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Apr 5, 2014 9:06 PM
#151
| Apology accepted. But sorry, the woman here is a teenager. This takes place during high school. The MC is looking to get into Todai (Tokyo University) which is difficult for students at that time. And the woman is looking to be a pop-idol (Hence the "Idol" part in the title). But then a mystery DVD mailed to the MC leads to terrible circumstances. In the end, rather than live in misery, the MC takes matters into his own hands and exposes all dirty deeds to the cops. The "other guy" claims to be above the law (yeah okay =/ ). With all that's said and done, the woman explains herself in a live press conference (It's that, or get charged for accessory after the fact) before going into exile. That's pretty much where I'm at. I don't know if I'll have the girl back with the MC, or make an ending similar to Full Recovery. My next original will have a Milf. Kay? |
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Apr 6, 2014 9:52 PM
#152
| i would like to see the MC get back the girl like in your unsweet story but that's just my two cents |
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Apr 7, 2014 7:20 AM
#153
| Funny you'd say that. See it's leading towards that outcome. Plus someone asked why I changed the outcome for True Blue (1 year later). Seems that he liked the old outcome. Well I checked the forums of True Blue Gaiden in this website and they were hoping for that outcome to happen in the future. Despite the fact that I hooked the MC up with a Milf, that's pretty much what happened. Now my next story will have a new setting. This time, it's an office building. |
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Apr 7, 2014 12:40 PM
#154
| This is just to add, to prevent anyone from complaining/trolling about the nature of your stories. Has anyone seen Kono Kanojo wa Fiction desu manga? If no one likes the nature of Shield's stories, which I can tell he put some good effort for others to enjoy, then just make your own stories and keep it to yourself. You can write your ideal outcome, on your fanfic based on a certain NTR plot, as well as your "elements." My element is the "devil," to dachisama it would be just "throwing the girl to the dumpster," and to everyone else it can be anything. I have written my own stories, to myself, and it worked just perfectly and I refuse to show it to anyone since I know that not everyone is a sucker for good endings like me plus I have plenty of vague holes and tend to go over the top. So go ahead and make your own plot if you are not satisfied with Sheild's stories. Don't troll, spam, or any more negative things to an author that is trying to help people. Just do whatever you want that you expect to happen in your perceptive. |
Apr 8, 2014 4:57 PM
#155
| i'm not trolling or what not but what does Kono Kanojo wa Fiction desu have to do with writing stories |
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Apr 8, 2014 6:27 PM
#156
Monstar20273 said: i'm not trolling or what not but what does Kono Kanojo wa Fiction desu have to do with writing stories You're okay dude. It's just that there are "people" who'd rather give me a hard time than follow greed2's advice. Disrespectful behavior is intolerable. As for that series he mentioned, I'm not sure myself. |
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Apr 8, 2014 10:26 PM
#157
Monstar20273 said: i'm not trolling or what not but what does Kono Kanojo wa Fiction desu have to do with writing stories >>then just make your own stories and keep it to yourself. In "Kono Kanojo wa Fiction desu", the protagonist wrote/drew about an imaginary girlfriend on dozens of notebooks and kept those notebooks to himself over the years. |
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Apr 23, 2014 9:36 AM
#158
| As zanetu said, using Hamura (the manga's protagonist) as an example who feels "empty" and "unsatisfied" with the lack of a "perfect girl" in reality. As such, with us being "unsatisfied" with the certain "cursed" NTR plots that haunts our memories and made us "empty," go ahead and jot down some "personal work" of your own, it does miracles if you do it and save it for yourself. XD http://mangapanda.net/Kono-Kanojo-wa-Fiction-desu/16/3/ You can curse the NTR author on your own private and public time with the anti-ntr club, but try not to publicly criticizes Shield as it is also possible where you can just make your own ending to neutralize the UGLY ending the author made for the MC and heroine, and make your own cure as your write your own ideal ending. I did that plenty of times myself. Be as farfetched as you want like this anime http://myanimelist.net/anime/10590/Reunion use some amazing nonsensical Deus Ex Machina magic in order to fix the super NEGATIVE bad feeling you get as you got trolled by the retarded NTR author's work. http://www.mangahere.com/manga/dantalian_no_shoka/c004/30.html (a representation of how people would react with any NTR and what people can do) For Kyouko's son (Furyou ni Hamerarete Jusei Suru Kyonyuu Okaa-san), much like in Shield's fanfic although my "personal fanfic" had different scenarios but the same results of "personality change," I continue on to spend some more time to type a "sequel," for myself as I feel better and better as I go on to add further details, as I continue to develop his "transformation" more and more as it can reach to the point where after some years as he continues to grow up, leaving off from where he killed Shin, I made him into something like this as he became more and more cold hearted and more possessive over Kyouko, to the point where I can imagine what he would look like as an adult. http://www.mangahere.com/manga/code_breaker/v09/c078/7.html (please read from 7 to page 11, to get the point) http://i1083.photobucket.com/albums/j389/Izaya_Kida/Togainu%20no%20chi/Gunji2.jpg" target="_blank">http://img-cache.cdn.gaiaonline.com/b8f7cc11c04a51d4b72a5206745ac930/http://i1083.photobucket.com/albums/j389/Izaya_Kida/Togainu%20no%20chi/Gunji2.jpg But moving on to the subject. If you wish to follow the example of making a "redemption," you can just make your own fanfic while using Shield's fanfic as a springboard. I am indeed surprised in how NTR authors have yet to be given a death threat much like how the author, of Ore no Imouto ga Konnani Kawaii Wake ga Nai, did from the amusing news articles I read. But, if I had to guess, perhaps there are plenty of other people, that despise NTR, that could be doing the same idea of making a "redemption" fanfic. p.s Sorry Shield, if this is taking up room, but this is incase anyone decides to troll again for "typical reasons." |
greed2May 27, 2014 1:07 PM
Apr 23, 2014 6:00 PM
#159
