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Jul 22, 2014 1:58 PM
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| Chapter I Slice of Life! I can't believe at how much my life has changed in the last few years. I mean, before the government revealed, "their," kind, I was just pretty much your typical average joe. Having a ton of friends, coming from a good family, graduating from high school as a 3 time district champion and regional champion in high school sports, (2 time district champ in baseball, and Big 8 Conference, district, and regional champ in football), as well as with the Most Improved Senior Award. Becoming a college boy and graduating with a Bachelor's in Criminal Justice. Working as an assemblymen at one of the top Inc. factories in the world, and readying myself for the Police Training Academy to achieve my lifetime goal of becoming a man of the law, but that all ended up changing, and actually; probably for the better I might add. You know how the old saying goes that we're not alone in the universe? Well, technically; I guess you could go out on a stretch and say that the rumors were true, since the government decided to reveal to the world that there was actually another group of species living among us, hidden from the public eyes. I knew that the government had its own share of secrets, but this took secrecy to a whole new level. I mean, why reveal their kind now? Anyway; after the government had finally revealed their kind to us called; Mamono, or simply known as; Monster Girls since their all female and have the form of a monster or ancient creature, they decided to launch the IEP (Interspecies Exchange Program). Kind of like a foreign exchange program if you will, I'm sure you get the idea. It became a huge success and was launched worldwide and continues to be a huge success today. Yeah, from what I've read and heard, there's been a few bad apples here and there but overall; a success. I at first had no interest in it since I had a big future set for myself, but that all ended up changing thanks to a certain friend of mine who sorta decided to go behind my back and push me under the bus technically; and have me live with these beauties. Though it did end up taking my life in a 180, I honestly; don't regret it one bit. "What the hell were you thinking, Jordon? What, you just decided to get rid of me and push me under the bus?" "Come now, Moose! You're being paranoid, you know damn well that I would never do that. I simply made a suggestion and it ended up going the wrong way." "Uh huh, sure! If you wanted to see me in this little program, all you had to do was ask. Why didn't you just participate yourself instead of dragging me into this? You know I had a future set for myself." "I know, Moose, I know, but think of it this way. At least you'll finally; be living with a woman and not with your parents all this time now, and you damn know why I didn't participate. I've got my own woman to be with." As much as I hated to admit it, he did have a point. I actually was getting tired of living with my parents all the time and did really want to get out on my own. My grandfather after all did offer me a good piece of land on his farm back here by the woods and my grandmother dug out my dad's old blueprints of a ranch house that he designed back in his days of high school and the government was happy to build it for me as my own home. "Yeah, you do have a point there. Just pray tell that whatever kind of mamono that gets assigned to live with me, doesn't try to eat me." "Hahaha! Don't worry; Moose! I'm sure that they won't try and do that to ya." "Yeah, well I gotta go bro. It's about time for me to do my rant." "Awesome! Tear 'em a new one today Moose." "Will do! Later man!" "Later!" I hung up my cell phone and made my way to my computer room. The ranch house that my dad designed was pretty damn impressive. Despite the fact that the government had to make a few modifications to it to make it suitable for my lady who would be arriving soon. They changed it into a four bedroom with two huge bathrooms, and I mean freaking huge. A grand living and dining room, and huge kitchen. A study, and my own personal computer room where I could do my rants and review videos, and the downstairs was home to a fantastic gym so that I could workout and practice my martial arts of taekwondo. I got on my computer and started browsing the net of what I could rant on. My personal favorite that I loved ranting against was Westboro. Those guys were so misguided that it was freaking funny making fun of them. However; despite doing all that, I could never had been ready for what they were picketing today. "Wh....wha....what is this? What am I reading this time?" I carefully read the article and it turned out that they were now protesting against the IEP saying that it was an abomination for humans and mamono to live among each other and that the mamono themselves were an abomination and that they were the devil's offspring and this fulled a lot of hatred and anger in me. "ARE YOU.....ARE YOU FUCKING SERIOUS??? Nah, ok! Nah, oh!" (Knocks off glass and shatters on the floor. Launches himself out of his chair and falls on the floor. Goes to get ready for the rant and yells in the distance). "God damn cult, fucking bullshit." (Takes a minute to get ready, here it comes) "You know what I've had enough of Westboro. Is your fucking bullshit, that's what I've had enough of. Protesting against the mamono, you dun fucked it up, ya dun fucked up protesting against the mamono you wanna know why? Oh, to increase your bottom line right? Oh, are these people human, no. Just because you like targeting people who are different and live outside your cult? Yes! Well guess why that is, is because I'm sure the government kindly asked you to not target these people since they're now trying to live among us in peace, because I know for dadgun fact that the government wouldn't allow something like this, despite the 1st Amendment. Let me show you something, do you see this on my screen? Do you see this shit here? Oh, this shit here? This shit is unacceptable. Yeah, sure ok, yeah you protest against the military saying that the soldiers who have died for their country and loved ones in the war saying that they are in hell. Yeah, I get that, freedom of speech that's cool, but when you do it against everyone, now including the mamono every fucking day. Wh.....what day is today anyway? I don't even know because I'm all messed up right now. I just launched my community last week, my house just got finished the other day, and I'm patiently waiting for my IEP lady to get here. Oh yeah, that's right, I too an now participating in the IEP program, so chew on that and come out here and protest at my house if you've got the balls to which I damn well know you don't. You know, I was raised in a way where we treat others with respect, and that we don't judge them by the way they look or for who or what they are, nor do we judge them of their backgrounds, and I sure know damn well that no matter what my IEP partner looks like, I'm not gonna judge her. Yeah, it might take me a minute for it to sink in of what she is, but I'm not gonna judge her, and also Westboro, let me give you one piece of advice. If you've got nothing nice to say about someone, then don't say anything at all. Think about that!" I launched my video onto youtube and then sat back into my chair just to regain my composure since it was rants like those that were capable of taking a lot out of me. I was about to go and watch some tv when I heard a horn outside. "Ah! She's here!" I went to the door and saw that a 2014 red Ford Mustang had pulled up into my driveway. In the divers seat was a young dark brown haired woman in a suit and was wearing sunglasses. It was faint, but I could also see someone in the back seat of the car. The driver stepped out of the car and revealed herself. "Ah; Mr. Marshall Burlew, I'd assume?" "Yes, that's right, and who might you be?" "Lora Ryan, and your co-ordinator." "In other words, my supervisor. How quaint!" "Exactly; I will be keeping an eye on you and your IEP partner. May I present to you, Nefertari Aysel." She then made her way to the back passenger side and opened the door. When the lady came out my jaw dropped because I couldn't believe at how beautiful she was. She had long black hair that extended all the way down to her ass. She wore a long black dress and wore a lot of silver jewelry and was in high heels. The one weird fact about her was that while her beautiful eyes had a beautiful golden glow in them, the pupil was slit like a snake, and to top all that off, she appeared quite human. I then remembered that some mamono either had similar human characteristics, or could disguise themselves as humans. When she stepped out of the car and took notice of me, not only did she blush but approached me in such a gracious manner. When she came up to me, she put her hand on my chest and stared into my eyes, and when she spoke, her voice almost made me feel that I had ascended to heaven. "So, you are the handsome, devilish man that I'll be staying with. Marshall, is it not?" "Ye....ye...yes, that's right, and Nefertari, is it?" "Correct, and I look forward to spending my time with you, handsome." "Well, it looks like you two are getting along right off the bat, but Nefertari, you do remember the rules right?" "Ah! Yes, I do Lora, but he's so handsome though." "Yes, he is, but you must wait though. After all, you have just met." I wasn't too sure at what she met, but I had a pretty good idea as to what she was talking about. Anyway; I let the ladies in as Lora took Nefertari's baggage to her room, while Nefertari made her way to the sofa and took off her heels. Lora then came back to the living room. "I must admit, I'm impressed Marshall. To think that your dad designed this back in the day, it's quite a sight." "Thanks, it's an unique design." "Indeed! Well, I gotta get going. I gotta take a few other ladies to their houses before the day is out. Here's my card in case you need anything." I took the card and escorted Lora out. Before she got back into her car she informed me of what Nefertari was. "Oh yeah, I forgot! Watch your back, because Nefertari is no ordinary lamia." "Lamia? She's a lamia?" "Yup! You take good care of her now, but she might be taking care of you." She then got in her car and drove off. I couldn't believe my ears. The fact that Nefertari was a lamia was almost overbearing. I then closed the door and sat the card on the kitchen counter and made my way back to the living room and right the hell out of nowhere as I came through the arch, a black serpent tail came out and snatched me. It then wrapped me in its coils and I found myself staring into Nefertari's eyes. Her true form was before me. Her upper half was pure purple as lavender, she wore no clothes say for the jewelry that covered her ample breasts and that she wore. Her head resembled that of a cobra and her black serpent tail just made it even more overbearing. She then brought me to her eyes and wrapped her arms around me. "So, Marshall, what do you think? Do I look beautiful? I'm Lady Nefertari Aysel, 1st born of the house of Aysel, and I look forward to spending many days with you, especially; alone." |
Darkness-RyuJul 22, 2014 2:01 PM
Jul 22, 2014 7:59 PM
#2
| It may be a restart but I like it hope this girl is like alice from monster girl quest |
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Jul 23, 2014 1:40 AM
#3
| I did never read the other IEP... But I can say that this looks like it's going to be fun ;D |
Jul 28, 2014 2:49 PM
#4
| Ok I read the chapter thoroughly and such tempting, as well as magic & other things at work I'm sure this program will be quite the adventure for everyone, and your YouTube rants might get more snaky, and aside from that I also feel that a house like that would be good for larger species, so good luck with that :P Good starting point |
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Aug 4, 2014 1:46 PM
#5
