| What did you got? I mean the food. Yea, I know cook is hot, but you certainly noticed what was the dish too :) |
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| Beast is right, you probably could have added a bit more dettails, especially about the environment. Seems like you still liked to put attention on the dettails of the Devil's appearance though. You perv! XD The exchanges between you and your companion are so cute, I love them XD Can't really tell what's going on in the last part for now, we'll have to see what happens in the next chapter! :3 |
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| Chapter 05: ” I’m gonna make him an offer he can’t refuse.” I hope the devil will stay there until she wakes up. She was not awake when I "left", she will be scared, when she notices I’m not there. Damn, I have to organize my thoughts, even when I should have to concentrate on how to stay calm in front of that leader, I still think about Seira. Staying calm is for her sake too, if I mess up, there will be no chance to escape. That devil offered her help, I’m not a big fan of "meet my friend, even if you dont know" plans, but I cant do anything else, thats the only hope. If I dont accept her help, we are surely dead, if I accept and its a trap, it will be the same result, but there is a slim chance it’s not a trap. It’s still better than nothing. While my thoughts are like a train on the loose, we reach a door. That door is a huge one, abou 4 meters tall, but really simple, there is no carvings, fitting for a gang leader. 1 of them opens it and the other just pushes me in. I hear the noise of the lock, well, from now it’s up to me, I can’t run away. I look up and the view takes away my breath: There is an about 2 meters tall woman, dressed in different animal's fur, the room is even more frightening, it’s full of with skulls, I dont know if those are human or animal skulls but I will definitely not ask it, and since the room is big (just like a throne room), means really a lot of those frightening skulls. She speaks up: "Am I that frightening little boy?" *Gulp* I still can’t tell anything, just how does that devil expected I can manage this plan through, I will be killed here. "Well, that was my plan to scare you, but it would be problematic if you would stay silent. How should I make you talk... What if I take off something..." "That would make the situation even more awkward to me." I TALKED!!!! Looking at her face I’m more surprised about I opened my mouth. "If you would do it too, that would not be awkard." Is she a friggin black widow, mate then kill?... "I’m more comfortable if we both stay dressed." "If it’s your wish. Come closer." I decided, from now I will gamble, make or die. "Im comfortable here too." I tried to sound cool but my still trembling legs didn’t supported it. "You didn’t wanted to talk first, now you talk back. Its better for you if you come here..." "If you say so." I take few step toward her but she showed with her right hand "Closer" so I had to go even closer to her. "Do you want to survive?" "Of course" "I can assure you survive, and maybe your little friend too, if you do as I order you!" That supposed to be frightening, but that close I don’t see the skulls, so I was quite relaxed, at least, a bit more than when I was pushed in. Am I that used to monsters, she doesn’t scare me… "And what would that order be?" "Dont rush, first I have to check, are you really that special as my men told it." "What did they tell?" "They told you wear strange clothes, that is right, I see those clothes are surely weird. The other is you smell different than other humans." "In what way?" (If I keep my mind shut down, no thinking, I can be quite brave with breaking her talk with a question) "They say and I smell it, you are different, its not possible you are from here. Now, I will do the final check, so dont struggle!" DONT STRUGGLE??? What does she plan to do with me... It caught me off guard and she licked my face. SHE LICKED ME!!! It’s what kind of a examination... "Mmm, you surely are different, your taste is... I cant describe it, I dont know that taste, but that made it sure, you can accept my order." "What is it?" "Its an easy, boring job, you have to abduct someone." "Abduction? Boring job?" "Yes, it is. I prefer killing, it’s more fun. I’m not used to accept boring jobs, but since you are here, to test you, I can go easy on you with that." "I cant really say no, right?" "You are smart, if you dont accept it, or if you fail, you are dead, and your little friend will watch it. So you really have to make it." Every evil could hide behind her, she stepped over being a simple evil, and that smile... *shivering* "I will accept your offer, I would like to hear the details." "Good answer. There is a little mansion, past the village. There lives someone who always tries to cross my plans. Just bring him to me." "Is he some kind of hero of justice? Would not be easier just to kill there?" "I like your thinking. You are wrong with the first part, he is a killer, and my reason to punish that man is because he kills my personally picked targets. The 2nd part is basicly true, but simply killing him would not satisfy me, so just bring him here." "I understand. I would like some weapons and armor." "Why do you need it?" "If he resists, I have to use force." "I see. You don’t need those. If he wants to resist, just threaten him, you are a powerful magic user from another world. He is a coward and seeing your clothes, he will be convinced about it." "If he is a coward, even me could handle that job." "I wanted to hear it. Now go, you have to finish that job fast until this time tomorrow." "I will." I turned away and opened the door - its open -. Before I left, I heard her "goodbye" words: "Dont try anything funny, you will regret it!" Those words still ring in my ears as I headed out from the cave. Some men followed me until I went out. Sunshine, will it be the last time I see you? Slowly walking away, I looked back and the fighters are still at the entrance. They really want to make sure I don’t go back immediately to rescue Seira. With that on my mind, I went out of their eyesight and probably now they can’t really hear me. I looked up to the sun, clenched my fists and swore: "Seira, I will save you from there." Thats another case how will I do it... |
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| See? This is exactly what I meant when I told you that you had problems saying "no" to girls XD Still, you're building an interesting kind of character here. The way you talked back at the leader was impressive, even if you were so scared to the point of not distinguishing an animal skull from a human one XD Let's all do our best to save our poor Seira!  |
"You keep changing the shape of your eyes. How does that even work?" -AbhLeaderKrelian |
