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'Oh! Hi! Excuse me, I was distracted. You must be the new student aren't you?' She spoke and stood up to greet you. Her eyes sparkled with excitement as she put away the book she was reading.

'I'm Arletha Covey, the student counsel's secretary.' She introduced herself with a grin. 'Silly me, I've almost forgotten the reason why you're here.' slapping her forehead, she spurned around and reached for the folders behind her.

When she returned, she passed the application form to you. 'I would appreciate if you could be so kind as to fill this up for me. When you're done, just come back to me. I'll show you the way to your dormitory and the school. Take your time though, we're in no hurry here.'










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INTRODUCTION

Welcome to Peccatorum High School. We are happy to see that you've arrived here safely. It is with great pleasure to see that you'd taken the leap of faith and join us on this journey.

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ADDITIONAL SECTIONS OF THE CHARACTER'S PROFILE


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Agent_No-BentoNov 18, 2016 11:37 PM
Nov 19, 2016 2:05 AM
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Name: Riccardo Orchestra
Age: 17
Gender: Male
Height: 174 cm or 68.5 inches tall
Weight: 55 kg or 121 pounds
Occupation: Musician
Special Physical Features: None
Personality: Is a calm and collected person, he shows great love for any kind of a music instrument and many music types.
Ability: Fortissimo
Riccardo is able to freely manipulate sounds around him as well sounds coming from him.

He is able to alter sound waves to virtually make no noise whatsoever, produce sounds as well. The sounds being produced can be a person's voice, or another sound entirely. And has control of sound waves.

He is able to detect sound from long distance, and have them travel directly towards him giving better hearing. But the weakness to this can be that if a too high pitched sound is made when he is enhancing his hearing too much he can get very disoriented.

He has shown to be able to hear the heartbeats of a person. He can recognize sounds with higher or lower frequencies from around 16 herz to around 300 kHz.

Techniques:

Forte - Striking Sound: A shockwave attack that strikes multiple targets at once. 15 meter range.

Sforzando - Internal Fracture Sound: A single-target directed soundwave attack.

Fortissimo - Large Explosive Sound: An area of effect attack that targets a wide range of enemies. It is strong enough to create a crater on the ground. 15 meter range and it has a diameter of 3 meters by 3 meters.

Sec - Suppress Sound: A area of effect attack that targets the current location (thread) which makes all sound he does not desire null. Even speech from people.

Joyeux - Joyous Sound: A area of effect that makes all he wishes relax his/her emotional state.




ByakugaranNov 26, 2016 12:06 PM
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Name :Yoemon Kikyou
Age: 17
Gender : Female
Height : 1.56m
Weight : 44kg
Occupation : Used to work for a private investigation agency due to her ability. She quit after a certain incident occured
Personality : Unbelievably shy, caring, easily hurt but never says anything.

Ability : Judgement
She can selectively read the mind of anyone within 3 meters (10 feet) of her, no more than 1 at a time. She can only do this 5 times a day, attempting to read someones mind after the fifth attempt will cause her a sudden, extremely intense pain in her brain, but she will still successfully read their mind.

She can also use this ability to sense people near her by 'accidentally' reading their thoughts, but will not be able to identify exactly who it is. This will also take up one of the 5 times she can use her power daily.

Bonus:

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Name: Ciane Marlon
Age: 17
Gender: Female
Height: 162.5 cm
Weight: 120.0 lb (54.4 kg)
Occupation: Street performer
Special Physical Features: Eyes that seem to be mainly blue,with hints of various other colors such as yellow,green,and purple.
Personality: Very playful in even bad times and whimsical,Ciane is not easily angered,and her spirits rarely lower. This is sometimes confused as carelessness,though in actuality Ciane is very observant of her surroundings,she definitely keeps being cautious in mind.
Ability: "Colors"
Ciane's ability allows her to create things out of a strange "material" she likes to call Color. It is,as one may or may not assume,colorful,but can be made to take the form of various small things,solid or non solid,and can even be moved at Ciane's will wherever,including the air. However,she can only make four of any small objects at any given time,and can make a medium sized object if she combines all four of them.
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(Small is up to 15 cm)(Medium is up to 60 cm)

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Agent_No-BentoNov 22, 2016 11:31 PM
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Name: Arletha Covey


Age: 17


Gender: Female


Height: 1.65 meter


Weight: 65 kg


Occupation (if any, before enrollment): Not applicable


Special Physical Features (if any; optional): Arletha has Heterochromia eyes. Her left eye is scarlet.