| Chapter II Servant of the Netherworld! Well, my life has just suddenly taking a 180, and surprisingly; for the better probably. I mean, the last few hours with Nefertari have been quite intriguing to say the least. Nefertari has shared with me a lot about her kind in the lamia family and how there's very few of her kind. She also explained that they are the sworn enemies of the pharaoh's in their world. That they are to prevent them from resurrecting or simply make them their slaves when they do awake. She even told me about the old ways of the Old Dynasty and how prosperous it was. Sounds like the Old Dynasty of King Ramesses if you ask me. I also told Nefertari that she had the name of one of the greatest queens of Ancient Egypt itself, Queen Nefertari the Great and she felt honored by such a name. I asked her if she had any family and said that she had one younger sister who was also in the IEP program and was living with a man in Florida. She asked me if I had any family and told her everything and everyone. "So, this land that we live on owned by your grandfather and he gave it to you? It's so big that you could build your own castle out here." I started laughing at the suggestion. "Hahahahaha! No, I don't think so Nefertari, besides. I only own a certain amount of acres out here. I was only given 5 acres which is more then enough for me, especially; back here near the woods." "Oh! Well, nevertheless; it's still a good piece of land, and I love this house. It's certainly better then living in a tent most of the time, especially; when someone like me travels a lot." "I take it you love to travel?" "Oh yes, I love travelling. I love visiting new sites and exploring new possibilities. That was one of the reasons why I joined the program so that I could learn about your kind and see many of the wonders that it holds. Perhaps you'd be willing to show me around sometime?" "Sure, I'd love to. In fact, I already had something planned if that's alright with you?" She clapped her hands together and had a big old smile on her face. The face that any excited girl would have. "Oh yes, I'd love to what did you have in mind?" I put my hand over my shoulder and blushed a little. "Well, my family that lives around here plans to get together tomorrow in Reading for breakfast and they want me to bring you to meet the family. I mean, I know you just got here and if it's too big of a rush for you we can do it another time." She then all of a sudden started to dance and prance around like a five year old and seemed to like the idea and then tossed herself on to me. "Oh Marshall, I would love to meet your family. I can't wait to meet them all." "Ok, but can you do one thing for me?" "Oh, and what's that?" "Can you change yourself back into a human like you were when you first came here?" She then got off of me and sat back down on the sofa and had a little sad look on her face. Like she didn't like of what I just asked her. "Yes, I can do that but why? You don't like me like this?" I raised my hands and started shaking my head in a no, no situation. "No, no, it's not that. Actually; I do like you in your lamia form. You look very beautiful in that form. It's just that, I mean when we go tomorrow. It would probably be best for you to appear a human for now. I mean, some of my family members ain't to keen on snakes, especially; my mother. I mean, it just would be best until they got to know you and then they might be able to accept that. I'm sure they'll ask you of what you are and that would be ok to answer but showing them on the day they first met you would probably traumatize them. Ok?" "Alright, but I'll only do it for you since you asked. It's just, I don't like disguising myself as a human. It was bad enough that I had to do that when I first came here, but I'll do it for you." "Thanks, Nefertari!" To make her feel better, I moved over to her and she leaned her head on my shoulder and I put my arm around her. I felt a little embarrassed at first but didn't mind it that much. I looked forward to introducing her to my family tomorrow but did have my doubts, especially; with my younger sister. I then looked at the time and realized that it was now 6 P.M. and that it was about that time that I got dinner ready for us. I removed my arm from Nefertari and got up, but she grabbed my hand. "Where are you going?" "It's about that time." "Time for what?" I let out a small laugh and explained. "For dinner, silly!" "Oh! You can cook?" "Yeah, I love to cook, but I'm no ***** chef or anything like that, but can cook good food. Any idea's of what you want?" She smiled and got off the sofa while still holding my hand in hers. "Usually; I would say that I'd rather have you for dinner." My face turned sour as I had a chill crawl up my spine. Don't tell me that the legends were true that lamia actually did lure in men and devour them, but when she saw my face, she started laughing like crazy. "Hahahahahaha! I know what you're thinking and no it's nothing like that. My kind never devour men like it's said in your myths about us, though I don't deny the fact that there have been a few incidents like that in other lamia families, but fear not Marshall, for I wouldn't dare to devour you. You're too good and handsome to be devoured. No, what I meant was having you for dinner in a more luscious way." I knew right then and there of what she was talking about as she ran her hands all over my body. "My kind, especially; in my family take in men's spirit energy and that also acts as a way for our food but we don't need it as much as those of the succubi clan. Oh, if only we weren't told that we had to wait for a while before I could have you, because if I could. I'd take you right now by wrapping you tightly next to me in my coils and never let you go. When our kind becomes one with our mate, we hold a strong bond with them." I then started to feel her coils wrap around me and she drew herself closer to me to the point that her ample breasts were pressing against my chest hard and despite it being the first time that something like this was happening, it actually felt good and I almost gave in to her seduction until I heard a very familiar voice. "What the hell is going on in here?" I turned my head in a shock and found my younger sister there, standing in the middle of the room with a, "you pervert," look on her face. Nefertari released me from her coils and made herself rise with her tail. "Who are you and how dare you trespass in here without being invited?" "Nefertari wait!" "But, Marshall! She's trespassing and if I recall, trespassing on land of the owner is a crime." "It's ok, that's my younger sister. One of the family members that I was going to introduce you to tomorrow." "Oh!" Nefertari then lowered herself and ducked behind me while putting her hands on my shoulders. It was as if she was the one scared of Traca now or either embarrassed. I turned my attention towards Traca. "Trace, this is Nefertari and no your eyes aren't deceiving you. She is a snake woman, aka, a lamia. Nefertari, this is my younger sister, Traca." Nefertari moved away from me just a little to say hi but Trace just gave her the cold shoulder, as well as the bullseye look and she ducked back behind me. You figured with her being part snake, especially; that of the cobra family she wouldn't be scared of her, but I guess since Trace was my younger sister it would make sense since she was still in her true form. I then turned my attention towards Traca. "So, Trace! What are you doing here and why didn't you ring the doorbell before you came in?" |
Aug 4, 2014 10:18 PM
#6
| tempting as always, adding in MGE information too, i didnt entirely expect that, but the most I love about this chapter apart from the teasing, trace, in your last story she was the anti monster family member, not going to lie but she threw the story a good twist and i enjoy her return in this one, now to see what she will do |
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Aug 5, 2014 11:24 AM
#7
| When Trace came in the only thing that poped up in my head was COCK BLOCKING!... althought that has happen twice in my IEP story. Really like it and keep it up |
Aug 6, 2014 6:47 PM
#8
| I should have known friends with benefits coming in fast |
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Aug 8, 2014 8:30 PM
#9
| Chapter III Brave and the Bold! My sister just continued looking at Nefertari with that cold emotionless expression in her eyes. My sister never did really have that much patience for me nor did she really care that much about me since she always had delusional thoughts about me. Thinking that everything was always handed to me like a baby or a prince and that she never got anything. Hell, we and my mean by my parents, grandparents, and myself have done a lot more for her then I ever asked for them. Hell, she even went as far as to say that I was the prince in the family and that I've never had to work for anything and boy has she been dead wrong. I've worked hard in my life and I guess she would consider this as one of my so called; handed me moments since I'm being payed by the government to look after Nefertari, but I digress. Anyway; after giving Nefertari the cold treatment which seemed like for hours and actually; did start to scare Nefertari a little she finally spoke to me. "Mom and dad wanted me to tell you that plans have changed. We're all getting together at Ina's tonight for dinner and they want you and this....thing to come as well. Disgusting!" My eyebrow raised and I could feel Nefertari's grasp on my shoulders getting stronger. If there was one thing that Trace was very good at, it was pushing the envelop and carrying it on to the point where it was totally uncalled for. To the point where I just had to correct her. "First of all Trace, that's your grandmother to whom you're referring to so show some respect. Two, Nefertari is not a thing, she's still a living creature and don't ever say disgusting in front of her again you got that? Look, you've gone and upset her." "Yeah, well whatever I don't really care anyway. This is just another way for you to get whatever you want and whenever you want, just like you always have." I just whispered under my breath, "If only you weren't so blind by how much we've done for you." "Anyway; when do they want us over there?" "Sometime around 8. Now, if you'll excuse me, I need to get out of this place before I vomit. Au revoir!" Trace then ran for the door and left. Man, I don't know what the hell is wrong with that woman, but if I was to guess. I'd say that she had a borderline personality disorder with the way she acts towards me and anyone who talks about me. Anyway; after she finally left, I turned my attention towards Nefertari and found her holding on to me tightly. She was also crying because of the things that she had heard my sister speak about her. I then put my arms around her and held her tightly to me. "Don't take what my sister says to heart, Nefertari." She tried speaking to me but her words were choked back by tears. "Bu...but, wh..what if sh....she says is true? A....a......am I really.....disgusting? Do...I disgust you, Marshall? Am I.....truly; that hideous ?" I held her even more closely to me to try and get her to calm down and explained everything to her. "You're not hideous, Nefertari. You're beautiful, far more beautiful then I could have ever imagined. You're probably the most beautiful creature that I've ever laid my eyes on. Trace is just jealous, just like she's always been. She just refuses to accept the fact that we've done so much for her and she discards it like so much waste, but you. Your nowhere near being hideous. You're beautiful, and that's the truth. You might be a lamia, but even a lamia can be beautiful." She then lifted her head towards me and looked me in the eye. I removed the tears from her face and just looked at her. "Am...am I really beautiful to you?" "Yes, and that is no lie. Others might just look at you and see a monster, but I see a woman. A beautiful woman who is just simply misunderstood. Trust me, I've been there and know what it's like to be misunderstood and looked at the wrong way." She then put her arms around me and kissed me on the lips. It was the first time that I had ever been kissed by a woman and it actually felt good. I'm sure that this wasn't against the rules since they said that we couldn't have sex yet but didn't say that we couldn't kiss. She then pulled herself away and just lay herself in my arms for a while. I then looked at the clock and noticed that it was almost 7. "We'd better get around." She nodded and withdrew to her room to get herself ready but before she did I grabbed her arm to stop her. She looked at me with a puzzled look on her face of why I had stopped her. "What's wrong?" I looked at her and realized of my mistake from earlier, especially; now that Trace had pretty much ruined everything of how I wanted to present Nefertari to my family, but I was now left with no choice but to change things. "Remember when I said earlier that it would probably be a good idea for you to appear as a human before my family so they could get to know you before revealing your true form to them? Well, I don't want you to do that now. No doubt that Trace is gonna run her mouth off until it falls off. So, just appear as your normal self now. If they get too scared or try to shoo you out, then we'll just leave and try again some other time." I saw the star sparkle in her eyes as she acknowledged of what I had just said. She nodded her head and went to her room to prepare herself. As for myself, I went to my room as well to freshen up. After 'bout 20 minutes or so, I returned to the living room and found Nefertari there waiting for me. Instead of just wearing her jewelry, she was also wearing a purple tunic along with a purple silk scarf. Purple must have been her favorite color with herself being purple and wearing that color. The tunic gave herself her own unique flavor of beauty, as well as her own outfit, but no matter what she wore and what color it was. I knew, that she would still be the most beautiful lady that I'd ever seen. After I had finished gotten myself ready and grabbed my house keys. I took Nefertari's hand as she held on to me and we left for my grandmothers. I decided that it was just better to walk and not waste gas since it wasn't even a five minute walk to their house. I mean, they did own the land after all. Say for the acres that they gave to myself and my aunt and uncle who too owned some of the land now. We came from the back path that leads to wear the barn is and made our way to the house, where we were confronted by Freckles, my grandparents border collie and like their 3rd dog or something. Freckles tried to approach me like he always does but the sight of Nefertari scared him as he ran off with his tale between his legs like he just been whipped. Nefertari just let out a small chuckle and we came up the steps and I knocked on the door. The door opened and I couldn't believe as to who answered the door. "Ah! Marshall, Nefertari, I was wondering when you two were gonna show up. Everyone's waiting for you." My jaw dropped as I couldn't believe that Lora was here. "Lora, what the hell are you doing here?" "Now, now, Marshall! I'll explain everything, but first. Let's eat!" [color=blue]"Geez, doesn't this woman think of anything other then food in a time like this?"[/color] Nefertari and I went inside and I prepared myself to introduce her to the family. However; nothing could have prepared me for what was about to go down that night. |
