Nalusa_Falaya said:This was a pretty nice chapter/nightmare, Not much happened but I think that's not a bad thing, You were right when you said you'd slow things down and focus on the existing characters.
Thanks again for your feedback!
Nalusa_Falaya said:I also like that you added a character that resembles you, I like when writers have this way of knowing more about them through a character in their story instead of like...watching an interview or something, didn't know you sucked at social interactions that much, Lol
Thanks! Moonbow still hasn't reached her peak "me" yet, but she's definitely getting there! And yeah, accidentally offending people is one of my biggest fears, and I find I often do so by accident, so Moonbow and I have that in common, lol
Nalusa_Falaya said:I still don't really get what Kii and Rie do, Are they some type of hunters that go after murderers ? Are they barbers at day, Youkai busters at night ? The guy with the mustache at the beginning and now the police is asking them for help, It seems kinda strange that Tachibana never asked about what they did to that guy with a mustache and the girls never mentioned it, Hopefully their status/job will be more clear in next chapters, Speaking about that...
Yeah, their status will hopefully be much more clear when You starts helping them out with crimefighting. Kii is a barber/hairdresser by trade, but being an oni (which are known for being really strong) she's also been entrusted with protecting the town. Rie's a college student and she's kinda just there to give Kii support and maybe provide useful mind-reading abilities, lol
Nalusa_Falaya said:Are you gonna write privately and post it when you make a lot of progress/finish the story, Or will you publish it ? Regardless, I'm still pumped for new chapters, wherever they'll be released, if they'll be released at all.
Yeah, writing it privately for now is the plan. Probably gonna release everything somewhere when it's done for feedback, before then touching everything up and hopefully finding someone who wants to publish it!
Nalusa_Falaya said:Also, I hope your fever goes away, Fevers suck, I'd imagine getting good ideas for writing is hard when you're sick, Get well soon!
Yeah, I'm getting better, but fevers sure do hinder my ability to come up with ideas, lol. I think the worst of my fever is over though, so fingers crossed!
Nalusa_Falaya said:(Also, I dunno if this was intentional but I think you forgot to add a note for "Yamata no Orochi")
Don't worry, it's intentional! The "Yamata no Orochi" in this story is quite different from its namesake, so I don't really think the footnote would be necessary
Thanks again, for your feedback! |