| It's fine. I thought someone was causing trouble for me again. But you were just making another point. Anyway, my story is finished. It's called "From Idol to Idiot". It's right there in the first page. |
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May 9, 2014 8:11 PM
#160
| Okay. I haven't started yet. But here's some highlights for my next story. As promised, the women in this one is a Milf. But the idea of the Office building setting is dropped. I just can't come up with anything there (yet). It starts as the kind of situation you'd see in Yama Hime no Mi. Only, the main protagonist kills the faggots who rapes and mind breaks the MC's mother. But it's the kind of supernatural deaths you see in Hellsing Ultimate. That being said (And if greed2 is seeing this), I'll need a short description of the Devil's Contract". I won't be able to read that whole thing (unless I'm unemployed). But the ending is already decided. He get's his Mother back as well as 1 other woman (maybe 2). |
Sheild0731May 10, 2014 8:03 AM
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May 10, 2014 1:49 PM
#161
| My concept of the "devil" can be a enigmatic figure that, like Baccano, can simply be like a mysterious ghost that doesn't have to be a traditional devil in a sense; by "traditional" I mean he can act like a devil but is not really a devil but likes to be called the "devil" because he is the type of person that enjoys opposing God's "original script" which he deems ugly depending on what it is that occurred. He can be like some mysterious voice that only the MC can hear or he can be a person that can take the form of either a man or a woman depending on his preference. How he appears is that he can appear in front of a disheartened MC where, after proving his power where he can saved the MC from some street gangsters by tearing them apart via telekinesis then saying "the most arrogant trash make the most lovely set of music if I do say so myself," he would offer the MC his help and the "devil" would keep his cost ambiguous as the MC says how he is willing to offer anything, thus ending with a handshake to start the "contract;" the cost later would really be just how the "devil" is looking for some "lackeys" so he can spread his "devil's contract" while the contractor will use their own personal experiance to make their own judgement. The "devil" would give the MC various of powers which included mind control that can control people like puppets, illusion that control the 5 senses thus can make scum feel countless of painful deaths occurring in a single second to the point where they aged rapidly due to stress, and so forth. How he can kill, and what the MC's face would be like as he kills, can be the same as this, please just skip to where a certain suitcase opens. https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=HBqzhZGIU0Q or https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=vRutAbiKYTo (start at 8:10, the MC can kill after getting god-like powers that makes any scum into natural prey as the MC is the predator) If your going to do this, try to do it for Yama Hime no Mi, I am sure you can do a good job with Masae's son. How the MC is influenced by the "devil" can be the same as this guy https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=vKFAEEJsfJ8 https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=iTCNwL032GY Where the MC simply laughs at his own foolish naiveté that guided him in the past as the main character concludes that the ends are more important than the means to reach them, and becomes more focused on just following what he "selfishly" desires which is just to make his mother his own woman. Thus he becomes more "twisted" like Saruhiko here. https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=3S0Xn8mQLnU To get my point, on what he does with his mother, go to g.e-hentai and type in "[Shiashiya] MamaLover Another [English]" to get my point on "selfish" desires on what an MC can do to get his mother back. |
greed2May 10, 2014 10:15 PM
May 10, 2014 7:34 PM
#162
| So I just do a rewrite for Yama Hime no Mi? So be it. I'll have to watch that anime again to see what I'm working with. But at least I got those videos there to relieve me while I write. It'll be a while longer though. Things at work are REALLY RETARDED. |
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May 10, 2014 10:19 PM
#163
| http://myanimelist.net/anime/4701/Yama_Hime_no_Mi episode 1-2 just so we are on the same page. Son's name is Kazuya while the mother's name is Masae. On the side note, I am sure you can get inspiration from something like Gibo (NAGARE Ippon). Just for the extra info. |
May 11, 2014 1:45 PM
#164
greed2 said: http://myanimelist.net/anime/4701/Yama_Hime_no_Mi episode 1-2 just so we are on the same page. Son's name is Kazuya while the mother's name is Masae. On the side note, I am sure you can get inspiration from something like Gibo (NAGARE Ippon). Just for the extra info. Thanks. But I already got plenty of references for this story. This story will take place at the end of Episode 2 where he wishes that his Mother is still with him. Then he runs into a mystery guy and this guy offers him an "interesting offer". Is a time-warp part of your devil's contract? Cause I'm thinking, he takes the offer, he ends up where he's about to beat up those assholes, only instead of a regular beat-down, Kazuya goes demonic and splaters their heads (Just like that second video where it said to start at 8:10). Then, when his mother Masae finally comes too, she's all tied up in bondage. Kazuya treats her to a snuff film where the faggots finally get their due. Then finally, the rest is pretty much what you see in MamaLover Another. Masae won't be mind broken. She just stays with Kazuya believeing that if she'd do something like that again, Kazuya will kill her. |
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May 12, 2014 11:15 PM
#165
| A time warp is not needed, incase you don’t want to get too supernatural, you can just use the manga references I gave you; but yeah you can use it if it interest you. If a mother already has a “f*cked brain dead mind, then it is reasonable to counter things using an extreme method. For example, electric bondage is one good “therapy” to snap a woman back into reality while her son is having forced sex with her as he gleefully smiles on how he killed everyone who killed in his way after using his new powers. https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=lUzlVBgrcgY https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=8VPDTQViU3c p.s, one of the "devil's" lackey's can also be Kyouko's son, who you named Akira, which is where I can imagine where Kyouko's son also "teaches" his kouhai on how to kill and gain a form of "madness." Heartwork: Symphony of Destruction is one example of such a case if inspiration is needed. An example of how, if you want the "return of the demon from hell" as he helps killing a bunch of guys that had sex with Masae. https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=JkPtvaAtIZ0&noredirect=1 (start at 2:32) But yeah, I will leave it up to your imagination in how you want the "devil" to be. |