| Chapter 6: A cliche meeting I walked down in the forest, deeply sinking into my thoughts. If I dont count my arrive, thats the 1st time Im alone. I should have to sort out my thoughts. I have time for that, the town is far enough to let me think a bit. This world is not mine, I just ended up here, and since I dont see any option to get back to mine so far, I have to find out a way to survive. I have 4 options, and it depends on „do I trust that devil?”. The simple „running away” is out of question, I dont have the heart leaving Seira behind to that monster. The 2nd possibility is if I dont trust her words and somehow I accomplish my job and hoping she doesnt trick me. Thats not really possible, I dont see a way to abduct someone, especially if that someone is strong. The 3rd is if I dont trust her words, but I go back to save Seira alone somehow, but since thats even more impossible, -going against a whole gang and a damn strong monster- if I want to save her (and I want), I need help, so that leaves me with the only true option, I have to trust that devil and do as she said. Why am I want to save Seira that much? Do I love her? No, I dont even know her too much. Do I trust her enough to not let her die? Thats more possible, and saving her would highly raise my chance of surviving. I should not have to think about it now, the town is close now –I guessed the distance wrong- and have to find that „Flying Fish”. I guess Seira would find it fast, there is no way she didnt heard about it from her parents, and given the name, „Fish” is pretty much water related. Finding it should be not hard for me too, I just have to ask someone, the man from yesterday was really friendly and hopefully the others here are also friendly. The more problematic stuff is to not draw to much attention. Thats quite impossible now, with my clothes, I will be the center of attention. With a more girly face, I could go with the „Im a new kind of a monstergirl” plan. That idiot thought puts my mind at ease and I even start to smile. Hardly I can stop myself from smiling as I reach the entrance of the town. It looks like a nice village, I dont see any trash on the „streets”, they really care about keeping it clean. It looks like a big village, but thats just my guess, it doesnt have the feeling of a little town, where everyone knows everyone. I step to the first person I meet there: „Excuse me, can you help me out? I want to find the „Flying Fish”.” He points to a direction and says: „Its easy to find, just turn left there at the corner and you will see it, its hard to miss it.” „Thank you for the help.” Finally a bit luck, its close, so hopefully I will not draw too much attention. In about less than 2 minutes, I step in the „Flying Fish”. That bar is big and clean. Quickly I count at least 20 tables –with 4 chairs/tables-, its not the cheap kind for the drunkards who spend every money on alcohol. As fast as I can I sit down at a table, out of sight of the other guests. I dont have to be the center of attention, if I will be found that „easily”. Soon, I hear a voice, a girly but not too high pitched. „I arrived, My Lord.” „You surely mistaken me with someone, Im just a commoner.” „Your clothes tell another, you are the one Im looking for.” „I dont think, why are you sure?” „I saw you yesterday in the same clothes…” „Yesterday? Wait, are you the one who will help me?” „Yes, I am. I waited for that moment.” That starts to be a bit cliched, feels like a story of a „hero” teleported to another world and „coincidentally” he looks like the someone mentioned in a prophecy that tells he will save the world. And noticing her clothes I cant help: „Arent your clothes a bit cliched? A mysterious person in hoods, dont tell me you are going to give me a mystical weapon with a cool name…” „Unfortunately I cant provide it yet, but if that is your wish, I will try…” „Forget it. Let me get to the point. How can you help me and why do you want to help? But 1st, im pretty thirsty but I dont have any money, could you treat me to something here? Anything is good.”[/i] Asking a girl to treat you, really „gentleman”-like, but now I cant afford it… „Yes, My Lord.” She goes to the bar to get my drink. As she puts down my drink, I saw her hand and something gold. That looks like an armor, its a good sign, probably she can fight… The drink is sweet, a way too sweet but Im too thirsty to be picky about it. „Before you answer my questions, tell me your name, I cant call you „The mysterious girl in hoods” all the time.” „Im Laila.” „Im Tibor. Nice to meet you Laila.” As soon as I finish my line, someone steps in, and that someone can mean trouble to me. „Laila, we should go to somewhere else, that man is 1 of the people who caught me yesterday.” „We can stay here, look! He looks too drunk to recognize you.” Even after her words, I cant be calm, because that man, after getting his drink, sits down at our table. |
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| Well, being hero from another work has it's perks, like free drinks, but let us see if that drink will be spiced with something :) |
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| Good chapter. I really appreciate how you stopped to think about your situation instead of just being dragged around by the events. As for: Shadowt5 said: "Why am I want to save Seira that much? Do I love her? No, I dont even know her too much. Do I trust her enough to not let her die? Thats more possible, and saving her would highly raise my chance of surviving." That's an easy answer! It's because you're a proud lolicon! XD |
"You keep changing the shape of your eyes. How does that even work?" -AbhLeaderKrelian |
Shadowt5 said: "Why am I want to save Seira that much? Do I love her? No, I dont even know her too much. Do I trust her enough to not let her die? Thats more possible, and saving her would highly raise my chance of surviving." That's an easy answer! It's because you're a proud lolicon! XD[/quote] Ssssh, someone will hear it! |
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| I fell behind for a bit (blame beast XD) but I'm back! I really liked the reference to Fortuna in chapter 3, unexpected and funny =) Your writing is improving slowly but surely, keep at it! |
JPAI27Dec 12, 2014 1:43 AM