Aug 10, 2014 6:04 AM
#10
| What a nice dinner you're going to have :D |
Aug 10, 2014 2:30 PM
#11
| I hope there will be no more family matter crap from here on in |
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Aug 11, 2014 8:26 PM
#12
| well that was nice, i enjoyed it except saying creature repeatedly, then you said woman and things fell into place, its a good thing your saying it loud and proud but i get the feeling this lora and your family will be a different matter, still you've set up a show now to sit back and watch |
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Aug 17, 2014 10:44 AM
#13
| Chapter IV Family Disaster?! Nefertari and I entered the house and I could smell the food that my grandmother had prepared. I didn't know what she had cooked, but if there was one thing that she was very good at. It was cooking a nice home cooked meal. She was one hell of a cook and could always knock a nice dinner out of the park. Hopefully; Nefertari would approve, but I was worried about them approving of her. Then again with my supervisor here, even though she just showed up right the hell out of nowhere, things might actually go for the greater good. Anyway; I removed my shoes from my feet and sat them in the corner and them removed Nefertari's coat from her. We then made our way through the kitchen, and into the dinning room where everything was sat up and the food at the table looked delicious, and as much as I wanted us all to dig in, I needed to introduce Nefertari first. I wasn't really too worried about the men freaking out about with her being a lamia, it was the women that I was worried about, especially; my mother since she hates snakes, and we already knew how my sister felt, and my grandmother, aunt, and cousins weren't too keen on snakes either, but to each is own is what I always say. Then again with Lora here she probably already told them about Nefertari if Trace didn't spill the beans already. I asked Nefertari to wait by the arch until I gave her the signal to come into the living room. I walked in and found everyone there. The men were watching the Tigers game and the women were gossiping on who knows what and I decided to make my big introduction. "Hello!" Everyone then turned and saw me, say for the men since my dad, grandfather, and uncle were now screaming at the tv due to a horrible call made by the ump. My mom and grandmother informed them that I was there and they put the tv on mute. "About time you got here," said my dad as he looked my way from the couch. My grandfather and uncle then got off of their seats and came into the other half of the living room and were ready to be introduced. "Alright, are we all ready?" Everyone shook their heads but before I could introduce her I had to no something. "Hold on a second, Lora. First of all, why are you here and two. How did you know where my grandparents lived?" Lora put her hand over her shoulder then replied with this. "Well, I kind of knew that you planned on getting your family together for breakfast tomorrow to introduce Nefertari, but I was a little worried that it might had gone a little sour in public. So, I suggested to your parents and grandparents before I brought Nefertari to you that you should all get together for dinner tonight and they wanted me to come over to lay out the ground work so that they wouldn't drop dead from fright when they met her. As for how I knew where they lived? Well, I think it's pretty obvious since they did give you a large piece of the land. Sorry, I didn't inform you before." "It's fine, but let me know before hand. I don't do so well when I'm told about something that's going down right at the last second." "Are you going to introduce her to the family or do I need to spill the beans myself on how I think of what she looks like." I glared at my sister as she sat there on the floor with her two sons, my nephews Jakobie who was 6 and Koal now 1, and the fact that she had a 3rd one on the way, and she thinks I have problems, especially; when all three of her kids don't have the same dad? Anyway; I took Nefertari's hand, she took a deep breath and slivered her way into the living room and I introduced her. "Everyone, this is Nefertari!" Nefertari smiled and said, "Hi, nice to meet you all." I could right away feel the room turning into an ice barrage as everyone stayed perfectly still like they had actually been frozen in time. My mother looked like she was about to either croak, have a stroke, or die from fear as I could see the light fading from her eyes. Like before, my sister just shrugged her off by giving her the cold shoulder, but the one person who seemed the most traumatized was of course my Aunt Ginny. She had an absolute fear of snakes and this was no exception and I was actually worried there for a second that she was gonna have a heart attack. "You alright, Ginny!?" She couldn't speak and just shook her head in a yes movement. As I said, the men didn't find her that traumatizing but I could totally; see the disbelief in my grandfathers eyes and thought that we'd be staying like that until my nephew Jakobie broke the silence and spoke to her. "Hi!" Nefertari smiled and waved at Jakobie but Trace didn't take too kind to it. "Listen here serpent, if you lay so much as one finger or your tail on any one of my boys. I'll boil you myself you nasty piece of....." "Ok! Now that, that's taken care of. Let's eat before dinner gets cold." I took Nefertari's hand and escorted her to her seat and I sat down next to her. Like always my grandfather sat at one end of the table and my grandmother sat at the other end of the table. I always sat at the far right of the table next to my grandfather but had Nefertari sit there so she'd have the extra room. After we all sat down, my grandfather graced our table and we ate. There really wasn't much talking at the table and could you blame them? Not really; since there was about an eighteen foot lamia at our table. All that was pretty much going on was the noise of silverware hitting the plates and that was it until finally; my grandmother broke the silence. "How is everything, Nefertari?" "Delicious, thank you!" After we had all finished eating and consuming our drinks, I helped my grandmother wrack up the dishes and as the she and my mother did the dishes. Nefertari and I went into the living room and everyone else went about doing whatever. Dad, my grandfather, and uncle came into the living room to finish watching the game and seeing the Tigers get their asses handed to them again since they couldn't hit the freaking ball, and as usual. My father would rant on about them not hitting the ball. Hell, about the only player that could actually hit was Cabrera. "Come on, guys; hit the damn ball already." Yeah, yelling at the tv when it came to a sports games, especially; when it came to baseball and football, ran in our bloodline, especially; the males. Anyway; as we sat there watching the game. I noticed my little nephew Koal come crawling into the living room and right up to me. He, like Jakobie was pretty much a grandma's boy but came up to me and I picked him up. Nefertari took a notice as well and smiled and patted him on the head, but then of course. That was when things started taking for a worse turn of the tide as Trace noticed and came rushing in right away and yanked Koal right out of my hands. "I told you, you lay one hand on my baby and I'd boil you myself." Ok, this was totally; getting out of control so I had to stop this. "Good lord, Trace! She was just patting him not doing anything harmful, so get a grip already." "Shut the hell up! You know, I wouldn't be one bit surprised if she swallowed you whole tonight." I flinched at those words for I couldn't believe at what she just said. Since when did she have the nerve to call Nefertari a man eater? I then noticed Nefertari grabbing a hold of me and clinching herself to my shoulders. I honestly couldn't blame her from being a little scared of my sister because in all honesty; she was a scary person. So scary in fact that I was always afraid that she was gonna do something horrible. "Come on, J, Dale, we're leaving. I can't stand the sight of that abomination anymore." I and a few others in the room, including Lora whom I think I heard, gasped at that word. God, now she was starting to sound like Westboro. Hell, I wouldn't be one bit surprised if she up'd and joined Westboro. I wansn't about to say anything though for the last thing that I needed right now was an outbreak in my grandparents house. I turned my attention towards Nefertari and noticed that her eyes had this intense anger in them and Lora noticed it as well. "Marshall, we've got to get her home now and get her calmed down. Lamia, especially; the Apophis have a great vindictive level and I'm afraid the calamity could be quite devastating." "Calm down, Nefertari! Let's get you home." Lora and I helped Nefertari to the kitchen and got her coat on her and I got my shoes on and apoligized to my family and we took Nefertari home while trying to suppress her anger. |
Aug 17, 2014 2:41 PM
#14
| Well that went well, like being caught in a ambush, I liked how you showed some badness even from family to the over all IEP and mixed things up a bit, keep it up :) |
| Mon-Love club: http://myanimelist.net/clubs.php?cid=39529 The Shape of happiness might resemble glass... Even though you don't usually notice it, it's still definitely there... You merely have to change your Point of View slightly... and that glass will sparkle when it reflects the light... |
Aug 18, 2014 12:07 PM
#15
| yup... just as I thought. A nice dinner... execept a few things here and there... didn't like you're sister, she was mean but I sure liked the background story the little familiy. was nice and good :D |
Aug 29, 2014 9:04 PM
#16
| Chapter V I'm Not the Only One! It proved to be a little difficult and I probably wouldn't have been able to get her home on my own but with Lora's help I was able to. It turns out that lamia can easily get very vindictive, especially; when it comes to her mate being unfaithful to her. However; in this case thanks to my idiot and loudmouth sister, it was a good thing she left when she did or Nefertari may have actually attacked her and she would have been sent back to her homeland and that would have just ruined everything for me and us. Yeah, I admit it. Despite it just being the first day, I actually; liked Nefertari and it just wasn't because of her looks and the fact that she was a lamia, but it was something else. There was something else about her that made me like her but I couldn't put my finger on it yet. Anyway; Lora and I eventually; got her home and we took her to her room so she could meditate. It turned out that lamia's would use meditation in order to get their anger under control. I used meditation as well but for a different reason. I'd use it to get in touch with more of my spiritual self, as well as to control certain edges of mine that I had and was trying to keep under control. Lora informed me that, that was a close one and thought that it would be best if Nefertari stayed away from my sister for a while and I agreed. The last thing I needed was a case to deal with and having my family jumping up my ass with a missing relative, especially; when Trace was my only sibling and with her having two boys and a third child on the way. Oh by the way; not that I was calling my nephews and if this one was a boy as well a bastard because I would never dare call them that but did I forget to mention that both boys and probably this one as well were born out of wedlock? Can you now see of why she and I really don't see eye to eye and why I've barely gone out? In fact, Nefertari is really the only woman that I've actually had the privilege of going out with. Though we weren't actually dating but can you see where I'm going with this? Anyway; Lora said that when Nefertari was done meditating she'd be heading straight to bed and shouldn't be disturbed since lamia's really need their alone time when meditating so they can concentrate their energies and get rid of all of that negative energy and sleep the rest of it off. After she left, I then went to the bathroom and then headed to bed myself. I thought about checking on Nefertari real quick but the last thing that I needed right now was having her get angry at me for disturbing her so I left her be. I then headed to bed and actually drifted asleep pretty quickly. I heard my alarm go off and found that it was 9:00 in the morning which was the usual time for me to get up in the morning when I'm not working let alone third shift from 7:30 p.m. to 5:00 a.m. Yeah, a nine hour shift and it was never that much fun. However; when I woke up, I felt something weird wrapped around my body and realized that my body temp was different then it usually was. I also noticed that my