Thoughts on my review for 'Barakamon' (how to improve, what I did well, etc)...

Dec 18, 2014 6:24 PM

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Any input would be great. Want to learn to review better.

Link to review - http://myanimelist.net/reviews.php?id=172831

Dec 18, 2014 6:28 PM

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It's a good review. The only thing I would recommend is grouping together a few things and making it more concise.

underneath the stars

Dec 19, 2014 12:50 AM

Ryugen

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You could probably break it down a bit more. It sounds like you're writing a persuasive essay than a review.

Dec 19, 2014 1:02 PM

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To mayukachan - Now that I read that, it definitely makes sense. The flow is a little straightforward in a slightly unproductive sense.

To Ryugen - Very true now that I think about it. Thanks for the eye opener.

Dec 19, 2014 1:22 PM

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Quite nice, though you should take out the first paragraph (not the quote), or at least put it further on. Remember: people read reviews because they're interested in a given series, not in you.

Dec 19, 2014 3:02 PM

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yazio said:
Quite nice, though you should take out the first paragraph (not the quote), or at least put it further on. Remember: people read reviews because they're interested in a given series, not in you.

Right, try to remove as many 'I's as possible.

Dec 20, 2014 5:35 AM

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To yazio - Very true, took your advice there and it actually flows better and gets to the point faster. Thanks.

To Ryugen - Thank you.

Dec 20, 2014 7:33 AM

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You want us to review your review?

Dec 20, 2014 9:24 AM

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To Qatami - Yes, in a sense. But not the way you might be thinking. I just mean the facets of it such as readability, clarity, flow, wording, etc. Not my thoughts on the show though ;)

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