| Chapter 07: The shocking truth „Yoo guys!” *hiccup* -I can’t believe it, he really had to sit here.- „Behave! Dont call My Lord „guy”!” „Laila, its not a problem and please stop that „My Lord”.” „But he…” „Sorry” and I grab Laila’s hand to pull her away. „Why do you let it?” „Because if we anger a drunk man, who is actually an enemy, he will be agressive and probably attack us even here.” „But I cant stand it.” Suddenly something came in my mind: „I have an idea, if he will be even more drunk, probably he will tell some information unconciously, that could be useful for us.” „If you want My Lord.” „Please drop that My Lord, really.” „Yes, My King.” „You really think thats better? Please try to call me simply „Tibor”.” „But its not allowed for a servant to call her master by his name.” „Here and now I will allow it for you.” –if not, she could make that situation worse. And now it would take too much time to convince her about we are not master and servant. „I-if you want.” „Good” and then we head back to the table. „Sorry for the wait, she is new around here and dont know how to behave with others.” „No problem” *hiccup* „What brings you here?” „I wanted to be far from my boss and its far enough from that sadist.” „Sounds like a bad workplace.” „Its not bad, its like being a slave. I joined for the easy money but thats a nightmare. She doesnt care about the money, she just kills and tortures.” „I guess there is not an option to quit…” „Tomorrow maybe but anyone who tries to run away during the „work” gets killed.” „What is that job? Maybe we would join if it sounds good for us.” „You better not, you 2 look too soft for that sadistic killing. It would be sure you would have to do the torture, the newbies got the dirtiest jobs. If we could sell that little fish, we could get a nice money, there is not much around here.” -I have to be calm, I have to be calm!!! It would make the situation worse if I yell „She is not a fish!!!”- „And that „new guy” will be shocked when he returns…” „That guy knows her?” „Possibly, they were brought in together.” Its good, he doesn’t remember me. „Anybody would be shocked seeing his partner dead.” „Thats not the worst part, she will be beheaded and her head will be hanged at the entrance.” „Ugh” „And he will be killed at that moment.” Fortunately he blurted out some information but none of them were to my liking, and his voice become more and more clear with every moments, possibly he is becoming sober. We have to leave before he notices that guy is me. „Im really sorry but we have to go.” Before he would be able to tell something, I stand up and pull Laila out of the bar. „We have to go now, we have to save her!” Without thinking, I blurt out those words to Laila as soon as we reach an empty alley where no one hears us. I cant help but Im too angry to think clearly. „We cant go there now, we have to wait…” „We cant wait, she will die if we are not fast enough!” „We have to go to my house first.” „I said we have to hurry, the whole situation changed!” „I know, but now you are angry, clear your head, and we have to talk before we make a move.” „I-I know it but…” I cant continue my speech, my tears start to fall as soon as I realize my desperate situation, I cant save Seira and myself, thats the end of the line… „I can help, come with me My King!” „Will you?” I dont even care about she called me „King” again. „I will. Please follow me!” I nod and follow her without saying a single word. I can be suddenly angered but I can calm down fast. I realized it doesnt help if I try to act on my own and she is the only hope. She wants to help, I think. We went out of the town and kept walking long in the forest (the opposite direction of the cave) before we reach a hut. I think its her house. We step in and I look around. As it looked like from the outside, its not really big and it has only 1 room. There is only a single shelf with some things that look like fruits, a small table with 2 chairs and a bed. „Please sit down.” I sit down and she starts to speak: „I need you.” „Ehh? Arent you the one who will help?” „I help you but you have to become my King, truly.” „Please explain why do you keep calling me a Lord or King.” „Im from a far away land, a land of a long forgotten kingdom. My goal, my purpose of my existence is to revive that kingdom with my King. And finally I found you.” „Slow down, why do you think Im the King of that kingdom?” Long forgotten kingdom, that girl does not make any sense… „You are different from the people of this world and your demonic energy is the proof. Only kings have that different demonic energy.” Now demonic energy, but that doesnt sound out of place here. I have to play along with that, if I want to save Seira. „I understand it now. I am this King and you are not my servant! You are equal, be by my side!” I really said that? But well, there is no man who would refuse an offer of becoming a king”. „Im happy but we have 1 last ritual before we revive the Kingdom together.” „What is it?” A ritual, that sounds bad, in the movies thats the moment when the mysterious person turns into something horrible and eats everyone to complete the ritual, but the next moment I become absolutely stunned. Thats the 1st moment when I see her. She dropped the hood and stands before me. A gorgeous girl with short, purple hair, she is as tall as me, covered in gold, if I could say that little cloth covers much, and its not even a cloth. It looks like more of a shell, a shell of a bug, the only piece that looks like a cloth is her black panties. Her figure is what I would call perfect, not too slim, and I see her nice breasts. If that would be not enough, her words make me speechless: „We have to became one in soul and body!” |
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Shadowt5 said: Im happy but we have 1 last ritual before we revive the Kingdom together I had to re-read this and previous chapter to realize you've got a Khepri girl. Are you using Encyclopedia's universe? |
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beast_regards said: Shadowt5 said: Im happy but we have 1 last ritual before we revive the Kingdom together I had to re-read this and previous chapter to realize you've got a Khepri girl. Are you using Encyclopedia's universe? Yes, I choosed the fanfic format because I was not able to pick only 2 companions (but I will not go overboard with the companion number, I want to work out their personalites good enough) |
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| FUCK FUCK FUCK XD Ok, I have a huge problem. Is it normal to hear Akatsuki's voice everytime the Khepri girl speaks!? No because seriously... I-I can't stop doing that. Holy crap XD And yes, I think you should have slowed down the dialogues in some points to add a bit more of description from time to time. Quite interested to see the next part now, mr. cliffhanger XD |
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SydoKiller said: FUCK FUCK FUCK XD Ok, I have a huge problem. Is it normal to hear Akatsuki's voice everytime the Khepri girl speaks!? No because seriously... I-I can't stop doing that. Holy crap XD And yes, I think you should have slowed down the dialogues in some points to add a bit more of description from time to time. Quite interested to see the next part now, mr. cliffhanger XD I didnt thought about it but yeah, no surprise she sounds like that. Im tryin to improve to add more details. |