fan had been turned off. I always had my fan blowing on me to keep me cool at night, especially; during the summer even though summer was just about over with and fall being right around the corner. I then looked over to my left and noticed Nefertari was the one who was wrapped around me and was laying on my chest, and to top that, she was naked and I mean completely naked. Not to sure at what was going on but apparently; she loved sleeping naked, though I too won't deny the fact that there were times that I would also or in my boxers, but when you sleep in a humidity at a high level, come on you've been there too I'm certain of it. Anyway; just shaking Nefertari and waking her up that way would be quite rude of me and since we did already share our first kiss last night. I decided to wake her up in a more loving manner. I kissed her on the forehead and that did the trick. She let out a big yawn and opened her eyes and looked right at me with a smile on her face. "Morning, handsome!" "Morning, beautiful!" She moved up towards me and returned the kiss but planed it on my lips. She then looked into my eyes and I swear that every time I looked into them. I felt the hairs on the back of my neck stand up just like a Malamute when it looks at you with those green eyes. Yeah, her golden serpent eyes always made a chill crawl up my spine whenever I looked into them so sue me. "How are you feeling after last night and I'm sorry about that. I didn't think things would end up going as awry like that." She held me close to her and then just spoke to me like any normal woman would after just meeting the family of her date. "It's alright, darling! At least I was able to meet your family and besides your family reminds me a lot of my own." "What do you mean by that?" "It's best as of right now if you didn't know but I have the feeling that you'll be finding out soon." "I see, by the way Nefertari. When exactly did you crawl in bed with me?" She let out a small chuckle and released me from her arms. "About around late in the morning. I got cold and couldn't get warm and so I came into your room to see if you were awake but you were out like a grizzly bear in the winter. So, I just crawled into your bed and wrapped myself around you and with your body heat and the blankets I got warm in no time, but even after doing so, I didn't want to leave you. So, I lay my head on your chest and let your heartbeat sing me to sleep." "You could have woken me up, I wouldn't have minded it." "I know, but you seemed so peaceful in your sleep and looked like you were having a good dream and I didn't want to awaken you from it. So, I took matters into my own hands." If she always got this cold in the morning and needed my body temp to warm her, I then shuttered to think of how it would be when fall and winter got here. "Oh by the way; I ended up turning your fan off cause if that had kept blowing on us, I probably would never had gotten warm." "It's alright! I don't mind it. As long as you got warm then that's all that matters." I then heard my stomach growl and Nefertari's as well and she undid her binding to me. "I guess we're both hungry, hahaha." "Yes, I'm getting hungry myself." "I gotta go do my workout first though before I eat." "I guess that explains why you have such broad shoulders and a nice chest. Well, while you're doing your workout, I'm gonna jump in the bath and then I'll prepare a nice big breakfast for us." "Wait, you can cook as well?" "Oh yes! I was going to wait and surprise you later on but since you're going to need a big meal after an arduous workout. I feel that it would be more fitting for me to cook now." "I do love a woman who can cook me a nice meal." "Indeed! I could definitely tell that from your grandmothers cooking last night." "Well, let me then at least get the bath ready for ya before I go do my workout." "Oh, you're so sweet. Maybe we can bathe together one day." I blushed at that statement since I had never bathed with a woman before. You can just see the irony in that of me bathing with a lamia, don't deny it. Anyway; I got up and as did Nefertari and I put on my gym shorts and my blue shirt and Nefertari went and got ready for her bath. I went to the big bathroom and started up the tub and made sure that the water was at the right temperature. I had to make sure that it wasn't anywhere near a cold temp with her being cold blooded, less she go into a coma or an early hibernation. After getting the tub ready and at the right temp, Nefertari entered and had a few towels with her since one wouldn't be enough for as long as she was. I then left the bathroom but not before she gave me yet another kiss to thank me for getting the tub ready for her and I left her to her bathing. I then went downstairs and started lifting. I always changed my workouts everyday hence to confuse my muscles so that they'd develop better and faster. Yes, I was following Tony's muscle confusion method so sue me, but hey; at least it works. On Monday's, Wednesday's, and Friday's, I would lift with weights and would do pure cardio on Tuesday's and Thursday's. After working out for an hour I put back my weights and used the bathroom downstairs to shower cause I mean let's be honest. What woman, especially; one as beautiful as Nefertari would want to smell the stink of a man who just got done working out? Yeah, exactly! After showering and dressing myself in a different pair of shorts and a tight t-shirt. I went to the little refrigerator that I had down there and pulled out a gallon of milk and placed it on the counter. I then opened the cupboard and pulled out my Herbalife shake mix. I always had at least one shake a day along with my vitamins after working out to give my body the nutrition that it needed. I put my shake together with my milk in my little shake cup and made my shake. I then put everything back, took my vitamins and drank my shake. After having it, I cleaned my cup and went upstairs to find my senses on fire with the smell of hot ready food waiting for me. [color=blue]"Damn! Whatever she cooked, it sure does smell delicious,"[/color] I thought! After going back upstairs and walking into the dining room to find the table filled with great food. I saw Nefertari sitting at the table waiting for me. However; it seemed that we weren't going to have any alone time because sitting next to her was someone else. Another lamia and the same kind as Nefertari "Ah, Marshall! There you are! This is my mother, Ahhotep. Mother, this is the man that I've been staying with. Marshall Burlew." The Apophis rose from her seat and slivered over to me and looked me right in the eyes. "So, you're the man who's been taking care of my little girl, huh? Hmm, I wonder!" |
Aug 30, 2014 8:26 AM
#17
| I like it how it's going but I wonder when the next girl is going to show up. And that was a real surprise how the mother already showed up |
| IM A ISH! http://i.imgur.com/XsnQ67O.png |
Aug 30, 2014 11:13 AM
#18
ISH29 said: I like it how it's going but I wonder when the next girl is going to show up. And that was a real surprise how the mother already showed up I'm still debating on that right now for the other two. Yeah, it does feel a little too soon for the mother to show up but it's for a good cause, especially; for Nefertari in the next few chapters. |
Sep 1, 2014 12:44 PM
#19
| Me smell trouble xD |
Sep 2, 2014 12:37 AM
#20
| Yep that's one poisioness foreshadowing you set up, surprised how fast your relationships going and the mother dropping in... Seriously unexpected, I mean how for 1 thing and in the morning? Still this will be trouble or MILF trouble |
| Mon-Love club: http://myanimelist.net/clubs.php?cid=39529 The Shape of happiness might resemble glass... Even though you don't usually notice it, it's still definitely there... You merely have to change your Point of View slightly... and that glass will sparkle when it reflects the light... |
Sep 3, 2014 1:17 PM
#21
| Chapter VI Momma's Little Girl! Nefertari and her mother; Ahhotep didn't really bare any striking differences, they actually looked pretty much the same. I did some reading a while back when they were first made public to the world that a daughter who is born from a mamono look pretty much exactly like her mother but takes in any traits that both; the mother and the father may have had. I also admit that it was a little surprisingly to see her here and so soon too. Sure, I did one day look forward to meeting her parents but I never did expect it to be this soon. Before I sat down to eat, Ahhotep started moving around me as if she was observing me. "Ah! Ma'am, what are you doing?" She let out a small chuckle and replied, "Oh now, there's no need for such formality; Marshall. Please, just call me Ahhotep. As for what I'm doing, I'm simply observing you. I just want to simply see what kind of a man you are." She started feeling around my shoulders and my arms. She then moved towards my chest and my lower torso. She then observed my legs, lord knows why she was observing those. She then sat back down and I gave that the impression that I could sit down as well. "Not bad, I'm actually impressed. Nefertari, you've landed yourself a nice catch here. Tell me, have you done it with him yet?" I nearly chocked on my water as I spat it out over my plate. Good thing I didn't put any food on it just yet as I had to now wipe it off with my napkin. "Mother! Not while Marshall is trying to eat." "Oh come now! I'm sure he doesn't mind of hearing something like that when he eats." I turned my attention towards Nefertari and said, "Is she always like this when she's around men?" "Mmm hmm!" "But of course I don't want to disturb you from your breakfast, Marshall. Go ahead and eat." I loaded my plate as did Nefertari. As I was doing so, I began to talk. "So, what brings you here, Ahhotep? And why exactly were you observing me like that?" "Well, I wanted to come by and see how my little girl was doing and to see this strapping young man that I heard was watching over her, for it's been a while since I last saw my little girl. As for you, I just wanted to see if you were a worthy man for my daughter." "Mother, please don't bring that up right now. It's too soon for that." "Bring what up?" "To see if one day you'd make a worthy mate for my daughter." "Ah; I see.......Phhhhhhhh! WAIT WHAT?" "Mother!" "What the hell are you talking about?" "Hasn't she told you? She'll soon need a man that she can mate with, and being a strong man like yourself. You'd probably be able to be the one for her." "You're talking about marriage? It's far too soon to even be thinking of something like that. We haven't even been living together for a week yet." "Oh, I'm aware of that, Marshall, and I'm not saying that I don't want you guys to be in a hurry to mate. Just like myself, Nefertari has a certain time of when she'll need to mate. No, I do want you guys to take your time with each other. I'm just simply stating that you'd probably make a great mate for her. Unlike the men that my husband has been picking out for her." "Say what?" "My father, is a former duke. He comes from a family that the parents would gather together a group of men that they deemed worthy for their daughters hand in marriage. They'd do the same thing for the sons in their family and my father said that we'd follow that tradition for me, but then the mamono's were made to the public and the IEP was created. I volunteered myself for this so that I could have the opportunity to meet someone on my own and not have to live by my fathers rules. In fact, he actually disapproved my decision to participate in this, but my mother did want me to get out and find someone on my own. Thanks to her, I was able to get out and meet you Marshall." I blushed as I placed a piece of the egg in my mouth and swallowed it. Now, I see why she didn't want me to know about her family right away. I mean, what kind of parents force their daughter to marry someone that they don't love? Sounds just like a tragic Titanic story to me. "So, you can see why I came by here. Not that I'm judging you Marshall, because I'm not. I'm not like my husband who only judges people by their wealth and appearance. If the day comes that Nefertari chooses you as her mate then I'll gradually; accept you as my son. Nefertari, when that time comes make sure you take good care of him, ok?" "I know, mother!" "Well, I hate to eat and run but your father will be wondering of where I'm at and the last thing he needs to know is that I'm visiting my little girl and her new friend. Enjoy your breakfast you two." "Take care, Ahhotep!" "Later, mother!" Ahhotep then left and Nefertari and I finished eating. After we were done eating and we put everything away and cleaned the dishes we sat down on the sofa for a while and I turned the tv on to the news, but Nefertari turned her attention towards me. "Uhm, Marshall! About what my mother said, about you becoming my mate one day. I....." "Nefertari...." I was about to reply to that when something on the news came on that just made me feel disgusted. "Well, it seems that the IEP has continued to be a great success as more and more participants have been joining the program and living their new lives with their new mamono roommates. It has continued to spread worldwide and many in different cultures continue to support the system and participate. However; one particular family that wished to participate in the IEP have been denied in participating the program. The Crowley Family of Crowley Mansion