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Jun 15, 2016 11:04 AM
#501
@Meliaman When you state a time period, use posts. You should also add a cooldown on your power for balancing purposes. For example: I can summon a zombie for 1 post, with a cooldown of 2 posts Also, just a side note, you should try to describe what your character looks like, or give an image of what he looks like |
Oppression. Rule by fear. Dictatorships. It's a strange thing. Throughout history, for some reason, the lives of such rulers have always ended in the same way: Assassination by someone who isn't even part of a combat unit. ------------------------ RP LAYOUT: ------------------------ * Name of the character you're roleplaying with -- [Example] -- [b]Kanitsuki Nihontou[/b] * Dialogue -- [Example] -- [b]"Hello. Nice to meet you"[/b] * Thoughts -- [Example] -- [i]"What am I going to do?"[/i] * Actions -- [Example] -- She went to the place * (Out of character) -- [Example] -- (I enjoy anime) |
Jun 15, 2016 11:25 AM
#502
ImmortalZypther said: @Meliaman When you state a time period, use posts. You should also add a cooldown on your power for balancing purposes. For example: I can summon a zombie for 1 post, with a cooldown of 2 posts Also, just a side note, you should try to describe what your character looks like, or give an image of what he looks like I changed my character like the ways you said can you take a look at him. |
Jun 15, 2016 11:38 AM
#503
Name: Wolfram Adelheit Strausz Age: 17 Gender: Male Power: Split Personality Power Explanation: He uses both his personalities as weapons. When he starts to use his powers, the spectral wings appear on his back. When he is Wolfram, his wings are angelic and Adelheit's demonic. The wings demonstrate amount of his energy, as he is F-ranked from the start, his wings are small and can grow larger when he become stronger in future. There is no difference in powers, just shape which shows what person he is at the moment. As he uses the energy, the wings slowly disappear as his energy lowers. When the wings are gone, he is completely powerless, without energy and vulnerable, so he focuses on defeating his enemies just before his wings disappear as he uses energy from them. He sacrifices parts of his wings to make weapons for attacking of self defence, like sharp spectral blades or bolts. As he creates blades/bolts, his energy thins and when he is energyless, his wings begone. Weapon list he can make of wings: sword like spectral blade on which he sacrifies one half of his one wing, so he can make four of them. Next are bolts, he can make about 10 from one wing, totally 20, he can shoot them on enemies,they do piercing damage. He is focused on attacking, but his final move is that he can cover himself with wings as shield when he knows that strong attack is being delivered on him, but also this is his final move, because after that he loses all his energy. Weapon: none, he is weapon himself Rank: F Club: Literature Pic: Personality: Wolfram Adelheit suffers from mental disorder called multiple personality disorder. His both personalities are completely different. Wolfram is shy boy, wise, inteligent and calm. He has problem with making new friends because of his shyness. He is afraid of many thinks, one things he is making him uneasy the most is his second personality. Wolfram is emotionally unstable and he wents crazy in situations like when he feels afraid or if he is extremely angry. This is time when he switches with Adelheit, the mad, insane and reckless guy. Adelheit is psychopath and is strongly self-confident, impudent and can't behave at all. Bio: Wolfram Adelheit was once loved boy from ordinary family. He was only child and parents raised him with love. But when he was 5, he started to behave strange. He talked to himself a lot, so the parents decided to take him to see a doctor. Then they learned the truth about his disorder. After some time, the boy started to called one of his self Wolfram and the other Adelheit. As he was afraid of himself, the parents wanted to help him and took him to hospital as they thought, they can treat his son. There Wolfram Adelheit had a rough times, he was so extraordinary, that the specialists started to make experiments on him. One night, when he was around 16, he switched to Adelheit who went crazy and killed the staff. When the Wolfram came to himself, he was alone in forest covered all in blood and decided to join Mirai High as he hoped, they will teach him how to handle his powers. I hope it is ok this time :) |
TheEdgelordJun 17, 2016 9:10 AM
Jun 15, 2016 11:39 AM
#504
@Meliaman Can you give more detail about the undead familiars? What's their relative strength compared to average humans? What kind of weakness do they have? I assume the 2 post cooldown comes into affect after the three posts of controlling a familiar and not at the start. You need to provide a picture, or at least a detailed description of their appearance. The Personality is incomplete too. |
Jun 15, 2016 11:49 AM
#505
@nikodra Characters are limited to one power only, so you'll have to revise the power a bit. Just something to note, you might want to be careful with how you approach the whole multiple personality disorder, as you risk turning your character into "just a character with multiple personality disorder", not to mention the kerfuffle caused by misrepresenting serious mental issues. If you're confident in your abilities, feel free to ignore this. |
Jun 15, 2016 11:56 AM
#506
RedPtolemy said: @nikodra Characters are limited to one power only, so you'll have to revise the power a bit. Just something to note, you might want to be careful with how you approach the whole multiple personality disorder, as you risk turning your character into "just a character with multiple personality disorder", not to mention the kerfuffle caused by misrepresenting serious mental issues. If you're confident in your abilities, feel free to ignore this. Will it be okay when they have same power and one of them focuses on attack and one on defence? Because I am not pretty sure how to revise it, as this was on my mind from the start. I am realy sorry for messing up :( |
Jun 15, 2016 12:01 PM
#507