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| Sexytime incoming. Why have have you stopped using quotes like this, "example," and instead you do this: „example"? It's a bit odd XD |
| ^ Jp is jealous because he didn't think about doing something like that. ù_ù |
"You keep changing the shape of your eyes. How does that even work?" -AbhLeaderKrelian |
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Come at me bro. I'll fight you faggot. |
"You keep changing the shape of your eyes. How does that even work?" -AbhLeaderKrelian |
| You will not be fighting me, but rather a champion I have selected specifically for this battle. May she bring me honour and glory! |
JPAI27 said: You will not be fighting me, but rather a champion I have selected specifically for this battle. May she bring me honour and glory! and nosebleed too XD |
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| Chapter 08: „Hero” of the harem „What are you doing?” „I will complete the ritual.” „I know, but why are you undressing?” „I just took off my hood, thats my usual appearance.” She could not even hide she is not a normal human, calling that usual. „You are almost naked, but skip that, what do you mean with „becoming one in body and soul”?” „We have to have sex.” Now my eyes are wide open even more: „You are just joking, right?” „No, we must have to do it.” She said it a bit hesitant, as I noticed… I never was bad at poker, maybe I could bluff myself out, if I read her expression well. „If we really have to, we will do it, come!” I lie down on the bed, if my guess is right, she is as shy about it as Seira and she cant do it. She comes closer slowly and gets on the bed over me. Dammit, I was wrong about it, really wrong, possibly she just cant talk about it. Now I cant back away. Her face is really beautiful as she is closer, her lips almost reach mine but she stops suddenly. I dont know what happened, she looked determined until now. It can be my chance… *creak* and the noise of steps. I have a deja vu feeling… „If you cant do it, I will do it.” That voice sounds really familiar and now a blue face comes in my view. – Thats the Devil I met there!- and now she tries to kiss me too????? But she cant because suddenly Laila takes the initiative and kiss me, she pulls her head away after few seconds. Just what happened, I try to sit up and catch my breath. Does she really wanted it too or just tried to provoke Laila. I really should not think about it, I dont think, I could figure out a devil’s thinking. I cant sit up, because Laila is still on the top of me. „Please could you get off me?” „No, we have to continue it.” Moments ago she stopped the kiss, I thought she is still embarassed about it but looks like she just want to step to the next „phase”. „We are not alone as you can see…” „Andariel please leave.” So her name is Andariel, it sounds familiar from somewhere… „I would be fine with watching it –is she crazy, I have the feeling she would join when we dont notice it in time-, but we dont have time for that now, that was enough, Im sure he will not leave you now.” „Thanks Andariel.” The world sure turned upside down, if I have to thank to a devil. „Thats nothing.” She grabbed Laila’s legs and started to pull her down. She tried to resist but the devil is slightly stronger –if I would have to guess, Andariel is much stronger, just Laila position was better for holding her place.-, as last resort she grabbed my pants. Damn, thats no good she will pull it down that way. „Andariel, please let her off, that way she will pull down my pants!” „I would not mind the view.” That smile again… She just said moments ago we dont have time for that. Did I become the MC of a harem anime when I didnt notice or what… „But I would mind it!” That little interjection from me helped, she had to answer and she could not hold Laila as strong and she crawled back on me. „At least let me stay like that yet.” *sigh* „Okay…” She is totally dissatisfied, her expression showed it pretty clearly, she wanted to see it… „By the way, why are you here now?” „Because the situation changed, we cant save the girl the way we wanted.” „But that means there is another way to save her, right?” „Right, and that way we can help in the resurrection of her ancient kingdom.” Looks like Laila is lost in her thoughts because she doesnt even say anything. „Hmm, that sounds great, let me hear it.” „Since I cant bring the Sahuagin girl out through the entrance , we have to go another way, through a tunnel but to accomplish it, we have to split up.” „Is there a door, that can be opened only from 1 side?” „Exactly, and here comes the part about her kingdom: To reach that door, you have to go through an ancient ruin, where lies something related to the kingdom…” „What is it? And why is it here, its far from my kingdom?” Now she is listening. „I dont know what is it, it can be anything. „Hmmm, we dont have another choice so we go with your plan and I think Laila is on the same opinion.” „Good, now get ready as fast as you can, I will wait for you outside.” And she went out of the house but before that, she put down something. „Dont die on me because you didnt eat anything.” So thats food, and by the way, if she was in a hurry, why did she has time for that little prank before it… I dont have time for thinking about it, I try to rush Laila. „Laila now you really have to get off me, we have to go.” And she jumps off me, wow, now she really wants to hurry. I wait sitting on the bed, I dont have anything I can do. I gaze outside of the window, covered in the „light” of the moon, it does not look scary. I avert my eyes from the window and I catch the last moment of her preparations. She grabs a little dagger and attach it to her waist. „Thats a nice dagger.” It really is, the whole grip is covered in gold and for a moment I saw some writings on it. „Come, we dont have much time – now she really wants to rush-, I will explain everything about it while we get there. „Okay” We go out of the house, joining Andariel and head off to the ruin. „So hows the plan exactly?” „I will take you 2 to the ruin and then I head back to the den to bring Seira to that door.” „That sounds easy, but I guess it will be hard.” „Possibly, I dont know what will wait for you in the ruin, there can be many traps.” „I figured…” Even if she promised, she didnt say any word while we go through the forest again. The forest wants us to lead to our goal, I feel the trees open up a path just for us. After about an hour we reach the entrance. „Now I have to leave you 2.” Laila cant really wait and steps in. „Wait boy!” I turn back to the devil. „Take care of Laila!” Ehh, if I have to take care of her, we are doomed… „And even if we part ways here, we will meet and I will want something from you at that time.” She doesnt let me answer as she turns away from me and walks away. I cant do anything else, I cant even care about what she wants, it can be anything if we succeed, I join Laila in the ruin. |