Personality: Arletha is extremely forgiving, a little too much in the eyes of her friends. She can be clumsy at times, often tripping over nothing or knocking over stuff.


Despite unconsciously getting into trouble and needing someone to bail her out, she is fiercely loyal to people she’d recognized. Arletha can jump into the conclusions quickly albeit often to the wrong one.


Ability: Poison Beauty
Arletha’s body naturally secrete poisonous substance through the pores of her skin, hence making human contact impossible without protection. The level of toxicity is dependent on her emotions. A good rule of thumb is that the more negative her emotions are, the more deadly it would be.


Because of the nature of her ability, any surfaces that she touched would have a small amount of poison attached to it. To prevent any accidental poisoning, she wears a pair of long flesh-colored gloves and thighs.

Special Notes: Arletha is the current secretary to the Student Council.
Nov 22, 2016 8:10 PM
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Name: Corrin Crimrose
Age: 22
Gender: Male
Height: 5'8 feet
Weight: 153 pounds
Occupation: Dress-maker and Horticulturist.
Special Physical Features: Fake cat ears he's had sewn into his head. Over the years he's learned to use them as if they were real cat ears, by using the muscles in his scalp to move them.
Personality: Loud, dramatic, a bit prissy, and will hit on anything that moves.
Ability: Corrin can summon a wand made of magic with a star on the end that can fire glitter into his enemies eyes to blind them and make them irritated.
And here's a picture of him:


And here's a picture of his wand:
BlairIsBest7Nov 22, 2016 8:13 PM
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LETTER OF ACCEPTANCE



Dear Ms. Yoemon Kikyou,

We are pleased to inform you that you have a place at Peccatorum High School. Please find enclosed the directions to the school and you're required to report to the administrative office no later than seven days upon acceptance of this letter.

We looked forward to your presence.

Yours sincerely,
Neacel Nori Patton,
Principal of Peccatorum High School






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LETTER OF ACCEPTANCE



Dear Mr. Riccardo Orchestra,

We are pleased to inform you that you have a place at Peccatorum High School. Please find enclosed the directions to the school and you're required to report to the administrative office no later than seven days upon acceptance of this letter.

We looked forward to your presence.

Yours sincerely,
Neacel Nori Patton,
Principal of Peccatorum High School






Agent_No-BentoNov 22, 2016 11:34 PM
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LETTER OF ACCEPTANCE



Dear Ms. Arletha Covey,

We are pleased to inform you that you have a place at Peccatorum High School. Please find enclosed the directions to the school and you're required to report to the administrative office no later than seven days upon acceptance of this letter.

We looked forward to your presence.

Yours sincerely,
Neacel Nori Patton,
Principal of Peccatorum High School






Nov 26, 2016 9:53 PM

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Name: Lyka
Species: Dullahan
Age: 31
Gender: Female
Height: 5' 7"
Weight: Approximately 20 Pounds
Picture:
Occupation: Death's Accountant - She watches over the Primary Book of the Dead. The book that all copies of the Book of the Dead are derived from and are linked to. She doesnt change it, but rather checks for things each day and will alert Death to people who managed to outlive themselves. This is her only use to her master. And she still has this job.
Special Physical Features: As a Dullahan, her head is detachable, but it still functions as her head should, whether its attached or not.
Personality:
She isnt shy really, she just likes to keep to herself. She doesnt like to sleep with her head on, so she sits it on the counter next to her bed. She is a VERY light sleeper. Since she doesnt have the Call of Death (the power to kill by saying a name), she is very shy about her species since she doesnt want to be thought of as a lesser being, despite almost being as weak as a human. She hates redundancy, and classifies redundant questions as stupid, and may or may not answer them. She does not care for much. But if you somehow manage to worm your way into her unbeating heart, then you can bet your ass she is going to protect you.
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Work in progress:

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Krop-Tor said:

Name: Lyka
Species: Dullahan
Age: 17
Gender: Female
Height: 5' 7"
Weight: Approximately 20 Pounds
Picture:
Special Physical Features: As a Dullahan, her head is detachable, but it still functions as her head should, whether its attached or not.
Personality:
She is a very quiet person. She will show emotion, but not as much as others. She isnt shy really, she just likes to keep to herself. She doesnt like to sleep with her head on, so she sits it on the counter next to her bed. She is a VERY light sleeper. Since she doesnt have the Call of Death (the power to kill by saying a name), she is very shy about her species since she doesnt want to be thought of as a lesser being, despite almost being as weak as a human.
Abilities:


(I will add the Q&A Bits later)


1. What do you mean "Almost as weak as a human being?"
Like how weak is she? She could be immensely strong and the almost could mean a tad bit stronger than the strongest person on Earth.
2. Her ability No Escape would count as Godmoding easily. @Norbeto never said that the obstacles were made out of gold. She would be like Makoto except with the power to unlock/break down anything. Thats not fun, is it?
3. Rip Byaks character with the AoD's hum.
4. How big are they? Like if they're giants, well guess for ya self.
5. When/how did she learn unarmed combat?
NekyneNov 27, 2016 2:40 PM
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nekyne said:

1. What do you mean "Almost as weak as a human being?"
Like how weak is she? She could be immensely strong and the almost could mean a tad bit stronger than the strongest person on Earth.
2. Her ability No Escape would count as Godmoding easily. @Norbeto never said that the obstacles were made out of gold. She would be like Makoto except with the power to unlock/break down anything. Thats not fun, is it?
3. Rip Byaks character with the AoD's hum.
4. How big are they? Like if they're giants, well guess for ya self.
5. When/how did she learn unarmed combat?


1. It is in her Personality, therefore you shouldnt consider it a part of her physical or magical strength. It is a metaphor for low self-esteem. The only thing that keeps her stronger than a normal human is Aspects of Death and No Escape.
2. Thats more of a social quirk. I cant think of many scenarios that would be helpful in a combat setting. And to be honest, I really dont wanna use her for combat.
3. Harmonic Dread only gets rid of their debuffs. I dont see any debuffing powers on Byak's character.
4. Ill put in a height. But imagine them as a few inches taller than an average human.
5. This is very strange question. If I punched you, that would be considered unarmed combat, am I right? She learned it about the time she earned how to move her arms :/
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Name: Skylar Leiado
Age: 16
Gender:Female
Height:160 cm
Weight:45 kg
Occupation (if any, before enrollment): Artist and music performer
Special Physical Features (if any; optional):Heterochromia, One blue eye and the other green as shown in picture. Scars running the length of her left arm.
Personality: In general Skylar comes off outgoing and confident, but tends to hide her real self behind this illusion. She tends to go with the flow and easy to get along with when meeting for the first time. She enjoys writing music and playing for a crowd big or small as we as painting.
Ability:




@norbeto edited the ability. Let me know if I need to add anything else.
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Name: Stahl Perry
Age: 17
Gender: Male
Height: 6'
Weight: 72kg
Occupation: Inventor
Special Physical Features (if any; optional):
He has a living fox tattoo that runs around his skin freely

Personality:

Jaded views and an absent minded demeanor muddle the mind of this genius scientist. Bored easily, predisposed towards addiction to impulse stimulation, and a ruthless record of human interactions, Stahl shows a host of symptoms of a psychotic mental disorder. He is willing to be extremely brutal, and thinks nothing of doing so.

