| Im working on a BIG fanfiction called Elyasia. It's simlar to Lin's Fanfiction called Otherworld. Arc 00 is done and I'm working on Arc 01. The arcs are like sagas/parts/books/etc lol Here's the site link that it's on: http://salyazelyasia.weebly.com/ |
| If you are writing an original work, don't label it as a fanfic. That label alone is a repellant. As for the story, from the first chapter alone, I think you need to work on the narrative structure more. It's pretty dry and telling atm, much like "this happened, that happened, and so on." Try getting into the character's head and elaborate on how she's feeling. Also, expand on the description of the setting, not just the characters. It's setting that serves to immerse readers, not character's appearance. Have to say that the concept is pretty nice, though. Really get the feels of fantasy (mage, dragons, war). It's just the narrative that needs some spicing up. |
 "Who wouldn't want to be like me? Handsome and free like a bird in a tree! Badaboom!" |
| It's a mix of original and fanfiction since a few of the characters are from other animes. I know it needs more details in the setting and other things other then the characters, I'm still working on that. Sadly I'm not the best writer since I'm still learning things. Thanks for taking the time to read some of it. ^_^ |
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