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[center]Those that wish to have their artwork critiqued will upload within this thread. Put the images in spoilers, ask for people specifically (and only those that are asked will do the critiquing) or just ask to be critiqued. [b]To put images in spoilers [spoiler.] put image here [spoiler/.] with out the "."[b][/spoiler]
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Here are a couple of my works that I would anyone to critique on.

Eye


Flower


Shoes


Unfinished (will finish after this critique)

Leaf


Medallion


Anime style guy with suit
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Wow, they areee really nice (no lie). Especially the hair XDD & the last one!
Critique suppose to be blunt? I'll be as nice as possible >.<!


  • For starters, for the trainers, it felt a bit unclear since there weren't much heavier tones or a bit of an outline. Though sometimes outlines are bad if they are too bold. Usually for an outline, you try to blend it in so that it doesn't look overwhelming or as if it was a border.
  • With the rl (e.g the leaves) stuff, I think your pencil was blunt? Was it a HB pencil? Since if the pencil is blunt it doesn't portray a much refined look (though it has a nice effect, looking at it differently e.g. the stiff leaves - frail). Also your flower has a nice tone which is in the positive of not pressing hard with your pencil- it looks gentle.
  • For your graphic art, I saw the one in the Display Art, and I have to say, the hair was rlly nice!! Though I guess for that critique, the mouth was too close to the chin; so probably proportion.
  • Your graphic work is good, it seems kind of difficult somehow. What program do you use? I can see the sense of what you were trying to draw. Since you haven't finished yet, you could probably just try to blend the tones in (white / black are clearly seen < but thats if you want to go into it). Do you plan on colouring it ;3?


I do Art GCSE so I'm doing Art in rl, though I wanna try graphic work (doing a bit rn) but not original drawings yet since I need to get a graphic pen etc. ;D
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I used Gimp for the program. I use to have a DA account but I stopped using it (account is basic-K) The outline's how do you blend them? Which one was trainers? I have a very gentle style when it comes to my sketches. I don't like pressing so hard because it makes me feel kind of weird and like once I do it, it just won't be the same.
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Well when I say blending, kind of like using different tones to pile it up and make each tone stand together well. Kind of like, you wouldn't colour eyes with a fill paint in black since that'll make it just 2d. But yeah.

I'll probably post my drawings in a week since its the holidays!~
 
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I displayed the girl on the other thread but I actually do want a critique on it


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Yea~~ Please finish the girl since it looks kinda cool! And the glasses!!! XDD
(Your really good at drawing the hair >.<) , oh and I can see part of the hand yay!!
(Sorry this wasn't much of a critique lmaoo)
 
 
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Oh my friend and I was playing this stupid sketching game (through oovoo) and I beat her when I drew this! XD. Doesn't look finished and rushed but we all laughed lmfaoo!

I was wondering if I should finish it. Anything to add, make it better?
Probably need to edit those hands owell XDD
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I did finish it :( it was a picture of a girl that I drew and that;s how the picture looked
Here is the pic
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sorry but picture taken from cell phone here is one.


and second
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Oh!! Sorry I never noticed >.<!
I actually didn't mind it like that (thought I read unfinished) it looks rlly realistic!
 
 
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They are unfinished :/ I got this problem with the sky DX
 
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Ooh house house pretty~
 
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Here's something I started just so that I could have something to post hahaha. Got kinda sloppy towards the end.

 
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LMDY said:
I displayed the girl on the other thread but I actually do want a critique on it


OP, I like the drawing in its overall-ness. I do however feel that it would be nice to have a bit more toning to the skin of the subject. I understand you're drawing using a photo reference, yet I feel that perhaps you could add a few more elements to the composition so that it would maybe contrast or accentuate the presence of the main subject. The hair was done quite nicely and I really enjoy the enigmatically charming look of the subject's face.

Great illustration OP :)
 
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nobodoc said:
LMDY said:
I displayed the girl on the other thread but I actually do want a critique on it


OP, I like the drawing in its overall-ness. I do however feel that it would be nice to have a bit more toning to the skin of the subject. I understand you're drawing using a photo reference, yet I feel that perhaps you could add a few more elements to the composition so that it would maybe contrast or accentuate the presence of the main subject. The hair was done quite nicely and I really enjoy the enigmatically charming look of the subject's face.