@nikodra A power that work for both offense and defense is usually over powered, considering it has no notable flaw, and is always practical to use. I mean, it's not impossible to pull off, but the limitations on it have to be rather severe. You haven't anything up really, since only like 5% of character ever get approved without any revision. This is just par for the course. |
Jun 15, 2016 12:20 PM
#508
RedPtolemy said: @Meliaman Can you give more detail about the undead familiars? What's their relative strength compared to average humans? What kind of weakness do they have? I assume the 2 post cooldown comes into affect after the three posts of controlling a familiar and not at the start. You need to provide a picture, or at least a detailed description of their appearance. The Personality is incomplete too. I changed it can you take a look at it, thanks |
Jun 15, 2016 12:22 PM
#509
RedPtolemy said: @nikodra A power that work for both offense and defense is usually over powered, considering it has no notable flaw, and is always practical to use. I mean, it's not impossible to pull off, but the limitations on it have to be rather severe. You haven't anything up really, since only like 5% of character ever get approved without any revision. This is just par for the course. I tried to remake it somehow, hope everything is ok this time, senpai :) thank you |
Jun 15, 2016 12:32 PM
#510
@Meliaman Lower the strength to 1.5 times stronger to keep it consistent with other F rank powers. Remove the bit about newer corpses being much stronger since that's just situational power at the liberty of the RPer. Abide to those and it's perfect. @nikodra What do you mean by "he uses energy from [his wings]"? As it stands his power is effectively making a blade with no special properties whatsoever. I feel like I'm missing something. |
Jun 15, 2016 12:48 PM
#511
@RedPtolemy So I tried to remake it. Please, také a look *feels embarassed* |
Jun 15, 2016 1:04 PM
#512
@nikodra Can you list the various weapons he can make, and how many he can make before his wings disappear? Is the only purpose of the wings to have a visual of his remaining power? Basically, he can't like fly with them or use them as shields right? |
Jun 15, 2016 1:26 PM
#513
RedPtolemy said: @Meliaman Lower the strength to 1.5 times stronger to keep it consistent with other F rank powers. Remove the bit about newer corpses being much stronger since that's just situational power at the liberty of the RPer. Abide to those and it's perfect. @nikodra What do you mean by "he uses energy from [his wings]"? As it stands his power is effectively making a blade with no special properties whatsoever. I feel like I'm missing something. I changed it again,how is it |
Jun 15, 2016 1:28 PM
#514
@Meliaman |
Jun 15, 2016 2:04 PM
#515
Thank you |
Jun 16, 2016 6:11 AM
#516
Recouerr said: Recouerr said: Name: William subaru Age: he claims to be 17 Gender: male Power: Body and object enhencening: -he can harden his skin ( it can become as tough as a rock ) -he can boost his strength using threads of particule ( about 1.5 times max ) but about 2.5 times if it is localized ( just one arm for exemple but localiziging it more than one arm won't change his strengthening also the strengthening of just one arm isn't practical since in a fight you need to use your own body so it can only be used for very specialized tasks ) -he can harden any object or make it sharper by simply touching it. He can harden anything by 2 times but his skin, which he can harden 4 times. He also has a limitation on the volume he can harden which is 20 liter or else it would weaken drastically his hardening ( it would become nul ). -if he uses stregthening about half his max he can only uses about half the max for hardening and if he uses strenghening to his max, he cannot uses hardening at all and conversly. -he needs 2posts to be able to change his stats -he can change his stats once every 10 posts. Power Explanation: he can produce subatomic particle and control them at will to bend the laws of nature to his will. however he can produce only a very few of them and can only perform body and object enhencening. (This is principaly due to the fact that he needs to use some computing devices however before coming to this world, his was destroyed, preventing him from sustaining a fatal injury (cf end of part 2 in his bio) because those are implanted in the chest and are biocompaptible (of course).however those devices are technologies that uses the same subatomic particule to process information which can make it a sentient being due to the amount of information processed and so another self of the protagonist, which he definetly lost because of the technology in this world isn't as advanced as his. His eyes and earing are also mechanical however, due to the fact he needs some computer to use them, he ended up with a bad eyesight however he still has good hearing even though he cannot echolocate anything as he used to and just have a little above average hearing) (( he also has replaced a part of his bones by a reinforced organic alloy which makes them nearly unbreakable however they can still be dislocated )) Weapon: anything is fine as long as it's practical Rank: F Club: boxing club engineering club Pic: https://s-media-cache-ak0.pinimg.com/originals/be/66/0f/be660f48dd53e5f6c194c857c79ea90a.jpg 180 cm tall and 90 kg in wheight but does not look muscular because of a very thin frame while being very wellbuid. Personality: he's bright and chearful and likes to discover new things as he venture through the world and he's a fight maniac and will never turn down a proposital to fight with someone else as long as it does not endanger his life. However no matter how difficult the harship, he will always tries to find a solution, even if it costs him his life. Bio: he's from another space-time continuum which in this society, the catholic religion never appeared and scriptures of grec and roman philosopher greatly inspired the wealthiest, leading to the creation of scientific standards in order to make humanity progress as fast as possible. With those progress, man rapidly conquered the world and the population increased at an alarming rate. The primary ressources soon became a great source of conflicts and wars over ressources hapened all the time. However, one small state never took position in any wars because it controlled the population, never having more people than they could feed, and never attracting covetouseness which made it very prosperous and allowed it to increase its scientific reseach faster