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| I can see a deep "Ecchi/Harem" knowledge from you in this one, I wonder why ù_ù Kind of awkward how the scene started with you laying in the bed with the girl and ended up with you saying "That's a nice dagger" XD How long will our hero be able to keep his pants on!? We will discover it pretty soon! ...Maybe. ù_ù |
"You keep changing the shape of your eyes. How does that even work?" -AbhLeaderKrelian |
Shadowt5 said: harem You stay true to the hero of the harem stereotype. :-) At least better half of it, you didn't fell off the bed shocked that you see a girl. SydoKiller said: How long will our hero be able to keep his pants on!? I know the answer to that :-) As long as he wants to. True harem show heroes fight off the temptation with self-control that puts Buddhist monks in shame. They feel the need to explain the misunderstanding even to female childhood friend who enters the room it wrong time even though said friend is perfectly fine with joining the fun. Sometimes they receive a minor help when they lose their consciousness due to heavy nosebleed or other random c***blocking events like explosions, but majority of them stay true and resist the temptation head-on in truly heroic way (waving their hands wildly and just stuttering a little)! |
beast_regardsDec 15, 2014 1:05 PM
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SydoKiller said: I can see a deep "Ecchi/Harem" knowledge from you in this one, I wonder why ù_ù Kind of awkward how the scene started with you laying in the bed with the girl and ended up with you saying "That's a nice dagger" XD How long will our hero be able to keep his pants on!? We will discover it pretty soon! ...Maybe. ù_ù beast_regards said: Shadowt5 said: harem You stay true to the hero of the harem stereotype. :-) At least better half of it, you didn't fell off the bed shocked that you see a girl. SydoKiller said: How long will our hero be able to keep his pants on!? I know the answer to that :-) As long as he wants to. True harem show heroes fight off the temptation with self-control that puts Buddhist monks in shame. They feel the need to explain the misunderstanding even to female childhood friend who enters the room it wrong time even though said friend is perfectly fine with joining the fun. Sometimes they receive a minor help when they lose their consciousness due to heavy nosebleed or other random c***blocking events like explosions, but majority of them stay true and resist the temptation head-on in truly heroic way (waving their hands wildly and just stuttering a little)! From tons of ecchi-harems XD And I put in ecchi clichés on purpose. You will see how strong is the harem hero attribute in the mc :D |
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JPAI27 said: XD your mad poker skills failed. Waiting to hear more on this topic. I used to play poker a while ago and I was pretty okay in it. |
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SydoKiller said: I play poker too. My poker face is unrivaled. Dont be overconfident about your skills! :D  |
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| Chapter 09: Bug phobia That ruin looks abandoned for a while already, the stone walls are dirty and all of the torches are burned down. The tunnels are narrow, lots of curves, maybe pits. „Laila could you make light with something? Without light we will trip all the time and bump into every walls or even worse, fall into a pit.” –if there is any, and I didnt even mentioned what would happen if we dont notice a trap- She already took the initiative and makes fire with stones and wood (I feel useless now, I should have to do that…) She notices my expressions: „Dont worry, Im ready for any situation, you dont have to do anything.” „Thats just make it worse, I dont want to be that useless.” After that she hands over her dagger to me. „Why? I dont see you have any other weapon, that way, can you fight?” „I have my own method to fight, that dagger is just an extra for me, it will be more useful for you.” „Thanks. By the way, is that dagger has something special trait or is it just a dagger?” „It has a little portion of my demonic energy.” „Wow, how did you do that?” „We, Khepris are able to manipulate demonic energy, exactly to siphon out from someone or even imbue it into objects, but into anything. It has to be from my country, with magic engravings.” „I see, so that was the words I noticed on the grip and you imbued your energy into it, but I still dont understand why is it useful in the dagger.” „If you injure someone with that dagger, it throws his/her energy off balance and cant use his/her magic for a while, but it depends on how strong is her/his magic. If its too strong, it will be no longer than couple of minutes, if its weak, it can be even an hour.” „Sounds really cool.” – against a strong magic user, its still almost like suicide to use it- „And how can you fight exactly now?” „I can materialize the energy and use it to hit my opponents.” „And what if you cant siphon too much energy?” „Do you see those golden parts of me?” „Those are like my shells, hard like a metal.” „So you can fight even without that dagger.” Seeing her slim figure, I still cant imagine she can hit her opponent hard, even with her shells, wait… „You said shell, what kind of monstergirl are you exactly?” „Do you know about scarabs?” „Now I know why do you looked familiar, scarabs, from Egypt.” Her whole appearance has egyptian feeling, I should have to notice it earlier. „Egypt?” „Never mind, its a country from my world.” „You seem tired, should we rest here?” „Wow, I wanted to say I feel a bit tired.” Its night already and I didnt had any rest since I left the prison. She starts to pack out from her bag, a sheet, -a pretty big one, it would be enough for maybe even 5 people to sit down on it- some food… Will it be a picnic… „Please sit down.” I sit down and she hands a food to me, it looks like a sandwich, some kind of fried meat between 2 slices of bread. „Mmm, it is delicious, you are a good cook.” „No, Andariel made it.” „Awww, next time I really would like to try something made by you.” „I cant cook.” „I see.” That sounds bad, how can we survive after this dungeon trip, she cant cook, I dont know but highly possible Seira cant cook too, and me, better not mention it. Seira, I really hope Andariel can take her to the meeting point, and we can make itt here too, I want to see her again. I sank into my thought and I notice just now Laila stood up and went to the next turn, probably