May 13, 2014 7:05 AM
#166
greed2 said: A time warp is not needed, incase you don’t want to get too supernatural, you can just use the manga references I gave you; but yeah you can use it if it interest you. If a mother already has a “f*cked brain dead mind, then it is reasonable to counter things using an extreme method. For example, electric bondage is one good “therapy” to snap a woman back into reality while her son is having forced sex with her as he gleefully smiles on how he killed everyone who killed in his way after using his new powers. https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=lUzlVBgrcgY https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=8VPDTQViU3c p.s, one of the "devil's" lackey's can also be Kyouko's son, who you named Akira, which is where I can imagine where Kyouko's son also "teaches" his kouhai on how to kill and gain a form of "madness." Heartwork: Symphony of Destruction is one example of such a case if inspiration is needed. An example of how, if you want the "return of the demon from hell" as he helps killing a bunch of guys that had sex with Masae. https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=JkPtvaAtIZ0&noredirect=1 (start at 2:32) But yeah, I will leave it up to your imagination in how you want the "devil" to be. Electric Therapy. FUCK! I should've used that for my Revenge of the Son story. Oh well, it had positive reviews anyway. *shrug* |
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May 13, 2014 12:48 PM
#167
| *shrug* just add it. I have plenty of friends that fill in some holes to anything of their fanfic. It can just be like some minor detail. If you watched anything like Tokineiro or Tokubetsu Byoutou then I can imagine how effetive it would be to "change" a woman's mind in a certain subject. https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=lvj9LfETdB0 |
greed2May 13, 2014 12:52 PM
May 16, 2014 2:12 PM
#168
| Bad news, I might start writing the story later than I thought. Financial problems keeping me from doing things that I want. - Writing this story - Playing Killzone: Shadowfall |
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May 16, 2014 9:49 PM
#169
| Like I said in the past sir, you are only human so do not push yourself too hard. As the saying goes "one’s first priority to make a living; any other stuff would feel good, but should come second." Try to take it easy and be sure everything goes ok. I seen our economy and it is not looking so well in regards to jobs and wages. P.s a small thing for possible inspiration http://manga.animea.net/lunar-legend-tsukihime-chapter-44-page-1.html |
greed2May 22, 2014 12:37 AM
May 25, 2014 7:54 PM
#170
| Okay. I began writing the story. It starts just like Revenge of the Son where in case no one hasn't even seen the anime. There's a recap of the 2 episodes. Then, as Kazuya is walking down the street, he comes across someone who will help him out of his troubles in the biggest way. After (painfully) watching the anime for research, the time-warp idea is off the table. Now I'm figuring out how to go across Kazuya getting some payback. I haven't even come up with a proper title yet. Right now, I'm listening to Hikaru's theme music from Chaos Code (A PS3 fighter) to calm me down. |
Sheild0731May 31, 2014 6:56 PM
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May 26, 2014 1:00 AM
#171
| Have you thought of doing an otomedori redemption |
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May 26, 2014 5:55 AM
#172
MoniStar said: Have you thought of doing an otomedori redemption Maybe sometime later on. It takes a lot of time for me to come up with anything. Plus I'm in the process of my current story. Though I'm half-way done. |
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May 27, 2014 12:02 PM
#173
MoniStar said: Have you thought of doing an otomedori redemption Incase you want some inspiration, if you prefer not to wait and write you own fanfic, you can use ORE GA DOUTEI O SUTETARA SHINU KEN NI TSUITE as an example of what can occur or you can, if you want to be realistic, just kill everyone with a bomb. |
greed2May 27, 2014 12:50 PM
May 27, 2014 3:08 PM
#174
greed2 said: MoniStar said: Have you thought of doing an otomedori redemption Incase you want some inspiration, if you prefer not to wait and write you own fanfic, you can use ORE GA DOUTEI O SUTETARA SHINU KEN NI TSUITE as an example of what can occur or you can, if you want to be realistic, just kill everyone with a bomb. HA! Just like the end of Blackmail 2. Sadly, I'm still stuck. |
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May 27, 2014 4:26 PM
#175
Sheild0731 said: greed2 said: MoniStar said: Have you thought of doing an otomedori redemption Incase you want some inspiration, if you prefer not to wait and write you own fanfic, you can use ORE GA DOUTEI O SUTETARA SHINU KEN NI TSUITE as an example of what can occur or you can, if you want to be realistic, just kill everyone with a bomb. HA! Just like the end of Blackmail 2. Sadly, I'm still stuck. With your current fanfic or for Otomedori? Oh, also, incase you want the "devil," or one of his "lackeys," to present an epic introduction, here is something that may help. Just read five pages. http://www.mangahere.co/manga/mirai_nikki_mosaic/v01/c001/35.html |
May 27, 2014 6:36 PM
#176
greed2 said: Sheild0731 said: greed2 said: MoniStar said: Have you thought of doing an otomedori redemption Incase you want some inspiration, if you prefer not to wait and write you own fanfic, you can use ORE GA DOUTEI O SUTETARA SHINU KEN NI TSUITE as an example of what can occur or you can, if you want to be realistic, just kill everyone with a bomb. HA! Just like the end of Blackmail 2. Sadly, I'm still stuck. With your current fanfic or for Otomedori? Oh, also, incase you want the "devil," or one of his "lackeys," to present an epic introduction, here is something that may help. Just read five pages. http://www.mangahere.co/manga/mirai_nikki_mosaic/v01/c001/35.html My current one. I never said I'd make one for Otomedori (Not yet anyway). |
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May 31, 2014 6:34 PM
#178