Stahl's complete disregard for human life may easily have turned homicidal, if not for his intellectual muse to sate his incessant mind. In coherence with the aforementioned afflictions comes Stahl's difficulty in adhering both to authority and the will of others; being one of those people who is extremely anti-totalitarian and also thinks that everyone else's opinions are stupid.

Suicidal people are statistically more intelligent, and for a logical reason. The more the human body understands, the more aware it becomes of how little it can understand. With intelligence comes the insatiable need to destroy oneself, Stahl being no exception. This has led the young teen to a serious substance abuse addiction, where he uses drugs and alcohol to numb the feelings of existential awareness.

When substance is insubstantial, he resorts to thrill seeking to make him feel alive, which mainly involve a lot of illegal acts. Thus far, Stahl has been wanted or arrested for:

--Breaking and entering (Busted)
--Assault (Busted)
--Bioterrorism (Wanted)
--Cable piracy (Wanted)
--Driving under influence underage (Busted)
--Human Cloning (Wanted)
--Smugling (Busted)
--Slavery of unidentified organisms (Wanted)
--Illegal Arms Dealing (Wanted)


Ability: Tinkerbox
While not actually possessing any magical abilities, Stahl carries on his person a wealth of his own inventions, which he wagers the intelligent man would choose over a power any day.
--Plasma blade
When activated, produces a ninety cm long plasma blade.

--Sentry spider:
Appearing as small white oval disks, these three devices can be thrown and explode into an arachnid-like form to travel. Once they reach their designated location, their legs lock and they produce a large laser from their eye. This laser cannot be moved and remains locked in one position. Contact with these beams is ill advised for, although small, they can cut through almost anything on contact

--Widowmaker sentry:
A floating turret with active camouflage, this machine is capable of firing a high heat 50 cal. bullet at a target Stahl marks with a laser pointer. This turret can only fire once every five turns.

---Stahl's special shoes:
These shoes have been lined at the soles by a gel of Stahl's own design. These shoes allow him to bounce to almost thrice the height of a normal human jump

--Safety helmet:
Stahl has designed a completely retractable helmet that with activate and shield his face whenever his head would make contact with something. It was originally designed for motorcyclists to prevent their brains turning to soup in accidents but it has its uses beyond that.

--Ser Grapling's Hook:
A metallic hook capable of locking its malleable whip at will via a button on the hilt.


WIP
QUESTIONS



WhoremoansNov 28, 2016 5:47 AM

There's a lady who's sure
All that glitters is gold
And she's buying a stairway to heaven
When she gets there she knows
If the stores are all closed
With a word she can get what she came for
Oh oh oh oh and she's buying a stairway to heaven


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Name: Edo Agawa
Age: 17
Gender: Male
Height: 1.8 M
Weight: 70 Kg
Occupation (if any, before enrollment): Gambler
Special Physical Features: None
Personality: Carefree and prone to fall asleep quickly. Edo usually finds the quickest way to do things, be it efficient or not. If not entertained Edo normally just goes to sleep, regardless of the location or time. He will also sometimes search for entertaining situations, or create them himself if not available.
Ability: Trickster




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Name: Ezra Williams
Age: 19
Gender:Male
Height: 198 cm
Weight: 80 kg
Occupation: School Office Assistant, Unclean and Clean vocalist/Songwriter- He got lucky and found himself working at a high school for some good pay, helping him fund his small dream of starting a band, after he started his first band, a record company showed interest in it and so they signed them. After a year of touring and two albums, the band broke up due to “creative differences”, and so Ezra was now left alone with a contract still active. The record company put him with a new band, but after a year he decided to leave and pursue other things.
Special Physical Features: Out of the ordinary red eyes, don’t really mean anything, just a weird things he has. His entire right forearm is tattooed with some kind of floral colored tattoo, he rarely has it covered,, unless he wears his leather jacket, in that case you only see the ends of it that extend on to his right hand. The rest of his body has tattoos, but they are nothing special:
Some wings on his back that he got after losing a bet.
Some stars on the left side of his chest
• Two geometric tattoos, one on each side of his rib-cage.
o A fox on the right,
o And a glacier on the other.