than any other country. However, the technologie of other countries slowly grew as well and gained in size. But the scale of the war too grew in size, making some countries realize that now, man could destroy the Earth many times over, which resulted in a common truce between those countries, however, as they saw that the other countries were still fighting over ressources and so, they were weakened, this new allied nation gave in to its insticts and started a war between those smaller nations. Twenty years before which would be known as the great world war, the most prosperous country saw his king die, which was a great shock among the citizen of this little country as the king was from the second generation of immortal and supposedly should live for millenias. But he had many descendants, but only the fitest for the position of king should be selected through a serie of tests to dertermine who it would be. After the tests were done, by the surprise of every one, the least likely to be throned since he was the youngest proved that he was the most suited and qualified to become a king. But he was also the son which the king had passed the most of his time to instruct so it made some sense for the follower of the former king and accepted him shortly after he was throned. However, this new king sort of came out of nowhere as the king was very secretive, even with his own son and only spoke to a handful. And so this new king also had a very solitary lifestyle, only learning how to become the greatest king, never having much of social interaction, exept for his childhood friend, a girl shich came often to his room and to whom he could talk freely. She was like a mental support, never allowing to break down and remain strong in the path of becoming a great ruler. As he was crowned and became a king, he soon made his childhood friend his queen and she never let him down no matter the criticism for him being so young and declaring him incompetent without knowing how much sacrifices he had done for those people. During the first attack of the allied nation, the allied nations won batlles after battles, conquering slowly but surely territories from other nations. However, a king of a greater nation, delusionned by his former power wanted to make a full scale assault on the allied nations, bug his subordinates knew ghat would lead them to their doom and instead chose to betray him at the last moment, trying to assassinate him, and then join force with the allied nations as they wanted a ruler worthy of them. But they failed in the atempt of assassinating him and this fallen king then took asylum in a litlle country which is prosperous and they could easly protect him since the new king of this country married his sister. But even though he managed to escape his death, his mind was broken as he lost his friends, his wealth and his nation. Not knowing what to do, he learned from he king of this country many things, like how to rule, how to lead his troops to victory no matter the conditions, etc... In short how to become a great ruler. But he was a ruler no more and seeing the allied nations still winning territories he then asked for help from the king which was like a friend and a mentor since they were about the same age. But the king said he could not join hands with him since his nation made a truce with the allied nations. Instead, with the newly created weapon he made which was a weapon never seen before and was considered to be the greatest, he decided to acompany him with his wife and help him to actualy make the scattered countries that were still fighting into a unique new country in order to repeal the allied nations' forces. The process was long but the damocles' sword coming from the threat of the allied nations allowed him to unite them actualy very fast as it was only a matter of year to have a power that could rival the united nations' propress. But what was unexpected was that the former king became the leader of this new nation, which would be named the world nation in the future. As time passed war ended and the world nation became the first country to unite the world into one. It was a time of peace and so, the king of the litle country came back to his country as he finished his duty, managing to form great contract with this new country which beneficed greatly both of them. However, the subordinate of the world nation were greedy, as they wanted the knowledge of this only opposing country which were far superior. And so they influenced slowly their king, which was in too good term with the king of this country to steal their knowledge or declare war against it. And so they slowly made this king become paranoid of anything telling him that he would be killed by the other king or that he would take power by using the economic advantage they had. So the king was crazed and ordered the assassination of the other king. But his sister knew of the intention of his brother to kill her husband. She tried to resonate him but nothing could be done, as he even said to his own sister to kill her husband. She actualy took this very seriously and since she could not save him or so she thought, she decided to kill him herself as she only had this right. However, when she shot him in the heart, she actualy missed him. And so, the king, as he saw who tried to kill him, became desperate and from his despear, as to flee his current situation, he used a theory he thought of many years before and created a gate to another space time continuum, fleeing his own world. when he woke up, he was in a hospital, with people of another language and culture. Even though he was desperate, he was still happy to find that his theory worked out perfectly and the he was still in a world with human being. But he couldn't talk to any of them since their language was different. However some words were familiar to him even though they were slitly different. During his stay in the hospital, a nurse helped him to learn this new language and they started to become friends, the nurse clearly saw that he was very gloomy at times. After all, he had beed betrayed by the only one he truly lovedand now he was lost, without a reason to live. At the last day of his stay, she finaly asked him what was troubling him, and as she was the first friend he made since he came to his world, he just described how he was betrayed by the one he loved and how