| Looks like I'll be working on 2 targets at the same time (I actually did that once). There this one that I'm dealing with now. The second one is Boku no Yayoi-san. All 8 chapters are finally uploaded. But the ending was... well... I don't know if it was good or bad. It was a really complicated ending. Only 4 chapters have been translated. But someone was nice enough to provide a summary on the site where I was checking this out. I'm not taking the risk of waiting for the translation and possibly have my blood pressure go any higher. So I'm giving this series the Axe. |
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Jun 2, 2014 10:33 PM
#179
| Oh, I seen that. I hate being TROLLED! Anyway, for Boku no Yayoi-san, I only seen an untranslated version of the ending which is in g.e-hentai. I am unsure how it ended. I would have at least liked it if it ended like Netorare Fighter Yaricchingu!. But, because I didn't see the rapist get killed, I won't get my hopes up. Incase it may help then you can use this now or later. I don't know if you will have the "devil" or someone you "transformed" like Kyouko's son, which I mentioned it can be just some minion of the "devil" spreading his contract, then you can have him say this speech in order to motivate the disheartened MC. “No no no, that is all just nonsense; let me give you one straight clear path, you just 'take back her and make that woman yours!' All throughout history, be it royals or dictators or whatever, this world has always been ruled by minorities that get to take whatever they want! You're not the ones in the wrong. It's this world that's become too lenient towards those idiots that have been jealous and tried to take our ‘everything’ from us. It's time we changed all that. Thanks to the ‘devil’ we have been given the 'right' and all the abilities we need make it happen. To us, there are only two kinds of people on the planet and they are just simply people that are allowed to live while the other are bastards who must die! And we know just how personally we hate such trash. This time, we're gonna be the ones at the top of the food chain and ‘take back’ everything that is rightfully ours! So I will teach you...I am going to teach you what it means to be on the top of the entire food chain!!” |
greed2Sep 16, 2017 8:10 PM
Jun 3, 2014 7:10 AM
#180
| I better hang on to that last paragraph. In my Yama Hi no mi story, I had to resort to giving Kazuya the "Red Pill" (That's right, this is now Revenge of the Son: Part 2). But don't worry. Later on, there will be a prequel to all this involving what happened in Yusuke's past. I mean, those Red Pills were not crafted in any normal laboratory. PS: Story is almost finished. |
Sheild0731Jun 3, 2014 12:08 PM
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Jun 3, 2014 3:03 PM
#181
| In case it may help. You can use it or someone else can use it to make their own fanfic. I don't know if I misread if you are going to use the Kyouko’s son and the “devil” combo, anyway here are some more ideas for you if you need any. For example, I would imagine that Kyouko’s son would develop his own group of gangsters known as the Kishin Faction, the one many factions that serve the “devil;” it takes the name Kishin [鬼神, kishin; Literally meaning "Demon God"] which may be translated as Ogre to some, as a fitting name that reflects some of their actions where the Kishin can be exaggerated as "the gods of death, the personification of the entrance to Nilflheimr." http://www.mangahere.co/manga/luck_stealer/v04/c013/35.html If there is a character, I can name, that would help visualize the transformation Kyouko's son then it would be Ken Kaneki from Tokyo Ghoul with the last episode of season 1. I also gave Kyouko's son a new name; while you named him Akira I gave him a different name, Bankotsu Kihara can be a “new” name that you can give him. Bankotsu (蛮骨, "Barbaric skill"), a name that reflects his talent with savage methods; the name, Bankotsu, was originally a nickname as people around him noted how Kyouko’s son enjoys relishing in his barbaric action, hence the name that replaced his birth name which Kyouko’s son has then later forgotten. Kihara is a name derived from the Kihara Family (Toaru Majutsu no Index), I just put that name because I liked the anime Accelerator was from, where I imagined that his estranged father was a member of a certain family with an infamous reputation. In my imagination, I put how Kyouko’s son lacked the typical Kihara-ness of his family as he initially didn’t displayed any noticeable talent in science and was able to be the kind boy he once was due to his warm upbringing by his loving mother as he originally took Kyouko’s surname to hide his lineage. He initially could not make any famed contribution to the world of science and he could not even commit himself to any acts of violence, much less the ability to kill. Basically he was just an ordinary boy where he was a forgotten member of the Kihara family that would have lived an ordinary yet happy life though he secretly lusted over his mother, whom he love very deeply but suppressed this, and continue to live peacefully with her. Or at least, that was how it should have been, when Shin took Kyouko away did his dark traits surfaced due to his terrible ordeal and he, to the point where it practically became irreversible, no longer resembled the kind boy he once was. The one trait that all Kiharas have in common is a natural aptitude in science as well as the gravitation of their actions that can be seen as evil to most human standards, both of which was later exemplified by Kyouko’s son, who without being taught anything of the two, where he was able find a preferable way to kill Shin and his friends in the most horrific way possible. His later main aspect is how he has a double face personality; if needed he would indirectly projects his timid appearance to make idiots let their guard down where he would later unleash his true self as a sadistic psychopath so twisted that he becomes highly aroused by witnessing his own work of violence. http://fc03.deviantart.net/fs70/f/2014/110/c/b/yuu_ibara_yandere_version____ryuugajou_nanana_by_serlyharuno-d7f7o73.jpg At best, he can seen as a bloodthirsty killer who takes life as naturally as he breathes and enjoys slaughter to no end. But the most dangerous aspect is how he enjoys extreme torture, experimenting with new unique methods to kill, such as how he found pleasure making punks die very slowly by boiling their blood where the result made them into a roasted husk. And so forth as later he strikes fear in the underground world when using the name Bankotsu Kihara a.k.a the Datenshi (だてんし); Datenshi is Japanese for fallen angel which is fitting for his rather "angelic face" that is "tainted with blood." https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=VjbWYXGkMZk (an example of how he introduces himself when he spares an enemy female bodyguard he deems "unsuitable" to kill where she then faints in the end of his intro.) The best description that one can have