Mar 7, 2024
This was just okay. There really wasn't anything special about because it was only three chapters long. It would have helped if the story was a lot longer - like maybe ten or twenty chapters long. I was hoping for something like "The Blue Lagoon" meets "Tarzan". It would have been nice to see much more of Lou and Asha's childhood and friendship that developed into natural love as they grew up. Heck, that's probably where the twenty chapters could have helped; the first ten chapters could focus on them during their child and adolescent years, and the other ten focusing about them during their
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young adults years. I was also a little confused when I learned that Lou was light-skinned when he was a kid, but got a much tanner complection when he grew up - Asha's father was also tan-skinned. I guess it would have been better if all the males were tan, while all the women were light. And because it's very short, it is quite limited with the erotic and lewd escapades. I will say the that the art style was quite beautiful. Anyway, the story should have been longer to help with character development and world building. I don't know if other people will like it, but I suppose they should at least give it a chance.
Reviewer’s Rating: 6
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