were denied into competing in the IEP due to the background of their daughter; Jody Crowley, who was arrested and made bail 5 years ago after committing fraud during the tv series of Popular Role Model by tampering with the voting process. The show was cancelled due to other possible frauds and Jody Crowley was to receive 5 years in prison but made bail. The family is displeased that even though their daughter still lives with them that they cannot participate in the IEP and have made numerous threats to the program and to all of those who are participating in it." "Serves her right! Besides, even if she was able to participate in the program, she would probably just lie and manipulate the mamono's that would be living with them." I turned off the tv not wanting to face that woman or hear about her anymore as a certain part of my past sparked some anger in me and rubbed my head with my hands. I then slammed them against my legs and noticed that Nefertari had a horrified look on her face and I apologized to her. "I'm sorry; Nefertari! It's just that....." I then felt her come closer to me as she wrapped herself around me. Coils and all! "I sense a disturbance in you, Marshall. That woman that was just announced. Do you know her?" I shuttered at first to answer her but went ahead and did so. "Yes, I do know her. Her name is, Jody Crowley and I know her very well." "Will you tell me as to what's going on? What's your connection to her?" Again, I was hesitant to tell her but I needed to get this pressure of my back and began to explain to her. I took in a deep breath and began to explain my relationship with Jody to her. "Jody and I do have history together. It was about 5 years ago, 2 years before the mamono's were introduced to the public. She and I use to date and she was my girlfriend. I eventually; fell in love with her, at least I thought I did. We were going to get married but then after one major event with her involvement changed everything, and it's to this day the biggest mistake and regret of my entire life. A mistake that I deeply wish that I could take back." |
Darkness-RyuSep 20, 2014 8:37 PM
Sep 3, 2014 1:47 PM
#22
| Backstory. Now I'm very intressed. join us next time too see how Marshall shall increse the secerity around Nefertari (Not that I think it's nesscecary but Mamono isn't even alowed to lay one finger on a human so it is needed anyway...) I wounder when the other species are coming... maybe it is only one xD |
Sep 3, 2014 1:53 PM
#23
Carn0 said: I wounder when the other species are coming... maybe it is only one xD Nope, there's still two more to be introduced but they'll be coming in eventually. Probably in the next couple of chapters. Right now, I'm just having a big build up for my main character. |
Sep 3, 2014 10:56 PM
#24
| whoa whoa whoa whoa whoa.... this is not my batman glass but seriously about that criminal thing, what the shit? i'm super surprised at this but im also questionably on how you brought this up in your story? as for neffertities mother and "mate"... im not fond of, not saying as an admin but a reader, still this stirs things up i guess |
BlackRegisSep 4, 2014 6:27 PM
| Mon-Love club: http://myanimelist.net/clubs.php?cid=39529 The Shape of happiness might resemble glass... Even though you don't usually notice it, it's still definitely there... You merely have to change your Point of View slightly... and that glass will sparkle when it reflects the light... |
Sep 4, 2014 1:42 PM
#25
| Michigan boy? lol So how do Mamono that are not in the IEP get around in the human world :P? Interesting development, I see the father playing a large role later on. |
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Sep 6, 2014 2:09 PM
#26
This chapter as well as a few throughout the story are going to start having commentaries throughout them. Not everyone, just here and there to try and give the chapter a more funny tone to it, especially; throughout the dark parts. Enjoy! Chapter VII Time Never Heals! You know how the old saying goes that, "time never heals all wounds?" Well, that would be a permanent definition in my case with the past that I've had. A past that I wish I could just eradicate from the vast reaches of time itself. I won't lie, when Ahhotep said that I'd possibly make a fine mate, a.k.a., a fine husband for Nefertari one day, I shuttered at the thought. Why you ask? I'll put it in a simple word that pretty much every man can understand when it comes to women. Manipulation! After what happened to me and my best friend 5 years ago. I've come to understand that women can be quite the manipulative bitches that they can be. Now, am I saying that all women were like this? Absolutely not and I could without a doubt see that Nefertari wasn't like that. Sure, her looks alone could usually manipulate me into having intercourse with her but what was different about her beside the fact that she wasn't human was that she wouldn't use her beauty for her own self benefits. Plus, she actually seemed to care for me unlike someone else that I knew and seemed to have a great deal of respect for me with how I took care of myself. Jody Crowley however; is a different story. As I told Nefertari, it happened about 5 years ago. Well, actually; it all started with me and Jody nearly 7 years ago. It all began just shortly after I turned 18 and finally; becoming an adult. I was a junior in high school at the time and was moving up in the ranks and improving myself by going out for football and baseball that year and the year after that. I met Jody at our high school dance on homecoming night. She was brought to the dance by a friend of mine and we ended up bumping into each other. Ever heard of love at first sight? Well, let me tell you something about that. IT'S NOT A REAL THING. Never fall in love with someone at first sight because that's the first step that women like Jody like to use to manipulate men. Then again, I was in high school at the time. So, could you really blame me? I guess not! I guess what really made me fall for that was because I was kinda in a desperate position at that time. I mean, I was pretty much the only guy that didn't have a girlfriend and I was kind of desperate to have one. So, I guess you really couldn't put all the blame on me, but sometimes that's how life works. It makes you go through something that you really don't want to or shouldn't go through but can help you grow into a stronger and more mature person. "If it doesn't kill you, it only makes you stronger." Anyway; after that night, Jody and I fell in love and we started dating. It at first, at least to my eyes was a happy relationship and I was actually; the happiest that I'd ever been. Even my family and closest friends were happy for me. We went to parties together, we spent as much time with each other as we could despite the fact that we went to different colleges. We seemed to have a strong connection as well and I loved the fact that she wanted to be a model. However; a few years later that all started to change. After I graduated from ITT and received my Associates and then transferd to Trine. I stared working cause I finally; found myself a part time job near home. Jody, didn't take to it that much. It was as if she was against with me working and that she didn't want me to work at all and wanted me to focus all of my attention on her and nothing more. I also, had to focus on my schoolwork and again. She didn't like the fact that I was spending less and less time with her. Hell, it only got worse, she didn't take to keen to the fact that I had set my sight on becoming a State Trooper for the state of Michigan, and to top all that off. I started taking martial arts classes to learn self-defense to prepare myself for that future and that only made it even worse. During that time as well, Jody was part of a popularity model contest. She was a member of 5 girls that would go on live to display themselves in different dresses and uniforms and at the end of every month. They would have a voting process from their fans to see who would be the most popular and ranking each girl from 1st rank to 5th rank. Kind of like America's Next Top Model. My best friends girlfriend Ali Herona and baby sister, Jami Karen were also part of the contest. Jami was ranked number 1 and Ali 2. Two others named; Leanna was ranked 3rd and Lita was 4th, while Jody was 5th. She didn't take to kind to that as well and would always get into fights with Jami and with her brothers and I growing up together and being like brothers ourselves. Jami was like a baby sister to me even though I did have a sister. It eventually; got so bad that Jody and I would have our own arguments, especially; when it came into terms with Jami and Ali, especially; Jami. She didn't like the fact that I considered Jami as a baby sister and that her brothers and I were like brothers. I was actually; going to end the relationship on her high school's homecoming that night but she did something that quite shocked me. "Everyone, I have some great news for you all, but first. I would like to call down my boyfriend to join me here at center field, Marshall Burlew." Here's where the commentaries are gonna start coming in for this chapter. [color=lightblue]"What in the world is going on here, Scott?"[/color] [color=black]"I haven't the bloodiest idea, D. Whatever she's got planned though it can't be good. We've all seen how their relationship has been going for the last few months. It's been going south pretty damn fast."[/color] [color=lightblue]"Oh come on, Scott! You're just being paranoid."[/color] [color=black]"We'll just see in the end, D, cause here comes Moose now."[/color] [color=lightblue]"I wonder if this surprise that Jody has in store for Moose and everyone here will be to die for?"[/color] [color=black]"Oh; I'm sure it will."[/color] "What's going on, Jody?" "Good Marshall, good! I'm very glad that you don't know anything just yet. The reason why I had you come here and wanted to have this announced to everyone is because I wanted to share something very exciting with them and you. As you may have guessed. It does seem that our relationship has been falling apart. It does seem like we're just not communicating, especially; with the two of us working, you going to your martial arts classes and having your studies. It seems that our love that we once felt for each other in high school is just not as strong as it was then. That's why I've decided that the only way for us to show how much we love each other Marshall. Is that in 2 months time, on Christmas Eve that we finally become husband and wife at Barre Field." [color=lightblue]"What? That's a great idea."[/color] [color=black]"Have you been drinking, D?"[/color] [color=lightblue]"Oh come on, Scott. They should tie the knot. It would totally help to fix their relationship."[/color] [color=black]"Marriage never fixes a relationship, D. Only chemistry does!"[/color] [color=lightblue]"Scott, you're once again being paranoid."[/color] "That is the stupidest idea that I've heard, especially; for an outdoor wedding at that time of the year." [color=black]"Your damn right it is."[/color] "Why is it that ever since you and your family came into millions of dollars for winning the power ball, that you need to do everything in front of the world? Why is it that you need to share anything that you deem to be huge to everyone? Huh? Why is that?" "It's.....It's because of them." (Crowd starts chanting) [color=black]"Because of them my ass."[/color] [color=lightblue]"Come on, Scott! Show some dignity!"[/color] "It's because of all of them. Everyone who watches me and the other girls on Popular Model. Everyone who has ever known me. They all think that I'm some sort of failure and that I don't belong in the modeling business, hence probably why I'm always in 5th place." [color=black]"Oh come on, don't bring that b.s. up again."[/color] [color=lightblue]"She does work hard, Scott. She should be like in 3rd now."[/color] "They all think that I'm....." (Crowd chanting, "slut, slut, slut, slut, slut). [color=lightblue]"Oh come on, she's so not that."[/color] "They all think that I'm just using you and trying to get you away from your life goal of becoming a law enforcement officer. They seem to think that I have you wrapped tight around me finger." [color=lightblue]"Come on, Moose! Do it for her."[/color] "So, let me get this straight. On Christmas Eve, you want us to have an outdoor wedding at Barre Field, my hometown field in Reading?" "Yes!" [color=black]"Not too sure about this, D."[/color] [color=lightblue]"Oh come on, Scott. It would make a great Christmas present."[/color] "No!" [color=lightblue]"What? Oh come on, Moose! Why not?"[/color] "No, Marshall you can't say no. You just can't! You have to do it for me, you have to do it for....." "Why? WHY DO I HAVE TO DO EVERYTHING FOR YOU HUH? Why is that? Because your father is a multi-millionaire? Because you're the million dollar princess? Why should I, especially; with the way you've been treating Jami and Ali lately huh?" [color=black]"He's standing behind his beliefs."[/color] "N...no, Mar...Marshall. It.....it's because.....it's because I'M PREGNANT." [color=lightblue]"WHAT?"[/color] [color=black]"Oh my God! Oh..my..God!"[/color] [color=lightblue]"She's pregnant!"[/color] [color=black]"She is pregnant!"[/color] [color=lightblue]"She's pregnant! She's pregnant!"