| Use capital letters for 'i'. Have consistent spacing. Elaborate more for the Art part. |
| What he means is you wrote. The story follows the some basic plot and story line which is Heavy,heartfelt,groundbreaking,thrilling of disastrous proportions This is proper grammar, so is having capital I's when it is alone like I or I'm. It affects how you read it so it's something that you should try to get right. It's hard to try and decipher everything as I read. The story follows the some basic plot and story line which is Heavy,_heartfelt,_groundbreaking,_and_thrilling of disastrous proportions And yeah you do need to elaborate more on the art and not make weird comments about 5 girls sitting on your seat. You actually need to elaborate on a lot more stuff than just the art, in every section you have 1 to 2 sentences except for the character section. Your art section is only one too long sentence. Your character section only covered 3 characters and had a non clickable link that you didn't even need because the definition of Madao isn't something crucial to the anime. You gave everything a 10, and put a whole lot of your personal opinion in everything. Of course opinion is expected but it's not backed up by anything, you just say that everything is the best and put your personal stories in each really short section. |
     Short of the day: Monotonous Purgatory(MAL) ✰Public Domain Club | One Piece Club✰ |
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