ”So what's the story on these markings on the walls?” I ask as we pass by a few interesting images. ”They hold the history of the island, there are many temples like this one across the island. They each hold a fragment of it's history, though everyone sees a different image etched into it's walls, a magic that has unfortunately been lost to the ages.” Nice! This adds a whole 'nother layer of meaning to the shrine network! |
| "When you have bought your own load of hooey, you know exactly what it is worth." -- Bruce Sterling |
| Your temple is getting a lot of attention lately, but you MIGHT be getting another visitor later. Not certain yet, but when I come back I'll let you now :P. But yeah I have some fairly large plans the connect a lot of the stories (in reference mostly) to the history of the island. Since many of us don't actually interact in our stories, and this will be shifting towards collab, I plan to use that for an interesting plot device. |
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| Sucks that you'll be gone. I'm thinking about doubling my chapter length and posting frequency while you're gone as a passive-aggressive attempt at pouting =P Anyway, the shrine revelation is pretty cool. If they show the history of the island, that could explain why the initial description included a lot of sexual themes (if I remember correctly). I wonder what sort of other things it might reveal... |
| Chapter 37: Poison for poison WIP |
New_User_12345Dec 10, 2016 11:26 AM
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| 2 months later huh? You see, this is the result of you not manning up and just helping poor Scarlet. Glad to have you back. Few grammar errors. Think your slipping since I can't recall ever seeing any before your service. |
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| eh it happens, feel free to point them out to me (in PM so it doesn't clog the posts) and I'll make the corrections. Though this one I figured I would have a few mistakes because I changed the perspective tense, where normally I wrote in present tense, this was mostly in past tense (though some phrasing sounded strange in past tense so I may have ultimately left a few things grammatically incorrect for the sake of my own hubris which is my regional way of speaking lol). Again, just let me know :P (I'm not a pro, but I still appreciate feedback.) Thanks for reading and glad you're still around Clar ^^ |
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| you cant rid of me no matter what :P, if i remember to check i'll see if i can find them again when i get back from construction work later, for now i want try get some sleep beforehand looking forward to your next chapter (and hope your still reading mine :3) |
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| Ah, I love the whole flash-forward thing. It's like saying, "You done fucked up...let's see how!" |
| I am certain we will soon find out that everything was different that it originally seemed. This story began as a mindfuck and will end as mindfuck. |
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| @clar: yup still do :3 @em: I thought it only made sense to start off roughly the same amount of time ive been gone (nobody else stopped writing so its not like time time for my peeps) and 2 months is plenty of time for me to get into all kinds of trouble :P @beast: dont worry, I always wear protection b4 I mind f*ck you ;) |
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greatgreenman said: dont worry, I always wear protection b4 I mind f*ck you ;) Take responsibility, baka! |
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| Ya know, I would buttt ive got this meeting... with some people. And I have a long business trip soo... *runs off* Oh and I pawned off your keys to the loli kingdom |
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greatgreenman said: Oh and I pawned off your keys to the loli kingdom Don't worry. I got spare. |
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| Chapter 38: Relief WIP |
New_User_12345Dec 10, 2016 11:25 AM
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| WOOO he's still alive! great chapter but there seems to be a thing with male nudity around this chapter... even better lol great to have you back green |
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| Don Salieri is back. For a while I wondered if you had another split personality experience. Is there going to be transformation sequence for you too? I wonder if you get dog ears in the process. I hope you do, result could be greatest crossover between Inuyasha, Inception, American werewolf and Mafia done so far. |
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| shhh your wives mustn't know |
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| He's "sort of" a pharmacist, no? Looks like there's going to be all sorts of party going on here soon... |
| Chapter 39: When the (wedding) bell tolls WIP |
New_User_12345Dec 10, 2016 11:25 AM
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