| Come here to create short stories, or say some story ideas, other ppl would be able to use. |
| thank god....I've had writer's block for my books for almost a month now...it's driving me nuts... |
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| Haha. XD I have writers block right now, for a book i'm starting.. Hmm.. but maybe I could help you. What is your book about? I could give ya a couple ideas |
| this is the part i hate....because they're's so much I already have planned...yet at the same time my problem is I don't know what the book's about. It's weird I know... |
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| o.o... Well, what are some ideas you have? |
| I don't. Haha. Well kinda but not really sorta. :| I'll try to explain what I have so far...this'll be a long one so gimme a minute... |
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| Haha. Ok ^^ I'll try to comprehend as much as i can |
| Part 1 OK, so, the entire thing is under the title "The Last Ingress". In case you don't know the word "ingress" is another word for a door or entrance. In the tLI Universe ("tLI is short for the Kast Ingress), The Last Ingress is a supposively mythical "door" that, once opened, will grant you one wish, no matter what it is. No rules, no restrictions. It can do any one thing for you. Problem is getting there. Even if someone bothers to ever even discover the IDEA of the Last Ingress, getting any sort of real information on it is far and in-between. But even in the texts that tell the truths behind it, finding anything about it's location is near impossible. Opening it is another problem. Even if you happen to know how to get there, you would need the 3 Empyreal Keys to open the door. The Key of Light, Darkness, and Betwixt. Finding the Keys is another problem. They are another set of items shrouded in myth and mystery. No one knows what they look like, where they are, or even WHAT they are, truly. For the sake of someone trying to help me, I will state the information, of course. Each Empyreal Key represents the 3 Dimensions of Pure Existance: Light, Darkness, and Betwixt. Not only that, but they are made from these elements as well. The Key of Light is the pinnacle of purity and salvation, the Key of Darkness is the greatest evil and sin, and the Key of Betwixt is a pure mix of these two powers, stick in the middle in its' own grey area of existance. Finding the Keys is not enough however. One's will must be strong enough to weild them once obtained, too. For if not, the Key would reject its' user, and maybe even destroy them. Each Key resides somewhere within their respective realms, in the most deepest regions. |
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| Part II Inside the Universe, there reside different spots throughout the dimensions known as the "microcosms." Each microcosm lies somewhere throughout existance on the dimensional plane between Light and Darkness. Depending on where the microcosm is located will efect how it is shaped and how its' inhabitants, if any, will act and grow. For example, there is a world close to Darkness known as "The Dark Sands." It is an empty world, devoid of any sort of life. The only thing that makes up the world is its' wind, black sand, obsidian rocks, and deep chasms that seem to lead to nowhere. Another microcosm (that is a major part of the story) is located very far on the side of Light, and is known as "Flourishing Oasis." It is a beautiful world, with an expanse of blue rock and soil. It is teeming with life, both human and otherwise. Its' centerpiece is its' castle and surrounding town. The people are nice and friendly, and it is a fairly normal place. The microcosms are not fixed in their positions, however. If something happens to the world to darken it, or add more Light to it, its position will shift along the dimensional plane, as will its coordinants. Coordinants for what, you might ask? I will discuss that in the next post. |
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| Haha. That sounds pretty good ^^ I just put whatmy strory was mainly gonna be about in my blog, if you wanna check it out. |
| Part III As long as anyone can remember, seeping from somewhere in the Dark Realm are creatures known as the Shades. They come in many sizes and variations, but they all seem to have a basic shape: cat-like in appearance, they all generally have almond-shaped eyes with no pupil, triangular ears, and sleek bodies with long tails. Their entire being is grey in color. As their strength increases however, their appearances will change slightly, giving them a sort of rank. The lesser Shades will have only the basic appearance as stated above. The more powerful a Shade gets, their ears will get more "notches" into it. The most powerful kind known so far have 4. Also, their ears will slowly begin to rise in position. Those with 4-notched ears seem to have horns. Also, the higher the power, the more tails will form on the Shade. They seem to coincide with the notches, as the most powerful Shades will have at least 4 tails. The Shades are a deadly creature, for they rely on both pure animalistic instinct and also planned thought as well. Their brutality and tenacity stem from their violent instincts, but at the same time, they have the brain power to plan and think. A deadly combination. At some point in time, however, those started to appear who had the weapons and talents to destroy and combat the Shades. And thus, the Order of Light was born. The OoL and about coordinates of the microcosms will be discussed in the next post. |