[/color] "Marshall! That's why I've been so moody lately; and why I've been getting into fights with Jami and Ali these last several days, and I know that you've always wanted to be a father and we're finally going to be a family, but to ensure that. We need to tie the knot. Don't do it for me, do it for our baby." [color=lightblue]"I can't believe it, Scott."[/color] [color=black]"This.....this is a shock. Will he marry Jody on Christmas Eve?"[/color] I was quite shocked when she told me that she was pregnant, but the biggest shock of it was that we only had sex once ever since we had been together and it was two weeks ago on the day before her birthday. I was so filled with both; shock and surprisingly; happiness. With the fact that I was gonna be a father. I then walked over to her and picked her up. [color=lightblue]"Oh look at that Scott, she's pregnant. What a happy day."[/color] [color=black]"I think that's our answer, D. They will be getting married on Christmas Eve, but the biggest surprise is that Jody is gonna have a baby."[/color] [color=lightblue]"There's gonna be a Little Moose."[/color] [color=black]"What a shocking night this was for Moose but he's happy. Moose is gonna be a father."[/color] [color=lightblue]"We gotta get everything planned, Scott."[/color] [color=black]"Ya damn right we do. It'll be the biggest way to end the year."[/color] Jody told me that she was due in July but didn't have a specific date yet. I was so filled with excitement to the fact that I'd be a father for the first time. I had never really given much thought on being a parent but if Jody was indeed going to have my children, then who was I to stop her? After that exciting news, things actually did start to change for the better but only for a short time. A few weeks after the news was delivered, Popular Model had their popularity vote results night. They also ended up passing up some new rules apparently. There was only going to from now on be a three member team and the two lowest would be forced to retire. I kind of found this quite baffaling really for them to announce this right away, but if you think that was baffaling then take a gander at this. I didn't vote because each person was only allowed one vote no matter what and the last thing that I needed was a war on my hands with the ladies, but much to my surprise. Jody ended up reaching the top to rank 1. I remember spitting out my water when I heard those words. "How in the hell did that happen?" It's not like I wasn't happy or anything but for Jody to just rise from rank 5 to 1 when not that many people favored her just didn't make any sense, but oh it gets even better my friends. Rank 2 whom was originally Ali ended up going to the bottom with Jami because rank 2 went to Leanna, and rank 3 went to Lita. I was dead shocked at this and so was everyone else. My God, how the hell did those two end up the bottom when they had been at the top 3 years running? I began to think of the inevitable that Jody may have had something to do with this but I digressed with her being pregnant. Unless, of course she went behind my back and made it public that she was pregnant and getting married and that made her popular but to take her to rank 1? Nevertheless; I was crushed that Jami and Ali went to the bottom and were forced to retire and so were they. Because Jami and Ali were forced to retire and it crushed them to think that they actually had to do it. To try and lift their spirits, Jordon and I threw them a small party along with several of our friends to show them that it didn't matter at what place that they got in. They were both still #1 to us and would always be. Jody apparently; felt the same way too, (despite that she actually rubbed it in their faces of her being in 1st now), decided to make it up to them by having both of them in her wedding. They were at first hesitant to do it with Jody's new developing attitude towards them but I insisted that they were in the wedding as well. It took a while, but they agreed but said that they would only do it for me and not Jody. The road was tough for the next couple of month's but we all managed and we were finally able to make it there..........buuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuut. It all went down hill, or should I say; into a 180 because nothing could have struck my heart like a bullet when the truth was revealed to me the day before the wedding. On the 23rd of December, I received a FedEx package in the mail, thinking that it was a wedding present from some on. Shortly after my parents left to go and make sure that everything was ready to go. I received an anonymous phone call that day. Telling me that the anonymous caller was the one who sent me the package and that inside was a video that would reveal a shocking truth to me. "I warn you, the contents of that video will be quite shocking. I suggest at proceeding with extreme caution." And indeed, the contents were quite devastating. It turned out that Jody, Leanna, and Lita were actually working behind the scenes with their boss in order to sabotage the voting process so that they could rise to the top and leave Jami and Ali scattered in the wind. "Oh my God!" Oh, but it only gets worse my friends. Anonymous informed me that their was another scene on that video that I needed to see and so I did and I couldn't believe it. It was Jody and her boss getting it on willingly; and it made me sick to my stomach, but the biggest upset is, is what she told her boss. "By the way; what about Burlew's child?" "Oh; that! Ha, don't worry; I was never pregnant with that man's child. I simply made that story up as a means to hold on to him and to rope him in to marrying me." "Why not just ditch the bastard?" "Because, I need him still. He has no idea that he is but a pawn in my ultimate grand scheme of things, but enough of that. Give it to me. Satisfy me, unlike that twit couldn't do. Oh yes!" "Oh my God!" "As you can see, Jody has been playing and lying to you this whole time. I'm sorry my friend." "No! I thank you, anonymous. You just prevented me, from making the biggest mistake of my life." The next day, on the day of our wedding, was going to be the biggest day of my life because of what was about to happen but I was a patient man and could wait for the right moment because I wanted everyone to hear of what I had to say about her. When we were at the altar and after the preacher had done the prayer and everything else, Jody and I spoke our vows to each other, but we decided to do our own. "Marshall! Ever since I first met you I have always had this feeling in the pit of my stomach that felt like butterflies telling me that we were always destined to be together. And now, as I stand here before you, not only as the mother of your child, but also the women who loves you more then anything in the world and I know you share the same feelings for me. There are no words that can describe of how I feel about you then this. I love you!" I wanted to get it over with right away but since she lured me into a false sense of security from the beginning. I decided to take a page from her book before doing so. "And now at this time, Marshall shall now speak his vows to Jody." [color=lightblue]"Uh oh!"[/color] [color=black]"Yup!"[/color] "Jody, those have to have been the most beautiful words that I've ever been told. I'm speechless! I've been waiting for a long time to stand right here in front of all our families, friends, and loved ones of how exactly I feel towards you from both back then and now." [color=lightblue]"Uh oh! Jody!"[/color] "Jody! We've been together for nearly a little over two years now and we've had our ups and downs. Nonetheless! Two months ago when you told me that I was gonna be a father. It had to have been the greatest moment and best news that I had ever been told and ever sense you told me that wonderful news. I've now come to see you in a different way just as I do tonight. There's an old saying that goes that when you find out that your girlfriend or wife is pregnant. You love her even more because of the love that you will have for your child. And ever since I've heard those words from you. I see you in a different way yet again. Tonight; Jody, I not just see you as my soon to be wife and not as the mother of my child, but Jody. I need only look into your eyes tonight and I see the true you. I see you for what you truly are." [color=lightblue]"Ohhhhhhhhhhh! Ohhhhhhhhhhhh!"[/color] "A no good lying, SLUTTY, BITCH!" [color=lightblue]"Ahhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh!"[/color] [color=black]"Woooooooow!"[/color] [color=lightblue]"Oh no!"[/color] "HOW COULD YOU DO THIS? HOW COULD YOU DO THIS TO ME, MY BROTHERS, AND MY SISTERS?" "What's wrong with you?" "YOU WANTED EVERYTHING SO BAD? That you would lie? That you would use both; my emotions and Jami and Ali against me?" "I'd never....." "You wanted everything so bad that you would do whatever it took to get it? By whoreing yourself out to your boss as well as Leanna and Lita to rig the voting process? And then you would lie to me about being pregnant just to keep me rapped around your finger and then show me a picture of our unborn child???" [color=lightblue]"Think it was a mistake."[/color] [color=black]"Duh!"[/color] "Jody! I have made some bad mistakes in my life. I admit it, I've done things that I regret." [color=lightblue]"Ah!"[/color] "But the difference between those mistakes and this is that I would never stoop this low. And if there's one mistake that I've made that's probably the biggest one by far. IT'S YOU! You disgust me to the core." [color=lightblue]"My goodness!"[/color] "You have brought great dishonor upon me since day 1 because since day 1. You have cared for nothing but your own selfish desires. You never gave a crap about us, or Jami and Ali. It has always been about you." "That's not true, it's not true." "Well, let me tell you what......................You don't have to worry about us anymore." [color=black]"Uh oh!"[/color] "Because as of this moment. Jody! Not only is the marriage off, but our relationship. IS OVER!" [color=lightblue]"Ah!"[/color] [color=black]"God! The relationship is over."[/color] "WE! ARE! THROUGH!" [color=lightblue]"She's crushed!"[/color] [color=black]"Uh oh! A women deceived her man, and now her daddy; OH MY! Moose, just nailed."[/color] [color=lightblue]"Hey wait a minute."[/color] [color=black]"Mr. Crowley!"[/color] [color=lightblue]"Look out, this a sacred ceremony. This is.....Jody get out of there he's gone berserk."[/color] [color=black]"Moose, is.....is destroying. Her comes the boss man, and Burlew, knocking the hell out of that bastard. Oh my God! Look out!"[/color] [color=lightblue]"Not that!"[/color] [color=black]"Look out!"[/color] [color=lightblue]"Not on our wedding night."[/color] [color=black]"Jody's boss, trying to get out of the Tombstone, but Burlew is too strong."[/color] [color=lightblue]"Deadman Incorporated!"[/color] [color=black]"Tombstone Piledriver! Moose just dropped Jody's soon to be ex boss on his head."[/color] [color=lightblue]"Jody don't do it. Don't do it Jody."[/color] [color=black]"Jody in the face of the Moose. The audacity of this women of what she has put this man and his family through, and Moose. Just piefaced, his soon to be ex bride."[/color] [color=lightblue]"Look at this, not the lovers ring. Oh no! Scott, it really is over."[/color] [color=black]"Ya damn right it's over."[/color] [color=lightblue]"The game is over."[/color] [color=black]"But what will the repercussions be? Moose just assaulted both; Mr. Crowley and Jody's boss. Moose assaulted....."[/color] [color=lightblue]"More importantly; he assaulted daddy's little girl too."[/color] [color=black]"And look at the look on that face. Oh my God!"[/color] [color=lightblue]"Hell knows no furry; like the wrath of a woman scorned Scott. Look at that!"[/color] [color=black]"Oh my God! OH MY GOD!"[/color] |
Darkness-RyuSep 28, 2014 2:18 PM
Sep 6, 2014 3:04 PM
#27
| Keep up the good work my friend |
| IM A ISH! http://i.imgur.com/XsnQ67O.png |
Sep 6, 2014 3:13 PM
#28
ISH29 said: Keep up the good work my friend Txs, Ish! |
Sep 7, 2014 9:10 AM
#29
| I don't know what to say... other than you completely supresied me and I'm so... happy to finally be fooled for once. A great backstory, can clearly see effort put in it. Now I'm just curiose of how it will co-op with what is going to happen. |
Sep 7, 2014 10:17 AM
#30
Carn0 said: I don't know what to say... other than you completely supresied me and I'm so... happy to finally be fooled for once. A great backstory, can clearly see effort put in it. Now I'm just curiose of how it will co-op with what is going to happen. Yeah, I think I surprised myself a little also, especially; since this is without a doubt the longest chapter that I've ever written in either club. |
Sep 7, 2014 11:32 AM
#31
| um I thought the phrase was "time heals all wounds"? |
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Sep 7, 2014 11:37 AM
#32
greatgreenman said: um I thought the phrase was "time heals all wounds"? It is, but a lot of people completely disagree with that and always say that it never heals all wounds because if the wound is deep enough, especially; if it's a mental wound it can remain forever, and not even time can heal all physical wounds either. |
Sep 7, 2014 11:44 AM
#33