he couldn't be able to know for what reasons, ommiting the fact that he's from another world as even himself find this very peculiar. However, after hearing his story, the nurse did not felt sorry for him, but on the contrary scolded him saying that there was no use to mourn over the past and that he sounded more like a child wanting to be consoled than an adult to her. Those words greatly affected him when he left the hospital and found there was some thruth in them, after all, even though he was over ninety years old, he never had much of a chance to interact with others, exept for his wife, he was submerged in his reseach and his duty as a king, but now that he was free from them, he felt as if he was a new born baby and knew nothing of the world, he then decided to create himself a new identity, naming himself William Subaru and then joined a school he thought was fun since he could discover many things since it gathered oddities of this new world, and what is best to explore a new world than to live with the most peculiar living beings of it ? I think it's a bit long for his bio but i hope you like the story ;) I need approval for my edited char i put the added part in brackets to make it easier to know what i changed also the one with double brakets is optional because i think it may be a little too OP And i'd like to know where i should put it ( actually in power explanation because it's not power related but at the same time couldd be considered a power in the future ( of course he'll have to rank up for that ... Not that it's gonna happen anytime soon)) @Alice157 @Arc_1 @DL265 @Kiiii- @RedPtolemy @SakuraSweetHeart @Schema @Zesty-Lime Notice me sempais !! (Since asking one preson didn't work i'll just ask everyone XD(i'm just reducing my chance of having someone take care of it tho #bystandereffect#i'mnottryingtosoundsmartatallXD)) |
RecouerrJun 16, 2016 1:45 PM
Jun 16, 2016 6:44 AM
#517
@Recouerr holy that's a long bio for a character creation @.@ Now I'm inspired to have a story for my character as well because I like the idea of writing a story for my character x3 (If I'm ever gonna do that then I'll post it in my blog) |
Jun 16, 2016 8:05 AM
#518
@RedPtolemy I think I am done now, hope it is okay :) |
Jun 16, 2016 10:48 AM
#519
PREDICTABOL-43 said: Name:Sven Petersen Age: 19 Gender: Male Power: Cyckle of Life Power Explanation: Everytime Sven dies his spirit leaves his body and creates a new one. The time it takes for him to form a new body varies depending on how badly his previous body was destroyed. Since his spirit is still in his body at the moment of death, this affect the energy his spirit has. Unless his spirit is completly destroyed Sven will continue to live. Depending on how much his spirit was damaged by the destruction of his body, he will either come back as young adult (his true age and form) or as a child (how he looked like when he was 10-14) both physically and mentally. Weapon: N/A Rank: F Club: Computer Club (if there is one) Pic: [*]Height: 143-193 cm [*]Weight: 48-85 Kg [*]Eye color: Cyan [*]Hair Color: Golden [*]Body Type: Moderate Fit Personality: In his child form Sven is an inoccent little guy but he is also quite a charmer. Well not really, he can pass as an offensive child as he often comments about big butts and tits. He is very open about the fact that he likes that and honestly does not know that what he's doing isn't right. He's also a prankster who likes to prank everyone around him, his pranks kan get nasty wich makes him annoying at times. In his adult form Sven becomes much more of a gentleman. Altho he still has a huge love for volumptious women he doesn't express it in public. He still has his provocative personality but he does know how to moderate it and not go overboard. He is also now a real gentleman, helping people around him and being very polite with everyone. Bio: The Petersen family is a famous one. They are the richest people in the country known as Sweden and their influence around the world reflects this. Sven is the youngest of 5 siblings. As a child, he was the troublemaker in the house. His brother and sister were way more polite and "good children" yet Sven is the favorite of his father Erik. Sven was never a genius in school or was he ther worst one, nothing aside from his good looks wich he inherited from his father was the only thing that stood out. One day Sven was in a school trip to India, unfortunatly their plan was hijacked. No one survived the crash, not even Sven who came from a family full of power users but after a few hours later when the news reporter were on the scene and his family was moarning looking at the news a blue light appears out of knowhere and creates a body. It's Sven, but he looks like a 12 year old and acts like one. His family is both overjoyed and confused as is the rest of the world. Did they just witness instant reincarnation? Sven was then sent to this school by his father. Trivia: Jonathan is the eldest son in the Petersen family, he posses the power absorb energy and turn it into any other form of energy. (He can turn heat into electricity or turn light into movement power permiting him to have more striking power). Jonathan has a gentle soul, he likes to teach other people new thing, wich lead him into being a teacher at a univercity. He takes this from his father who's also a teacher. Ann-Marie is the second child of the Petersen family, she wields deadly flames at will. Unlike Jonathan she's very cold and often talks in a matter that makes the people around unconfortable. She does not care what other people think about her and never censor herself. She always tells what's on her mind, altho she's not a bad person. She is also a genious, being the head of the house she graduated from univercity at the age of 15! Her love for space and the unknown has made her an astronaut. Marcus is third in the house and is the most easy going person Sven has ever known. He has a very useless power wich is the power to make anything he touches clean. This power may have come to him due to his love for housework. Alltho his house has maids and butlers he likes to do the housework himself and helps around as much as he can. Other than housework, Marcus has a talent form football, he is now in the national team of Sweden, altho he is not the star he is among the best ones. Andreas is just a year above Sven, he was also a student