Great illustration OP :)
Do you mind showing me some examples? thank you for the critique and the complement by the way. I am quite new to art so I don't really understand most of what you are telling me to change so if you can put this is laymen terms I would really appreciate it.
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I wouldn't have any personal examples of mine to show tbh. I was never good at drawing itself in school, my strongpoint was always writing essays in art class.

-By toning I mean more use of your pencil so that you give more depth to the subject. As of now, although not a downside, the subject's face appears three-dimensionally flat. By shading or toning the skin with graphite you're able to push certain areas back and bring other areas forward (just like in a real person's face i.e. our eye sockets lie deeper into our faces and our cheeks and nose kind of protrude more). So maybe by hatching (shading technique) close or around the receding hairline it would give the impression that the end of the forehead is pushed back into the drawing which in turn pushes the area of the brow forward.

-In terms of composition or what makes up your drawing, I guess it's fine as is since you're using a photo as a reference. When I mentioned adding a few more elements to it, they could be anything really. Perhaps you decide to lightly outline the environment that is around the subject (e.g. her room, bookshelves, bed, table..). This is of course a real minor recommendation but it always makes the composition a bit more interesting as a whole given you have the time, effort and interest to go as far, which is often not the case for everyone.

Well, hope this helped man. If you have the time, I'd be interested in what you have to say about my samurai sketch. Take care.

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To be honest I'm not good at critiquing but I do have a question, what did you use for shadowing? Also thanks for the advice I will try the first one and see how it comes out (I also thought it was a bit flat but I drew it the way I saw so I didn't know what else to add.)
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LMDY said:
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nobodoc said:


I wouldn't have any personal examples of mine to show tbh. I was never good at drawing itself in school, my strongpoint was always writing essays in art class.

-By toning I mean more use of your pencil so that you give more depth to the subject. As of now, although not a downside, the subject's face appears three-dimensionally flat. By shading or toning the skin with graphite you're able to push certain areas back and bring other areas forward (just like in a real person's face i.e. our eye sockets lie deeper into our faces and our cheeks and nose kind of protrude more). So maybe by hatching (shading technique) close or around the receding hairline it would give the impression that the end of the forehead is pushed back into the drawing which in turn pushes the area of the brow forward.

-In terms of composition or what makes up your drawing, I guess it's fine as is since you're using a photo as a reference. When I mentioned adding a few more elements to it, they could be anything really. Perhaps you decide to lightly outline the environment that is around the subject (e.g. her room, bookshelves, bed, table..). This is of course a real minor recommendation but it always makes the composition a bit more interesting as a whole given you have the time, effort and interest to go as far, which is often not the case for everyone.

Well, hope this helped man. If you have the time, I'd be interested in what you have to say about my samurai sketch. Take care.

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To be honest I'm not good at critiquing but I do have a question, what did you use for shadowing? Also thanks for the advice I will try the first one and see how it comes out (I also thought it was a bit flat but I drew it the way I saw so I didn't know what else to add.)[/quote][/quote]

I used mostly 2B, 4B, and 6B pencils. To blend it all (and a poor job at that) I used both my fingers and a make-up sponge.
 
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What's 2b 4b and 6b pencils. I thought people only used regular pencils and a blending tool. Do the 2/4/6B have something to do with the thickness of the graphite within the pencil? If it does then someone told me about this before but my applied art teacher doesn't have them so i couldn't use them
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LMDY said:
What's 2b 4b and 6b pencils. I thought people only used regular pencils and a blending tool. Do the 2/4/6B have something to do with the thickness of the graphite within the pencil? If it does then someone told me about this before but my applied art teacher doesn't have them so i couldn't use them


The pencil's rating (i.e. 3H, H, HB, 2B, 4B, 6B...) actually refers to the hardness of the lead. The softer the lead (e.g. 8B) the less you have to apply pressure to gain darker tones. Harder leads (e.g. 6H) will require more pressure to gain even slightly darker tones.

Overall, softer leads found in pencils such as 8B will give darker tones, whereas harder leads such as 6H (in the opposite side of the spectrum) will comparatively give much lighter tones.

Here's a link to give you an idea: http://i00.i.aliimg.com/wsphoto/v0/1600478520_1/-font-b-STAEDTLER-b-font-Professional-drawing-font-b-pencil-b-font-6-pcs-font.jpg
 
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nobodoc said:
LMDY said:
What's 2b 4b and 6b pencils. I thought people only used regular pencils and a blending tool. Do the 2/4/6B have something to do with the thickness of the graphite within the pencil? If it does then someone told me about this before but my applied art teacher doesn't have them so i couldn't use them


The pencil's rating (i.e. 3H, H, HB, 2B, 4B, 6B...) actually refers to the hardness of the lead. The softer the lead (e.g. 8B) the less you have to apply pressure to gain darker tones. Harder leads (e.g. 6H) will require more pressure to gain even slightly darker tones.