Personality: Hardly ever stays in one place, changing subjects in conversations as though he can’t choose the flavor of the ice cream he wants. Calm and quiet unless spoken to, only having small burst of random thoughts. Hardly caring for anything else but himself, and is a bit of a trouble maker, nothing huge, but he has received prison time for some stuff such as: Drug possession, DUI, Assault, Possession of an unregistered firearm.
He has this issue of not wanting to work within his potential, seeing as he purposely would flunk his classes despite being able to learn most of the subjects like nothing, as well as, by some miracle, he received the full ride to a world class university in order to become a lawyer, but passed it because:
“I would rather have fun, than become some monkey in a suit, helping rich assholes get richer, and walk around like some uptight idiot with a broom up his ass”-Ezra

Seems to depressed at times due to his choices, but takes pride in his life, stating
”I made my choice, I didn’t let someone else tell me what to do, I can fuck up as bad as I fucking want, because it’s my choice.”

As it can be seen, his vocabulary while speaking isn’t the best, as well as having a bit of an attitude when it comes to subject of his life, or certain subjects. But while despite having a bit of a hostile attitude at times, he is a pretty active, and somewhat friendly individual, showing care for people at times, being a bit of a humorous guy, and a bit of a flirt at times, though it is mainly unintentional. He seems spaced out, but pays a lot of attention to his surroundings and unintentionally acts nosey when examining people around him.
Ability: WIP

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SharkDad-Dec 8, 2016 7:06 AM
I keep my distance now
Forcing my jaw to smile
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Name: Lucas Larsson
Age: 18
Gender: Male
Height: 186 cm // 6"1' ft
Weight: 75 kg // 165 lbs
Occupation: Part-timer at German moving company
Special Physical Features: Yellow eyes
Personality: Lucas is a hotheaded teenager and believes there are only two types of problems in the world: unfortunately his problems and definitely not his problems. Lucas is quick to flee the scene if the second type of problem occurs and not one to be part of a team.

Ability: Intangibility
Lucas is able to move through objects and ignore most physical effects in their way, being able to make his own particles move between other particles. Therefor Lucas is able to ignore most solid masses whether they be objects or beings.

Techniques:
Intangibility extension: By touch Lucas can extendhis intangibility with a target, whether being or object, to avoid causing collateral damage or pass through walls/dangerous attacks.
Intangible rocket: Lucas can hurl a being or object at an opponent while making it temporarilly intangible, allowing them to pass through obstructions and bypass defenses. While the object is intangible, Lucas is not however.











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"Ever faced the thunder before?"
Name: Aiden, "The Thunder's Roar", Stormguard
Age: 18
Gender: Male
Height: 180 cm / 5'11
Weight: 70 kg / ~154 lb
Occupation (if any, before enrollment): Student
Special Physical Features (if any; optional):
Personality: Hyperactive, he really shows his affinity to the Electric Element. With a happy-go-lucky attitude, he faces everything as if being the comedic relief of the scene. But don't get him angry, the thunder roars.
Ability: Electromaniac







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Vital Statistics:

Family:

Personality:

Abilities and Traits:

Relationships:

History and Influences:

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Name: Kiara Bloom
Age: 18
Gender: Female
Height: 6'4" ft (193 cm)
Weight: 173 lb (78.4 kg)
Occupatio: Science Experiment
Special Physical Features: Body was experimented on, augmented and enhanced. She is as strong as a body builder, but her hands shake from the constant experiments she had been put through.
Personality: An eccentric person who likes to be cheerful so she could hide her past. Occasionally, she would grow crazy as if she was the mad scientist herself who put her in the experiments she had been through. She is a heavy thinker, but is often clumsy when put under pressure or too careful. When asked about her life, she tends to make up the story and make it happier than how she had her life as a lab rat. She isn't very concerned about her weight, but she is concerned about how she looked as a woman. Alone, she twiddles with her fingers and talks to herself as if she was broken mentally, smiling like a lunatic.
Ability: Internal Equilibrium
Due to experiments augmenting her body and enhancing it, she is able to control electricity and dark matter. Using both to her advantage, she could destabilize objects that run on electricity and use dark matter to fly by compressing those particles onto her body.





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Name: Charo Chino
Age: 18
Gender: F
Height: 3'5
Weight: 30 Ib
Occupation (if any, before enrollment): student
Special Physical Features (if any; optional): None
Personality: Charo is a sweet, kind-hearted, and cheerful person. She care about others and not to scare to share her opinion
Ability: Object-based powers
Powers derived from objects
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You have to be more specific about her ability because you are been too vague now. List examples and explain it. What are the shortcomings? Any cooldown period needed? How frequent can she use her ability?

Do work on it because her ability has the potential for greatness.
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@Krop-Tor

Generally, I do not have an issue with your character though I need to clarify on certain things with you first.

  • “Gravity Down”, how large is the area affected?
  • ”Soul Thirster”, you mentioned that it siphons the enemy’s own soul. How affected the victim of this siphoning is? As in, will the victim be completely knocked out? If that’s your intention, I’ll not be able to approve this particular section. If not, what can I expect from the victim (loss of mental capacity perhaps? If so, for how many posts?)

    “When fired, the ball of energy hits for half the damage taken from the Siphon.”~ What would this mean?

    Is there any consequences for the use of this particular aspect of her ability?
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Your ability seems fine to me, however you might wish to expand on it. As of now, you had not indicate what your ability is able to achieve. You might wish to refer to Uniqvoid’s teacher profile for inspiration.

What I’m concerned mostly is the absence of an elaborate description might handicap your character in future combat. However, if you declined, that is fine as well.
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The aspect of your character’s ability that concerns me is the temperature that she’s manipulating. I’ve completed my research and temperature of -45 degree would cause frostbite in five minutes. Also the coldest temperature that she can achieve is almost as cold as the coldest place on earth. As such, that is deemed as overpowering in my opinion.

My next point is based on the assumption that her ability would also summon icy winds (although you had not indicate it on her profile), that would cause extreme discomfort to someone’s eyes and hence would handicap your opinion. There is nothing that her opponent would be able to do to avoid this damage dealt to their eyes. Besides that, there is also the risk that body parts would start falling off
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Due to all that, the lowest temperature I can accept would be -10 degrees. At this temperature, it’s sufficient to cause damage to her opponents while allowing a fair battle ground.

Besides that, I would need to scale down on the area affected. The maximum parameters that are acceptable would be 15 meters.

Lastly, I would appreciate if you would be able to provide more substantial examples of what can she do with her ability.

Below are the sources that I’m citing from for your reference.

Source 1

Source 2
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@Willowmaker

I enjoyed reading your character’s ability. He reminded me of another character I’d created years ago. The lack of abnormal abilities allows one to be more creative with the creation of tools.

Moving on, these are the questions I have for his tools:

”Plasma Blade”: describe the properties of the blade. What is its capabilities? Does it act like a normal blade or is it capable of cutting through other materials. Would the blade be broken? Also, the image appears to be broken from my perspective. Please fix it.

”Sentry Spider”: What is the maximum parameters that the three can form (assuming that they form a formation)? How far would the laser reach? Also, does he have control over them upon placement? Does he need to physically retrieve them or is there a remote control he has?

“Stahl’s Special Shoes”: the average human male can jump between 16 to 20 inches (approximately 40 to 50 cm). You mentioned that he can bounce twice of that. I need a figure for it.