exploring what lies ahead. Suddenly I hear a scream, I jump up but the next moment Laila runs exactly to my direction and she didnt slow down so she knocked me down. Its probably instict but I push her off me –she really has soft skin- and stood up to defend her. I look forward, to the left and to the right but I really dont see anything. She sat up already and still looks scared. „Its coming.” „Whats coming and from where? I dont see anything.” „Its there, look down.” I look down and I notice something moving: It looks like a bug, maybe a cockroach or something like that. „Is it the one that scared you?” „Yes.” Like a lighting, it comes in my mind: „Scarabs are basicly bugs, right?” „Yes.” „And you are scared from that little creature, right?” „Right.” A bug afraid of bugs… -I really should not tease her, she looks too cute now- „Dont be scared.” I step on the bug and step to her and hug her. „Look, its gone now.” I point to the flattened bug. „Can we stay like this?” „As long as you want.” She really is clingy, but I dont mind. After a while, she speaks up: „I want to kiss you…” I dont even answer, my body moves on his own as I kiss her. „Can we go further?” And now she doesnt let me to answer as she lies down and pulls me on her. Just as I continue kissing her and put my left hand under her chestplate to feel her breast, I feel something thrust into my right leg. As I turn around, I notice someone sneaked behind us. |
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| *squints* not sure if that thing that poked your leg at the end was a dick (Laila is a futa?! O.o ...or the person sneaking up behind you is just mega confident?) or a weapon.... Will the next scene be "ah, I'm bleeding!" Or "get that thing back in your pants!"? Waiting to see... |
JPAI27 said: *squints* not sure if that thing that poked your leg at the end was a dick (Laila is a futa?! O.o ...or the person sneaking up behind you is just mega confident?) or a weapon.... Will the next scene be "ah, I'm bleeding!" Or "get that thing back in your pants!"? Waiting to see... Laila is under me at that moment, so futa Laila is out of question. |
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JPAI27 said: Will the next scene be "ah, I'm bleeding!" Or "get that thing back in your pants!"? It will be "It's not how it looks like!" misunderstanding scene. It is a must for ecchi-harems. |
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| Feel free to place your bets, everything will be "revealed" next time. :D |
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JPAI27 said: "*squints* not sure if that thing that poked your leg at the end was a dick" Pffff... I thought I was going to die XD Nah, I'm pretty sure Shadow's is ok with her girls not having any particular "optional". Maybe seeing her going all lovey dovey after seeing you stepping on a bug felt a little bit unnatural, you could have worked a little more on that scene in my opinion. Really cute, it's going to be interesting to find out if the pic-nic is going to turn into a huge orgy or something like that XD |
"You keep changing the shape of your eyes. How does that even work?" -AbhLeaderKrelian |
SydoKiller said: JPAI27 said: "*squints* not sure if that thing that poked your leg at the end was a dick" Pffff... I thought I was going to die XD Nah, I'm pretty sure Shadow's is ok with her girls not having any particular "optional". Maybe seeing her going all lovey dovey after seeing you stepping on a bug felt a little bit unnatural, you could have worked a little more on that scene in my opinion. Really cute, it's going to be interesting to find out if the pic-nic is going to turn into a huge orgy or something like that XD More and more ideas about what could happen, *tension intensifies* its gonna be a revealing next chapter. :D |
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| Chapter 10: Fighting for someone A bit far from us is another monstergirl, her lower body is the tail of a snake. „Is she a lamia?” She is the first monstergirl I recognize. „Almost, she is an Echidna, worse than a simple Lamia.” She answered while she got up. She looks determined, there is no sign we were about to have sex. Thats different from the time in her house when she didnt want me to let go. „Can you defeat her?” „I will.” Her answer feels like more „I have to for you” and not „I can”. At that moment the pain in my leg comes back. Its a deep wound and bleeding pretty much. I dont see anything weapon-like near me, so she used magic, because she was not close enough to reach me. I try to not let out any noise that would show to Laila, Im wounded, she has to concentrate now. „Why did you come here, „Khepri”?” I feel the disgust in her words. „You dont have to know.” „Well, its not necessary for me to know it, I will kill you without hearing your reasons. Dont worry, it will be over fast, I dont want to be tired before taking that man.” „He is my partner, you cant have him!” „He does not belong to you, I saw you didnt mate with him yet.” She raised her hands, as she starts to form something, and Laila took a fighting stance, I cant recognize –its not like I would recognize it if its from my world, since I dont have knowledge about any martial arts-. Why didnt she use magic or her manipulation power? As it runs through my brain, I notice something black starts to materialize around her left hand. Possibly the Echidna noticed it too and pushed her hands forward, I dont see anything but she released her magic. Laila put up a little shield with that black energy but it was not enough to repel fully the attack. Some of them grazed her side, leaving line-like scars and her wing like armor is also damaged now. That was a really powerful air magic – I dont see anything liquid or burn mark, so it has to be air -, it even went through her armor. She decided to attack now, she runs to the Echidna with high speed – so she is not the powerful type but the fast one -, to hit her with a right hook. She reached her neck but it wasnt enough to knock her down. „You almost got me.” And right after that, she sweeped Laila’s feet with her tail to knock her down. „Now you cant do anything, you will die.” And she started to form her magic again. I have to do something but I cant stand up with my injured leg. I really have to, or she will die – Im a bad luck here, first Seira got into a bad situation because she met with me and now Laila -. I look around and realize I have her dagger, I can use it! If I could hit a vital spot, that could give a chance to Laila, as it would throw the Echidna’s magic off balance for couple of moments. As I pick it up holding it at its blade, I hope it doesnt need any activation. I throw it, aiming for her upper parts. It feels like hours until it hits her. . . . I look there and see I hit her neck, yeah, a vital spot, looks like my throwing practices at home paid off. Laila immediately realized it, she stood up like a lightning and reached to the dagger, to push it deeper. It ended fast, the Echidna wriggled for few seconds on the ground before she stopped moving. Laila threw the dagger away as she run to me. I saw she is crying, while she hugged me. „Im sorry.” „You dont have to say that, you fought for my sake.” „But you had to help me, even if you are injured.” „Dont worry about it, without you, I would be her prey.” „You really are my lord.” „And again, please stop it, we are equal and call me by my name.” I think she cant say it again, as she stopped talking now. „Please could you treat my wound before it becomes wo…” I could not finish my sentence, my conciousness fades away, everything goes blank slowly, I lost too much blood. Before everything went completely dark, I saw her worried face, with teary eyes. My last thought before I fainted, was I should have to cheer her up. |