| Still reading it but I'd like to point something out: With the commentators or whatever you want to call them, Its confusing when you transition their comments with your regular dialogue. I thought they're in the crowd with everyone else (which its confusing enough that there's a crowd involved) but they're somehow able to speak to your character as well as speak among themselves? Maybe a change in format, a modifier like italics or something, or even a change in tense can make it more clear that its a separate dialogue from your own. Idk, I think the commentary format needs work. Just some constructive criticism. Now back to reading. |
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Sep 7, 2014 11:47 AM
#34
| Yeah, I'll take that into consideration. I've tried using the bold but it never works for me. So, yeah; I'll probably put them in italics or something else. Txs for pointing that out. Oh, and their not speaking to my characters, their speaking out on their own on the situation. Kind of like in Dio's story, but they won't be in every chapter nor play in any major part of the story. They just serve for fan base pretty much. |
Darkness-RyuSep 7, 2014 11:56 AM
Sep 7, 2014 11:53 AM
#35
| Okay it became a little clearer in the end, but still it was kind of distracting. I'd suggest finding a way to point out that its a separate dialogue, maybe put in brackets or something. So I'm assuming sometime after the wedding you revealed the tape to the police, which is how she is in or was in prison? Interesting chapter for sure, I always like back stories, and this was rife with drama. I wonder how Nefertari will take hearing the news |
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Sep 7, 2014 11:55 AM
#36
greatgreenman said: Okay it became a little clearer in the end, but still it was kind of distracting. I'd suggest finding a way to point out that its a separate dialogue, maybe put in brackets or something. So I'm assuming sometime after the wedding you revealed the tape to the police, which is how she is in or was in prison? Interesting chapter for sure, I always like back stories, and this was rife with drama. I wonder how Nefertari will take hearing the news Stay tuned and find out, hehehehe. |
Sep 9, 2014 12:34 AM
#37
| I really do to know what to say... I mean... REALLY, as both admin and a reader... |
| Mon-Love club: http://myanimelist.net/clubs.php?cid=39529 The Shape of happiness might resemble glass... Even though you don't usually notice it, it's still definitely there... You merely have to change your Point of View slightly... and that glass will sparkle when it reflects the light... |
Sep 9, 2014 1:43 AM
#38
Disgaea said: I really do to know what to say... I mean... REALLY, as both admin and a reader... was afriad you would say that, anyway ya da admin so... |
Sep 9, 2014 5:03 AM
#39
| Yeah I don't wanna be that guy, so we'll talk it through and come to a reasonable compromise without derailing anything ;) But as a reader, man that was dark and brutal, seriously would have even attempted murder for that, and I'm not liking these announcers, they should stay in wrestling or rings/area of combat, so the writer and expresses the characters feelings and junk, shake it up |
| Mon-Love club: http://myanimelist.net/clubs.php?cid=39529 The Shape of happiness might resemble glass... Even though you don't usually notice it, it's still definitely there... You merely have to change your Point of View slightly... and that glass will sparkle when it reflects the light... |
Sep 28, 2014 3:10 PM
#40
| Chapter VIII Remorse and a Surprise! After telling her my story and with myself feeling deep remorse for my past mistake. Nefertari pretty much spent an entire hour holding me in her arms. She held me very close and kept me in a tight embrace that I never felt before. Something that Jody never did for me whenever I was down on my luck or something bad had happened to me since she was nothing more then a power hungry dictator and cared for only her own self being. As Nefertari held me in her intimate embrace, I could feel her heart beginning to race and mine as well. Probably because she held my face close to her chest and her lovely; ample breasts were right there in my face. Tell ya one thing, she wasn't ashamed to hold me close to any part of her body, but that's a mamono for ya and in all honesty; I didn't really care if they were right in front of my face. Truth be told, I was actually kind of glad she was holding me like this. I felt a soft warmness coming from her, despite the fact that she was indeed cold blooded with her still being part reptile. It was like she could actually feel my pain and wanted me to just forget about all that and truth be told I wish I could. There were times in my life that I just wanted to forget about her and wish that I never had met her and that none of the events that had transpired those years ago had actually took place. After what had seemed for hours, Nefertari finally; released me from her embrace and just looked me in the eyes. I didn't know what it was but for some reason I felt like Nefertari had this sense of a motherly love that a mother gives her child after a terrible incident and yet she was the oldest child of her house and wasn't a mother. Perhaps, it was a certain trait that her mother, Ahhotep has that she inherited. She then pulled me in and kissed me yet again, but it was different this time. It was more passionate, especially; when her tongue invaded my mouth and pulled my tongue into hers. While Jody may have indeed been my first through sexual intercourse to my deep regret. Nefertari was my first kiss since they had this stupid rule in their house that kissing was never tolerated even after marriage. Yes, it's stupid but just bare with me here. Anyway; after sharing a deep and passionate kiss with me. Nefertari pulled away but then hugged me again. If Jody's parents saw this, they'd probably say that she was trying to seduce me but I doubt it or her kisses wouldn't be this loving and passionate and she wouldn't hold me like this. Anyway; afterwords, Nefertari then lay me down on the sofa and then began to move her body on top of mine and honestly; I started to get a little chilly now. "Uh! Nefertari! What are you doing?" "What that whore did to you is unforgivable. She even stole from you your virginity, but I will give you what she could never do so Marshall. Allow me to show you how a true woman would love a man such as yourself." Ok! I could probably go out on a stretch here and say that she may have been trying to seduce me, but in all honesty; I still didn't care. Call me crazy, but as Nefertari's body was crawling over me and leaned in to kiss me again. I could feel this sense of wanting to be with her. It was as if Nefertari herself was actually sent to try and heal me, mentally after everything that had transpired over those many years, but maybe that was just me speaking from a unethical point of view. However; as much as Nefertari wanted to go all the way with me as I could see it in her eyes after she pulled away from me again from kissing me and as her tail started moving down my pants, the doorbell rang. Nefertari didn't seem to pleased about it, though it was good to see that people were finally; learning their manners. "I'd better see who it is." Nefertari uncoiled me and let me up from the couch. I then made my way to the door and opened it. It was Lora and with some other woman who I deemed to be another mamono. "Lora? What's going on and who's this?" "Hi Marshall! Sorry to be of such a nuisance to you but I need to ask a favor of you. Since you have more then enough room in your house. I was wondering if you could look after this lady for a while?" "WHAT?" "WH.....WHAT ARE YOU ASKING LORA???" "I know that this seems so sudden and is unprofessional of me to ask this way but you're the only one around here that has a heart of not turning a lady down in her time of need. So, will you help?" [color=blue]"This is not gonna go well for me, especially; if she is indeed a mamono."[/color] |
Sep 28, 2014 3:26 PM
#41
| Frist the cock blocking and now a new girl life must be really coming at him fast but I wonder who is this new girl and what monster is she? |
| IM A ISH! http://i.imgur.com/XsnQ67O.png |
Sep 29, 2014 6:02 AM
#42
| I wanna know what she is... damn you and you're cliffhangers. >:D join us next time to see just what kind of a mamono Marshall shall start to have in this O so worng timeing. |
Sep 29, 2014 2:25 PM
#43
| Wow, Nefertiti has a lot of love she wants to give, that or she's relentlessly seductive, good thing another girls stepping in now, otherwise things would have got heated really fast |
| Mon-Love club: http://myanimelist.net/clubs.php?cid=39529 The Shape of happiness might resemble glass... Even though you don't usually notice it, it's still definitely there... You merely have to change your Point of View slightly... and that glass will sparkle when it reflects the light... |
Oct 4, 2014 9:30 PM
#44
| Chapter IX Rare Among Rarity! Ok, just a quick recap of all that's been going on in here. I joined the IEP so that I could learn more of the mamono's with my curiosity getting the better of me. I was given a great piece of land by my grandparents and the government had a house built for me in rapid time. The house ended up being that of a ranch house that my dad designed back in high school. I have a co-ordinator named; Lora, and my exchange partner is a high class lamia. An Apophis named; Nefertari and things have been going pretty well and quite lucid I might say. I mean, the woman can't keep her lips away from mine. I was worried that we were gonna end up going all the way when Lora came back and had another mamono with her that she was now asking me to look after for a while. "This is Vixen Vulpine. She is a very rare breed among here kind." "What is she?" "Vixen Vulpine? No, it can't be!" "Nefertari, you know this girl?" "Yes! She's the Black Inari. Vixen Vulpine!" "It's been a long time, Nefertari. So, you too are living among this fine human here. I can see though that you have not taken him yet, perhaps I will." Nefertari clenched her fists for the first time as her tongue hissed in and out of her mouth like an actual snake. Something told me that this wasn't going to go to well for any of us, or me. The black inari looked over towards me those black eyes and spoke directly towards me. "Well, aren't you going to invite me in, human?" "I do have a name you know and it's Marshall." "I have no interest in your name as of right now. Now, am I going to be invited in by a gentleman, or should I have to file a complaint to both of our governments that my host is refusing to let me into his home as well as being very rude?" I let out a sight and invited her into the house. As she walked by me carrying some luggage she gave me this what looked like sadistic smile and an evil grin towards Nefertari. I then turned my attention towards Lora. "What the hell is going on here Lora?" "I'm sorry; Marshall, but no other family seems to want to take her in due to her nature." "And what praytell might that be?" "I think Nefertari can better explain that then I could." "Black inari's as Lora said are a very rare breed. There's only a few of them of their kind, but unlike the typical inari. Black inari's are known for their aggressive, sadistic behavior. They can be very sadistic around a man that they've taken a liking to and with them having the instincts of a fox just like any inari, they can be very cunning if they wish. In other words, to make a long story short." "Too late!" "Too late!" "Everything that the typical inari is, the black inari is the opposite, except for one trait that they always carry. They're extremely; loyal to those who have won their trust. Which for the black inari is almost an impossible feat." My life flashed before my eyes as I took in the useful yet very frightening information that Nefertari had just filled me in on. If it was the usual inari that Nefertari had filled me on then things probably wouldn't be too bad, but a black inari and being the opposite? Great! I knew right then and there that I was about to relive the false loving life with Jody all over again. I guess it is true what they say, "time just loves to repeat itself." "I know it might seem tough but can you do this until we find her an appropriate place and Nefertari, is this alright with you?" "I don't have any objections if she currently has no place right now. My only concern right now is keeping her away from my Marshall." She then wrapped herself around me as if Vixen was already trying to take me from her or something. "What about you, Marshall?" "Well, sadistic or not, I just can't let a lady out in the cold. So, yes; I accept!" "Good! Now, can I get you to sign a few papers here real quick?" Nefertari released me and I signed the papers to indicate that I had taken in Vixen until they could find her an actual place. After signing them, Lora gathered them and told me that she'd be in touch and left. I then turned my attention towards Nefertari. "Say, Nefertari?" "Yes, darling?" "You mentioned before that you know Vixen and that she clearly knows you? What's your relation towards her?" "Well, she and I....." "She and I are stepsisters." My mouth dropped to both seeing Vixen right there in front of us and what she had just told me. "St...st...step.....stepsisters???" Here it was coming crossed my mind right away as I now felt like I was trapped in a dark and twisted version of a Cinderella story and that I was the prince and one of these two were gonna be chasing after me and somewhere around the corner there was a third sister. I also couldn't believe of how Vixen was now dressed as her true self stood before me. Her long black hair was completely left down and popping out of her hair were two black fox ears. Her entire outfit just like when she arrived was pure black as night with these strange symbols over them. She continued to carry the same sadistic smile across her face and popping out from behind her back seemed to be a tail, but not one or two or no. She had nine tails. Yes, nine tails that too were black as night. "So, you two are stepsisters?" "That's right, and I'm not about to allow her to beat me. I'm going to beat her again just like I did last time." "Beat you? Like last time? What are you talking about?" "Oh she didn't tell you? So sad! Very well, I shall then." "Vixen, don't you dare!" "Try and stop me." Vixen then moved her hand in a circle in Nefertari's view and she collapsed to the floor. "Nefertari!" "Don't worry; she'll be fine. She's just enjoying a good sleep. Now then, what should I do with you my delightful morsel? Of course, I shall first tell you of what she didn't." |