"Widowmaker sentry": Please take away the camouflage element and isn't 50 unreasonable? That would be a highly powerful sniper and would give your character too much of an advantage over the other players.

Source

”Ser Grapling’s Hook”: I need description pertaining to the range. How long is the whip and the hook.
In conclusion, your character is rather interesting in my opinion. It does need minor adjustments but other than that, I do not see any huge issues.

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@Uniqvoid

In general, I do not see any major issue with Edo’s abilities. I do wish to clarify on certain matter with you before he can be approved.

His ability, is it capable of convincing people to harm themselves? If so, that would not be acceptable.

Dec 3, 2016 7:44 PM

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Lucas’s ability is interesting because he seems to be unable to take damage from physical attacks.

I’ll have to ask, would that apply to intangible attacks too (such as fire, ice or poison). If he’s undefeatable then that would defeats the fun element in combat situation. Is there exceptions of his ability, such as Krop-Tor’s Lyka character’s allergies to Gold.

“Intangibility Extension:” the effects of intangibility are only effective when he’s touching the object/ person, am I correct to assume that if it would be nullified shall the contact is cut off. Theoretically speaking, if that’s the case then there is a possibility of having a blade pierced through the benefactor’s body shall he let go of his hands.

“Intangible Rocket:” Does he have exceptional strength? As far as I understand, one cannot simply hurl a human being more than a couple of meters at best.
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While it’s acceptable for him to be able to control lightings, I do have to inform you that mother nature’s lightings are much stronger than you thought to be.

It’s mentioned that 10 amps is sufficient to cause severe burns and cardiac arrest. Death is highly probable. An average bolt of negative lightning carries an electric current of 30,000 amperes. Hence an adjustment to it would be great.

How fast and agile can he be? Simply mentioning that he outclass many wouldn’t be too useful for me?

What’s the limitation of the length of distance he’s capable of travelling? Would he be able to change direction midway?

For the bolts, how strong can it be and what would be the effects it have on his opponent?

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  • “Gravity Down”, how large is the area affected?
    Its a targeted effect, not an AOE effect.
  • ”Soul Thirster”, you mentioned that it siphons the enemy’s own soul. How affected the victim of this siphoning is? As in, will the victim be completely knocked out? If that’s your intention, I’ll not be able to approve this particular section. If not, what can I expect from the victim (loss of mental capacity perhaps? If so, for how many posts?)
    This does actual, physical damage. Not inflict status. This is her only way of inflicting actual Damage aside from Melee attacks from her and the Aspects.

    “When fired, the ball of energy hits for half the damage taken from the Siphon.”~ What would this mean?
    It means this phase of the attack, is always 50% less effective than the siphon.

    Is there any consequences for the use of this particular aspect of her ability?
    No, because it is her only damaging ability. Without it, she would have to punch the enemy for victory >.<
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@Uniqvoid

In general, I do not see any major issue with Edo’s abilities. I do wish to clarify on certain matter with you before he can be approved.

His ability, is it capable of convincing people to harm themselves? If so, that would not be acceptable.



In short no, not directly. IF anyone would hurt themselves after use of this ability, that would purely be up to the person who is currently writing a response. But most should not be able to agree with those suggestions.
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Do add that into the description. Once completed, he's ready.

Dec 5, 2016 5:47 AM

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I do believe I know how strong Mother Nature's lightning is. I am not stupid, so do not worry about that. Problem was that I thought the students here would be generally stronger compared to average humans.

I don't know how to explain it since I believe that there is nothing that is in the club's description. I just gave a bit of a numerical estimate.
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To clarify, I am by no means questioning your intelligence.

I was seeking clarifications in general. Students in general are stronger, yes. But stronger than mother nature is a whole different matter.

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I'm glad you took the time to reply, but I woukd've preferred if you didn't do it to that part rather than the one that is relevant to the character's edits.

On that note, the reply does not further anything but a discussion. I recommend focusing on the character, not the discussion.
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