on him is “someone who isn’t human, or rather someone who had completely gave up being human;” people who saw him, at first glance, would get the constant feeling that Kyouko’s son had forgotten he was once human. This can be considered to be an accurate description of him as Kyouko’s son can also be described as “a beast that discarded his humanity for the sake of obtaining the desired results.” Here can be one example, if you still plan to use a "pill," just read 4 pages. http://www.mangareader.net/666-33051-21/deadman-wonderland/chapter-17.html One of his many speeches as he enlist a new member of the Kishin. "If you ask anyone to name a universal rule that governs animals and humans alike, I bet you most people would answer 'survival of the fittest.' There are strong people and there are weak people. At a glance, it looks like the difference is pretty clear-cut. But the truth is, there's a lot more to it than just a simple battle of 'strong' against 'weak,' of kill or be killed. You lot must understand what I'm talking about too, right? We all felt the dark disgusting feeling of losing someone we love, while how it occurred is all different for each of us, the end is all the same. The true meaning of "survival of the fittest" isn't as simple as all that. Those words 'survival of the fittest' is just a pretty lie that they tell us to give up easily. A lie to make weak people believe that if they try their best on a fruitless path, then everything will be ok. Truth is, the logic is not as simple as where the weak that get eaten. It's not about strength, it's about numbers. The ones ‘who stand at the top’ of the food chain are the brainless dolts. No matter how or where we live, as long as we were human that are easily labeled ‘weak,’ then there will always be idiots that try to take our ‘everything’ from us. And, when you think about it, anyone who had met the ‘devil’ was originally ‘weak’ because we were either foolish or ignorant on what we needed to do. That is why idiots like them always try to get back at people like us, we were all seen as so easy to target, because they knew just how ‘weak’ we were and how easily we can give up as they take our ‘everything.’ Those loudmouths are typically the ones that enjoy their own sick sense of entertainment as they ruin our lives. Because there are so many of them then the majority will all just turn a blind eye and pretend not to notice no matter how much suffering they caused. We all know it's true. Everybody does. The very deep concept of ‘pulling the trigger’ is what the ‘Devil’ taught us. He gave us all powers and we were able to take back what was ours while killing those idiots that we so despise. And we are given the job to kill all those other ‘idiots,’ that are the practical cancer of humanity, as a great bonus.” When describing the Kishin. “To kill as we dive to massacre those idiots that dare step over the line... to make them boil in pain... and to put a permanent end to them as they are sent to a sea of hell. That is how we have 'fun' as a Kishin. We are neither heroes or saviors, we are just savages that kill people we see as an ‘eyesore,’ it is as simple as that. So if you want to 'making something yours' then the best option is to drop you sense of 'norms' to another sense of Extreme!" *grin* When killing a bunch thugs working for scum. “hi there, you little bastards. I'm going to reward you guys with a one-day round trip to heaven. Though you might enjoy it so much you won't feel like coming back!” To helpless scum begging Kyouko’s son to spare their lives "Oh, what a laugh, the tables have turned where now you truly show how small and pathetic you really are! Try think as hard as those weak brains of yours can manage. Do you idiots ever listen to the emotional sorrow coming from the people you tormented? No one ever listens to the cries of mercy coming from pigs and cows slaughtered daily; it’s the same with me for what I am going to do to you!” Anyway, as for Yusuke's past. Incase you need help, you can say that he was never a “real friend” of Akira. You can say he has an ability similar to the Book of the End (bleach) where he has the ability to Insert Presence- basically the ability to split the past of whomever it cuts. The ability works not by manipulating time and memories, but by literally inserting Yusuke's presence into the victim’s history. Victims of this power recognize Yusuke as someone closely connected to their personal lives, whether it is as family, friend, or lover. He can even usurp the roles of other individuals in the victims’ pasts. Likewise, Yusuke gains comprehensive knowledge of his victims’ memories. Thus you can say how Yusuke is able to gain a person’s trust so it is easy to help them. p.s Incase you want Kyouko’s son to look more like a “leader” you can have him have some “supernatural ability” that allows him to transform into an adult of his “would be future” in the CG game where he burns himself, then the rest is my imagination where he “miraculously” survives later to then later kill Shin, out of sheer vengeance, and then later made a big name out of himself in the underground world as he became a serial killer that was known of multiple acts of manslaughter in the pornographic business world. However, despite how police would see him as a criminal, many would see the altruism within his actions for many reasons such as how blackmail, drugs, and so forth was used to force the women to engage in unwanted sex. A visual appearance on what he can look like http://www.mangahere.co/manga/dance_in_the_vampire_bund_sledge_hammer_no_tsuioku/c007/21.html http://www.mangahere.co/manga/code_breaker/v09/c078/7.html (I already mentioned this before) Physical Written Description, both young and adult forms: His 12 year old appearance is generally the same but only how he has a tattoo and a red jewel piercing on his tongue, as he has a habit of sticking his tongue out showing he looks down on his victims as he sadistically sends them to hell. If needed, if you had applied "magic," he can make his tongue look normal depending on the situation, such as how he is about to have a "good time" with his mother. http://37.media.tumblr.com/tumblr_mcqzlxpSg61qjog3lo2_1280.png (what the tatoo looks like, with a jewel piercing in the middle) Kyouko’s son also dislikes crossdressing, especially as people look down upon him because of his feminine features as it makes him look like a masochist, which should be taken on a highly serious level as he acts very violently when someone tries to make him crossdress which many close to him finds it very reasonable as this is due to his trauma. His main choice of clothing gravitate towards a “dark” colored theme that consists of simple clothes, with a Military Long Sleeve T-shirts and cargo