at Mirai due to his ability to turn invisible. Andreas is an self rightious bastard. He thinks he's above everyone that he is the best and that no one can touch him. Him and Sven have a very bad relationship because Andreas has been jealous of the special treatment his younger brother has been having. Thus Andreas has been antagonising Sven for as long as the two can remember. Now that Andreas is no longer a part of Mirai he became an agent in training for a special task force that deals with super human crimes within Sweden. His powers has made him an exelent infiltrator. Evelina is the mother of these children and the wife of Erik. She has the power of immortality. How long she has lived is unknown but some people say that they saw her looking exatly like that on pictures of world war 1. She's a very seductive lady that likes to flirt alot much to the dissmay of her husband. Altho she flirts she never outright cheat because she is genuilly in love with her man. She's also the big money maker of the house. She's a famous actress and also has an internationall humanitarian organization that helps people around the world (something like red cross but more honest). Sven is her favorite child as he is the only one that will stay with her, the others will all die one day. Mega super bump Am i approved or what? |
Jun 16, 2016 10:48 AM
#520
@nikodra He shouldn't be able to use the wings as a shield since his power is primarily offensive. Not without some sort of consequence at least. If using the wings as a shield instantly depletes any of his remaining energy, then I will allow it. Also what are the bolts for? You never mentioned anything about a crossbow? Does he just throw them? |
Jun 16, 2016 10:52 AM
#521
@PREDICTABOL-43 Considering character can't be killed without permission anyways, I don't see anything innately OP with the power. However, it would be problematic if you every abuse it, so like, don't do that. K? |
Jun 16, 2016 1:24 PM
#523
Oh it seems mine wasn't seen since it was on the other page ^^; |
**********Smile! ^^********* |
Jun 16, 2016 1:29 PM
#524
@magicalofmagic Sorry about that ^~^"" |
Jun 16, 2016 1:51 PM
#525
Name: Ichiro Noritaka Age: 19 Gender: Male Power: Pure Judgement Power Explanation: Pure Judgement is the power to do as the name implies. It brings justice to those who do wrong. However, it only affects those in the wrong. It may seem OP at first glance, but Ichiro may only use his power if the power deems those who are wrong deserving. Also, the power must also deem the user worthy. In other words, if Ichiro is not deemed true and pure of heart his power will not react, until he has redeemed himself. Weapon: His father's switchblade knife. https://i.kinja-img.com/gawker-media/image/upload/s--bsVIsZM_--/c_scale,fl_progressive,q_80,w_800/1250544720078240171.png Rank: F Club: Martial Arts and Gentleman Pic: http://cdn.myanimelist.net/images/characters/5/110552.jpg Personality: Ichiro is a kind hearted guy who tries to help anyone he sees in need of help. He also has a very strong sense of morals. He thinks that justice is the best way to solve any problem. He tries never to get mad, but if someone gets on his bad side, they're sure in for a world of pain. He also has a lot of anguish because of what happened to his sister and his father. Because of it, he becomes a different person if he gets mad. His anguish also got him into smoking. He also tries to be a very articulate person. Strangely, he isn't a very shut in person, once you get to know him. At first, he barely talks at all, but after making friends he opens up quite easily. Bio: Ichiro Noritaka is the son of a well-known detective(father) and a lawyer(mother). He had a younger sister who was murdered at age twelve by a psycho killer his father was tracking down. After this, he swore he would become a hero of justice, but he also swore to do it within the law. After this, he began using his father's resources to track down criminals without his knowing. He went under the alias Ace to keep his true identity a secret. With his father's detective mind, and his mother's knowledge of the law he fights for justice. He is also highly skilled in hand to hand combat(top of his class), and he is also highly skilled in knife combat. not long after the death of his sister his father lost his mind and his job. So, at the young age of 15 Ichiro became a hero of justice. |
Jun 16, 2016 1:59 PM
#526
@CharmanOtaku Get your "pure of heart" crap out of here XD But seriously that power is under no circumstances fair given the duplicity or morality. The only possible justification for it working would be a degree of Powerplay. With that being said: |
Jun 16, 2016 2:12 PM
#527
k |
Jun 16, 2016 2:19 PM
#528
@RedPtolemy But speaking seriously I see where you're coming from. You know looking back almost 30 mins in the future it might be best to edit it and give it some more thought. Thanks for your quick response. :D |
Jun 16, 2016 2:42 PM
#529
@CharmanOtaku I don't know what to tell you. That's not the kind of power that can be fixed with a few edits. It's flawed as a concept. My only piece of advice would be choose a different power altogether. |
Jun 16, 2016 7:27 PM
#530
@krop-tor Let's start with the power. I recommend that you create a new power rather than use the one posted. 3 and 4 won't be allowed due to the far distance and the telepathy. 2 probably won't help you in any form and 1 shadows just move in light with the person so it isn't destroyed. The bio first off is short and doesn't really fit with the theme of a school. So that should be changed as well. Is your character a vampire of some sort. The sharp nails and fangs are a bit weird and the fact that they can grow into claws is an added ability that isn't really accepted |
Jun 17, 2016 5:19 AM
#532
Name: Kuro Power: A 0.000000001% increase in intelligence Abilitys: do I really have to explain Personality: A slightly depressed sarcastic guy who is a psychopath but has a hidden side... Bio: just a only child upbringing nothing special but always wanted to be a hero so technically being one. He joins Mirai High |
Jun 17, 2016 5:35 AM
#533
@Koreijutsu-shi I'm going to consider your character sheet as nothing but a troll post. |
Jun 17, 2016 5:49 AM
#534
