| Uhm this is my first time here so... These pages are just sample. First of all, please ignore the story and focus on my art style. |
JaeYeolDec 5, 2015 2:53 PM
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| Yet these eyes cannot see anything! |
| sorry i was googling how to post pics here >.< |
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| Page 2 isn't coming up for me. I like it. The shading pattern you've got on their skin is interesting / a little weird/distracting with how evenly spaced it is, but I could see it working in your favour. (especially in p1, left panel.) Similarly the sky 'pattern' also sticks out a lot in p1, top right - maybe because there's a little too much empty space above his head. The dynamic pose in p3 is pretty nice - you might get flak for 'red eyes' given how popular that sort of thing is (e.g. "sharingan ripoff", but that obviously depends on what else you're doing with it.) Since pg2 is missing, I might be missing out a lot of context, but the dialogue is intriguing enough - if maybe a little cliché. "conversate" was a bit of an awkward word choice for me, but maybe it's more widely used than I know of. tl;dr going off the two pages I can see, I'd say it looks quite promising, and I'm digging the dynamic poses and shading in p3 and p1;left. |
Ckan said: Page 2 isn't coming up for me. I like it. The shading pattern you've got on their skin is interesting / a little weird/distracting with how evenly spaced it is, but I could see it working in your favour. (especially in p1, left panel.) Similarly the sky 'pattern' also sticks out a lot in p1, top right - maybe because there's a little too much empty space above his head. The dynamic pose in p3 is pretty nice - you might get flak for 'red eyes' given how popular that sort of thing is (e.g. "sharingan ripoff", but that obviously depends on what else you're doing with it.) Since pg2 is missing, I might be missing out a lot of context, but the dialogue is intriguing enough - if maybe a little cliché. "conversate" was a bit of an awkward word choice for me, but maybe it's more widely used than I know of. tl;dr going off the two pages I can see, I'd say it looks quite promising, and I'm digging the dynamic poses and shading in p3 and p1;left. Hey, thanks for the feedback :) And sorry about page 2, i'm not sure why the link is not working but here is the link: http://postimg.org/image/4pcrpkum1/ Regarding the red eyes, the red eyes are there to indicate that his 'demon' powers are active. If you focus on page 1 first panel, you can see that his eyes aren't red, yet. About that awkward word XD, i'm not that good when it comes to english. |
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Honeypop said: Pretty awesome! Page 2 ain't coming up for me either Page 1 kinda puts me off a bit. I love Pg3 though! I think you should use a different tone for the backgrounds (panels 1 & 2). Maybe put a small white outline round the characters Page 2: http://postimg.org/image/4pcrpkum1/ Thanks for the feedback, Can you please tell me why page 1 puts you off? |
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| 1st page: i think that the fluidity is not ok, i dont really see the connection (maybe it's just me....) and i think you should need to use more case 3rd: Its a nice pose, i like it Keep it up :) |
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| panels too big instead of 3 big ones maybe ur could more w/ smaller ones page 2 blonde guy's left eye a little higher than his other eye |
| Better than anything i could do so i applaud you. |
LadyBovine said: Better than anything i could do so i applaud you. haha thanks i guess xD |
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senseiiiiiii said: Page 3 is great Hehe arigatou senpai :) |
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| I like your art . |
| Wohooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooo |
| That looks really nice. Post more pages once you've made them ^w^. |
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Evildragon16 said: I like your art . Thanks :) SukiYume said: That looks really nice. Post more pages once you've made them ^w^. Hehe thanks for the encouragement >.< and sure, i will definitely post more once i've made them Aoshinah said: Page 2 & 3 are amazing! I would love to see more :D Hehe thx, sure once i i finish drawing more. But I need context before i start drawing again, ATM i have no stories/plot to use |
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| Thanks :) |
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| That's a really nice work! In fact I would love to see more. Keep the good effort :)! |
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LaloChii said: That's a really nice work! In fact I would love to see more. Keep the good effort :)! Thanks :) potato said: page 1: -the dots from the screen tones are too large and should be downscaled. they're supposed to represent tones, not look like a distracting pattern. page 2: -looks better overall, but again, the tones are too large and distracting especially bottom left. -his hand is weird and his pinky is too short. but hands are difficult to draw overall. i suggest looking up hand tutorials and references page 3: -again, his hands look weird and fingers are too pointy. there are supposed to be 3 joints -the lighting doesn't make sense. it seems to be from below so his entire hand should be white (unshaded) -would look better if his hair had some highlights too. remember the light source though Thanks for the feedback. I will surely keep this advice in mind |
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| Really digging the artstyle. I would like to see more. :D |
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Daitomodachi6 said: Really digging the artstyle. I would like to see more. :D Hehe thanks :) |
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| The screen tone (is this right?) on the first page is a little too much. It kinda overpowers the drawing, which is very good, btw |
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