Overall, softer leads found in pencils such as 8B will give darker tones, whereas harder leads such as 6H (in the opposite side of the spectrum) will comparatively give much lighter tones.

Here's a link to give you an idea: http://i00.i.aliimg.com/wsphoto/v0/1600478520_1/-font-b-STAEDTLER-b-font-Professional-drawing-font-b-pencil-b-font-6-pcs-font.jpg
I'm actually going to keep that as a reference and buy some of those magical pencils
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I'm actually going to keep that as a reference and buy some of those magical pencils[/quote]

Hahahahaha, they make a bunch but I guess you only need about 3 of them really for basic work.
 
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I am going to just be drawing anime characters to get better at it. I have no talent for it so when I ask for critiquing please be as honest as possible
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I am going to just be drawing anime characters to get better at it. I have no talent for it so when I ask for critiquing please be as honest as possible[/quote][/spoiler]

Likewise
 
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nobodoc said:
I am going to just be drawing anime characters to get better at it. I have no talent for it so when I ask for critiquing please be as honest as possible
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Likewise[/quote]I will try but I don't think I will be able to give you a good critique since I suck at it but I will try.
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So many spoilers to quotations~! 'Magical pencils' XDDD
 
 
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They are magical though xD
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Truee (tbh I don't even use all of them :F) ~Magical safe keeping~
 
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Truee (tbh I don't even use all of them :F) ~Magical safe keeping~


I was so tempted to buy the full range from Staedler the other week hahaha, it comes in such a nice box
 
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@Nobodoc, Oh I've got the full range but I usually just use the HB pencils. I've got loads~~
Do you use the other ranges?
 
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@Nobodoc, Oh I've got the full range but I usually just use the HB pencils. I've got loads~~
Do you use the other ranges?


The only ones I use now are the HB to 8B from Staedler; it's a recent purchase and before that I was just straight up using Micron pens non-stop haha
 
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@Nobodoc, Oh okay lol.
 
 
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Yo guys.

I'm practicing on proportion.
Please gimme advice!

[I have a personal mindset that advice makes you better but critique makes you worse :P]

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I'm not a big fan of drawing people so I'm not too familiar with body proportions. Other than the fact that the body looks proportionate and it's a decent drawing I couldn't give you good advice. If I were to venture into giving you my opinion however, I would perhaps advise to make the thickness of the chest in side profile slightly thinner because with such size I would expect broader shoulders in the mannequin's front profile. The opposite could also be done: broadening the shoulders to make the thickness of the chest more natural.
 
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kazu00 said:
Yo guys.

I'm practicing on proportion.
Please gimme advice!

[I have a personal mindset that advice makes you better but critique makes you worse :P]

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I feel the legs are a bit short, but don't worry, it depends of the style as well. I would recommend you to practice proportions where they really are tricky, which is in action scenes, action doesn't mean a fight, I mean doing something, anything, walking, eating sat on a chair. and stuff like that. Also, work on the feet and open hands, don't avoid them just because you are not good at them, they are really difficult to master, I still have some problems with them.
 
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nobodoc said:
I'm not a big fan of drawing people so I'm not too familiar with body proportions. Other than the fact that the body looks proportionate and it's a decent drawing I couldn't give you good advice. If I were to venture into giving you my opinion however, I would perhaps advise to make the thickness of the chest in side profile slightly thinner because with such size I would expect broader shoulders in the mannequin's front profile. The opposite could also be done: broadening the shoulders to make the thickness of the chest more natural.


Yeah if I'm not careful I might ended up giving him boobs. Thanks!

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kazu00 said:
Yo guys.

I'm practicing on proportion.
Please gimme advice!

[I have a personal mindset that advice makes you better but critique makes you worse :P]

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I feel the legs are a bit short, but don't worry, it depends of the style as well. I would recommend you to practice proportions where they really are tricky, which is in action scenes, action doesn't mean a fight, I mean doing something, anything, walking, eating sat on a chair. and stuff like that. Also, work on the feet and open hands, don't avoid them just because you are not good at them, they are really difficult to master, I still have some problems with them.


Gotcha! I hate drawing the lower body. So weak at feet. I only hid one hand bcs I didn't know what position that should be drawn lmao. Thank you for the advice and encouragement.
 
