May 2, 2023
Well I don't often feel compelled to write reviews that aren't positive, but this one takes the cake.
This is yaoi, and as us fans know, the yaoi scene is filled with foal play, abuse, rape, and worse. However this time I feel like the poor writing as if straight out of a fangirl's wet dream takes the cake. Let's do a little dive into why.
Story & Characters - 4 - I should have known this wouldn't be much of a good story when it starts off with a guy groping another man's crotch out in public while looking at the man's father and
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making jokes. Red flag number 1. While it's not completely hopeless, I would say there's not much you could do to salvage the broken design for a story of parental figures being extremely irresponsible and sexualizing a minor. One of the main characters was the step father for this kid for 3 years and they fell in love with each other, and this spurs on the new lover who's entered the scene to almost provoke the child to react and vice versa. It's like watching a tug of war game and no one is stopping it to say "this isn't right, how about we DON'T talk about having sex with the 16 year old?"
At one point the ex-father gets pulled aside by his step-son and they end up making out. The new boyfriend in the situation notices, calmly lets it slide and does nothing. (Author, just a heads up most sane folks who immediately put up red flags and at least berate the ex-father for allowing/continuing this behavior.)
The continuous behavior of the two older men constantly trying to get frisky with each other (because they apparently can't keep it in their pants for 3 days while the son is over) is beyond confusing. This could have been written better.
I believe this story was just a way for the author to display their NTR and incest fetish at this point. And look, I ain't judging anyone here because I think most of us can admit to looking at some interesting themes for our porn, but this excuse of a story is so bad that even the minute pornographic parts aren't interesting in the slightest.
Art & Design - 5. Average across the board. Nothing interesting to note.
Overall - 4 Bad and not work the time to read. I felt more confused and annoyed than even just "meh" or "okay".
Anyways, happy reading as always!
Reviewer’s Rating: 4
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