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| Nothing stops h-scene better than death. Or bleeding injury at least. :) |
| Signature removed. It was too good for this cruel world. |
| Welcome to the world of throwing knives! XD We have to train together one of these days ù_ù |
"You keep changing the shape of your eyes. How does that even work?" -AbhLeaderKrelian |
| I liked the magic you described, both the Lamia's and Laila's. |
beast_regards said: Nothing stops h-scene better than death. Or bleeding injury at least. :) Combined with the appearance of the enemy. SydoKiller said: Welcome to the world of throwing knives! XD We have to train together one of these days ù_ù Write down the wished date. :D JPAI27 said: I liked the magic you described, both the Lamia's and Laila's. Thanks, I tried to fit Laila's magic with the Khepri's demonic energy manipulation, and air was fitting for the echidna because I wanted something that is invisible. |
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| Chapter 11: Level up! People say they see their life as a movie when they die, but for me, there was nothing, complete emptiness, darkness. There was only 1 thought: I abandoned 2 girls with my death: Laila and Seira. I had the feeling Laila could hardly move forward, even if we knew each other not even for a day, she was attached to me, but before that thought would continued, I heard my name. I heard it, am I not dead yet? I collected my strenght to open my eyes. That simple move caused a big happines, and not just for me. "I was so worried, I thought you never come back." "I had that thought too, I dont survive it." "I dont remember, what happened? My last memory is the echidna's death." "Soon after that you fainted from the blood loss." "I remember now, she stabbed my leg somehow." I tried to look down to my leg, but I cant. "Laila, can I ask something?" "Yes" "Why am I almost naked and why do you cling to me?" "I wanted to keep you warm." "And hows my leg?" I have to keep away the thought of a half-naked girl is hugging me, because if the blood runs out of my head, I will die now, definitely... "I put a bandage on it and infused a bit of my leftover demonic energy to heal it." "Can I try to stand up and walk?" "Dont hurry." "Wanna do it here?" If there would be a textbook about how to get off a girl from us, that sentence would not be there, but with her shyness it could work. "If you want." I really should learn that trick will backfire, 2 times fail is not just coincidence. "Im just joking, I just hoped you will get off me if I drop in that question." "I wanted..." "Laila, please, thats not the right time and place for that. We have to move, if we are late, it can raise the chance of Andariel and Seira is getting caught." "I will support you in walking." As I stand up, looking down, I see my own blood, there is really a lot, I would fall again if Laila would not support me. With her help, I dress up. Dressed up by her, I gained a Laila XP... Ouch, every steps hurt like hell, that wound is still not fully healed -how could I expect it with that little time, I dont even know how long was I unconcious-. "Will you leave the bag and everything else here?" "We dont need them anymore." Now I have time to observe her closely again, thats the first time when she is that close and we are not about -or at least she- to have sex. I notice her expressions, she tries to hide it but I can see she feels pain too, that echidna caused some painful injures to her too. "I think I can walk on my own now." "No, let me still support you." "I see you are in pain too, there is already enough pain for you to endure." "Supporting you will be never painful for me." "Just because you choose me, you dont have to "sacrifice" yourself because of me, think about yourself first." And we argue about it for a while, during that "night walk" in the ruin. That ruin is just too plain to be related to a high rank person tomb -because she gives of egyptian feeling, the first thing that comes in my mind it is a tomb-, but more fitting for hiding something important. If anyone would see that, they would not think there will be something big treasure or anything valuable. Im surprised just now, we walk for a while but didnt run into any trap. "Isnt it suspicious, we didnt see any trap so far." "You are right, maybe we are not the first here." That thought saddens her a bit, maybe she thinks the treasure mentioned by Andariel is already taken away. "Maybe they were sure nobody will come here, or they would not put the echidna as only guard here." That definitely not cheered her up. Should I mention I owe her really a lot now? Probably not, she would say its her duty and I dont owe her with anything. "Laila, when we get out from here with the "treasure" and Seira, and everything is calm around, I really want to spend time with you alone." "Alone with you..." "And what would you like to do?" "You have to decide." "That time will be for you, you can choose anything and I dont accept "you have to choose" as answer." "Could we finish the ritual?" "You really want to do. Its not like I dont want it, you really are a beautiful girl but I would prefer to do it when we know each other more." "I dont understand you." We cant go on with that topic, we reach a room that is bigger than the tunnels we went through, its like an arena, and in the middle there is someone. |
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| D'awww... when she said that supporting you would have never been painful... just... d'aawww <3 And well, glad to see that you escaped death. You knw, having you die like that could have been a little bit depressing to say at least XD You still have a lot of things to do, and your little Sahuagin to hug! ù_ù |
"You keep changing the shape of your eyes. How does that even work?" -AbhLeaderKrelian |
