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Dec 7, 2011 3:54 AM
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ok i wrote a very short story,
its short, but i don t know if its good or not. should i expand it to a real big story and make a novel then a visual novel?

i ve only wrote the bigline and important ones. soo it could be really hard to understand. AND ALSO MY BAD ENGLISH -_- .
just tell me what you guys think

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Dec 7, 2011 8:48 AM
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It's not too bad, but if you want some constructive criticism I could give you some in the spoiler below. If you don't want it (may look like bashing), just ignore it.


There's probably more I could add, but I couldn't think of anything right now.
Dec 7, 2011 8:54 AM
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yeah :D this is a super short version . I know it should be added alot more to ^_^ be a more real story .but as i said i only wrote down the big lines >.<
but thanks aza :D . your "criticism" would help me write a full story
Dec 7, 2011 8:57 AM
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Well, as long as you know it, everything's all good. Good luck!
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