pants, that effectively shows less of his slim features; because of how he hates when people judge him by his girly body then he preferred choice of clothing covers his entire body, leaving only his hands and neck to head exposed, which led some to think he has a lot of other tattoos on his body when he doesn't. As an adult, Kyouko's son is much taller, having longer hair where his hair color turned into a stark white in the course of his traumatic event of killing his mother thus forever losing her, more muscular and carried a long scars over his right eye all the way down to his waist which was self-inflicted while he was in a state of bottomless sorrow. http://www.mangareader.net/tripeace/28/34 (a visible example of how it went out) Along with how he has some more scars along the way while also having several burn scars spanning from the right side of his neck down to his entire back of his right shoulder and onto his torso. Here, he is in his youthful twenties which show just how much of an overall difference in age he has with his 12 year old self. The "adult" self of Kyouko's son wears a light sleeveless shirt that clearly shows his upper part of his very well-built muscular body and wears long pants, usually dark trousers, along with the darkish socks and shoes that completely covers his legs and, along with this, he wears a darkish coat, that has a fur-covered collar, that he wears depending on the occasion. Along with this, when in a private area and away from public eyes, he is always seen with his mother who has a dog leash that has a chain attached where her son is holding the chain where he is very unruly and openly possessive of Kyouko, as well as being somewhat verbally abusive while calling her "my bitch" while always holding the chained leash around her as a way to be "considerate about her well being and safety," where her son uses his mother as a visual example stating how he loves his mother but is really bothered by the fact that he failed to "retain" her once. Anyway, the "adult" shapeshift idea is just used incase you need an example of an "intimidating benefactor" if you need one. He has a very dark sense of humor, one time making a person shut up by using a vacuum to do the job. https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=gILc00OPMw0&t=0m15s When he sees Kazuya, and later describes him, he points what an amazingly ordinary face he has, pointing that's how a buffoon should be. The only reason Kyouko’s son is so eager as to help him is because of how they both once had the “same face” where Kyouko’s son thinks that Kazuya’s level of stupidity would naturally be called a sin, and Kyouko’s son knows how personal just how “sinful” of an existence a certain type of “stupidity” is. To Kyouko’s son, as all are born from their mother's wombs then to later be shocked at the ugliness of the world is common occurrence, because it is proof that one was raised by such warm maternal care, thus it was only natural for Kazuya to have “his world” shattered as his strong faith, in regards to how he believed that his mother would stay with him, can so easily be deemed as foolish. To be tossed about by the world may be a good fortune, as Kazuya becomes a member of the masses, but to later experience a certain type of “loss” would reveal just how much of “sin” it is to be that ignorant of how life "really" works. Kyouko's son has a strong dislike to the snow, which his mother finds natural considering how it was the day when she “ would have" left him. On a snowy area, his mother is usually required to stay with him to make sure to pacify him. In his young form, Kyouko's son has an uncanny talent in attracting women, even those with complete misandry. Often times, girls like to cuddle him as if he was a plush toy, something he does not mind. If a person similar to Merraid Oarburgh (Akame ga Kill!) meets Kyouko's son, she would find his "cute" presence appealing to be around. Kyouko's son, both young and adult, can be very blunt, sarcastic and quite sadistic, revealing a psychotic grin and would often be very rude and quite disrespectful to his enemies. Thus, as a dour and pessimistic leader, he has very little to no intention of being liked by others, though oddly there are many people that are fond and continue to befriend as they respect Kyouko's son from the bottom of their heart because of the Charisma Kyouko's son has as he recruit new people. Despite his savage methods, when in a "hunt," Kyouko's son shows perfect capabilities that can make him a great leader. Due to the incident with Shin, Kyouko's son dislikes making any forms of friendships, while he does make his own form of “trust” he doesn't consider it as a form of friendship; regardless, people do take his idea of "trust" as a tsundere form of friendship. His idea of “trust” varies depending on the person. According to a member of his group, he is a charming individual that apparently talked others into walking in the palm of his hand where even politicians, kingpins, Oyabuns, and business elites would easily learn to not only underestimate him but just the wrong move would be very costly on their side. He takes joy in helping the “devil” to spread the “devil’s contract,” for people like him, and enjoys the methods that lead to the results he desires; thus he is always known as an Amanojaku (天邪鬼, "heavenly evil spirit"). In my imagination, I can imagine he influenced Naoto (Solace) into killing his abusive father; the same would go for Hiro ([Tsukino Jyogi] Boku no Yayoi) as Kyouko's son can “persuaded” him to accept the “Devil’s Contract” where Hiro then kills off Hebitsuka Jouji. Along with that, Kyouko’s son would burn into Hiro’s mind that he should just “take something regardless when 'you know it is yours' and never hesitant" where Hiro would do a blunt action such raping his sister-in-law, thus an example of how Kyouko's son leads many to join him. If I were to give him a "theme song," to start his dramatic entrance as he begins his slaughter, it would be something like this. https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=LeUqCnMipaU the name is "K ost Karma" https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=3WUvsSpYDoE and a song for times of peace Although he is not a believer in “survival of the fittest” creeds, Kyouko’s son does believe in the notion that “violence is a needed solution for many problems.” Kyouko's son also believes in the existence of an inherent cruelty in all human beings regardless of personality that is brought by the excitement of seeing blood and death; this is likely stemmed from how his once kind mother had strangled and abandoned him. This belief is something which he asserts as he, when meeting someone similar to him, takes part of the process in the “devil’s