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| Part IV The Order of Light is a huge and well-organized...organization. An entire system is set up for training and planning. Their only purpose? The defend the microcosms and eradicate the Shades. The High Council leads the Order with one Grand Master looking over the Council along with the entire Order. The heirarchy goes like this: Grand Master | The High Council (consisting of High Masters) | Masters | Apprentices (Enchanters/-tresses or Warriors) | Trainees It seems as if anyone born with the Art (ability) to fight the Shades have one of two powers: either they can manipulate and use the Magics, or they can weild a Weapon, known as Blades. Once a child, who's powers, if any, usually surface around the age of 12, they are tested and then inducted to be trained in the Order of Light. The Trainees are split into their respective groups of Enchanters/-tresses or Warriors. Once their training period os overwith (which usually lasts between a year or two), they are certified Apprentices. They are then put with a Master into a Squad that can consist of as many as 3 Apprentices to only 1 (though it is extremely rare.) Apprentices will go on Missions and train with their Masters until their Masters believe they are ready enough to take a Master's Exam to become a Master themselves. If that is achieved, usually they do not exceed any higher. Only those with extreme power and will can go on to be on the Council or even possibly the Grand Master, though that is usually put to a vote between the Council. So how do the Order members get from place to place among the microcosms? That's where the coordinates come in. They have developed many machines in their time, and one of the is a teleportation system that will "teleport" them to a given location. There are other ways of travel, but only those of high power can use them... |
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| whew....so that's the basic outline of how things work in the Universe...but there's still the actual characters to explain...x.x |
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| i'm not gonna do that right now... |
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| [sorry, have to do this...] 700 posts! wooting! |
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| LOL XD I GOT MORE POSTS THAN YOUH Yeaaa |
| ...anywho... how does it sound so far? |
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| Sounds pretty good to me ^^ |
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| hoho Ive decided to write a story out of boredom. Never done this before, do I post the first bit here..? |
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| I would go ahead. I think there needs to be another forum just for story HELP... |
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| Plot- and writing-wise, that was quite good. The only thing I'd say you needed to fix is your grammar with dialogue. At the end of a spoken statement, if it should end with a period but still has text afterwards, it needs to end with a comma, then the closing quotation marks. Also, any words describing the quote afterwards should not be capitalized, it is not a new sentence. Beyond that, this was most excellent. |
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| Sure. "Let's say that I am speaking this in a story. This sentence will end with a period, but it will have a description following it, thus it will have a comma before the closing quotation marks," Noa said. Like that. Also, the "Noa said." part is not capitalized, unless of course the first word needs to be, like a name. |
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| Sinats Beginnings I was a Celtic Berserker with wanderlust centuries past. Two beings kept me in my homeland though for years; Twin sisters which are identical in every physical way. One was a high druidess, the other a warrior of the Sidhe. After many years I could not choose between the two so I married them both. A few months later my wife Calet (the High Druidess) was taken. When our wife Telac and I found her she had been turned. The Vampire that had done so was gloating over how he would have our whole tribe to feast upon at his leisure. He was wrong; when I came to myself he was beheaded. My wife Telac and I, not wanting to be separated from Calet, Had her turn us as well. Since all three of us shared of our blood all three of us gained knowledge and skills we did not before have. Since our own people could not accept us as we were we left our homeland. We journeyed generally east. Our next major stop was in Egypt. There we found the land in turmoil; as the ruling body had gone into a long vampiric sleep. After trying several times to talk to the Magi, I finally hit upon the expedient means of getting their attention by challenging a member of one of the hierarchies of their order. After defeating the Magi in one on one combat, therefore becoming an honorary Magi. I then talked with the Magi at length. My wives and I, accompanied by one of their order, went in search of an heir. We finally found Ramses in the war torn area around Persia. After getting Ramses enthroned; my wives and I spent several years in relative comfort and safety while training in the ways of the Magi. Once again, after about 50 years, wanderlust took us over. We headed east again. We next stopped to indulge our thirst for a prolonged period in India. In India we had no trouble feeding as they were constantly warring. It was during one of our nightly excursions that we came upon one we thought was dead. It turned out the man was a Llama. From partaking of his blood and essence we gained the knowledge of astral travel. While exercising this new ability we learned of places even further east where others had this knowledge. Once again we journeyed east. Once in China we once again had to be careful of our thirst. We spent quite a bit of our time using our telepathy to pick up the local customs and language. Once we were proficient in Chinese we began to venture forth with more regularity. We once again searched for more knowledge; a thirst which we never seem to quench. After a few years of searching for something that kept eluding me; I heard of the Shaolin. An order dedicated to peace, balance, and life. After a few more years of searching for one of the Shaolin order I finally found one whom, though I was not human, was willing to take me as a pupil. With my teacher I learned much. I learned that with my turning I had still retained a bit of what most of our kind lose, a bit of humanity. After several years of his teachings, including acupuncture, Kung-Fu, as well as other techniques to numerous to mention; my teacher and friend taught me the dim-mak; the touch of life and death. A few weeks later I returned from a business venture to find my existence torn asunder. I found both of my wives as well as my friend, and teacher dead? |