@Recouerr Sorry for the delay. he can harden his skin ( it can become as tough as a rock ) his skin, which he can harden 4 times. If being as tough as a rock = 4.0x increase in defense, then this is OP. he can boost his strength using threads of particule ( about 1.5 times max ) but about 2.5 times if it is localized ( just one arm for exemple but localiziging it more than one arm won't change his strengthening also the strengthening of just one arm isn't practical since in a fight you need to use your own body so it can only be used for very specialized tasks ) This is actually very useful in fights. However, a power that has strong offensive and defensive capabilities is very flexible and therefore needs a fix. Especially when the power increases defense by 4.0x and offensive strength by 2.5x. He also has a limitation on the volume he can harden which is 20 liter or else it would weaken drastically his hardening ( it would become nul ). Could this drawback be applied in RP? Volume and surface area are extremely hard, if not impossible to track in a forum RP. (( he also has replaced a part of his bones by a reinforced organic alloy which makes them nearly unbreakable however they can still be dislocated )) So, he's also invulnerable? Even when dislocated, an unbreakable bone means that it would withstand any attack, meaning that he could use his arm to block anything. |
Jun 17, 2016 8:00 AM
#535
@RedPtolemy I think my job is done now, sorry for making you so much troubles |
Jun 17, 2016 8:26 AM
#536
@nikodra I've stated my stance on the wing shield. It's either all his energy, or nothing. The difference being that using all his energy to block an attack would serve to prevent a potentially lethal attack from landing, and afterwards he would be left unable to fight (a means of defeat where your character won't sustain terrible wounds). Just using up a "large amount" of energy would mean he could portential block an attack and then retaliate. This would contradicts the fundamentally offensive nature of his power. Do you see what I mean? |
Jun 17, 2016 9:11 AM
#537
@RedPtolemy I see your point, so I tried to "fix" it, take a look please |
Jun 17, 2016 9:22 AM
#538
Name: Ichiro Noritaka Age: 19 Gender: Male Power: Ace Power Explanation: When Ichiro gets really worked up and his personality completely changes. This is because of the grief caused by the death of his sister. His sister's death gave a multiple personality disorder of sorts. When Ace comes out, Ichiro changes into a person purely fueled by rage and anguish. When he is in this mode he doesn't really gain any abilities to speak of. However, when using the power his rage unleashes all of his inner grief and all of his strength, fueling them until he feels satisfied. This move does not push him beyond human strength, nor does it enhance his normal strength. In this mode, he has no control over himself, and he has no recollection of it afterwards. He chose the name ace for this mode because, like his detective name, it is a separate life from his own. He despises his "ability" because it reveals a side of him he doesn't want anyone else to see. Weapon: His father's switchblade knife. https://i.kinja-img.com/gawker-media/image/upload/s--bsVIsZM_--/c_scale,fl_progressive,q_80,w_800/1250544720078240171.png Rank: F Club: Martial Arts and Gentleman Pic: http://cdn.myanimelist.net/images/characters/5/110552.jpg Personality: Ichiro is a kind hearted guy who tries to help anyone he sees in need of help. He also has a very strong sense of morals. He thinks that justice is the best way to solve any problem. He tries never to get mad, but if someone gets on his bad side, they're sure in for a world of pain. He also has a lot of anguish because of what happened to his sister and his father. Because of it, he becomes a different person if he gets mad. His anguish also got him into smoking. He also tries to be a very articulate person. Strangely, he isn't a very shut in person, once you get to know him. At first, he barely talks at all, but after making friends he opens up quite easily. Ace is a rage-fueled monster. He uses Ichiro's power and skills that he has accumulated over his years of training to "power" his rage. Ace is a very angry and emotional person. Despite being purely driven by rage, Ichiro's grip to him keeps him from killing anyone. Ace is also a very conflicted person. If someone Ichiro cares about gets mixed up in one of his fights he shows restraint from hurting them. He can also be swayed back to his normal self by friends as well. Bio: Ichiro Noritaka is the son of a well-known detective(father) and a highly respected lawyer(mother). He had a younger sister who was murdered at age twelve by a psycho killer his father was tracking down. After this, he swore he would become a hero of justice, but he also swore to do it within the law. After this, he began using his father's resources to track down criminals without his knowing. He went under the alias Ace to keep his true identity a secret. With his father's detective mind, and his mother's knowledge of the law he fights for justice. He is also highly skilled in hand to hand combat(top of his class), and he is also highly skilled in knife combat. not long after the death of his sister his father lost his mind and his job. So, at the young age of 15 Ichiro began to pursue the path justice. |
Jun 17, 2016 9:23 AM
#539
@nikodra |
Jun 17, 2016 9:31 AM
#540
@CharmanOtaku It would be unnatural for a perfectly natural person such as Ichiro to be accepted into a supernatural school. If he has no supernatural power, he wouldn't be allowed in a school designed to train supernatural abilities. Approving your character would violate the fundamental purpose of the RP setting. In summary, he can't not have a power. No, mental disorders are not special abilities. |
Jun 17, 2016 9:35 AM
#541
@RedPtolemy thank you so much for your help :) |
Jun 17, 2016 9:42 AM
#542
@Kiiii- well we can nerf the hardening to only 2 that won't really make a diference to me since i don't usualy use it ( so basicaly it do nothing to his defense ) and since it is an offensive ablity as much as it is a defensive one ( i need tones of money for that tho ) if you want we can delete the localised reinforcement and only make it a generalized one also as for the twenty liter drawback, i'm always mesuring just how much volume something has (for exemple the entirety of your skin is around 10 liter) and no he's not invulnerable ( i know that would be OP XP) because his flesh can still be affected ( he's weak to shock, bullets, knifes ...) i mean what's the point of bones if you can't move them so no he can't block anything |