contract” where Kyouko’s son teaches victims on how it matters little what they do, even if one feels the excitement after killing their tormenters, as long as you can forever be with the person, that you cherish, then such costs are exceptionally petty as compared to the desired benefits. While some comrades ponders if Kyouko’s son would have been happier if he had continue living as a normal boy, others believes that such a scenario would be impossible because if it had been a situation where Kyouko’s son never met the “devil” to grant him his desires then Kyouko’s son would definitely be "much worse than he is right now” since meeting the “devil” had given “absolute peace” to Kyouko’s son. His speech in order to motivate a disheartened MC. “No no no, that is all just nonsense; let me give you one straight clear path, you just 'take back her and make that woman yours!' All throughout history, be it royals or dictators or whatever, this world has always been ruled by minorities that get to take whatever they want! You're not the ones in the wrong. It's this world that's become too lenient towards those idiots that have been jealous and tried to take our ‘everything’ from us. It's time we changed all that. Thanks to the ‘devil’ we have been given the 'right' and all the abilities we need make it happen. To us, there are only two kinds of people on the planet and they are just simply people that are allowed to live while the other are bastards who must die! And we know just how personally we hate such trash. This time, we're gonna be the ones at the top of the food chain and ‘take back’ everything that is rightfully ours! So I will teach you...I am going to teach you what it means to be on the top of the entire food chain!!” How he encourages someone to kill. "In all of our situations, we faced the same dilemma where we had clear options while being put in 'simple scenarios.' It was never a matter of 'to kill or be killed,' but the real idea was 'do what it takes to get what you want or to live forever without it!' In the end, we all made some stupid mistakes that messed up everything for ourselves but, because of how we experienced all that hell, something like 'sell your soul' was nothing more than a trivial cost as compared to the benefits of getting one's 'everything' back. The 'devil' gave us a real good deal, and to spread his 'contract' is something we would gladly do when we know there are plenty of other poor saps like us. Any hypocritical majority would scorn at us, for any stupid reason such as ignorance or because they are too sheltered to understand, but kids who have never seen peace and kids who have never seen war have different values. So let me ask you something, if you lost your 'everything' back then is it really worth following the pointless norms of society to not get it back? You know fully just how useless such things are, so I suggest to you to do things that you didn't do before to get the wanted results; if you want to kill then kill, if you want to rape that woman then rape her to 'fix' her head, if you see something as an 'eyesore' then deal with it in whatever way to 'fix it.' In this world, niceties can never solve the problems we all faced. Thus, all of us had 'let go' of some annoying 'function' in our heads to get whatever we want!" but again, these are just some ideas on my imagination. If it helps, that is great, but if it doesn't help then it makes no difference. Anyone else can use it. This is just something I wrote when I made my personal fanfic, as I made my "cure," to counter how NTR main characters have "transform." Anyway, I don't know if you are planning to use the "devil" or planning to change things again to something "less supernatural" but do what you got to do sir. I came up with plenty of extra stuff, for all the NTR characters I see, but I doubt it would further make a "cure" for NTR. One example is how I have Kyouko's son an "imouto," as in a co-worker that he works very well with that happens to be a younger girl fit to be his younger sister, in my fanfic. Here is the "imouto" if you are curious. Please use the find option and start with the words "Jack the Ripper - the serial killer which shook England one hundred years ago." as you read the following. http://forums.nrvnqsr.com/showthread.php/1451-Fate-Apocrypha-Translation-%28no-spoilers%29?p=1160437&viewfull=1#post1160437 http://img4.wikia.nocookie.net/__cb20140606075851/typemoon/images/5/50/Assassin_and_Reika.jpg (and what she looks like) |
greed2Oct 25, 2022 5:19 PM
Jun 3, 2014 8:44 PM
#182
| Wow.......... That is way more info.......... I'm gonna have a full stomach for months. LOL! |
| I wish Nailkaizer is my wife. Don't know her? Look ---> http://myanimelist.net/character/13615/Nailkaizer |
Jun 5, 2014 11:06 AM
#183
| Oh, thanks, I hope that it would "cure" any NTR you ever seen. It reminds me of when I first posted on this forum. But, as I said, none of these have to be used since the real intention is to help either you, or others, which would be great if it does since I can imagine how painful it is to not have a "cure" when one sees such disgusting NTR. Feel free to not use it if it doesn't help a story, and don't feel guilty not to. If it helps your imagination, you could use small references, for those in the Kishin faction, such as small descriptions or names. For example, I turned Sakura Makihara (Kumikyoku Mitsunyuu) into this as she gives her small sample of her story about "extremes" many of the Kishin had done. https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=3T67pMwTwG4 |
greed2Jun 6, 2014 9:32 PM
Jun 5, 2014 6:19 PM
#184
greed2 said: Oh, thanks, I hope that it would "cure" any NTR you ever seen. It reminds me of when I first posted on this forum. But, as I said, none of these have to be used since the real intention is to help either you, or others, which would be great if it does since I can imagine how painful it is to not have a "cure" when one sees such disgusting NTR. Feel free to not use it if it doesn't help a story. If it helps your imagination, you could use small references, for those in the Kishin faction, such as small descriptions or names. For example, I turned Sakura Makihara (Kumikyoku Mitsunyuu) into this as she gives her small sample of her story about "extremes" many of the Kishin had done. https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=3T67pMwTwG4 Ah yes. Sawyer the Cleaner (I love Black Lagoon). I might pull something like that later on. |
| I wish Nailkaizer is my wife. Don't know her? Look ---> http://myanimelist.net/character/13615/Nailkaizer |
Jun 5, 2014 9:38 PM
#185
