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#1
Feb 21, 2012 5:17 AM

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i know some of you really hate reading reviews but pls help me see this through and see if my review of gintama is any good
http://myanimelist.net/profile/AfiqHamizan/reviews

Thank you
 
#2
Mar 9, 2012 6:00 AM

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Use capital letters for 'i'.
Have consistent spacing.
Elaborate more for the Art part.
 
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Mar 29, 2012 9:16 PM

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sorry for late reply but i normally use this 'i' when i type i hope that this doesn't ruin you're reading experience and why would you care about spacing? never mind that... but the art is perfect with the new graphics Gintama' is the best, yet...
 
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Sep 7, 2012 11:53 PM

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What he means is you wrote.

The story follows the some basic plot and story line which is Heavy,heartfelt,groundbreaking,thrilling of disastrous proportions

This is proper grammar, so is having capital I's when it is alone like I or I'm. It affects how you read it so it's something that you should try to get right. It's hard to try and decipher everything as I read.

The story follows the some basic plot and story line which is Heavy,_heartfelt,_groundbreaking,_and_thrilling of disastrous proportions

And yeah you do need to elaborate more on the art and not make weird comments about 5 girls sitting on your seat. You actually need to elaborate on a lot more stuff than just the art, in every section you have 1 to 2 sentences except for the character section. Your art section is only one too long sentence. Your character section only covered 3 characters and had a non clickable link that you didn't even need because the definition of Madao isn't something crucial to the anime.

You gave everything a 10, and put a whole lot of your personal opinion in everything. Of course opinion is expected but it's not backed up by anything, you just say that everything is the best and put your personal stories in each really short section.
 
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