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| Sinat part 2 I have finally tracked down the last of “The Black Dragons“. They were the rouge shaolin order that hunted down and killed my friend and teacher as well as killing my wives. I take my time with this one for he was the one that was in charge of the group that did the killing. I feed off of his fear as I toy with him. I know he will not feel the lose, and pain I have felt this past year, however he will feel the fear and pain that only one of our kind can inflict. I use my telepathy to keep him off balance as I nick him here and there with my butterfly swords. Finally when I can bear the scent of his blood no longer; I clear the fog in his head long enough to tell him; “ For he whom you slaughtered as well as my wives I now take your essence and blood for my nourishment.” As soon as I see comprehension light in his eyes I behead him. Before the body can move even an inch I stick my fangs into the severed neck. Making sure not to get anything on me or my attire I lower the corpse to the floor, wipe my swords on his clothing; lock them together and sheath it. As I rise I notice a presence that wasn’t there a second ago. I feel a bit of trepidation now, after all I would of felt a mortal, or most of our kind before they got this close. This unknown one is indeed powerful; not only did I not feel them until they wanted me to but they also know how not to have any scent. All this goes through my mind in less than a blink of an eye. When I finish rising I am facing the direction of the presence I feel. Only one possibility comes to mind : Jaho. “ I would offer you a drink.” motioning at the corpse. “However there is only enough left to make sure our kind is not detected. Will you come out so we can talk in a civilized manner?” After a few moments he appears out of the shadows. “Thank you for the offer.” He says ”However as you said there is not enough left.” “Meetings are not an easy thing for our kind; I am Sinat Bloodstone. And you, if I am not mistaken, are the great Jaho of which I have heard.” “Yes I am Jaho.” He looks down at the head of the corpse. “ You know I should be angered at you for taking my mark. However after hearing what you said right before you beheaded him I can understand your need to be the one to bereave him of his life.” I look at Jaho more fully realizing that he is indeed attired for the hunt. “ Than I apologize for the inconvenience to you Great Jaho. I was unaware that this scum was of any interest to you.” *Jaho then locks his gaze with mine; Opening a psychic link between us.* I could resist this however I don’t. *”Show me why you deprived me of my mark.”* Gathering my thoughts into the proper order I send one Image. *Once again I see my friend and teacher as I found him a year ago; dead and desecrated. Dishonored by the means of his death I do what I can to lay his body to rights. It is then that I notice the absence of my wives presence. I start searching for them. I find them in much the same condition as I found my friend. Both of them beheaded, both of them desecrated. Calet’s holy symbol of Danu, and Telac’s sword of the Sidhe taken as well. After I laid them out on their pyres and sent them on their way I then found that my teachers scrolls were missing. Only one thing is here to track the killers by; the symbol of the Black Dragon’s a rouge shaolin order. I follow this with a few images of my hunt for the Black Dragons ending with this one.* After a few moments Jaho looks at me with a look bordering on compassion. *”I understand why you have done what you did. I can also tell you actually have no interest in collecting the fee on this ones death. I will take the proof I need to collect on him and …No I will not leave you in peace for I can tell if I left you would greet the sun. Your wives would not want you to do this. Nor would your teacher and you know it. I can read it in you.”* I look at Jaho startled for I did not know that he saw so deep into me. I had indeed thought of greeting the sun and joining my loved ones; However as he pointed out they would not want me to do this. For I would be doing the one thing I have never done; Give up. *”I thank you for the wake up call Jaho. If there is anything I can ever do for you it is yours for the asking. I now consider thee as a friend; And If thou wouldst permit even as a brother ?”* Jaho watch’s me as I gather up those things stolen as trophy’s by the one that I had finally killed. First I find Calet’s holy symbol of Danu and place it around my own neck. Then I find Telac’s sword of the Sidhe and buckle it on beside my own blade. I then look for my teacher’s scrolls finally finding them in a hidden nook in the wall. These I pack with care, for no matter where I go from here these will I ever keep with me. I look at Jaho after I do all this. *”You have been silent for awhile is there something the matter?”* *” It is this gift you have offered me of brotherhood. How can such exist between two such as us? “* I lean against a wall really taking a good look at, and psychic feel of the surface of, Jaho.*”You have been a vampire for quit a while Jaho. It is not something that most vampire’s would suggest . However you yourself showed me that there is a bit of who we were before we turned still in us. So for that and also for my existence I offer you brotherhood.”* Jaho thinks a moment as he takes and packs what he needs for the collection of the contract. *” I believe I will take your offered brotherhood.”