Darkness-RyuOct 4, 2014 9:38 PM
Oct 5, 2014 5:26 AM
#45
| I'm already likeing the inari. And step sisters ya say this is gonna be intressting. |
Oct 9, 2014 12:03 AM
#46
| Wouldn't a black Inari be a youku? Otherwise I feel that could be a bit racist, apart from that holy crap! That was a surprise to me! Sisterly rivals now, turning up the heat :) |
| Mon-Love club: http://myanimelist.net/clubs.php?cid=39529 The Shape of happiness might resemble glass... Even though you don't usually notice it, it's still definitely there... You merely have to change your Point of View slightly... and that glass will sparkle when it reflects the light... |
Oct 9, 2014 3:20 AM
#47
| Well, the reason I say black inari is because I'm kind of leaning towards like the fallen maiden that became a black inari. So, I'm not being racist because I'm not but apoligize if it does sound like that. |
Oct 12, 2014 3:37 AM
#48
| LOL sorry i might have used the wrong word to explain myself on that one, just thought with diffrent colour variation a "black inari" would still be an inari, even if her personaility is diffrent that shouldnt really classify her another species, much like us all being diffrent but under the same race human, thats what i ment by my comment but thats the long explination, you can still do it your way I'm just throwing this out there to think about, esspecially if a black inari is like our albino's |
| Mon-Love club: http://myanimelist.net/clubs.php?cid=39529 The Shape of happiness might resemble glass... Even though you don't usually notice it, it's still definitely there... You merely have to change your Point of View slightly... and that glass will sparkle when it reflects the light... |
Oct 24, 2014 10:50 PM
#49
Here's what I was kind of leaning towards for the Inari. http://img2.wikia.nocookie.net/__cb20131001091153/monstergirlencyclopedia/images/thumb/1/1a/Inari_Koyoi.png/300px-Inari_Koyoi.png Chapter X Similarity! Ok! Well, it turns out that I'm not the only one here with somewhat of a dark past. According to what Vixen has elaborated for me is that it appears that I'm not the first person that Nefertari has actually been with. In fact, it turns out that Nefertari was to be a prize for a tournament that her father was to be hosting. In the times of her father when it was time for the lady of the family to be married. They would host a tournament and the one who survived it would be declared the strongest and worthy enough to marry the lady. In other words, it was a weak die and strong survive tournament. According to Vixen, Nefertari left her home with the aid of her mother; Ahhotep, (whom we already know that I've met), so that she could meet someone so she didn't have to be forced to marry someone that she didn't love. So, she enrolled in the IEP to meet someone of my world and ended up meeting me. I have not regretted a single moment that I've spent with Nefertari so far and I'm sure she hasn't either. She and I are very much the same. We both; have had something that we did not wish for, even though I almost ended up marrying the wrong women had it not been for someone who looked out for me. Nefertari is being forced into a marriage that she does not desire. What kind of a father would force his daughter into something that she does not care for? Does he not care for her happiness? Anyway; that was the least of my problems right now because it turned out that Vixen was here for two reasons. One, was to humiliate Nefertari since she always took great pride into doing that. Why you may ask? I have no freaking clue. The second reason was to bring her back home so that the tournament can commence for it turns out that her father now knows where she's at. Actually; I strike my remark to her first reason. It turned out that she wanted to humiliate Nefertari as well as enjoy herself in some lucid way. How? Well, (in a sarcastic manner), enjoy! The last thing that I remembered was that after she told me of all that was going on. She used the same type of spell on me and put me into a sleep. Some time later I ended up waking up with my hands and legs bound to my bed, naked. I am not kidding. I then saw that Nefertari was also bound but to a post and exposed as well and who had also just woken up as well. I blushed and turned my head. Sure, it wasn't the first time that I had seen her naked since she slept with me naked last night but it was the first time for her to see me like this. I saw her blush as well as she ended up being forced to show a smile. I also needed to confirm Vixen's story if it was true or not and so I asked her but before I could she spoke. "I'm sorry; Marshall! I didn't expect any of this to happen. If only.....if only I hadn't signed on for this, this probably never would have happened. I should never have met you and everything would be fine." I couldn't believe at what she was saying but could you blame her? No doubt, she probably already knew that Vixen had told me what she didn't want me to know. I wanted to untie these bonds and hold Nefertari but that went downhill when she came back in and wearing the most weird attire that I'd ever seen. "Ah! So, you're both awake! Excellent! Then this will be more fun then I imagined." She was wearing a mask that only covered her eyes and was wearing black lingerie that barely covered her breasts let alone the lower half of her body. She actually; did have a pretty hot body to be honest. She was probably around 5'3'' with a slim belly and nice legs. Despite the fact that she had nine tails and fox ears she wasn't that bad but my focus was on Nefertari not her. She also had this and I'm really not kidding here, a riding crop. I swear to God that is true and the worse part was, was that I had no idea of what she was going to do with it. "Vixen! Why are you doing this? Leave Marshall alone, he doesn't deserve this." "Oh shut up, Nefertari!" She then took the crop and started spanking Nefertari with it for no apparent reason. I had to do something to stop it. Sisters or not, I had to protect Nefertari from this. "Leave her alone, Vixen! If you want to punish someone then punish me instead but leave her alone." She at first stared at me and raised her eyebrow. She then forced a sadistic smile and just laughed. "Hahahahaha! Well, a human who's willing to take the fall for my sister? How quaint, but I'm afraid that there's more to this then you know boy. You see, you're just strapped there to simply observe and nothing more while I teach big sister here a lesson of disrespecting the wishes of her father. I'm quite certain that daddy already knows of Ahhotep being here earlier. I can smell her scent here still and is probably giving her some punishment right now and until he gets here. I've been given permission to give Nefertari here any form of punishment that I see fit, but if you're a good boy and just observe. Maybe, I'll give you some fun once she is taken back." "So, you're merely just here to keep Nefertari strung up until he gets here and that's it? You set it all up just to find her. No wonder, you've gone through so many different homes because it was all just to find Nefertari. This is wrong and disgraceful. Doesn't he care at all about his daughter's happiness? Or does he just simply pick the guy that his daughter is suppose to marry just like that? No lady should have to go through that type of process and should be allowed to choose of who she does and doesn't want to marry." Vixen's smile vanished and turned into a dark look. A look that was now about to punish me as well. "What makes you think that a mortal like you could possibly understand our father's ways huh? You pathetic seed sack." She started whipping me with her crop. Thank goodness I was on my back and not my front or she would have. Well, you get the idea. She then ceased for a minute and continued to speak. "Our father's wishes will be honored and not some pathetic mortal like you will never be worthy of someone like her. You're better off with a slug because that is what you are boy. You may have good looks and not that bad of a body I'll give you that, but to our father when he see's you. You would be better off with one of your own then one of us." She started whipping me again like a master whipping his dog for being bad. I could hear Nefertari crying as Vixen continued and she eventually called out. "Stop! Stop! Leave him alone Vixen." She did stop and returned her attention to Nefertari with tears running down her eyes. The whips didn't hurt that bad and I was just fine with nothing broken or anything but just a few red marks. Vixen held the crop under Nefertari's chin and looked her in the eyes. "Tell me, sister! Do you care for this man?" She didn't speak but I could see her face blushing and then I saw Vixen's face drop in shock. "You.....You do, you fancy this man don't you? No, no, no, don't deny it. I wonder though as to how father will take it when he learns that his oldest flesh and blood has fallen for a pathetic mortal like this? Nevertheless; you will honor his wish and will go through the same thing that many of the other women in his families have gone through and since we still have plenty of time. I think I will have some fun here with your caretaker." She took off the mask and came over to my side and started licking the red spots on my body that the crop had hit. "I'm sorry that I wracked you Marshall. Let me make you feel better." I had no idea of what this woman's problem was. I mean, one minute she's this sadistic fox who started wracking us with a crop and then all of a sudden she turns into this loving fox who's apologizing and trying to make me feel better. She was licking every red spot that was now on my body and it actually did feel good. Was this girl suffering from a split-personality disorder? If so, I could be in big trouble here. She licked the spots on me and started moving down to my shaft and started playing with me. "Since Nefertari can't have you. I think it'll only be fair for me to make you feel good." And with those words she started licking my shaft and I was starting to get hard. Eventually; I became fully erected and Vixen had this big smile form across her face. "Look how big you are. Perhaps I misjudged you. I can't take you the way I'm sure you would like me to since I too have sworn chastity until daddy gives me to the right man but I can at least make you feel good." She then took my shaft into her mouth and started sucking me down hard. I saw Nefertari turn her head away as the tears ran down her cheek. I wanted to tell her that I was sorry and that this wasn't what I wanted but with the pleasure that I was feeling right at the moment was almost unbearable but I didn't take my eyes of her. Seeing her tear up like that caused a tear to run down my cheek as well. After sucking me hard I eventually; came in Vixen's mouth and she cleaned me up and herself. She then looked at me and saw the tear that ran down my face and looked over and saw the same with Nefertari. She then looked at me again and actually had this sad look on her face. Good God, was this girl suffering from multi-personality disorder or something because one minute she's sadistic, she's pleasurable, and now she's sad. What was going on? "You really care about Nefertari don't you and she cares for you." She then bent down to my ears and whispered something in my ear. "To be honest, I'm actually glad to see someone care for her but alas. We must abide by what our father wants. Perhaps; if you were able to prove yourself we might be able to stay but until then. We must abide by his wishes and Nefertari knows that." She then untied me from the bed and released Nefertari from her bonds. "Come sister, we must get you ready for daddy will be here soon to get us. I suggest that you get ready too Marshall. You should at least look descent." They then left the bedroom as I sat on the side of my bed. I couldn't believe as to what was going on. I hadn't been with Nefertari for more then a day and she was forcefully being taken from me. Wasn't there anything I could do for her and worse, was their anyway to help Vixen? I wanted to help them, especially; Nefertari. I mean, this wasn't the medieval times anymore for crying out loud. I then got my cellphone and called the only person that could help me out in this sort of mess. "Lora? I need your help! That inari that you brought over? Well....." |
Oct 25, 2014 10:13 AM
#50
| Well... I has no comment. Continue :D |
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