| Mmm. strange, it seems my animelist is running some sort of bug and my post got messed up. Well, anyway, I will try to see if I can fix my post later once myanimelist deals with it, but you can still read it if you find it useful. p.s Like this "cute" and "adorable" maid, please be have one of the Kishin kick someone in this manner. Let's say Masae's rapist hired some flunkies this time; imagine one idiot picking up Kyouko's son, child form, and then put a careless comment about forcing him onto a maid outfit where we know just how much Kyouko's son hates crossdressing. https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=SliXyNnhnC4&t=1m30s or to slowly use a chainsaw would be enough. I can't imagine the pain with the time I have left to live. And you can always have the "twist" people of the Kishin say something like this as they kill. https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=oJVjeckN5mA |
greed2Jun 9, 2014 12:44 PM
Jun 6, 2014 5:10 AM
#186
| hi shield, yours fanfics are great, i loved them, but if u can i got some things i would like u to do please, like some bloody revenge for true blue please, like drug the 2 of them, cut the teacher dick and make he eat, and insert a dildo with a lot of needles inside her pussy, or some little explosives in her ass, but if u cant thx anyway, about "From idol to idiot" its said: "Her family now sees her as a shameless idiot who will use sex to get what she wants." and them she is staying at Ryo house using sex, thats not so funny buddy, if u can make fanfic for Juukyo Nightmare, Soredemo Tsuma wo Aishiteru, and that bitch that do some anal training with another man at Another World. Thx for the great work. |
Jun 6, 2014 4:12 PM
#187
greed2 said: Mmm. strange, it seems my animelist is running some sort of bug and my post got messed up. Well, anyway, I will try to see if I can fix my post later once myanimelist deals with it, but you can still read it if you find it useful. This is a known issue, probably associated with textbox input: http://myanimelist.net/forum/?topicid=1194799 Club members, please refrain from using non-English characters in your previous/future posts, as well as any other place where textbox input applies (e.g. list entry editor). |
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Jun 6, 2014 7:24 PM
#188
| Thanks for the Heads Up Zanetu. |
| I wish Nailkaizer is my wife. Don't know her? Look ---> http://myanimelist.net/character/13615/Nailkaizer |
Jun 13, 2014 9:39 PM
#190
| My Yama Hime no mi story is Completed! In the first post you go! Now for a sabbatical. |
| I wish Nailkaizer is my wife. Don't know her? Look ---> http://myanimelist.net/character/13615/Nailkaizer |
Jun 19, 2014 9:01 AM
#191
| Hello, I just learned about the existence of the "Netorare Redemption" stories and I've read most of your stories on adult fanfiction net, thanks you for writting them. I always hated how most of these Animes/Mangas ended and now, I'm less disgusted by their existence. :) By the way, are you interested by suggestions of Netorare Animes/Mangas to work on? |
Jun 19, 2014 10:21 AM
#192
revan193 said: Hello, I just learned about the existence of the "Netorare Redemption" stories and I've read most of your stories on adult fanfiction net, thanks you for writting them. I always hated how most of these Animes/Mangas ended and now, I'm less disgusted by their existence. :) By the way, are you interested by suggestions of Netorare Animes/Mangas to work on? Thanks for the positive feedback. And yes, suggestions are welcome. |
| I wish Nailkaizer is my wife. Don't know her? Look ---> http://myanimelist.net/character/13615/Nailkaizer |
Jun 19, 2014 11:11 AM
#193
| Here is all of the Netorare Animes/Manga I could find, Sheild0731: Mesu Nochi Torare (Anime) Netorare (Anime) Soredemo Tsuma wo Aishiteru (Anime) Triangle Blue (Anime) Yama Hime no Hana (Anime) Otomedori (Anime) Inshitsu Otaku ni Ikareru Kanojo (Anime) Ore wa Kanojo wo Shinjiteru! (Anime) A Side of My Girlfriend Unknown to Me (Manga, from chapter 1 to 78) Tachibana-san's Circumstances With a Man (Manga) Broken Checkered Flag (Manga) Boku no Yayoi-san (Manga) Beautiful Scientist in an Evil Organization (To Love Ru Doujin) Yuri & Friends 7 & 9 (King Of Fighters Doujins) Midgard Fehu, 2 UR, 4 Ansur, 7 Sowilu & X (Ah! My Goddess Doujins) Hide & Seek 1 (Code Geass Doujin) That's quite a number of Netorare, huh? I hope you will be able to create "Redemption" stories for them... Good luck! |
Jun 19, 2014 2:06 PM
#194
| I'll have to pass on the Doujins. I only rewrite Actual Anime & Manga. Not anything based on a Video Game, or Code Geass, or any of that. Sorry. By the way, I have all the Yuri & Friends Doujins. How are those Netorare??? In the 9th one, Andy gives Mai her just deserts. |
| I wish Nailkaizer is my wife. Don't know her? Look ---> http://myanimelist.net/character/13615/Nailkaizer |
Jun 19, 2014 10:32 PM
#195
| Sorry, it's been a while since I've read Yuri & Friends 9, I completely forgot the ending... Otherwise, ok, no Doujins. But what about the Mangas & Animes I proposed you? |
Jun 20, 2014 6:14 AM
#196
revan193 said: Sorry, it's been a while since I've read Yuri & Friends 9, I completely forgot the ending... Otherwise, ok, no Doujins. But what about the Mangas & Animes I proposed you? It's not gonna be as quick & easy as you think. First of all, there's my personal life OUTSIDE of my writing (Work and what not). Second of all, like a lot of fanfiction, they require a lot of thinking and grammar work (mostly thinking). So it could take me weeks or even months for me to come up with something. |
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Jun 20, 2014 9:48 PM
#197
| I think you misunderstood what I said, I didn't said if you wanted to do them all or tried to make it sound quick & easy, I just wanted to know if any of the mangas/Animes I proposed you could be chosen as your next subject, that's all. |
Jun 21, 2014 6:52 AM
#198
| Oh sorry. Well, I'm waiting for Boku no Yayoi-san to be fully translated. Other than that, I'm not sure what to pick yet. |
| I wish Nailkaizer is my wife. Don't know her? Look ---> http://myanimelist.net/character/13615/Nailkaizer |
Jun 22, 2014 5:29 AM
#199
| Furthermore, I mentioned a while back that I'm planning on re-writing the Yakin Byoutou Series (The first series, although there will be someone from the second series, not sure who but it's NOT Kazama Mana). I'm not gonna post it here because this series has no NTR what so ever because of that, there's no one to kill or put in jail like in my other stories. I'm gonna start with episode 10 because that's where things really started. |
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Jun 23, 2014 5:36 PM
#200
| Reading the new ones shield make me kinda glad I am a real girl and not a fictional one... Graphics.. Especially the one with ai... Fucking owww.. |
| NaruHina!! |
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