* Upon hearing this I take out a jar of an ointment that Calet used to make, and open it. ”*This ointment one of my wives used to make for the marking ceremonies our people had; before we turned. She had added to it so it will work on us who no longer scar. By the rites of my original people we would both smear this ointment upon our left hands; After this we would slice our left palms using the other’s blade just enough to draw blood. Then we would bind our left hands together palm to palm, over a chalice until the bleeding stopped. After this while our hands were still bound mead would be added to the chalice and we would both drink from the chalice therefore becoming brothers.”* I bring out a chalice putting it beside the ointment, I also bring out a leather strap putting it between the two. *”I believe we can do without the mead; Don’t you?”* Jaho looks at the implements I’ve laid out, then moves to the opposite side of them from me. *” I believe you are correct that we can do without the mead.”* We both kneel in unison, as we do so we both take out our short blade’s. We lay them hilt towards the other as a symbol of trust. We coat our left hand with the ointment, holding them over the chalice we then take the other’s blade and cut open our own hand. As the blood begins to drop from our hands into the chalice we clasp them together. I take up the leather strip and bind our hands together. When the blood stops the chalice is almost full. *”After you Jaho.”* He takes up the chalice swirling it gently to better mix the blood; He drinks about half of the combined blood. He then hands the chalice to me; *”Your turn Sinat.”* I drink the rest down savoring the taste as well as the essence of the blood. We receive impressions of each others past. We are now joined as friends and brothers truly. As I undo the leather I look at Jaho. *”Thus we are joined as brothers. I know I am going to go into seclusion for a while. However before I do there are things we need to share information about that we just shared through the blood and essence.”* His eyes become distant. *”I agree that we need to share some information and such. However after all we have done this night there is one thing we both need to do . We need to hunt; shall we my new brother.”* I smile slightly. *”Yes we shall my brother, yes we shall.”* This is how Jaho became my brother. After all what is anybody; be they mortal or immortal; without family of one sort or another. |
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| Sinat part 3 As Krovash enters Amon-Set’s Lair to find Janni in his fog form he hears Janni’s screams as she is being tortured. He finds Janni being tortured by one of Amon-Set’s followers. He materializes behind the follower already swinging his blade and beheading the follower. After dispatching the follower of Amon-Set he kneels beside Janni, which he finds to be almost beyond any help. Krovash realizes that Janni will fade very quickly if she does not receive immediate sustenance. He opens his wrist for her to draw upon so she can last long enough to be taken home. As Janni opens her mouth to draw from him a slight grin shows in her eyes. She then sinks her fangs into Krovash’s wrist immediately drawing on both his blood and, very surprising to Krovash, his essence. At that moment the door to the room slams shut and seals preventing any escape from the room so tight is the seal. In the time it takes Krovash to look at the door in surprise and back at Janni; Janni is no longer laying on the floor sucking on his wrist instead he is looking up at a Vampire he has never seen before. Weakly Krovash looks at this Vampire "Who the hell are you?" The Vampire looks at Krovash scornfully as he continues to draw from Krovash’s essence. "Why Krovash you and your family should be more careful whom you anger. After all the Magi gave the care of Cairo to Amon-Set long ago not the assimites. For that as well as the dishonor you and your family have caused to my brother, The Vampire Jaho, you shall cease to exist as shall your family." At that moment the door opens from the outside as Jaho steps in; expecting to see Amon-Set or one of his followers he is unusually surprised at seeing Krovash kneeling before his brother. " Ah brother Jaho right on time a gift for thee." Motioning toward Krovash. Jaho grins as he takes out his To. "It has been to long since last we met brother Sinat and yet here you are with a most welcome present." Jaho with great enjoyment beheads Krovash, just as a very weakened and bound Janni is brought into the room by Amon-Set. "As thou ordered Magi so have we done." Amon-Set bows respectfully to Sinat. Sinat returns Jaho’s grin " And one other gift as well; I believe you are in need of this slut?" As I throw Janni to Jaho’s feet. "I am coming out of seclusion my brother there is much afoot it seems, and I feel you may be in need of me before to long. As well I still owe thee for when we met. It is nice to see thee again anyway my brother." Yes there is much afoot at this time." Jaho looks down at Janni grinning wickedly. "And yes I am in need of this slut. It is nice to see thee as well my brother." Jaho picks up Janni roughly preparing to depart. "Now the world at large does need to tremble for we are reunited after all these years. There is not much that can stand against…. Sinat Bloodstone and The Vampire Jaho |
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| I may start trying to write again let me know what you think. |
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| This is just an idea I had for LONG AGO for a story(most probably for it to be a manga): So there are players, it's a game where there is a main center where u first start off. All players will be given 1 ring and a weapon. The weapon at first looks like one of those tiny toy weapons made of metal(or something harder), after being touch by it's master it'll become to it's original size. and so the battle begins. (still continueing, although still thinking) |
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