Shadowt5 said: and in the middle there is someone And that someone was Sydo. |
| Signature removed. It was too good for this cruel world. |
beast_regards said: And that someone was Sydo. Please let it be so! PLEAAAASE! |
| What the fuck!? No! XD |
"You keep changing the shape of your eyes. How does that even work?" -AbhLeaderKrelian |
| Thanks, yeah, I have much to do. And obviously NOT SYDO! XD |
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| Chapter 12: „We found it! or we found her…” She draw our eyes on her, it was not hard because that room was empty, almost completely empty, we saw a little platform with a book on it but not even a chair, not even a stone that sticks out of the plain walls or floor. She is a small girl –is she a child…-orange hair, red-orange eyes, wearing only a cape, probably –first Laila, now she, am I in the world of girls in cape…-. „Laila, could it be, that book is the stuff that is related to your kingdom?” „Im not sure.” „But the girl, is it possible for a human or monster to live that long?” „No, and I dont know much about the ancient magic, maybe somehow they reserved her.” „Hmmm” Slowly I start to walk toward the little girl –even if I would want I could not walk faster with that injury-, now her eyes are fixated on me. She does not look hostile to me, her eyes show more of some kind of curiosity. I stop few steps away from her and squat down. „Hello” Without answering she is staring at me still, it starts to feel a bit uncomfortable. „Do you understand me?” Still nothing, but I start to feel something, „what is this feeling…” „I feel, she is so cute, vulnerable, I want to reach out to her, to defend her, to take her in bed…” „Damn…” Without finishing her sentence Laila grabs my shirt and suddenly pulls me back. „Ouch, that hurt, why did you do that?” „She put you under a charming spell.” Now I see her point, the atmoshphere I felt earlier is gone now. „What is she? A vampire?” I cant imagine something else that is able to use charm spells. „No, she is a Familiar.” „Hmm, I see why was it that effective on me.” „Because you are a human, every magic is more effective on humans.” „Yes, we can say that.” I just cant tell what was the original reason… She would not heard it even if I would say that, because she went to the book. „Argh, almost forget it –how could I forget her- Laila, dont you know where is the door that connects to the lair?” „Its a hidden door, I cant tell where it is.” She doesnt even look at my way, she is immersed in the book. I start to look for the door, touching every possible stones, looking for a way to open it. After about half an hour, I feel a gaze on my back, good, Laila finished the book, I turn around but for surprise I dont see Laila there, but the little girl and she is not wearing the cape now, least to say, she is still not overdressed, but at least the important parts are covered, but there is something I notice on her arms, glowing words, but I cant recognize any of it. „What would you like little girl?” „Sorry” „Why do say it?” „Sorry for earlier, I didnt meet anyone for long and I got excited when you went to me –was she excited…-and my magic leaked out.” „No problem, I find you adorable without your magic too.” There is no turning back now, with that answer, I totally achieved the „harem hero” title, I hope it will end up with choosing a girl in the end and not continuing endlessly. She answers with a beaming smile. Right at that moment Laila joins us too. „Did you figure out what is the book about?” „Absolutely not” „Why?” „It was written in a language I dont know.” Is she that determined for trying to read it that long even if she doesnt understand it… „Okay, for now could you help me find the door?” „Of course.” From that moment Laila and me looking for the door, I didnt want to ask the girl to help, but she stays close to me all time during the search. After long time, I start to give up, there is no sign of a hidden door. I turn away from the wall and sit down, I need to rest a bit before I continue it, I put my back against the wall and as my head reach the wall, I feel I pushed in something. „THATS THE DOOR!!!!” I shout suddenly as I fall back. „Finally…” Okay, could it become more clichéd? That runs through my head as I look up and realizing my head is between Andariel’s feet, at least she is standing and didnt fall on me. „Uhmm, hello.” „You sure know how to arrive.” She pretended losing her balance and falling on my face. „Oopps, that floor is slippery.” Its absolutely not slippery, that devil, she did it on purpose. „Awww, dont lick me that fast, take your time.” Finally I pulled myself out. „That was close, you almost suffocated me.” „I wanted my „reward” for helping you and I can smell Laila scent on you.” „Because we were together while we got here –I realize she knows it but I still cant tell we almost had sex, because of Seira, I dont know how would she react hearing that-, so thats natural.” Is she jealous or really just wanted to do it as her reward… Finishing that line I turn to Seira. „I meet you again, Seira.” „Tibor, I was so scared.” „Me too, the thought they would hurt you…” „I wanted to see you again.” Even if she spent time together just for less than a day, she missed me, I realize it as we break down in tears. I dont know how long was it as we stood there hugging each other. „We should move, sooner or later they will notice Seira is not in her cell.” „Right, we have to go.” I turn to the Familiar: „You can come with us.” She was a bit surprised but she tagged along with us. Still holding hands with Seira, we walk through the ruin, exactly the same way as we went in. Laila was on my right side, sticking close to me, Andariel and that little girl followed us. Fortunately we didnt ran into anything trouble as we reached the entrance. „Should we go back to Laila’s house?” „No, its too small for 5 of us.” „Andariel, are you coming with us?” „I told you, I need something from you, exactly your help, so for a while I will join you.” „And anyway her house is too close to them, they would find us soon.” „Oookay, so where should we go?” „I know a town far from here, it will be out of her reach, and it would be close to the place where I want to go.” „Ok, so we go that way.” Taking a deep breath, we set out on a new adventure. |
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| And now we found out that someone wasn't Sydo. It is shocking. But it means that you shouldn't be under the effect of his power and can have some fun with the girls. |
beast_regardsJan 3, 2015 4:41 AM
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| What do you mean? That was obviously Sydo. >_> Three of them and Sydo in disguise all following Shadow... This can only go badly... |
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