Jun 18, 2016 8:19 PM
#543
Name : Calamity Asmodeus Age: 16 Gender: Female Power: Eye of Genesis Power Description: Allows her to open the Eye of Genesis once per battle. When it opens, it becomes a vulnerable point on her body and will stay open until he activates one of its effects. When the Eye is successfully attacked while open, it halts the attack completely and induces a state known as Genesis Collapse. This forces the wielder of the eye into mental shut-down. 1) Genesis Restoration: The Eye of Genesis heals all her wounds and fully restores all health and stamina. 2) Genesis Feedback: The next attack that hits her, will be reflected unto the enemy in double magnitude, regardless of the type. The damage she takes from the strike is halved. 3) Genesis Barrier: A barrier that will block any one attack, regardless of power. This also usually sends the attacker backwards from the force of the barrier breaking. 4) Genesis Thunder: The only purely offensive ability the Eye of Genesis has. She can call upon the Eye to summon a bolt of pure lightening on her enemy. Weapon: OmniTail - A long, black leather whip with a crimson padded handle. Rank: F Club: Astronomy, Art Pic: Personality: She loves the endlessness of space, and loves to imagine just how big it must be. She loves trying to understand people through art, it is her philosophy that art is the medium in which the soul can materialize its true values in our world. She can be a bit childish and random at times. She is kind towards others, and likes those who are humble most. Masochistic most of the time but she can become quite the sadist if she fights the kind of person she despises. She calls herself Cally. Doesnt like to tell people her real name for obvious reasons. Bio: She was born into the family of Asmodeus, named so because it is believed that they are the direct descendants of the Demon Sin Lord of Lust - Asmodeus. When it was learned that she possessed the Eye of Genesis, she was given the weapons passed through the family, the OmniFang, and the OmniTail though she only ever mastered use of the OmniTail. During the training sessions at the manor, a human with an ability called the Eye of Kaaos appeared and destroyed her home. She survived that day and found out through a vague reading that her ability and the Eye of Kaaos are related somehow. She transferred to Mirai High to hone her skill with the weapons she has, and to learn the full potential of the Eye of Genesis and what it has to do with the ability that destroyed her family. |
Darth_LewdiousJun 20, 2016 4:23 AM
Jun 18, 2016 8:23 PM
#544
Krop-Tor said: Name : Calamity Asmodeus Age: 16 Gender: Female Power: Eye of Genesis Power Description: Allows her to open the Eye of Genesis once per battle. When it opens, it becomes a vulnerable point on her body and will stay open until he activates one of its effects. 1) Genesis Restoration: The Eye of Genesis heals all her wounds and fully restores all health and stamina. 2) Genesis Feedback: The next attack that hits her, will be reflected unto the enemy in double magnitude, regardless of the type. The damage she takes from the strike is halved. 3) Genesis Barrier: A barrier that will block any one attack, regardless of power. This also usually sends the attacker backwards from the force of the barrier breaking. 4) Genesis Thunder: The only purely offensive ability the Eye of Genesis has. She can call upon the Eye to summon a bolt of pure lightening on her enemy. Weapon: She wields a Punching Dagger in one hand, and a thorned whip in the other. She is quite skilled with both. Rank: F Club: Astronomy, Art Pic: Personality: She loves the endlessness of space, and loves to imagine just how big it must be. She loves trying to understand people through art, it is her philosophy that art is the medium in which the soul can materialize its true values in our world. She can be a bit childish and random at times. She is kind towards others, and likes those who are humble most. Masochistic most of the time but she can become quite the sadist if she fights the kind of person she despises. She calls herself Cally. Doesnt like to tell people her real name for obvious reasons. Bio: She was born into the family of Asmodeus, named so because it is believed that they are the direct descendants of the Demon Sin Lord of Lust - Asmodeus. When it was learned that she possessed the Eye of Genesis, she was given the weapons passed through the family, the Omnifang, and the Sucubus Tail. During the training sessions at the manor, a human with an ability called the Eye of Kaaos appeared and destroyed her home. She survived that day and found out through a vague reading that her ability and the Eye of Kaaos are related somehow. She transferred to Mirai High to hone her skill with the weapons she has, and to learn the full potential of the Eye of Genesis and what it has to do with the ability that destroyed her family. Im not an admin but i would put a cooldown on that barrier and the first ability (i think they would say the same thing but hey slap me if im wrong) |
Jun 18, 2016 8:40 PM
#545
@SleeplessVampire The Eye of Genesis can only be used once per battle. And even then, only one of the effects are used. It does have a cooldown. |
Jun 18, 2016 8:43 PM
#546
Just saying admins are in charge here |
Jun 19, 2016 12:20 AM
#547
Name: Manami Saito Age: 15 Gender: Female Power: Air Magic Power Explanation:]1. Air Solidification: Manami can put pressure in the air molecules to solidify them. 2. Razor Wind: The user can project air in a way that allows them to cut through matter from a distance. It can cut both softwood and hardwood. It can't cut stones but can crack em' Weapon: Fan (Y'now this kind of fan) Rank: F Club: Nature Pic: Personality: Manami has a calm personality, she doesn't like being in groups and in crowded places and often eats her lunch at the rooftop. She sees all animals as cute and kind. (Yup, even the Blobfish..I'm just kidding, I love that fish) People rarely talk to her, and they find her "cold-hearted" but actually is a sweet girl inside. Bio: Manami comes from a rich and happy family. One day, while she was playing with her brother doing some pretend air-bending(magic thingy) she finds herself holding something solid in her hand but all she could see was...air. She looked at his brother, confused with what the heck was going on, she threw that solid thing at the potted plant and the pot broke, hearing the crash(?) of the pot, her parents came running. Manami and her brother explained everything to their parents. Afraid the government will hear this piece of news, their family advisor mentioned a school called "Mirai High" but her parents were afraid to put their daughter away at a very young age. Manami smiled,"I'll be okay, I'm 14 now" The whole family were shocked to finally see her smile after such a long time. They cherished her smile in their hearts and they bid their Manami farewell. It took a year to get to Mirai High so by the time she reached the school, she turned 15 (I couldn't think of a good bio and was running short on words :P) |