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@Kazu00, the hands should be the same size as the face, not the head, just the face, from the fringe to the chin. And the feet, the same size as the whole head.
 
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Can one of you guys teach me the basic proportions of a anime female and male? I watched some youtube videos on it but none of them really work for me so how do you guys set up your guidelines and outline for your creations?
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Girl proportion comin through~~



Advice welcome!

YamamotoSensei said:
@Kazu00, the hands should be the same size as the face, not the head, just the face, from the fringe to the chin. And the feet, the same size as the whole head.

Thanks bro.

LMDY said:
Can one of you guys teach me the basic proportions of a anime female and male? I watched some youtube videos on it but none of them really work for me so how do you guys set up your guidelines and outline for your creations?

I wish I could. Not enough skill to teach someone.
 
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To be honest, I see nothing wrong with it!! It's simply amazing!! (Though I'm not really an expert on proportions) I think the area where the clavicle appears to be is a little too far from her back on her side profile? (Again I'm no expert, so don't take this too seriously unless someone agrees!) Then again, she might be wearing a lot of thick clothing underneath.. but yeah!
 
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Jaymusta said:
To be honest, I see nothing wrong with it!! It's simply amazing!! (Though I'm not really an expert on proportions) I think the area where the clavicle appears to be is a little too far from her back on her side profile? (Again I'm no expert, so don't take this too seriously unless someone agrees!) Then again, she might be wearing a lot of thick clothing underneath.. but yeah!


Hahaha its okay just say what you think is needed to be improved!
You mean she looks fat? lol ok thanks!

So sad the display & critique threads are so quiet.
 
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You seem like a pro mangaka since it looks like the real manga art styles!!

It looks rlly nice *^*, your really good at this proportional thing Kazu!! I think it looks pretty natural since the clothes..


I just spotted this but who's 'Mabel' =3?.
 
 
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kazu00 said:
Jaymusta said:
To be honest, I see nothing wrong with it!! It's simply amazing!! (Though I'm not really an expert on proportions) I think the area where the clavicle appears to be is a little too far from her back on her side profile? (Again I'm no expert, so don't take this too seriously unless someone agrees!) Then again, she might be wearing a lot of thick clothing underneath.. but yeah!


Hahaha its okay just say what you think is needed to be improved!
You mean she looks fat? lol ok thanks!

So sad the display & critique threads are so quiet.


I didn't mean she looked fat!!

X.X
 
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xGelai said:
You seem like a pro mangaka since it looks like the real manga art styles!!

It looks rlly nice *^*, your really good at this proportional thing Kazu!! I think it looks pretty natural since the clothes..


I just spotted this but who's 'Mabel' =3?.

LOL NO!! Me a puro?.. Someday!
Yeah I should have made her wearing tight clothes to see what's unnatural. Maa bad.

Do you still remember An-chan? She poisoned me with Gravity Falls series. It's a cartoon that I just turned her into anime form. xD

@Jaymusta Hahaha ok. :P
 
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kazu00 said:
xGelai said:
You seem like a pro mangaka since it looks like the real manga art styles!!

It looks rlly nice *^*, your really good at this proportional thing Kazu!! I think it looks pretty natural since the clothes..


I just spotted this but who's 'Mabel' =3?.

LOL NO!! Me a puro?.. Someday!
Yeah I should have made her wearing tight clothes to see what's unnatural. Maa bad.

Do you still remember An-chan? She poisoned me with Gravity Falls series. It's a cartoon that I just turned her into anime form. xD

@Jaymusta Hahaha ok. :P


Oh. My. Gawd. I see it now!!!
 
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Yeahhh I see it now too XDD. Wow your amazing Kazuu!!
 
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plz ignore others just check the first one. the shorts seem off??


so i chopped his face too
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plz ignore others just check the first one. the shorts seem off??


so i chopped his face too
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Potential improvements,


to answer your question:

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They look fine!
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muyaobobwu@gmail.com
 
 
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Bob-kun... >_<"

@Hana, its Kenna right? From Haikyuu!!
All 4 = Same person.?

Hmm.. His shorts looks fine. Shading is done really well too.
Looks a bit flat towards the zip part but not sure how to expand on that..
Tho thats just me(?). Seems difficult to imagine how that shading would be so unsure for that part.
Nah, I think @-@ its fine, the shading shows enough. Plus including that wouldve been subtle..

Looks rlly nice btw!!
 
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