| Screw it let's thread this badboy so we don't have to spam up the comments section :D |
| Bloody hell the proof notes for FA05 is a convoluted mess...lemme see if I can organize it somewhat? I got spoiled by your scripts...but its not like I just mindlessly copy/pasta ;) You be the mediator between the conflicting ones viny :D p77: "Someone who (will) treat us as an individual, not only needing us in order to obtain certain goals." -s I prefer the other one since even though grammatically correct...its just a needlessly complicated version of the first one. "Someone not needing us for some specific goal, but to treat us as one." -p p78: "It seems like kids don't always live up to their expectations, even if their parents are extraordinary." -s Yeah I suppose that "their" makes it sound better but feels redundant imo. -p "If this continues, his father might not be able to rest in peace..." -s I thought this was Rentarou's bubble? -p p79: i propose a change from 'great guy' to 'hero' so long as the context is not changed -v not sure since the words mean two different things. shin's gonna have to look at that -p sure go ahead. Remember, we're doing a J->C->E scans so the translations are probably way off 30% of the time to begin with. -s Hero it is then! p80: "Also tried dating some girls." -s Yeah that one slipped through the net, but technically still right :D -p p81: "Hard as it is to believe, I had nothing to do after graduating from college..." -s Like the first one better since this is just pointlessly long. Would sound better if you removed 'hard as it is to believe' "After graduating from college, I had nothing to do…"-p p82: do you mean deprived? and 'eat yet today' sounds funny. 'have I even eaten anything today'? 'when was the last time I spoke to someone' 'lacking strength= 'to die from exhaustion' -v nah depraved has a different meaning from deprived. hmm acceptable change, but i kind of already like the line so once again up to the shin. -p Depraved wasn't the exact Chinese translation but probably the closest thing and probably closer to the original Japanese anyways -s Sticking to depraved p90: "Even though I'm jealous of my dad for being such an iconic figure, at the same time, I idolized him. Always has." -s Hmm better, but I don't mind the first one as well...(modified somewhat) "Even though I’m jealous of my dad for being such an iconic figure, I idolize him at the same time." - p This is like the first time the 3 of us have all given our input in a chapter :D |
PimpToadApr 20, 2010 12:58 AM
| 77: Someone who treats us as individuals, who would stay with us for who we are 82: well if it's still not quite right, chuck me the raw and let me ave a shot at em 81: agree with pimp 'and now I'm just bumming around after graduating from college' something along those lines |
| p77: Right since we all have our own different takes to it...I'll just stick with the original line =P p82: Just changed it to this, Seems like I’m becoming more depraved day by day, have I even eaten yet today? And scene? Think the chapter is good now and all we're doing is prettifying things? |
| point taken. final thoughts Shin? |
| p78: No that line was from the bystanders, hence the correction p81: Well the Chinese had even though it's hard to believe or something along that line there, I just took it out in the original translation 82: the original was 頹廢 I think. Well, as original as the Chinese translation is anyways |
| Hah we're just arguing about semantics now so shall we call it a day or do you guys want the jp scans? I'll list the changes I made? p77: "who will let us become free" p78: "If this continues, his father might not be able to rest in peace..." p79: changed 'great guy' to 'hero' (though I think great guy works better, but 2 to 1 so meh) p80: "Also tried dating some girls." p81: "I had nothing to do after graduating from college..." ...ah screw it i'll just upload draf2 and you guys decide if it's worth checking over again =P As to the great words of the -nii...CAN'T BE STUFFED! :D |
| @ shin Yeah you probably right about the definition. It should mean somethong like "lack of direction and goal in life' Can't be stuffed indeed! |
| Dear Pimptoad: I have full confidence in whatever files you churn out. I believe my trust is well placed without me going over the anime and the manga in 3 languages again. Thank you very much for asking and your consideration. That is all. |
| well said, dear sir |
| In translation...you can't be stuffed =P Ah well that's that! Should we go for a double release alongside FoA07? |
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