CynadoJun 22, 2016 2:54 AM
Jun 19, 2016 1:45 AM
#548
Name:Azael(Az) Age:17 Gender:Male Power:Cryomancer. Weapon:Muramasa.Originally crafted by a blacksmith in the 16th century,this blade got modified heavily to suit Az.It's a long two-handed katana made out of carbon steel and it's modified so it resists extremely low temperatures,thus making it immune to Az's power. Power Explanation:Az is a cryomancer,that means he can control ice.With this power he can freeze things by touching them or,if he concentrates really hard,create icicles.These icicles are really weak and are more of a distraction than anything.His real power lies in his touch.He can freeze objects pretty fast(depends on size),but when it comes to living lifeforms it takes a lot more effort to do anything.(Small objects:Instantaneous Medium objects:2 posts Large objects:4 posts Very large:7 posts) His power can not "kill" anything.He isn't nearly that powerful.In the best case scenario,if he has constant physical contact with his target,can knock the target out(15 posts).His power,however can slow the target down heavily. This comes with a cost,his body can't take the extremely low temperature concentrated on his arms when he uses the powers and if he pushes himself too hard his hands will literally freeze.Thus he can only use his power constantly for a very limited amount of time(20 posts).His body heats up pretty quickly(10 posts if he really pushes limit) but this depends on how long he uses his power. Rank:F Clubs:Fencing,Literature. Picture: Photo taken at age 17.Black hair and dark blue eyes. Personality:Az is a weird introvert.He likes his peace but he doesn't mind interacting with other people.He can be very cold sometimes and has trouble understanding what people feel towards him.He likes to mess with people and is very sarcastic. He likes reading books,and always had a thing for swords. Biography:Az is an adopted child.He lived in the "Blueberry" orphanage until the age of 7 when he got adopted by a rich and respected family.Az's biological parents are unknown.He was left at the door of the orphanage in a little crib.In the crib there was his birth certificate and a golden ring that looked like a snake biting it's tail and thus forming a perfect circle in the process.This ring is very valuable to him and he takes a lot of care for it. His adopting parents were called Lilith and Adam Brown.They took care of Az and loved him dearly.Adam passed away at the age of 40 due to the heart attack.Az was 14 at the time and this death impacted him greatly.However Lilith was always there for him and helped him get over Adam's death. His powers started to manifest at the age of 15.He was afraid to tell Lilith about his power because he didn't want to worry her.Recently she was diagnosed with Aplastic anemia so she had enough to deal with.Lilith never found out about his powers,as she died at the age of 41,one year after her husband's death.At this point Az was completely destroyed emotionally.He didn't need to work since he had tons of money but he was devastated.He skipped one year of school and refused to leave the house.After one year the scars of his adoptive parent's deaths are mostly buried.He heard of the school "Mirai High" and decided to apply.He is currently waiting for a response. |
CalmCallJun 24, 2016 8:02 AM
I don't even know what to write in here. |
Jun 19, 2016 5:29 AM
#549
@Cynado 2. Razor Wind: The user can project air in a way that allows them to cut through matter from a distance. How powerful is the cutting force of this power? Also, add a cooldown. We can't have you spamming the hell out of razor wind. It is also highly recommended that you get a weapon. @CalmCall He can freeze objects almost instantly,but when it comes to living lifeforms it takes a lot more effort to do anything. No, I don't think your character should be able to freeze a car in the same amount of time as freezing a pencil. Now comes the real problem. He experiences extreme pain due to the freezing and his body can't take the extremely low temperature concentrated on his arms when he uses the powers and if he pushes himself too hard his hands will literally freeze.Thus he can only use his power constantly for aprox. 50min-1h.His body heats up pretty quickly.His arms take about 30 minutes to return to their original temperature when he really pushes his limits.This depends on how long he uses his power.
His power,however can slow the target down and make it hard for the target to concentrate. I accept the movement speed reduction, but the mental effect of the spell could be labeled as OP, if not a violation of the rules, as the spell forcibly changes the mental state of the enemy. |
Nice--Jun 19, 2016 5:39 AM
Jun 19, 2016 5:38 AM
#550
Recouerr said: @Kiiii- well we can nerf the hardening to only 2 that won't really make a diference to me since i don't usualy use it ( so basicaly it do nothing to his defense ) and since it is an offensive ablity as much as it is a defensive one ( i need tones of money for that tho ) if you want we can delete the localised reinforcement and only make it a generalized one also as for the twenty liter drawback, i'm always mesuring just how much volume something has (for exemple the entirety of your skin is around 10 liter) and no he's not invulnerable ( i know that would be OP XP) because his flesh can still be affected ( he's weak to shock, bullets, knifes ...) i mean what's the point of bones if you can't move them so no he can't block anything
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