You might want to remove the 1-km range from your ability. This is completely unnecessary, as none of Mirai High's amenities are that large.
Also, what do you mean by a "magic bow and arrow"? Does the weapon have a special power? According to your bio, the power was an acquired talent and not a blessing granted by a weapon, so I'm assuming the magic bow and arrow has "magical" abilities.
We've just finished discussing your character sheet. We've come to a conclusion:
Your character's ability is unusual. It's both overpowered and not.
Focuses all his energy and power into his Bō staff and transforms it into a black scythe, increasing the damage dealt and making the weapon longer, therefore having a larger range.
We've decided to give the damage increase a numerical value. The ability will increase damage by 1.4x.
Also, please specify by how much longer the weapon will be while the ability is active.
This transformation lasts 8 posts and has a cooldown of 12 posts beginning after the transformation has reverted... Following the transformation his features return to normal along with the staff and he is physically drained for the next x posts, depending on how long his transformation was active for (1 - 3 posts = 2 post drain, 4 - 6 posts = 3 post drain, 7 - 8 posts = 5 turn drain).
8 posts is simply too long for an ability duration. 12 posts is also too long for a cooldown. We've decided to give you two choices:
a. Have your ability only last for four posts at maximum, and the duration-cooldown ratio be at 1:1 (meaning that if you only activate the ability for 2 posts, then it will undergo a 2-post cooldown); or
b. Have your ability undergo a two-post cooldown, but your character will be physically drained while the cooldown is active.
Please make the necessary changes. :)
@Nice Thanks for taking a look at my character :) Please let me know if there is anything else that you think I should change.
Name: Kurosawa Masumi
Gender: Male (Often mistaken for a female because of his feminine features and long hair)
Power: Manifest Power
Focuses all his energy and power into his Bō staff and transforms it into a black scythe, increasing the damage dealt (damage increased by x1.4) and making the weapon longer, therefore having a larger range (see weapon for length of staff and scythe). The transformation of the staff can last at most, 4 posts, but Masumi has the ability to end the transformation prematurely, the cooldown of his ability has a 1:1 ratio to the number of posts the ability was active (If the ability is active for 2 posts - it has a 2 post cooldown, if the ability is active for 4 posts - it has a 4 post cooldown). During the transformation Masumi's eyes and hair turn jet black and a faint black fog emanates around his weapon. Following the transformation his features return to normal along with the staff. If Masumi kept the ability active for the full 4 post duration, he will feel fatigued during the 4 post cooldown which follows.
Steel Bō staff (doesn't say blitz on it) || The traditional size of a Bō staff is 1.8m, but Masumi's is 1.7m as it better suits his height, which is rather small for an 18 year old male.
After transformation || The length of the staff grows to 1.8m and the scythe blade is 0.5m.
Once power has gotten stronger || The length of the staff grows to 1.9m and the scythe blade grows to 0.65m.
Club: Dance and Drama
Masumi is a very calm and collected person. He is not easily bothered and enjoys interaction with humans and animals alike. In the rare case Masumi is angered, it is easily noticeable through his use of sarcasm to berate those who angered him. Masumi enjoys expressing himself through the medium of dance and drama, hence his choice of clubs. He is a fun-loving person. He tends to focus more on his training than his studies, despite this he can be very knowledgeable in certain subjects which peek his interest. Masumi is not likely to open up to someone until they have opened up to him.
Masumi was born into an unordinary family. Every member of his family took part in the family kabuki troupe. In his early years, Masumi was regularly mistaken for a girl due to his very feminine features, and as a result ended up playing the role of an onnagata in the troupe. The first few performances he took part in sparked his flare for drama and dance and he continued his role as an onnagata, growing his hair out to its current length, making him look even more feminine. During his school years pre-Mirai High he took part in many drama productions often playing a female part (as voted for by his class), this led to him joining the drama and dance clubs upon enrolling in Mirai High.
In his spare time, away from kabuki, Masumi practiced Bōjutsu with his father and brother Aoi, which he still practices to this day. Upon reaching the highest attainable level of Bōjutsu, surpassing both his father and brother, his father entrusted him with the family heirloom, the steel Bō staff he currently uses. Upon wielding it for the first time, a power activated, manifesting all his energy as power in the staff, transforming it into the black scythe. He was at first unable to control this power and it would drain too much energy rendering him unable to move for hours. Perseverance and regular training led him to the point he is currently at, being able to control the power to a great extent.
After he reached this level he received a letter from an unknown sender prompting him to seek out Mirai High mentioned in the letter, and so he did hoping to fully understand and master his newfound power.
Modified by Kim_TaeyeonSNSD, Jul 5, 2016 6:20 PM
Joined: Apr 2016
Name: Aaron Serah
Power Explanation: Her powers gives her to ability to use sigils as a weapon with a sigil she can summom:
she can even teleport her and everyone else trough sigils to any part of the world
altho it takes alot of her mana
Club: No Clubs Currently
Personality: Calm, Bossy, Overconfident, Arogant
Bio: She was born and grew up in a successful family in a poor capital, she lived without worry until she was about 11 years old, but at that point things changed.
She lost her brothers in a horrible flood and was forgotten by everybody. With the help of a suspicious stranger she had to survive in a wicked world. But with her strength and powers, she managed to survive everything and overcome all odds. This has turned her into the woman she is today.
After finally turning life around, she now works on meeting new, kind people. By doing so, she hopes to start life over on a good note and finally find peace of mind she has never had.
I strongly suggest you to read the rules and guidelines before making a character. Teleportation of any form, whether short or long-ranged, is not allowed.
Her powers gives her to ability to use sigils as a weapon with a sigil she can summom:
Please specify which weapons and beings she can summon. Also, indicate durations and cooldowns in terms of posts.
Keep in mind that she is still Rank F, meaning that her powers need to not be overpowered.
Joined: Apr 2016
so teleportation isnt alowed heh i understand
for weapons she can summom light meele weapons like (swords, daggers,etc..)
for havier wepaons and bigger takes more mana
and ranged weapons (bows, crossbows, etc..)
for beings she can summom normal animals only
for a cooldown hmm...this one is pretty hard
if her mana is 100% how about 3% of her mana goes for weaker summonings (like weapons)
and 5% animals
for bigger sigils she will need atleast 10-20% (thats for havier things)
cooldown it doesnt take much time to draw one so lets say after drawing one her cooldown can be half of minute? for weaker?
for summoning animals about 2-4 minutes?
and bigger weapons about 5-10 minutes?